My name is Katie. I am a 14 year old girl who lives in a small town, which has nothing in it. So I occupy my time by writing and the like. I currently have one story up on FF.net, called By Moonlight We Walk. It is a Remus/Tonks story that will span the entire 6th book. I also I'm writing a story called Letters to Her, another Remus/Tonks post war fic. I have not posted it yet, since it is still in the writing stages.
Anyway, I am an active member of the MNFF forums. My username there is also kitkat2010. I am a member of the Bannermaker's Association, Hufflepuff House, and the lovely Susan Bone's Book club. I am an Alpha in the BA, so I have the highest skill in bannermaking. If you are ever interested in a banner for your fanfic, just PM me on the forums.
I suppose I am probably boring you now, so I will take me leave. Ta ta!
What an new and orignal idea. Not to mention interesting. I loved the conversation between young Draco and Tonks. The characterization of young Draco was exactly how I imagined. Spoiled, yet, not completely turned to evil. That young innocence was described very well. I also enjoyed the conversation between Narcissa and Andromeda. Although a little rushed, it did set a mood between the two sisters. My favorite line: “We were always the daughters of Black. You forgot that. I didn’t.” What a wonderful line. You used great wording while describing Narcissa's emotional state after the encounter. Great job, keep writing. =)
What a wonderfully original story. Your use of cause and effect was very well thought out, as well as interesting. Although I was a tad bit confused about the timeturner, I was able to figure out what had happened in the long run. You also had wonderful characterization. Dumbledore sounded like Dumbledore, Hermione like Hermione. Good job! Keep up the great work.
Oh, wow. I loved this story a lot! I really enjoyed how you explored a character from mythology, and inserted Hogwarts and such, as well as real historical events, such as Rome's invasion.
I enjoyed your description of harnessing magic, and the fiery description of Morgana throughout her teaching. I really liked was your description of 'true magic'. It was wonderfully thought out, and tied with the story very well.
The part with the sword was rather intriguing. The descriptions of Morgana while she made the sword were well written. And although I'm not sure who the hero ended up to be, but I do believe there is a connection to Harry. The presence of a connection between the wizarding world's past and present is obvious.
I, myself, did not think this story was rushed. On the contrary, I think the pace was just right. If it was more detailed and such, I believe it would have been confusing, and would have taken away from the mysterious feel of the fic.
This was a wonderful read. Keep writing!
Okay, you really need to stop this nonsense. I don't think I've ever got this worked up over a chapter before!!
Pooooor Remus. His love life just got screwed over. And Lindi!! How could you do that to sweet Lindi? You must be evil. Correction: You ARE evil! *grabs the dreaded pitchfork of doom*
Okay, I won't hurt you, but man! Good thing you still have half of their sixth year to fix their relationship. Or else, you have a ton of Lindi/Remus fans after you.
Now, on to praising. This was a very good chapter (although you tortured poor Remus!!) and you have the teen angst thing down pat. And although I can't say I particularly like Will, I have a feeling he there is more to him than you let on. Besides, since we only see Will through Remus' eyes, he probably isn't what Remus believes him to be.
Keep up the writing, and update soon!! (Please, update soon so I can hold off working on my book report!) ;)
Author's Response: *cowers at the sight of the dreaded pitchfork of doom* Evil? O.O Have you been talking to Bridget? I’m truly a very nice person, honestly. I didn’t torture poor Remus, Lindi did! I can’t help it if they act like lunatics, can I? ;) *looks angelic*
Ah, teen angst…I’m happy to say I can still remember those days, though I was not an angst-ridden teen, myself. So, I’m really glad you think I’m doing it justice. :) And Will…well, Remus doesn’t like him much. ;)
I feel great satisfaction with the chapter if you really “got worked up” over it, and still thought it was good. I hoped it would invoke some emotion other than simple irritation, so thanks for that. :) And you have a book report to do? Are you already back in school? Gah! I’m not ready for the summer to be over, even if it wasn’t nearly as productive as I had hoped in terms of my writing. Oh well, time flies! I’ll try not to let too much more get by before the next update. Thank you, kitkat! :))
Aw, back just in time to review. You had wonderful characterization of Hagrid. You have his accent written perfectly I believe. And, did I see a new dog? I bet...I bet Vlad is Fang's father. =) I don't know whether I should be happy or sad that Lindi and Remus didn't get detention. Why am I happy they didn't get detention? Because detention is horrible, and they shouldn't have to suffer through it. Especially Remus. Why am I sad they didn't get detention? Because it would have been very interesting to see the two of them stuck in a room together. Can you imagine the thoughts going through Remus' head when he's locked in a room with the Delectable Dellington? ;) Waiting anxiously for chapter 27!
Author's Response: Hiya, kitkat. Thank you for the wonderful comment on Hagrid; it's so good to hear. I started to put in Fang, but realized he'd be getting a bit long in the tooth and he is such a marshmallow. Vlad is a wee bit more agressive. If you'd like Vlad to be Fang's father then that is fine! ;) Fang takes after his mum! You should be happy! I wouldn't want poor Remus to have to suffer through a torturous detention! Thanks for reviewing, kitkat. It's been a slow day at the office, lol.
Wondeful chapter Moony! I really enjoyed the part where Lindi was refering to her book. Those theories you used were really interesting. And I loved how you made the guys all squimish. I'd list everything I loved, but that would make this review ridiculously long. So ten out of ten, have a cookie, and can't wait till the next epic chapter! During which, Remus better get a real snogging! Please? *offers a silver platter of cookies*
Author's Response: Hiya kitkat! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I was worried that I was going to make my readers want to pull their hair out like Sirius. I can breathe a little easier now, so thanks. I have always found it funny that boys (the ones in my own experience that is) could be so uninhibited about some things (certain bodily functions, gasses etc…) yet seem to be mortified and/or brought to hysterics by others, particularly when said things are called by their proper names. It’s the whole sending your boyfriend to the store to by feminine products…That’s how you know if he really loves you! LOL You are bribing me with cookies to give Remus some snogging? O.O Oh dear, *drools over cookies* but I gave up sweets for Lent. *pouts* Thanks so much, kitkat!
Author's Response: Okay, right about now I'm wishing there was an edit feature on review responses. I can only plead giddiness at getting to spend most of the day writing. I'm delirious!
No snogging? *takes back platter of cookies* Just kidding! Lovely chapter as always. Gosh reviewing is hard, you know? So many things to comment on.
[i]She stared up at the water cascading over the wall from the blackness of the night above them. It sparkled like diamonds spilling from a velvet pouch as the glow of hundreds of saucer-sized luminescent blossoms shone upon it.[/i]
That is my favorite line ever. Great visualization. It's so sweet too!
Author's Response: Oh, kitkat, you are taking the whole snogging thing very well, lol! I think reviewing is hard also, and I can't tell you how much I appreciate the effort. :) I am thrilled that you like the description of the cove. Want to make me a banner for it? LOL, I'm teasing you. But I love your work so much, I'd have you make a banner for every chapter. ;) I just wish we could put them in the stories. Thanks, kitkat.
Great chapter moonymaniac! The long ones are always good. I particularly enjoyed Dung, and Sirius' little "chat" with Malfoy. I did think that Lindi's panic attack could have been more dramatic, but the whole 'Lindi jumping on James' made up for it. 10/10 as always! Can't wait till the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you kitkat2010. Here I was worried that people would think Lindi was overly hysterical. *blush* Well, glad you enjoyed the chapter anyway and I get a kick out of Dung and like to throw him in now and then. Thanks again and I'll try to get the next chapter up soon.
OO! Wonderful chapter! I loved how the dance went, and how you did that research for the characters the Mauraders went as. I mean, I actually looked up the characters they dressed up as, because I'm a dork like that. =)
Very nice, dramatic ending. I loved Remus' reaction, and how Sirius had the last words. Can't wait till the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you, kitkat. Glad you enjoyed the dress-up characters and I don’t think you are a dork! You just want to be fully informed. ;-) I nearly panicked when the Lexicon went down right in the middle of this chapter when I really needed it. From now on, I copy/paste anything I think I might need! LOL Sirius was very cruel, wasn’t he? *loves naughty Sirius*
Congratulations on winning Haley’s Choice in the BA Challenge. It really is an excellent banner! I was hoping you would review so I could tell you, since I’m not in the BA and can’t post. *pouts*
Oh Yay! New chapter! Loved the whole chocolate background...I was waiting for chocolate to make an appearence in your story. So happy about the whole Lindi and Daniel thing. I knew she wouldn't date that prat. So what are you going to do with Darlene? Is something going to happen to her on the mauraders little 'adventure'?. I hope something does, I don't like her. lol. And long chapters....rock!
Today, you get a piece of fudge. Because it rocks too.
Author's Response: Thank you Kitkat2010. Waiting for the chocolate, eh? What are you saying, that I'm predictable and you knew it would be there or have you figured out my intention to utilize all known Harry Potter clichés? LOL! Well, I won't have all of them, just a fair few! You don't like Darlene and want something to happen to her? *gasp* I don't know what to say. Poor poor Darlene. She needs to take the hint and get lost. Thanks for the fudge and for taking the time to review.
*repeats everyone else*
Poor Remus, his day just went down the drain. I hope that date cheers him up.
What's up with Lindi? Has she finally grasped the fact their meeting at the Three Broomsticks could actually be a *gasp!* date? I really hope so, or else it will be a terribly awkward day for the both of them.
Yes! Richard Lupin is so fun. Although I cannot wait til we get a glance at Mrs. Lupin in future chapters. Gosh, have I mentioned you have her characterized perfectly? The prying mother you can't help but love. =)
I was very happy to see that the reporters of the Daily Prophet haven't started calling Voldemort 'He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named'. It really shows how they aren't yet terrified of him. And the article was a very smart way of showing the Voldemort's reign is just beginning. No one fears him yet, but everyone now knows he isn't just another crazy wizard.
I liked how you also snuck in the Order. I never really thought the mauraders would have heard of the Order in the middle of 6th year. I always thought they would have heard of it after they graduated, but this is not a bad idea.
Ugh, Greyback scares me. End of that subject. ;)
Anyway, just as a side note, I noticed something that didn't sound quite right. First paragraph of the article:
[i]The identities of the two other victims have not [b]being[/b] released, pending notification of family members.[/i]
Shouldn't it be been rather than being? Eh, I don't know really. My skills (or lack of skills) in grammar sometimes confuse me....
Anyway, wonderful chapter. I haven't done this in a while, so....Have a cookie!
P.S. Congrats! MoB is a featured fic! You deserve it!
Author's Response: Wow, kitkat, did you join SPEW while I wasn’t looking? :) I think Lindi actually realizes she has her first “real date” and it has her very nervous (something I can definitely relate to as I was ‘sick’ for nearly a week before my first date. ;) )
I’m glad you like Richard. I just imagine in their isolation during Remus’ early years, that they would have developed a very close relationship. His mum and dad would have been his only ‘friends’. And thank you about Mrs. Lupin. How could she not be a bit over-protective with such a wonderful, adorable, heartbreakingly sweet son?
Ah, the rise of Voldemort/He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named. Actually, I just don’t want to have to type HWMNBN all the time, LOL! Kidding, I want it to be fairly realistic, so it has to be at least somewhat gradual. And having them hear about the Order is really for a later chapter. I think it makes sense that they would have heard about it after graduation, too, that they were recruited by Dumbledore at that point, but it works for the story this way.
Greyback…can you say slow and painful death? I think I might write a one shot about Mrs. Lupin snapping and going vigilante on him…she then pleads temporary insanity and goes scott free! :) That could be fun!
You are absolutely correct that it should be \'been\'. I’ve changed it. Thank you very much! And thanks for the cookie and for your congrats, and this wonderful review. :)
Aw, man. A cliffy. Last time I read a cliffy in a Remus story I liked...it was never updated again...*tear* But anyway. Great chapter, as always (gosh your reviews are getting redundant) And the game....hehe, that made my day.
'woodyshaga dog?' Are you trying to say something there Moony? lol. Can't wait for the next one! I hope Lindi says she woodyshaga werewolf! =)
Author's Response: Oh, kitkat, never updated again? Don't you hate that? One of my all time favorite fics (the one that really hooked me on fanfic, actually) never updated after I think 11 chapters. Last update was in 2004,:( I still check it now and then. *sniffle* I promise, barring being hit by a bus or something equally tragic (for me, anyway) I will definitely update! I'm glad you liked the chapter and I don't mind redundant reviews. ;) I'll take any kind I can get. :) :) Well, no flames please. Glad you enjoyed the game. Me, trying to say something? *whistles innocently* Remus hopes she'll say she would too. She better tread carefully or Sirius might hex her! Thanks for reviewing.
Yay! I've been watching this story for a long time, ever since I saw the banner for it in your sig on the forums. I absolutely love it. I especially love this chapter. I really enjoyed how Sirius got angry and almost protective of Remus after the map incident. Also I liked how Peter gave a little speech. Peter never gets portrayed in a good light. 10/10 and you get added to my favorites. Have a cookie. :)
Author's Response: Oh, thank you Kitkat2010! I'm so glad you like it. And I'm glad to hear you were attracted by my banner! Was it the pretty Remus? lol. I'm glad you enjoyed Sirius. As we know, he can be a little volatile when someone makes him mad. And thank you for commenting on Peter. I won't go rambling on about him again but I'm glad you liked that. Everyone is being so very nice. I'm going to get right on the chapter I'm currently working on. That will help deflate my head really quickly as it is giving me headaches! But I'll enjoy the cookie first. Thank you for reviewing.
Oh! When Remus grabbed Lindi's hand I was mentally chanting "Kiss! Kiss! Kiss!" But knowing you, I should've thought, "Not going to happen..." That part was extremely sweet though. At least there is going to be a date in the next chapter!
I just noticed some foreshadowing. From two chapters ago:
He hoped James and Sirius considered that before they took him out. He also hoped that the brightness and beauty wouldn’t entice people into taking a midnight stroll. Of course, he always worried that something would make people come out. But he was sure the cold would help to discourage them. Anyway, James and Sirius would protect them if they did….
And now, in this chapter, we learn Lindi was out. Hehe, I love foreshadowing. =)
Are we ever going to figure out what exactly happened to poor, ickle Remus? That bruise sounds painful... I really hope Remus had ended up chasing a squirrel rather than Lindi...
Well, Great Chapter (as always) and keep it up!
Author's Response: Knowing me...? What are you trying to say, kitkat? O.o Hmmm? LOL Just keep chanting...this was first posted as a romance, so there is bound to be some kissing coming up, right? ;)
Oooo, foreshadowing... I try to use it, and there is more in the story(won\'t say where, as that would defeat the purpose). When I write it, I always wonder if I\'m being horribly obvious, but then wonder if maybe it is so poorly done that no one will remember it. But I do try, because I love it too.
I think Remus might rather not know what brought on the bruise. James probably wouldn\'t know what made Remus bolt, unless they had seen something like Lindi in the stands, and then, surely they would have mentioned it to Remus...or maybe they were protecting him from knowing. O.o. Thank you, kitkat. I\'ll try! :)
I absolutely love your story so far. 10++++++++++
Wow. Just astonishing! And delightfully dark. I loved how you inserted actions normal human beings would experience. Such as:
This time it happens so suddenly, I recoil when the black meets my eyes…Wonderful. I also adore the parts in italics, especially the last three lines.
I'm am ine awe over Snape's characterization. I, being eager like I am, didn't read the summary. I began to read, not knowing the poem was about Snape, and found myself thinking during the middle of the poem, "This sounds like a Snape poem."
Correct me if I'm wrong, but I do believe ninth stanza refers to Snape killing Dumbledore? That is the interpretation I got. Even if I am wrong, it still fits wonderfully with the rest of the poem.
There were a few spots where I was unsure about the comma uses. Rereading over the poem, I gues they are used correctly, but it might just be my reading style that makes them sound weird.
Overall, wonderful poem, and keep writing. P.S. If you see those tags around my paragraphs, please don't mind them. I'm still trying to figure this out. =)
Author's Response: Thank you for the great review. I rather liked the parts in italics also, they were there to add a catchy rhythm to the poem and I guess they did their job. I will review my comma use, I wrote this poem so long ago, and I\'m sure I could find all sorts of problems with it now, lol. Well, thanks again for the review and I\'ve begun writing again so you may see more from me soon.
I really liked this story. Although I didn't not laugh out loud, I was smiling contently through the entire story. =)
I liked how you split this story into letter format. The formal beginnings sort of made it a shock to read such casual little notes at the end. Anyway, I was enthralled to see that Hermione had such a sense of humor in this story. Most of the time she is the one that disapproves of anything humorous, but in this fiction she is actively involved in the fun. Nice change.
The interuptions the twins and Harry made were a nice surprise. I particularly enjoyed that part.
There was a few things that I didn't particularly like. They didn't make the fic less humorous in any way, yet they didn't add to it either. For one thing, the fact the children were named Lily and James and the dog Sirius sort of got under my skin. Of course, that cliche can be used to your advantage in some fics, but in yours I found it didn't add much at all. Granted, that is just my personal opinion. Like I said before, it didn't add, nor did it detract from the fic.
In all, your fic was wonderful. It was a great pick-me-up after a long day.
Good luck to you and your future writings. =)
Author's Response: Yeah, I probably should have chosen something a bit more original as far as names are concerned. I\"m really glad I could help make your day a bit better. thatnks for writing! -Daisy
Oh, that is so sweet, and very sad. I almost cried. Ron was very sweet, and you had Ginny's emotions down. The way she felt it was her fault Harry died was heartbreaking. Yet Ron's comforting words were heartfelt. I choked up when Ron said Harry was still living on in Ginny and Jacob. So sad.
10/10. =) Wonderful job.