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This story was really good... when I read the part where Harry said 'I wanna be a little boy again' I was actually tearing... you helped me realise that Harry was just a child who had an adult's burden put on him from the moment his parents were killed. Also you've got some very good points.. themes.. like the part where Ron gets jealous of the attention and love that Harry is receiving, but in JKR's books its always Harry's feeling jealous of Ron.. and so thats interesting. However, it's quite clear from the start that what Dumbledore wants Harry to realise is that Sirius's death isn't his fault, but that isn't very prominent in your fanfic... its like only at the end part that Harry goes and sees all the photos, and then he realises that Sirius's death isn't his fault. I think if Harry had kept insisting that Sirius's death was his fault all throughout the story, and you portrayed the changes in his attitude throughout the story, then he saw the photos and came to a realisation that Sirius's death wasn't his fault, it would be a better fanfic, rather than Harry upon seeing the photos realises all of a sudden that Sirius's death isn't his fault.