Nostalgia, Mar. 16th, 2016.
Long time reader, first time reviewer. Amazing fanfic, definately one of the best I've red on this site. Can't wait until the next chapter! (character death?)
Ah, what a great story. The plot just kind of sucks you in until you can do nothing but keep your eyes glued to the screen reading more and more. This chapter was especially suspenseful, there's so many unanswered questions. To add some constructive critisism, I'll say that you could benefit from using some modifier words other than said, I think it will just spice up the writing a little. The dialogue was written very well though and I cannot complain about the gripping plot. Overall, great story and if you're wondering why I'm reviewing the 5th chapter, its because I'm on a scavenger hunt for the word "enigma" in a story, in a contest on the forums and I must review the chapter which the word is in.
I will have to agree with the reviewers below me and say that, this is indeed a really great story. The characters are really real and in character and your use of description and dialogue create a similar atmosphere that we get when reading J.K. Rowling's writing. I can not offer any constructive critisism at the moment as I cannot see any real flaws in your writing. Anyways, it was a good read and I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thank you, that's very flattering. Sometimes it's nice to get a little writer's boost now and again and recharge those creative batteries ;)
very well written I must say, your style is so much different than I am most familiar with. It's very clear and concise not overly jammed with metaphorical puzzles, if you know what I mean.
Author's Response: Thanks! With this one in particular, it was more or less meant to be fun. I wasn't attempting to get all deep or anything. Just trying to capture some of the "surprises" often attributed to the infamous beans.
Very nice work Vader. It sounded so peaceful and calm, and it has a nice slow flow that kinda slows my heartbeat. I take it that it is from Dumbledore's point of view, from the socks, lemon drops and the quote at the end. If so, then good job capturing his mellow, somewhat weird imagination in his dream.
Author's Response: Thanks! I meant to capture Dumbledore's spirit. Only, he isn't really dreaming.... Thank you very much for the review.
Great song again, but I see that the Sorting Hat has lost a bit of his belligerence from the last sorting song. Maybe he had a talking to from Mrs. Sorting Hat?
I respect your Sorting Hat song writing skills very much because I've tried to write one but I can't seem to pull it off, and you say you wrote this one in 30 minutes? Very admirable.
*grin* I claim the title 'Fastest rhymer' in the forum *lol*
First of all, sorry for such a late review. The truth is I read it a long time ago and then I logged in to review it and BAM!computer totally froze. Anyways great poem, loved the use of repitition, it gave it that sort of anxious feeling that I'm sure an expectant father would have. Overall, great poem 9.5/10, but I'll just round up.
I think that this story has the potential to be great. I was disappointed slightly that the mystery of the horcrux's was over so quickly but I know that you have something else up your sleeve to keep the story going.
Author's Response: Thank you so much :) It's difficult to create a solid sense of exactly where, or it may be more appropriate to say *when*, Harry is in the course of the action - you might imagine this fic starting somewhere towards the end of the seventh book. The title sort of helps - I chose it because "the die is cast" is what is usually said in wartime when something enormous or cataclysmic happens and suddenly you're thrown into battle. That enormous "something" is Harry's discovery that he is a Horcrux. Because of that one detail, Harry is thrust into a majorly bad situation: having to search no further than himself for the last horcrux, how can he kill Voldemort without dying as well? I won't give anymore away, but I hope it eases your anxiety about the future chapters to say some pretty dark stuff lies ahead! Thanks again! :)
wow, that was a novel! Very well written, I'm not to sure why but I'm particularly fond of the stanza, ‘To be famous means trouble’ he said to his friends ‘A trouble I eagerly shun I prefere to be known for what I intend Rather than what I have done’
I liked it very much, it has that kind of random all over the place imagery that you would find in a haiku which I love.
Author's Response: Thanks, a haiku format was kind of what I was going for. -Cherubim
I really like this poem. Very good how the dialogue blended easily into the poem without feeling choppy.
Author's Response: thanks! ^.^ sometimes dialouges can sound choppy, and I'm pleased that you think it didn't ;) thank you for your review!
Very good revamp of Overdues. If my memory is correct, I believe that the original is about a panicking man with a library book thats 42 years overdue.
Author's Response: Thank-you. I may soon move this story to a different account.
Good poem! I like the French spin on it also, I know a bit of french and by looking at the French one first, I am proud to say that I was able to understand pretty much what each line meant. The rhythm held up good on the whole, overall good poem.
Liked it very much. It flowed so well and the lines just matched so evenly. I hope you continue to write poetry so I may read more.
Author's Response: Thankyou very much. If your interested, I've already written several other poems, see them on my User Page.
Oh, that so has to be Harry and Ginny, but when I read it i thought about Lily and James, anyone else, no? Well great poem anyways, as long as it has a happy ending...
Author's Response: it can be whoever you want it to be *grin* I just love happy endings, so I guess it reflects in my work ;) thank you for your review! :D
Very mysterious, I have no idea where the story is going to go from here but I hope it's somewhere very exciting! It reminded me of this prologue I recently read in a Agatha Christie book, it made little sense at first and then at the end of the book everything related squarely to it. Anyways, very well written I saw very little errors and I liked the little backstories on the policemen made it sound so real.
Not exactly my favourite pairing, but that aside I thought it was very well written. I am particularily fond of the verse,
You saved me
Your loving sympathy
Your soft kiss
You rescued my mind
The only critisism I can give is that the rhythm faltered a couple of times, but other than that it was good, and keep it up.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it anyway. As for the rythm; I don't strive for any particular rythm, I just write out of spur of the moment thoughts.
Excellent, I love Remus and Tonks as a ship even though not a lot of focus is put on it in HBP. In your poem you used your punctuation and line breaks very well to emphazise certain pauses and words. I want to offer some some sort of contructive critisism, but at the moment I am drawing blank, so I'd take that as a compliment. I'll give it a 9/10 and keep up the great work.
Author's Response: Thank you... I think the idea of Remus and Tonks is very sweet.
Excellent story of the brave knight named Odo. It rhymed really well and flowed pretty good. The only suggestion I can make is to put in quotations when Odo is speaking. I can see a lot of effort went into this (judging by the length) and I tip my cap to you for telling the tale of the brave knight named Odo.
This poem is a bit old and for some reason it won't let me reply to reviews anymore. So I'll just answer the question of who the poem is written about here. I believe when I wrote it I had Dumbledore in mind and thus supporting the theory that Dumbledore had his death planned out before that night on the lighning struck tower. Thank you all for the reviews and comments on the poem, they make writing poems even better.