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I Never Knew You by lily_evans34
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 29]

Summary: She had never known what to say to her sister. But now that she is ready, it is too late.

Andromeda one shot.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1912 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/22/06 Updated: 07/22/06


Reviewer: Avenger_of_Dumbldore Signed
Date: 07/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: I Never Knew You

Wow, very good. I always liked Andromeda, probobly because I can relate to her the most. EVen though we did not meat her in the book, I think this is how she would have acted, very passive, adn wanting to make peace with her sisters. There were a few things I would do, but that dont have to be done.

FIrst of all, I would put the letter in Italics. It shows she is writing it.

Also, why did she write the letter. I know it was to get her feelings out, but did she come knowing she was going to write the letter? It seemed like she just kind of... did.

Besides that, good job and keep writing!

Author's Response: I explained the italics thing in Peri\'s response, and the letter in, um... LadyAlesha\'s, I think. Thank you so much for the review!

 
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