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09/29/05




Hey everyone, my name is Nora!

Please read my fics and review!

Most importantly, please read and review my newest story, "Rose's Ramblings". Thanks!
- G. Hawk



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Ariel and The Triwizard Cup by Purplemage

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 255 Reviews
Summary: Get inside Ariel Sachs' head as he tries to survive his last year at Hogwarts. The Triwizard Tournament is going to be hosted once again after twenty-three years and Ariel is going to find himself in the middle of it. He soon learns that in love and war anything goes and that things are not always what they appear. A story of jealousy, gossip, teenage hormones and first love. (Rated for later chapters)

QSQ Award for Best Male OC, Ariel Sachs

QSQ Nomination for best Same-Sex Pairing Fic

I can't thank enough my wonderful beta Lys. Without her this fic wouldn't be posible.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 10/31/06 Title: Chapter 12: Spider Hunt

o.O How could you do this to us? Oh, my goodness, this chapter was abesolutely THE BEST chapter in this story so far!

“Bahir…?”

“Yes?” I felt like I could swim in his dark eyes.

“Are you gay?”

OMG! I love Ariel! Harald, you are an absolute genius for creating such characters! This is just wonderful.

The whole Jaqueline-Nessa fight was just SO funny! It was just like girls usually fight, you portrayed it so realistically that it made me laugh, it reminded me so much of other girl-fights I've seen. :) What's really funny though, is how alike the two are. Both are stubborn, a bit selfish and sarcastic and niether is going to surrender to the other!

Of course I feel sorry for Nessa though, I'm sure she didn't really forget her wand on purpose, did she? The embarressment! And getting silenced by Jaqueline! Oh, the horror! Thank goodeness it wasn't me!

Borislav... what's up with this guy? Was he drunk, or was he just driven to insanity by Jaqueline and Nessa? Nonetheless, his lines were brilliant! "“We’re lost!” said Borislav, between laughs." Love it!

As for Bahir, way to go, Ariel! He finally found out the right thing to do: confront before wasting away your life. But I still think Bahir is a bit wierd.. I wonder what this guy's story is. Hmm...

And what's up with Nessa? At first I thought that she was in love with Ariel, but now I'm begining to think that it might have something to do with Ivy crying. I already know you'll never tell us, so I'll just have to wait for the next chapter.

And what is up with Ariel being happy because Ivy and Christian broke up? Nooooooooooo!!!!! Ariel shouldn't even think about Christian anymore! Christian was a jerk, Ariel deserves better...like Bahir... But Ivy doubtlessly deserves the break-up. She was just horrible towards Ariel, and what goes around comes around, you know?

The note scene at the begining of this chapter was wonderful!!! I love John:"This looks like fun!" And Nessa to of course: "how to ignore YOU!" I love scenes with note passing, it's always so ´much fun and the character really show themselves through writing, which is cool.

And before I end this review I'm going to say that I loved chapter 10 so much that I downloaded the song Isaac to my iPod, and I think it's pretty cool.

Brilliant, as usual Harald, and you can't force a word of concrit out of me, since everything was perfect!

Author's Response: Nora!!!!! *hugs* I\'m so happy you liked this chapter!! I\'m thrilled you thought the fight was realistic. It\'s knida hard sometimes to get into a girl\'s head, so I\'m happy that it came out alright. I had a lot of fun writing it! Nessa didn\'t forget her wand on porpouse. She\'s not THAT brave. But of course, she would never admit she forgot it. Borislav is just weird, he wasn\'t drunk, he just has a really strange personality, you\'ll see more of him in the future. Nessa? in love with Ariel?? LOL no, that could never happen. Nessa doesn\'t fall in love so easily. I can\'t believe you downloaded Isaac!! I call it the \"Bahir song\" That\'s so cool! I\'ll try and update as soon as posible. Thank you so much for the wonderful review!!!!



Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 08/14/06 Title: Chapter 9: An Article and a Revenge

*huggles Ariel* I love him! And this story! I must be one of the worst reviewers on the planet, since you have left me incapable of writing any constructive criticism.

I'm so glad that Ariel finally got a date with Bahir! He so deserves it, he's been so badly treated in the past few chapters.

This chapter is amazingly funny and deep. I love the line, "Oh no, would it kill it if she drank it?" It made me laugh out loud!

Nessa is great as well. I love how well rounded she is, with the arrogance and everything.

Oh, and I finally figured out that Ornella is Ron's and Hermione's daughter! Am I right?

I heart this story!

-Nora


Author's Response: Hey Nora! You\'re not the wort reviwer in the world!! Believe me, I\'ve seen many worse. Ornella is Ron and Hermione\'s daughter?? Maybe, who knows....we\'ll see. The story hearts you back!!



You are insulting my delicate feelings again. by coppercurls

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 33 Reviews
Summary: Warnings: the following poems may contain sarcasm, witty repartee, little black dresses, and Inter-Office Unity events.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 04/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: You are insulting my delicate feelings again.

Great poem! I like how you slowly revealed how they feel for each other a long the way. Great job!

Author's Response: oops, double post... glad you liked it.



Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 04/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: You are insulting my delicate feelings again.

Great poem! I like how you slowly revealed how they feel for each other a long the way. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you enjoyed it. I tried to make it subtle and realistic, andhappy it worked.



Chocolate Connection by MaraudersAffair

Rated: Professors • 36 Reviews
Summary: There's a lot of chocolate fingers and unexpected guests on Valentine's Day. Lupin/Snape, Marauders Era.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 06/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Link of Hope

This is a good story. I like how the first paragraph sucks the reader in, making the reader want more. You continue to keep all the characters in character, and not have anyone do or say something OOC. You make Snape's attraction to Lupin seem completly natural, and you explain his confusions on his sexuality very nicely. However, I think it was confusing how you kept switching between Lupin and Remus and Snape and Severus. Chosing one would have set the mood of the story, but using both was a bit confusing. BUt the detail is wonderful, as is the description. Great job!

Author's Response: Oh, thank so much for taking the time to write this comment. I\'ve alway had a problem with the first paragraph and for you to say you liked it, it means a lot. I wrote this fic back in February and since then I\'ve realized using selective names is essential to the story. Thank you so much for pointing it out!



Two Lattes from Hell, Please by Eilime

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 98 Reviews
Summary: Post-Hogwarts

Hermione sighed in relaxation. She was sitting in her favourite café, the cafe latte steaming cheerily on the small, round table as she immersed herself in the news of The Times. As she flipped a page, the newspaper folded annoyingly backwards and revealed the scenery beyond.

Hermione let out a piercing scream.

4th story in a series of Hermione/Draco one-shot (Check out my author page for more information)

Important announcement in my profile
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

This is a brilliant D/Hr oneshot. I LOVE it. I love how you call Draco Satan, I love how you do say, "her sixth favorite cafe, her fifth favorite cafe..." I just LOVE this. It's brilliant. You're brilliant. Please write more.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I\'m glad you liked my nicknames for Draco :) And the café listing. Thank you so much for the flattering review.



Secrets by GringottsVault711

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 24 Reviews
Summary: Ron's guardian angel comforts his grief with secrets of hope and love. Written for my dear Patrick, aka TheVanishingAct
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 06/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: Secrets

This is a fantastic story. I simply love it. The first paragraph just sucks the reader in, and makes the reader want more. I like how you used more poetic and descriptive ways of showing what was going on and what had happened than just saying it straight out. I also like how you only reffered to Ron and Luna is "he" and "she" and never said their names. Yet we still know who they are, from the freckles Luna talked about to the wat Luna was described. The only slightly negative comment I have is that there are one or two comma misplacements, but that truly is something minor. This is a wonderful story, truly a treasure. Great job!



The Warmth of Courage by Avenger_of_Dumbldore

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 6 Reviews
Summary: Summary: It was the night that held the fate of the wizarding world. From the view of Harry Potter, it was a nightmare. From the view of Peter Pettigrew, it was a turning point in his life. What was going through Peter’s mind the night he helped to bring back the Dark Lord? What was he thinking when he cut off his own hand to repay his debt? Was it worth all the pain and suffering?





Thanks to my amazing two BETA’s- My dad and Little_Kitty.




Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 04/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: One shot

This is wonderful. I love the description and the thoughts running through Peter's mind. Many make him a villian or a complete coward, you make him 3D. I'm very impressed. There are a few missing comma's and periods, but it doesn't effect the story. I like how Peter thinks about how vital he is to the future of the wizarding world, I never noticed that. I also like how you keep coming back to courage. It makes people think about what courage really is. Great job!



A Mother's Love by Lilypudding

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 5 Reviews
Summary: Ginny Weasley is not getting along with her mother. She's tired of her mother interfering on everything she says. Meanwhile, Molly Weasley is fed up with her daughter's attitude. When Molly is accidentally hit by a spell that makes her forget who she is, everything changes. Instead of Molly being the mother, Ginny is forced to watch over and teach Molly. Can their relationship survive? Will this event make their relationship stronger, or will it just make things turn to bad or worse? Written in response to the Molly Weasley One-Shot Challenge by Lilypudding of Gryffindor.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 06/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: Mothering Molly

This is a really great story! I like the pacing and the sytle of the story, It has a nice flow. The only thing that I can say is that Arthur is a bit OOC: I don't think that he would just send his wife off like that. BUt I love this story, especially how you emphasize the significance of a mothers hug.

Author's Response: Thanks for your constructive review, Gemma Hawk. I am seriously considering re-editing this story to make Arthur more in character. This was a story really written in a menical way, in two VERY short days before a challenge deadline, so I\'m glad you like it at all!



Passive Murder by Catrin

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 10 Reviews
Summary: A moment's bad decision can cause a world of destruction...



What happens when Susan Bones goes aginst her badger instincts and chooses fun over others?



Submitted by Catrin of Hufflepuff for the Poetry challenge number 2 - "Apathy is Lethal"
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 10/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: Passive Murder

What a powerful poem! It has wonderful rythem, I love how almost every verse starts with a characters name. I also like that we don't know what happened, it makes it even more extreme. My only concrit is that the verse begining with "In realtiy" is a bit different from the rest, making it sound a bit choppy. But don't pay too much attention to me, I have no knowledge about poems! Great job!!



Train Ride Home by Bubbles_456

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 20 Reviews
Summary: Crabbe and Goyle are going home from their sixth year at Hogwarts. Crabbe thinks about what happened that year.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 05/01/06 Title: Chapter 1: Crabbe's Opinion of his Sixth Year

This is funny and cute. I like how the major things are minor in Crabbes mind. Well done!



Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 05/01/06 Title: Chapter 1: Crabbe's Opinion of his Sixth Year

This is funny and cute. I like how the major things are minor in Crabbes mind. Well done!



A Forbidden Connection by whittyleah

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 51 Reviews
Summary: It is three weeks after Dumbledore's death, and Hermione Granger is dealing with the betrayal of the man she is secretly in love with, the man who is now her enemy, Severus Snape.





The character death and violence are for later chapters, which cover the final battle.





Chapter 4 is up!
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 06/01/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Hi WhittyLeah!

First off, I want to say great story! I love the way this works. You have a wonderful style and language, and your words are juicy and sophisticated.

However, I do think that this: “”I was just… I’m sorry.” Hermione suddenly burst into tears and walked up to Snape, wrapping her arms around his waist, she continued crying against his chest.” Is very OOC for Hermione. I don’t think that she would wrap her arms around her least favorite teacher and cry because of Ron’s fling with Lavender. I think she would have thanked him, and found somewhere more private to cry, where she wouldn’t have to deal with Snape.

I LOVE the way you start this story off. I like how you constantly say something along the lines of: “Would they still like me if they knew?” without telling the reader exactly what it is. I think your description of Hermione in the beginning is great; it gives us a very good picture of the state that she is in.

So, keep up the good work!

Your fellow Gryffindor, Gemma


Author's Response: Thank you for your input! I understand what you mean about OOCness. But, you have to realize...she was distraught over Ron, she almost died, and Snape saved her...so she felt like she could depend on him. I tried to write that part with the least amount of OOCness as possible... Thank you for reading! And reviewing! Go Gryffindor!



Somewhere by wendelin the wierd

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 9 Reviews
Summary: Somewhere a woman stands waiting, her husband still has to return to her.

And she waits...






It was always in the heart that the mind was powerless.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 06/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

I promised you a review, so here it is!

First, I love this story! It’s so sad and desciptive. Especially this part: “Before the funeral she had felt a wild, uncontrollable anger. The desire to personally seek out and kill the Ministry workers. She smashed vases and glass figurines but they didn’t help in calming her down. She gradually settled but she didn’t get accustomed to it. The anger was replaced by despair and hopelessness. She had tried bullying herself into thinking he was still alive but this only made the emptiness seem larger. More prominent.” It is very true, and I like how it seems to fit Ginny perfectly. I can see Ginny being this way, and having those emotions. Really great!

The only thing is that Ghost/spirit/living dead Harry seems a bit OOC, but perhaps he has just grown wiser over the years as minister and/or death does that to people.

I love your description of the Danes and the Danish countryside! It’s like something I might see out my window in the wintertime!

So, in conclusion: I love it, and great job!



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Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 07/08/06 Title: None

This is really great! I love it! So sweet!



Harry Potter and The Process of writing Fan Fiction by Purplemage

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 110 Reviews
Summary: A hilarious ride inside an author's head as he tries to write the best fic ever written by a fan. Unfortunatley, things don't go as planned and the author must get himself out of a sticky situation before he ruins the joy of writing Fan Fiction forever.

WARNING: Random and Bizarre humor ahead.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 08/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: Harry Potter and The Process of Writing Fan Fiction

*laughs her head off*

Harald, this is THE funniest parody I have ever read!! I love it! Especially the line, "It's not the fog," said Ginny. "The author is smoking." and 'Not THAT kind of climax!' and how China revevealed that she's a man... you know what? I love the whole thing!

*huggles*

-Nora

Author's Response: Nora!!!! *tackles* I\'m so happy you liked the story!! *huggles* Thanks for the review!



Harry Potter and the Mary Sue by bajab

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 26 Reviews
Summary: Yet another Mary Sue Parody, portraying the trio in a less than flatering light and completely irreverent.
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 12/08/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is the funniest story I have EVER read.

And I love you for it!!!!!!!!



Breaking the Mirrors by On Angels Wings

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 9 Reviews
Summary: The infamous Draco Malfoy has been unexpectedly caught by the most unlikely of people; a young Muggle woman. His prejudices are still burned into his mind and woven into the threads of his soul, and he is more alone than ever. A static being, Draco Malfoy still doesn't know how to treat others properly, least of all the young Muggle who is treating his wounds and providing him shelter. He still disdains all Muggles and those who love them, despite his change of heart at the turn of the war. But is it possible he can learn to love just one?
Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 11/16/07 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Part 1: The Rough Draft

hey! when are you going to update? I love this story :D I like how "things" are happening between Draco and Morgan



Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 02/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Clearing the Mind

What an intruiging story! This is really, really interesting. It's a new and fesh idea, and I think it's awesome. :)

Just one little nitpick: "Go ahead," she whisperedd" has two d's, but that's so minor that it hardly matters.

Wow, let me start off with just the first paragraph. It was such a great way of starting the story, it really grabbed the reader in.

I loved how you only gave away small details before actually telling us what was going on, it kept me hooked!

The character of Morgan is just so sweet! She's really kind and caring and somehow I already feel sorry for her. After all, she's stuck with a complete stranger, and she doesn't even know that he's a wizard! I think that you've really created a great character here, although I'm looking forward to seeing some of her flaws, too, and her reaction once she finds out that Draco is a wizard. (Asuming, of course, that she will find out!)

Draco, meanwhile is so in character, it's wonderful. True, we don't see him this way in the books, but let's look at it this way: he's hurt and scared, not sure of who to trust, and who not to trust. When Morgan offers help he accepts, although he can't help but sneak in the comment about having sunk so low! Draco is so in character, which is great because it makes everything so real!

I love the scene with Draco taking a bath. (And no, it's not just because it's Draco taking a bath!) The thing with switching from paragraph to paragraph is cool, if you know what I mean. One paragraph you describe Draco taking his bath. The next it's him remembering that fateful nigh. Then you describe him bathing again. It was a really cool way of showing us not only what was going on, but also what was going through Draco's head.

The part with Draco trying to scrub off the Dark Mark was so sad and pathetic, in a way. It really made me just want to jump in and make that stupid mark disappear.

Your idea of the final battle was very original. I kept rooting for Harry, but at the same time I was really worried that something might go wrong! I've never before read a fic where Harry kills Voldemort with his own hands. Really cool. It kind of reminds us of PoA, when Harry attacks Sirirus, trying to kill him with his hands. He just forgets all about his wand and kills the muggle way. I love how you have him do it the same way here. It's awesome.

Draco's guilt over killing Bellatrix is so human that it kind of makes you feel for Draco, even though he murdered his aunt. I'm glad that he realized how many people he was actually saving by killing her, though.

All in all, this is a great, really gripping first chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more!

-Nora :)



Reviewer: Gemma Hawk Signed
Date: 02/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Clearing the Mind

What an intruiging story! This is really, really interesting. It's a new and fesh idea, and I think it's awesome. :)

Just one little nitpick: "Go ahead," she whisperedd" has two d's, but that's so minor that it hardly matters.

Wow, let me start off with just the first paragraph. It was such a great way of starting the story, it really grabbed the reader in.

I loved how you only gave away small details before actually telling us what was going on, it kept me hooked!

The character of Morgan is just so sweet! She's really kind and caring and somehow I already feel sorry for her. After all, she's stuck with a complete stranger, and she doesn't even know that he's a wizard! I think that you've really created a great character here, although I'm looking forward to seeing some of her flaws, too, and her reaction once she finds out that Draco is a wizard. (Asuming, of course, that she will find out!)

Draco, meanwhile is so in character, it's wonderful. True, we don't see him this way in the books, but let's look at it this way: he's hurt and scared, not sure of who to trust, and who not to trust. When Morgan offers help he accepts, although he can't help but sneak in the comment about having sunk so low! Draco is so in character, which is great because it makes everything so real!

I love the scene with Draco taking a bath. (And no, it's not just because it's Draco taking a bath!) The thing with switching from paragraph to paragraph is cool, if you know what I mean. One paragraph you describe Draco taking his bath. The next it's him remembering that fateful nigh. Then you describe him bathing again. It was a really cool way of showing us not only what was going on, but also what was going through Draco's head.

The part with Draco trying to scrub off the Dark Mark was so sad and pathetic, in a way. It really made me just want to jump in and make that stupid mark disappear.

Your idea of the final battle was very original. I kept rooting for Harry, but at the same time I was really worried that something might go wrong! I've never before read a fic where Harry kills Voldemort with his own hands. Really cool. It kind of reminds us of PoA, when Harry attacks Sirirus, trying to kill him with his hands. He just forgets all about his wand and kills the muggle way. I love how you have him do it the same way here. It's awesome.

Draco's guilt over killing Bellatrix is so human that it kind of makes you feel for Draco, even though he murdered his aunt. I'm glad that he realized how many people he was actually saving by killing her, though.

All in all, this is a great, really gripping first chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more!

-Nora :)

Author's Response: Oh my...this is the longest review I\'ve ever gotten...I love it! I\'m glad you think so highly of my story! Oh, and thank you for pointing out my spelling error, I\'ll fix that right away. Maybe you\'re the one who can point out if something isn\'t right, you\'re very observant. And not only that, you\'re comprehending everything that I\'m writing. Thank you! Sincerely, On Angels Wings