I am junior at Michigan State University, although my fiction has been lying dormant since I was a junior in high school! My favorite character is Tonks...closely followed by Fred and George. I also like Andromeda a lot, but I'm not sure if she really counts, seeing as she's never actually in the books.
Most of the time I am a die-hard canon shipper, although I grudgingly accept NEARLY anything well written.
Outside the world of Harry Potter I doodle, do TaeKwonDo, and procrastinate professionally. I adore Art History, shopping, sock monkies, Cirque du Solei, lemonade, Chex Mix, sleep, and singing badly.
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I've scored as both a Hufflepuff and Ravenclaw on these quizzes. The mugglenet fanfiction forums (which has the best test I've seen so far) said I was Ravenclaw...so maybe I am. I still like to think of myself as a Hufflepuff. Woo!! Go Duffers!
Ah, yes, quite a sticky situation for James. Miserably sticky. Your descriptions are still lovely. I could really see the shattered wine glass and the sugar cubes. Hmmm...onward to the next chapter! PS...the third chapter of my own story is up, if you are interested in telling me what you think (smiles hopefully).
Author's Response: Yes, a very sticky situation. I just reviewed your Phedra Bagley story - which is a great name, by the way, and the writing is lovely! I can't wait for her to go to Hogwarts, and I wonder what part she'll play in the lives of the Marauders. Oh, and I had forgotten about the sugar cubes (I went back to check what you were talking about) - but now I know, I'm very glad you appreciated them!
This chapter is so long that I'm going to leave reviews in sections or I'll never get around to reviewing at all! So its begining is great. I like seeing James at school again. The way he interacts with Sirius is well done. I chuckled over his behavior in Potions, for some reason it just really struck me as James-ish. Bravo. Expect another review on this chapter when I get around to the rest of it!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I've a feeling he might have misbehaved in Sluggy's classes!
New chapter! Woot! I am so excited! Now then, that was really good. Sirius and his motorcycle...sigh. The radio description was perfect (I had forgotten how much I loved your descriptions)! I loved everything except the bajillion spaces between paragraphs. I'm assuming they were accidental, because they are more than a bit ridiculous. So glad you updated!
Author's Response: Thank you - and I\'m so glad you noticed the radio description - I actually spent ages on that little paragraph trying to get the wording right! As for the format - I have no idea why that happened, and it looks quite annoying to read, I would think - but I\'m trying to improve things, so hopefully it won\'t look too bad!
Mundungus was absolutely hilarious. The image of Dumbledore with the umbrella was funny too. One of those images that makes me wish I was a better artist so I could draw it. All around an interesting chapter. The Lily-at-the-lake part seemed a little over-dramatic to me, but that was the only thing that bothered me. 10/10!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I loved writing Mundungus, and hope to feature him in the near future! I've never read a Marauder fic that features him as I had imagined, but when I put James on the Knight Bus in that chapter, suddenly Mundungus crept in and I thought - wow, I have to write him in! He's quite sneaky, but I suppose he steals to get by, and he provides a contrast to the people James has grown up with! As for Dumbledore with the umbrella - again, I didn't really plan that, it just sort of happened, and there he was, with the umbrella - it is raining, though... And the Lily-at-the-lake part was inspired by a poem by W.B. Yeats, and yes, I agree, it is a bit melodramatic, but so is the poem, so I put the Lily part in at the end of the chapter. It crops up again, so it wasn't entirely pointless, I hope!
Ah, I don't know if I trust this new guy yet. He seems too good to be true. And he almost seems to be coming on too quickly (I'm thinking Hamlet ) I'll have to wait and see...
Author's Response: I was thinking the same thing when I wrote the early chapters of Red - that it was a bit like "Hamlet". But I don't want to ruin anything, so you will just have to wait and see, I'm afraid. Thank you for your reviews; they are very much appreciated!
First of all, I am a huge fan of the title of this chapter, "From Genisis to Revelations". Its great, its clever, and it fits the chapter perfectly. There were certainly a lot of revalations going on here! Some of the description is great, like when you said that James eye's "itched" (or something along those lines). Your writing is really detail-oriented, which is a good thing despite the previously mentioned wordiness. The colors in the description of the papers were great. I could really picture it. I got goosebumps, and not just because the room I'm sitting in is really cold. Bravo!!!
Author's Response: Thank you - I love The Clash, and they feature in the time period of this chapter, so I decided to put them in - and put in some lyrics that were relevant, of course! I'm delighted to hear that your enjoying it, and hope you tell me what you think of the next chapters - it gets more exciting, I think. Thanks again for the lovely review!
Alright, the second half of this chapter was really funny, particularly the purple boils. I also got a kick out of Sirius talking about Lily while she was right there (under the cloak). Lily seems to be a pretty nice chica. So many people portray her so many ways. I like your interpertation a lot. 10/10
Author's Response: Thanks - it's really long, but then all this stuff kept popping up in my head - like Lily under the cloak - and I thought, I have to put that in! Glad you liked the purple boils, though I'm sure Snape didn't! And yeah, Lily's nice here, which is how she's supposed to be, I think, but also sort of closed and reserved, much more so than James. Anyway, thank you for your great reviews!
The additions were good. The chapter is now massive, but the additions flowed right in. There was a little "action." And James loves Lily (c'mon everyone, collective "awwwwwww"). You did that well, not too tacky.
Author's Response: Thank you very much - glad you liked the additions!
Ah, hmmm...lets see...
I am actually rereading this story (sort of) because I started it, liked it (but never reviewed...sorry), lost it for a while, and am now intersted again. Just to explain the random review in what seems to be the middle of nowhere. Although you're probably more confused now. Ah, anyways!
Its a great story. Your writing style is unique and your vocabulary beautifully large, although that can make the story seem a little bit wordy at times (which makes me start to skim...I have to mentally yank myself back). I really like the way you portray the purebloods' elitist society. Stuffy and whatnot. Uncle Lucius is certainly interesting. I suppose that the Malfoys and Potters are related somewhere (I just saw a pic. that JKR drew of the Black family tree on mugglenet, and it had the Longbottoms...so why not the Potters?) and it certainly would make things interesting for Harry and Draco, even though they aren't around yet. I'll try to keep up with my reading and re-reading! Lovely so far though!
Author's Response: I'm not too confused! Thank you for your lovely review though, and I'm really happy that you appreciate my writing style - you are right about it being a bit wordy sometimes, especially in the earlier chapters... oh well, I've cut down! And as for Uncle Lucius - I quite liked the idea, and I had never seen it anywhere else, so I thought I'd try it out! I really hope you enjoy the rest anyway, and let me know what you think!
Oh, I'm first. And my first first, at that!
“Well, he has as good a reason to celebrate as you do,” Remus mused, picking a leaf up from the ground and tearing it into two green halves.
This is exactly why I love your writing so much. You are so detail oriented, that you create these little images that completely set the tone for a scene, like Remus tearing the leaf. I almost feel bad, not having anything critical to say for this chapter. Er... I guess all I can say is great job, keep 'em coming! Oh, and a 10/10!!!
Author's Response: Thank you very, very much. I really love writing in those little details, and I'm so glad you appreciate them. And I'm glad you didn't have any criticisms about that part, but I just added two more passages, so please read them and then, let me know what you think. It now involves Slytherins, Snape, and more L/J stuff!
That was clever. The whole Moody-and-Dumbledore-bursting-through-the-wall-in-a-muggle-building-using-an-illigal-flying-carpet was really weird and random, but I still enjoyed it. Randomness can be good. Round of applause!
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!! That was a TON of really fascinating info! Petunia and Remus and Mrs. Potter and dementors...*is overwhelmed by the mass of information and faints onto the floor*. Petunia definitely hated magic after that (or is there even more?)! What a fantastic chapter, AND it had another cliffhanger (a happy one, this time)! Once again I absolutely cannot wait for an update!!!
Author's Response: Ickkk!!! Wow the next two chapters in particuliar are going to mix you up I'm afraid!!! Petunia is a complex character and now we are going to learn about her even more complex sister! ok ok that's your clue and I'm not saying anymore!!!
Alright, this was definitely my favorite chapter of ALL TIME! The chat with Harry and Hermione was lovely. I'm so glad that there aren't anymore excuses for keeping H/G apart (well, I suppose Dean is still there, but...). I was completely blown away with Lily being a volcen. It all makes sense now! What a great twist!
Author's Response: Favorite chappie? Yayyy!!! Hermione can be difficult/nosy when she needs to be! There are no excuses on Harry's behalf! He is going after Ginny all the way! As for Lily...one more thing in the next chappie is still to come...I hope you guys catch it right away!
Hey, how are villages like the ghetto? Ghettos are in big cities, like Detroit, which is crazy ghetto let me tell you. When I think of villages I think of small towns in the countryside. Ghettos are big and dirty and not in the countryside. I live about 45 min. from Detroit (not IN in, never IN it) so I would know.
Author's Response: Hehehe at least someone is challenging JeWb! There are smaller ghettos though...I feel worst for them because they are overlooked (cuz they don't have a large enough population to demand attention and help from the government!)
Oh, and I need a brit-picking beta for my story, Through the Eyes of Phedra Bagley and I was wondering if any of you lovely people would be willing. I've already got two chapters up if you want to take a look at it and decide. :-)
Author's Response: :( I'm not a brit so I can't help...but I must say so far it is excellent! Phedra is such a character! So hopelessly normal yet about to find out about things that would blow anyone's mind!
Haha, rereading this was a good idea o' mine! I had forgotten about Luna fancying Ron. That complicates things!
Author's Response: Notabanana, excellent job! You guys are beginning to catch old stuff that may *ahem may ;)* play a role in the future!
To be accepted to a university in Michigan, you don't have to take the SAT. The ACT is enough, although I probably will take both just because I can!
Author's Response: Michigan is definately tough! I considered going to law school there. I got the scores but than decided against it! Still, I love the campus and academics!
I think your reviewers are starting to develop a hate-group for Dean!!! I have to admit I was excited to see Ginny shut him out like that, although Harry's comment afterwards doesn't sound like him. I REALLY liked where Ginny shoved a turnip in Harry's mouth. Hehehe!!! I'm worried about Hagrid!!! He'll be squished by the bigger giants if he decides to lead some epic battle against them (bites nails nervously with eyes darting around the room). I caught a spelling mistake... murderers was spelled "murders" in the second paragraph of the Prophet article.
Author's Response: Yes, I believe saveginny417 is the leader of that group ;) Harry's comment...well he's jealous...very veryyy jealous! Dean has something that Harry believes he can't even try to go after! Hagrid...I really hope no giant sits on him as well! Thank you so much for the correction, it gets difficult to catch the errors sometimes!
Notre Dame (a crazy-awesome school) also will accept an ACT. We take MEAPs in 4th, 5th, 8th (I think) and 11th grade for standerdized testing. And some schools do still have study hall, I guess. My cousin's does, she lives near Chicago.
Author's Response: MEAPs!!! I love that!!! It sounds so funny!!! We have CSAPs! C-Saps? hehehe we made fun of it when we were younger..ahhh such fools!!
I feel like a meanie-head saying this but I wasn't very fond of the chapter. It was sort of dull, and...
Why hadn't Harry seen Ron turn scarlett before?
Why could Ginny be moved up if Hermione couldn't?
"Apperently they were spun to make invisiblity cloaks" was in the wrong paragraph.
I sound like a jerk but figured I ought to give my opinion anyways. I still love your story overall!
Author's Response: You are not a meanie-head, you are a good reviewer. I like to know what you like and what you dislike! You were right about the error *it has been corrected* Ginny is there for a reason! Looks like you've got another chapter to go and you'll be all caught up! Again, I always want to hear what you think!