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I am in college, love to read HP and anything else that is good and of course read and write fan fics. I also enjoy lots of other muggle things, music, movies and muggle dueling- fencing!

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Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 11/23/05 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: A Fork in the Road

WOW! So worth the wait! I enjoyed this so much. I am so glad you decided to take this up again. Your Secret Love story was also a favorite of mine, but you finished it. So now I hope to get the same enjoyment out of this one. Keep up the good work!!

Curse of the Reapers by deanine

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: A different sort of alternate universe... It is a world under the thumb of an ancient emperor. Muggle society has been oppressed beyond recognition. Wizards rule over all, their only laws defined by power. This is the story of a rebellion, a family, a traitor, and the long road that leads home at last.
Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 7: High Tea

"Soldier, you know how to run, because now's the time," James said. There should be a question mark in there somewhere.

London was a dark town, a tilted town. I don’t know why but I love this sentence. It says a lot in very little. Very poetic.

He wasn't wearing a time-teller of any kind I like this too, about the time teller. It’s the little details that you throw into your story that make me enjoy reading it so much. I don’t really take too well to AU, but this one is different.

"Foolish child, hasn't even learned that wrath is most powerful when it is cool." Oooo, that says so much about his character and the thought you put into your story. I was so surprised when you turned the Reapers into the 7 deadly sins. Nice touch. The way they play off themselves is wonderful and it takes some of the work out of characterization for you, I suppose.

*sigh* I just really like this story. Have you noticed? I know I am reviewing out of order, but I will eventually get to every chapter. I promise. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks dear! Your comments are always welcome and heartening and helpful.

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 8: Tripping the Light Fantastic

Hee hee “flummoxed” I love the word. Don’t get much of a chance to use it, but I love it. A lot.

Draco considered walking way now, I think you meant “away”. I know, I am nitpicking. Silly typos. I truly sorry to be nit picking, but the story is so good that that’s one of the only things I can find wrong with it.

The other thing that I find as I read through the chapters, is although you have these wonderful, slightly adapted personalities for each of the characters, the children all seem to be extremely mature. The things they talk about and the way they react and their thought process is almost too old for their age.

But please, keep up the good work (as well as some pestering) and we will all continue to read and review this nice little story.

Oh, and I must say, Poor Draco. I do feel bad for him. I suppose you meant that to happen. I honestly do feel bad for the little slime ball. *sigh*

Author's Response: Nitpicking = good. Thank you. :)

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 9: Chocolate Frogs and Crimson Dragons

The bit with Remus and Lily makes me really edgy. Is that clearly set out in canon or is that something that crosses the fuzzy lines between fanon and canon? I don’t know why but it does make me edgy. I think it’s plausible, but at the same time I want James and Lily’s relationship to be unmarred by anything. I wish it were a fairy tale. …and they all lived happily ever after.

Oh, and as a side note, you are so teasing us, your poor readers. All those times that Lily or someone else is so close to the truth about Isobel and Harry. How rude. To tease us like that it’s just… it’s just… good writing. That’s what it is. But cruel nonetheless.

It was a little confusing for me that you made James’ comment to Peter in italics, at first I thought it was part of the letter.

That little Rat! Ugh, I hate him more than Draco, more than Tom Riddle, more than Umbridge, more than anyone in the entire series. I have no pity for him. None at all.

Oh, and Fred, a Reaper?! NOoooooo! I should have seen it coming. But George’s hope gives me hope. I hope it’s not false hope. Don’t mess with my mind like this!!

Author's Response: Lily and Remus, a love affair that never quite was. Don\'t worry, I\'m not planning a homewrecking party. It\'s just an undercurrent, a ghost from their childhood. For Remus a regret. For Lily, it\'s something she never quite allowed herself to see.

I\'m not a tease! Well... maybe a little.

Poor poor Fred... :) We always hurt, the ones we love.

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 03/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

but Spero couldn't understand the words rolling over her ears. I just liked this sentence because I feel the same way but never thought about it that way. Cool description. And to think I felt bad for Spero in the beginning that little…

Every day of my life I thumb my nose at her and her friend death. Shouldn’t that say “her friend Death”? Because you are speaking of death as a proper noun, something that can be a friend.

With an annoyed gesture she indicated that Tina should stop waving around the valuable artifact they'd just risked their lives to steal. Lol! Tina sounds funny. I have a friend or two like that. Actually sounds like something Tonks would do.

Overly conscious of his overbite and weak chin, he instinctively jutted his jaw out and twitched his nose in a maneuver that was almost rodent-like. I had a feeling that’s who it was as soon as you shifted to this character!

A few moments ago, missing had been a scary word with a lot potential meanings, but it felt like a dirge now, a death song, an ending. Alas, so simple and yet so poignantly true. I feel so bad for Lily and James. I am not one to really read Aus or Marauder Era stories, for some reason I just can’t seem to attach to the characters, but your story is different for some reason. I am really enjoying this. I will have to read more. *slumps over asleep only to be awakened several hours later by a friendly and familiar pester*

Author's Response: :) Thanks dear. I\'m glad you enjoyed the opening, and I will definitely have to correct that bauble with death :D :D

Patrick Thatcher and the Colonist's Compass by Dean Thomas

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Patrick Thatcher’s older brother teases him, his mother worries about him, and his father defends him. His family sounds very much like any other, but somehow Patrick’s is far from average. In Patrick’s world, adults disappear into thin air, owls deliver mail, and the most popular sport in the country is played on broomsticks. Not to mention that every member of his family is, and always has been, a wizard. When your grandfather is a famous American veteran, being a Thatcher isn’t the easiest life to live. When his acceptance letter to the most prestigious American school of magic arrives addressed to another student, Patrick’s position in his former world begins to take a tumble—right along with the newly elected President of Magic’s approval ratings. With the Wizarding world’s eyes shifting toward a new wizard, can Patrick figure out just why his first year is off to a rocky start? Inspired by J.K. Rowling’s wondrous Harry Potter Series, Patrick Thatcher’s adventures of wizardry in the United States is a tale all its own while still respecting its English origins. Readers are sure to find that the magic across the pond is just as unforgettable.
Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 12/18/05 Title: Chapter 1: The Message Mishap

I was, as it seems many others judging by their reviews, rather skeptical about an American version. But then again, this is not a version, yes you have taken a few elements from JKR, but this plot is all your own, and you definitely own this plot. I love your character he is so personable, so realistic. He is entirely likable but is not just another Harry Potter, which is very refreshing. And the little twist with the letter-- very well done, I have read all the chapters and I am still wondering why the mishap. In fact, that's what I like most about your story, I keep wondering what is going to happen next. I love your writing style and your plot. I liked it so much that I have recommended it on the forums! It really is great! Keep up the amazing work! I loved it, I hope you enjoy the writing process as much as I have enjoyed reading this story!

Author's Response: Thank you so very much for your comments and for recommending my story. I sincerely enjoy this story and I have much more of it planned for readers. More characters, locations and history will eventually be revealed as the story of Patrick progresses.

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 12/18/05 Title: Chapter 2: Grandpa Thatcher's Gift

I liked this chapter so much! Especially Merton. I think coming up with house elf names is really hard, but I can totally picture this little Merton elf shuffling around the house. I also really like that you have six houses at Wentwater. And what on earth is in that box? hmmm? I will just keep reading! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I ran into a bit of luck with Merton. It just popped into my head and it sounded perfect for the kind of house-elf the Thatchers would own. House elf names are hard I just hope you'll like Grumby when you meet him, too.

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 07/02/06 Title: Chapter 12: History For the Holidays

I wanted to review because somehow I missed reading this last chapter when you first posted it. Personally, I think it’s a sin that you have so few reviews for such a wonderful story. You have such a good plot going on here. You have a good universe that you have created based off of the original and yet with your own unique twists and turns. You have definitely made this story your own. Your characters are strong and you have plenty of little things going on within your main plot. It is not one dimensional at all.

Your writing style is also very strong. You manage to vary your sentence structure and the grammar that you use is generally error free. Your dialogue is natural, you even manage the different accents for Henri and the Texan professor.

You managed to drag out the anticipation of getting some answers to help your readers feel the anxiety and excitement that Patrick and William feel. You also were able to remind us of the plot in this chapter without sounding condescending. I don’t like it when authors give us a full recap and make it sound like we don’t know what’s going on. Other authors expect their reader to remember all the ins and outs of the story from one chapter to the next, and that doesn’t work either.

Having said that, allow me just a few nitpicks:

“Patrick’s Charms exam passed by easily as Professor Montgomery only asked him to levitate a one of the classroom chairs.” Simple typo.

Patrick, William, and Elizabeth were all the least worried about Professor Sumpton’s Transfiguration mid-term, which was scheduled for that Thursday. I believe you meant to say “weren’t”

Professor Litmus’ exam was not as awful as they thought it would be, owing mainly to the fact that it she made their test a partner exam. Just another silly typo.

He brushed his hands across the top of it wiping away a bit of lent that had been residing on the outside of the box.

Mrs. Thatcher carried her son upstairs to his room and tucked him safely in his bed. No typos here, but all I could think of was “Wow! She is really strong!” Maybe she should levitate him to bed.

William took a space on next on the bed next to Patrick Just another silly typo.

The very though was unsettling. You left off the “t”.

And finally, what is up with that letter?! And where is the next chapter? I hope it is in the works, because I can’t wait to read more! Keep up the good work! I enjoy this so much.

Author's Response: Too few reviews a sin? Time for a Patrick Thatcher revival! Haha. Thank you so much for your comments and I\'m so glad you enjoy it. It\'s the most rewarding part of writing this. It helps that I\'ve plotted a lot farther than perhaps necessary so that allows me to align the story accordingly. Thanks, again, for picking out those typos! It\'s always great to have someone point those out because they are, at times, really hard to find. Haha, don\'t worry I haven\'t forgotten about the letter, all in due time, fellow reader. And chapter thirteen is definitely in the works I spend most of my time writing so you\'re bound to see chapter thirteen pop up at any time. Thanks again!

Author's Response: Ha, oh and about Mrs. Thatcher picking up her son to carry him to bed. He\'s only eleven and I don\'t imagine him to weigh very much. Plus, it\'s more the motherly thing to do ;)

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 12/18/05 Title: Chapter 3: Agnomon Square

It's me again, I just couldn't stop to review between each chapter, so I am going back now. I think your story really deserves the reads and the reviews! Have I mentioned I REALLY like this story?! Anywho, I love the little elevator to get them to the train, that was cool. I also like that the school is made up of several buildings, that makes it different, sets it apart a little. It is with a happy little sigh that I write this, I just can't say enough about your story.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like this story. Like you said, most are very skeptical about reading a fic like this and it's hard to get impressions on it. I very much appreciate your comments and I hope you continue to stick with Patrick and all his endeavors.

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 03/29/06 Title: Chapter 11: The Quaffle Quandary

“Just watch out…everyone isn’t used to playing Quidditch, they’ll try and get away with as much as they can,” William warned, as Patrick stood up from his seat and nodded, hastily joining his teammates. Oh, do I sense impending doom?!

…stepping over the grounds littered with fallen yellow, red, and orange November leaves. The collective sound of the Allards walking together could easily be mistaken for hundreds of tiny bones cracking.” I love how you described the crunch of the leaves and made it sound like bones. It could have been any other sound, but you picked bones. Talk about foreshadowing.

I must say, the whole of your Quidditch scene is good stuff. In my book, Quidditch scenes and battle/action scenes are the hardest to write. Often times the author will write what they see without making it clear enough to the reader what action is going on. But you managed to make this scene easy to read and yet action packed. When he was hit I really felt for him.

Patrick finally hit the ground, his back scraping along the grass until he came to a sudden stop, unmovable and unconscious. Ok, ok, call me a nit pick, but if I have to be this nit pickety then it means you did a really good job with everything else. The word you used “unmovable” made me picture Patrick lying there suddenly turned into some huge boulder or tower or other large physically impossible to budge object. I think a better word in this case would have been or “motionless” or “inert”.

Over all, I loved your chapter. I think what you added was appropriate and I was so glad you updated. I love this story and your characters and the way you truly make them your own. I can’t wait to read more from you. Keep up the good work!!

Author's Response: I completely agree with your suggestion of "motionless." Haha, ironically while re-reading that sentence in your review I said to myself, "that doesn't feel right..." Consider it changed. I'm glad you liked it and I'm not only working on the next chapters but the next couple of books as well, so there is more Patrick around the corner!


Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 09/09/05 Title: None

I read the other one, and liked it. But this one is even better, like WAY better! My favorite part is where Harry charms the cup to run across his desk for target practice. It just sounds like the kinda thing he would do. He seems borderline cocky, but isn't. This story is just great, I really can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep up the great work! *pleeease*

No Going Back Now by SomberBallad

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: After Harry leaves Hermione tries to find love in a place unconventional to the innocence of her heart.

(An eventual H/Hr romance, begins with some SS/Hr situations)
Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 06/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

“This was more that Hermione could bear but held back the tears.” Should read “more than Hermione could bear” and I think you should add “but she held back the tears.”

“She morphed in a confused little girl,” Should say ”into a confused little girl”

“she couldn’t think of answers to all the questions.” You mention “all the questions” but then the questions don’t come until later in the paragraph. I suggest you rephrase it to say: “she couldn’t think of any answers to the questions that plagued her.” Or something along those lines that would make the paragraph flow better. Either that or put that sentence after the questions later on in the paragraph.

“She also wanted to drown in her own tears hoping that it would take her away from this uncertainty.” You mentioned in the paragraph before that she was drowning in her tears. I would suggest changing one or the other drown, or say something along the lines of “she wished her tears could wash away all the uncertainties.” Just to change things up and keep things fresh.

“or maybe it was because that simply didn’t care.” That should read “because they simply didn’t care.”

“Yet something buried underneath the facts and evidence waited patiently for an empty promise, a lost dream, or something not to be expected.” I think there are a lot of things you could do to make this sentence have some more weight. I think it is a very good last sentence but it needs a little tweaking to really resound. I was thinking something along the lines of “a lost dream, an unexpected gift.” Just because “something” is so vague it could be anything. Giving “something” a name makes it that much more tangible.

I am a die hard Harry Hermione shipper. I know it may never come to pass, but isn’t that what fan fiction is about? It’s the ability to change and create our own story line that makes it so appealing. I like the feel that you give to their relationship. They don’t have everything all figured out, they are just doing what they know they have to do. The insights into Hermione’s personality and her weaknesses make her all that much more real as a character. Although, I am hoping that in later chapters you will show that same insight into Harry’s character as well.

I enjoyed this chapter and I am off to read the next one. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the gorgeous review, it\'s so shiny. I\'ll go fix those things soon.

Harry Potter and the Needed One by king

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: SPOILER WARNING! Events in HBP are discussed. This story picks up immediately after the funeral as Harry and his friends leave Hogwarts on the train. During the summer that follows Harry’s sixth year he begins his lonely quest to destroy Lord Voldemort. He finds two of the items that he is seeking and a truth he has been attempting to avoid. This chapter covers the trip to London on the Hogwarts Express after Dumbledore’s funeral. Why are Professors McGonagall and Flitwick on the train? Why is Hermione crying on someone else’s shoulder? What is Percy Weasley up to?
Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 09/17/05 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Desperate Problems

I love this story! I love the little author's notes at the bottom, its obvious you have really researched this. I like that you have put a lot of thought into it, and aren't just barging around saying "They have to be together! They have to!" It is really insightful. I think the story is very realistic, and I am really enjoying your story. There's plenty of action and it is all well written. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Hermione might be better off with Ron. It would be safer, but they'd fight all of the time. I think she would certainly be better off with either Ernie Macmillan or Terry Boot. But she has been devoted to Harry since third year, if not before. Harry has a think for pretty girls that are great Quidditch players. Either Cho or Ginny would be great for him. But he can't seem to keep a relationship with a girl like that going.

Walking With Hermione by MischiefManaged

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Walking with Hermione is one of Harry's favorite things to do. Very short one-shot. Pure fluff!
Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 10/02/05 Title: Chapter 1: Walking With Hermione

first off... AWWWW... I had to get that out of my system... ok, now, for the real review. I loved this, I am not a big fan of one shots because a lot of them just aren't done right, but this was good. I enjoyed reading it. The ending totally caught me by surprise... you distracted me. And I like the explanation you gave for why they are together, it made sense. It seems like you really thought this out, and the writing was good too, I would love to read more of what you write, in fact, I will go see what else you have right now. Keep up the good work!

Harry Potter and the Spirits of the Storm by QueenHal

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: A Post-HBP fiction.

When Harry’s quest for the horcruxes turns desperate, he leaves the security of his homeland to seek out the advice of an ancient and most unusual Council – one whose allegiance is only to themselves but whose knowledge is so vast it may be his only chance. What Harry discovers there will change everything. Soon, he comes to see that this is all so much bigger than just he and Dark Lord – his role, though pivotal, is terribly minute compared to the challenges the Wizarding World must now face.

Meanwhile, across the Atlantic Ocean, a young witch uncovers the truth about her bloodline. But only when catastrophic events begin to unfold, does she realise her importance in the greater scheme of things...

It is a tale of epic proportions: bringing in the truth behind Slytherin's betrayal, and the choices the Founders had to make to ensure the longevity of their world. Enemies must unite, lines must be crossed, and children must forgo their innocence. And behind it all, fly the Spirits of the Storm, waiting, watching, scheming. Welcome to the greatest epic war the Wizarding World has ever seen.

Chapter 11 is posted.

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 01/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

So, I decided to find out what everyone was raving about. Why didn’t someone tell me what I was missing out on?! I think I like this more than Ivory Tower. (Don’t hurt me for saying that…)

“eyes that stared blankly into the gloom ahead.” I think this sets the tone for the whole chapter, perhaps even for the whole story. I see Harry staring ahead, but not like one who is focusing on what is ahead, but what is beyond what he has to do. Eye on the prize sort of idea. The gloom is what is ahead, and he knows he has to pass through it. poor Harry.

“The boy’s hair and robes were as dark as his Thestral’s mane; his skin, so drained from lack of sleep and prolonged exposure to the cold, was as pale as death.” Wow, I can really see that! It makes me even feel cold, or maybe that’s just from being in the basement, nah, it’s your words. *shivers*

Falcor- love the name. Oh, is that from the Never Ending Story? Interesting parallels. *ponders* Where's my cookie?!

“He longed to be warm, well fed, and clean shaved again.” Isn’t it clean shaven? Is there a difference? I don’t know for sure.

The whole time I was expecting to find out where Harry is headed. No such luck, bummer. But I loved the tone you set for this bit. And I didn’t mind the length at all, I feel like you accomplished what you needed to accomplish in this bit to set up for the rest. If you had continued for length’s sake, well that would just be silly.

All in all, great start, I am off to read more!

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 04/21/06 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

I love the idea of the gift that changes colors and then turns drab grey. Very original.

“for reasons that I cannot indulge to you in this letter.” Don’t you mean divulge instead of indulge?

“being in her lap at and all.” I think you meant to choose either at or and but forgot and left both the at and the and.

“And as she slept... the wind revved up for another attack...” I love how you continue the action and yet keep bringing the reader gently back to the issue with the wind. It really works well. The reader understands that something is different, something is off.

“Hastilly, she carried her tray to the waste bin.” Hastily is spelled with only one L.

Dumbledore! Yay! I am so glad that he is making an appearance in this chapter. The next chapter, if you follow for previous structure would be a Harry centric chapter, right? Therefore, ending the chapter with Dumbledore is a good segway into the next chapter.

Very well done, very well worth the wait. May the writing muse be with you and continue to bless your little story with wonderfulness! Oh and as a side note, I love the new layouts, amazing job!


Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 12/12/05 Title: None

Wow! This is great! It is coming together so nicely. All your hard work is evident and definitely paying off. You managed to make this chapter flow much better than the last one and I like the bit you added with the twins! Judging by your reviews people are really enjoying reading your work! I hope you are proud of your work and the time and effort you have put into it! Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 11/15/05 Title: None

Aw! I love the changes you have made! It is great! I can just picture the gnomes running around mischeviously. My other favorite part is Ron being attacked by his candelabra and saying "Buggers!" Very funny, and a great way to imagine what is going on in the story. Great job! Keep up the good work!

Harry Potter and the Knights of the White Dragon by Sarakiel

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: After the fall of Voldemort, an ancient nemesis rears his head against the magical world. This time Harry is not the center of any prophecy, but can he prevent it anyway? Can a battle weary Harry Potter stand up to someone who even Voldemort feared?

Chapter 24 is in the queue
Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 11/29/05 Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Great job! The blood, the sweat, the tears, the lost sleep. It's all worth it to see it on here, huh? Addicting isn't it? Keep up the good work!!

Reviewer: Astrea Signed
Date: 06/21/07 Title: Chapter 19: Awake

I am SO proud of you! Now if I can just cure you of your odd capitalization disease! :)