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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
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12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: amortentia Signed
Date: 03/19/06 Title: None

Hi! I really like the idea for your story, but I think you would get more readers if you changed your story summary. It really is a turn-off when you see a story summary with improper grammar, capitalization and no punctuation. In your story you are a good writer, but no one will be able to tell that from the summary. Good luck with your story, and I look forward to reading future chapters.

Author's Response: Thanks Sorry I was in a hurry before work. So i just threw something up there. Well chapter two was declined so i have to go threw it and fix it all up, I will have it done tomrrow. I have School tomorrow thanks for takin the time and reviewing

 

Lily's Sacrifice by Periwinkle
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: A realistic portrayal of the night James and Lily died. Timeline is from nine o'clock to midnight. Please review.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 2431 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/01/06 Updated: 04/01/06


Reviewer: amortentia Signed
Date: 08/20/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Wow! You really did an amazing job on this fic. You potrayed the emotions of Lily so well, especially at the end. I really liked the 'last kiss' bit, and it made me really sad when I realized that it WOULD be their last. Like I said, everything was great, but the part that reason that I really loved this fic was how it kept me in suspense the whole time, even though I knew what was going to happen. Not many authors have that gift. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the truly lovely r eview, dear. And I see you\'re rather new to Hufflepuff, so welcome! =)

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