I am junior at Michigan State University, although my fiction has been lying dormant since I was a junior in high school! My favorite character is Tonks...closely followed by Fred and George. I also like Andromeda a lot, but I'm not sure if she really counts, seeing as she's never actually in the books.
Most of the time I am a die-hard canon shipper, although I grudgingly accept NEARLY anything well written.
Outside the world of Harry Potter I doodle, do TaeKwonDo, and procrastinate professionally. I adore Art History, shopping, sock monkies, Cirque du Solei, lemonade, Chex Mix, sleep, and singing badly.
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I've scored as both a Hufflepuff and Ravenclaw on these quizzes. The mugglenet fanfiction forums (which has the best test I've seen so far) said I was Ravenclaw...so maybe I am. I still like to think of myself as a Hufflepuff. Woo!! Go Duffers!
There is no freaking way that Dumbledore had children. He would have been responsible enough to tell Harry anyways. On top of that, Aunt Petunia isn't going to start being nice all of a sudden. Civil? Sure. Suddenly standing up for the magical world (that she hates)? Not right away like that. On top of that, the sentence structure in the very begining of the chapter was a bit too simplistic and the Hermione/Ginny dialogue was a bit unrealistic. Not the way two teenage girls talk, even if one of the girls is Hermione. I have to admit that the end of their conversation was funny however. And the cliffhanger was tempting, although I was distracted by all the things that bugged me earlier on in the chapter.
Author's Response: Sorry I bugged you, that was not my intent. But people do keep secrets for all sorts of reasons,some good, some bad. The reason Dumbledore has not revealed Harry's ancestry will be revealed in future chapters. I agree, Petunia's change is dramatic, but again, people can make dramatic changes, particularly after significant events such as Dumbledore's death. How about Dicken's Ebenezer Scrooge for instance? Also, these ideas are not random; they are essential to my plot line. Lastly, if you just don't like my writing, I'm sorry, I'll try to do better in the future. -greywolf
Oh, oh! I have found a typeo! In the fifth paragraph of this chapter, you wrote "out" instead of "put" (*notabanana glows with pride over finding a stupid, nitpicky mistake in Vindictus Viridian's work*). This story rocked. Its a good thing I read In the Eyes of Others first. The little tadpole was so cute! This was a very different perspective than you usually take, and it was a good job too. Woot!
Author's Response: *scurries to fix pesky typo* Thanks! I\'m glad you enjoyed it. I\'d been wondering what on earth would get them together if they were the Lily and James I knew so far, and just had to start writing. I\'ll look forward to the next typo!
Not a bad start! Harry being asked to take out the trash was funny, definitely, but a little out of character for Mrs. Weasly. I'm definitely intrigued as to what the next chapters will be like. The U-No-Poo seemed too random, I didn't really think it was funny. There seemed to be a feeling of I-know-a-lot-about-Harry-Potterishness about the chapter. Hmm...I'm anticipating the rest!
Author's Response: Thank you for your thoughts. You are definately right about the U-No-Poo bit being a bit random and not so funny. I will try and submit the next chapter as soon as possible :)
The voice telling the story seemed more Ginny-ish than other's I've read. I liked it, anyways. Good job with something so angsty!
Author's Response: Really? I thought I was very out-of-character when I wrote this. Hmm.... Thanks so much for your review. They make my day!
Very funny, very nice, very well written. Overall...I liked it a lot. Did the note in the begining say it was associated with a longer fic? I am so going to read it, perhaps it would explain the apparant OOCness of Snape. Despite that, it was an excellent one shot. What a NON-lets-look-deep-into-the-mind-of-so-and-so-in-a-poetic-way-by-discussing-flashes-of-their-past one-shot shoud be. If that makes sense. I have to admit, when I read the summary of this story...I thought you were talking about bodily organs. So you might want to consider adding the word "pipe" out front. To sum up this insanely long reveiw...GOOD JOB!!!
Author's Response: Oooh, no, no way am I adding a \'pipe\' out front! How else would I drag in the Lily/Severus shippers? *chortle* I\'m glad you liked it even if this isn\'t a side of Severus you expect -- it seemed to me that he is prone to being a mostly-subtle person who occasionally does utterly over-the-top things, and for some reason this was how it manifested. Given a birthday and a disused organ. I think that hyphenated term actually did make sense. If you want to try looking deep into the soul of Severus Snape with this story, though, you\'re welcome to give it a try. Thanks for reviewing!
Oh, dear. When I left that first review I had no idea that you had written so many fanfics. Where on earth do you find the time? And now I want to read them all! Arg!
Author's Response: Heh. I don\'t sleep as much as I used to. Enjoy the reading project! And thanks again!
Very funny...but I wish it had more. I especially enjoyed the "backsight charm". Clever! Good job, and update soon!
Author's Response: I\'m so glad you enjoyed it! I think this one\'s done though. I\'m working on others though. (The more I write that the more I make it a promise to myself that I will finish some that I have started!) Thanks so much- -Daisy
Wow, very dramatic. The last sentence in the first paragraph is way too long, in my opinion. It was rather winding and confusing. The part right after that, where James shut the door softly, was perfect. It was perhaps the most touching part of the entire story. Generally I liked this, although it isn't my favorite of your fanficton works. Perhaps an eight out of ten.
Author's Response: The last sentence of the first paragraph... yes, I agree, it\'s quite long, but I worked really hard on it. I had been attempting to create a rapid, fluid movement - a panicked, bunch-of-things-happening-at-once, as opposed to one action after another, which I thought lacked the frenzied mood I was trying to convey. And then, it contrasted with the following line, so I didn\'t really consider it\'s readability, to be honest! I know that there are so many versions of this exact night out there, but I wanted to make one of my own. The next part is more... original, I think, but I don\'t mind if it\'s not as much to your taste as my other fics are.
Ron was very Ronish and Hermione was very Hermioneish but Harry wasn't very Harryish. Harry tries to avoid any potential Ron/Hermione conflict. Well, thats how I always saw him. The story was cute, though. It made me smile, and wasn't too overdone.
Author's Response: yeah,even i myself think that harry wasn\'t that harryish...let\'s just say that he...uh... wasn\'t himself at the time... (hehe) anyway, thanks so much for the review!! =)
Look, I found the little box. Haha. I thought I might go and return the favor of a good review, so here I am. I'm glad I came! Fleur is certainly a plausible character here. She is a bit overdramatic, but that is in her nature, I suppose. The chapter seems like you were trying to cram as much information about Fleur's family life in as quickly as possible, which was a little too much. On the other hand, I loved your descriptions of Beauxbatons Acadamy. The contrast of its smooth, snobby air with Hogwarts' eccentricity (which I hopefully spelled correctly) was very interesting. The sibling relationships were also well, done. Even though Fleur is ashamed of her brother, she still knows he would take care of her if she was a squib. Awww. On a final note, I think that the word "palace" was a bit grand for the Delacour home. I'm sure its big and grand and white and pretty (I actually made a model on Sims 2 once, it was really big and marble-y) but I don't think a palace is the correct word, especially the way it was used. Perhaps if you has said something like, "her family's mansion (chateau?), a virtual palace of white marble" or something along those lines. Oh, dear. I am carrying on, aren't I? Anyways, overall, I enjoyed myself. Most people see Fleur as a shallow character, and this story should definitely add some depth!
Author's Response: Thanks! Sorry about cramming all the info, it is my first fic, and I\'m \"Not Always Perfect!\" haha That is actually a really great point about the palace. I like chateau, it\'s classy but a bit smaller. I think I will change it right now.
1983. In a world where Voldemort has won the First War, where hope has fled from an Earth moaning under the Dark Lord's iron hand, marriages are broken and others are arranged in order to preserve the sacred purity of blood. James Potter loses his wife; now they have to find another for him.
This chapter had a lot happening! I liked all of it as well, particularly the interaction between roommates. The attention to details...such as the hairpins pulling at her scalp, really brings the story to life. Will there be a backstory of why Voldemort won, and what went wrong etc? I really want to know! This is so different from any fanficton I've ever read (perhaps only because I'm a newcomer to the category), and I really like it!
Author's Response: Thanks... I\'m sometimes afraid I\'m a little too descriptive, but then if it helps making the story realistic, that\'s just great. The story of how Voldemort won the war will be told, though only much later. For now, it\'s enough to know he won it and Dumbledore fled. I\'m really happy you like the story, I wasn\'t too sure about writing an AU story. Thanks again for the review!
Poor little Harry! Poor Marie Antoinette! Poor everybody! Life seems generally awful no matter which way you look at it at this point. I'm very intrigued by the resolution at the end. It reminded me, for some reason, of Scarlett O'Hara saying she would never go hungery again. So, I can't wait to see where this new outlook leads Marie Antoinette! I can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: Yeeees, the story\'s not joyful, is it...? Funny, now you mention it, there IS a strong similarity between Marie-Antoinette\'s resolution and Scarlett\'s in Gone with the Wind... Strange, as they have absolutely nothing in common. I\'ve just started the next chapter! Thanks for the review!
Well, this is my first time in the alternate universe section, and I love the "what if" game so this story seems to be up my alley. Well written. Tinville was absolutely awful/pathetic, even though I chuckled at his accent. Good job on him. Even better job on Madame Maxine. And Lestrange. Overall... I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: You\'re putting quite a lot of pressure on me... I\'m your first time in the AU section! I hope I\'ll be up to it! Thanks for your comments on Tinville and Madame Maxime -- I like her, we\'ll see more of her later in the story. Well, you still have two chapters to read... Enjoy!
Fantastic job! I could see everything playing out in my mind, especially the storm at the end. Marie Antoinette's thought processes are great. Everything is well done! I was so excited for this update, and now (of course) I can't wait for another!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! now I should be writing some smart and/or deep comment, but I really can\'t think of any :). I\'ll try to update soon, I have a soft spot for that story...
Shame on me for not reviewing until now. Unfortunately, I've never been a good reviewer of stories I love (such as yours). So, uh, great job as usual! I'd really like to punch James in the nose if he wasn't already so distraught. Poor MA is starving and he's totally forgetting about her! Of course, I think I feel worst for Lily. Hmm...there's a lot of people to feel bad for here.
Author's Response: Yes, there is. I\'m starting to be worried: in all the reviews I got for this story, at least one out of two points out it\'s utterly depressing. Anyway, don\'t worry about not reviewing sooner; I, for one, won\'t update before quite a long time. So thanks for the review :)
Once upon a time in the far, far, away land of California, Miranda Aramintha Rowena Ysabella Slyvia Ursula Evangelista- Mary Sue, for short- accepted an invitation to Hogwarts. As she searches for her one true love, will her soul mate be Draco? Harry? Snape? Colin? Fred and George? or...gasp...Voldemort?
Nominated for a Quicksilver Quill for Best Humour Fiction.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! That was great, Mary Sue almost made me puke. Tiny typo on the very last line..shoud be "her love's first kiss" I think. The only thing your story was missing was Mary Sue's tragic past that she gracefully overcame. Such a funy story, I especially loved Draco's allergic reaction to the oil.
Author's Response: I\'ll take a look at that. I was going Shrek, when Fiona was in the castle saying \"True love\'s first kiss\". :D California blonde air heads are hard to give tragic pasts- they\'re way too bubbly, snicker, snicker. Thanks so much for letting me know you enjoyed the parody! ^_^
Well, first review! I did like the way you set the story up. Very nice, well written, and unique. There was a little bit of humor in the beginning, with the introduction and whatnot, which I liked as well. Now, although it’s understandable that the war would change everyone a bit, I found some OOCness that upset me nonetheless. I highly doubt that Harry and Hermione ever discussed magical theory for hours. Although he does appreciate magic more, Harry is just about as academically uninclined as Ron is. I'm not saying he's stupid, he just doesn't discuss it for fun. I did go along with the part where he lost interest in Quidditch. I have to say I was most upset about what you did to poor Ginny. Just because she was popular in Hogwarts does not make her a social climber. She is not the type to put herself first...ever. The opposition to the donation for war orphans was extremely unlike her, especially since she grew up poor. Lastly, the Muggle Liason Office is a terrible waste of Hermione's OWLs. If I remember correctly, there weren’t' a lot of prerequisites for that job. Unfortunately, I have to admit that your story sounds like the author survived the HMS Harmony disaster but simply can't admit that Ginny and Harry might be okay.
Oh man, I really liked this story. Very good.
Author's Response: : ) I liked it too, thanks.
As per usual...AMAZING!
Author's Response: Thanks!
That was adorable! It leaves you all happy inside...even though I still think that Oliver is a bit of a maniac. Great job...I love missing moments!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m gad that it did! Oliver is insane, really. That\'s why I like him so much. ^^ Hee hee. Missing moments are the best sorts of stories!