Summary: It's actually a a D/H poem...Hope you like it!
Wow. I don't ship Draco/Hermione, but that poem was fantastic. Beautiful and sad. 9/10
Summary: Luna Lovegood observes Ron and wonders if he'll ever realize that she's there. An incident with a book gives her the answer.
Very cute story! Nice job on keeping Luna and Ron in character
All's fair in love and war
Lily thinks herself too clever to fall for James Potters charm. Yet, as the two of them are appointed Head Boy and Girl, will Lily regret her negative feelings towards James? Pre-HBP
I really liked this story! It's on my favorites list, and it will probably stay there for awhile. But you had quite a few errors in this story. First off, I hated how you wrote Peter. I know hate is a strong word, but I feel you wrote him out of the story, and when you did have him in the story he was annoying and pathetic. That is not Peter. He might be a filthy rat when he's older, but I doubt he was that way in his school days. Even the Marauders called him annoying. That's not right. Next, you had a canon error when the Mckinnons died. You said Marlene Mckinnon dies, but you got her name out of book five from the picture Mad Eye Moody gave to Harry. That picture was taken after Lily and James graduated from Hogwarts, so she couldn't have died. And last, I don't think that part where Addison turns Sirius and Remus into girls is quite right. I just don't see a student being able to do that, even if she was a seventh year. I don't really see anyone being able to do that. But now for the things I did like. I loved your OCs, mostly Addison of course. They were written well, and I can tell you have a talent for creating good characters- something most writers struggle with. I also liked how you killed the OCs. Killing them all off was a little extreme, but it shows your not afraid to write a story where something bad happens, and no one can fix it. I would say more and answer your questions, but I am running out of time, and I'm sure you get enough feedback.( I think the number of reviews you have is a record.) So thanks for reading, and I wish you luck with the rest of your stories. ~ Katherine P.S. Sorry this review isn't in paragraph form. I can't figure out how to get the spacing to work in a review.
Author's Response: I wrote this when I was 13 and very bored :D Yes, so it's not exactly my best piece of work.
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This was a great first chapter! Your story really flows well, and your style seems similar to J.K. Rowling's.
But Harry seemed a little out of character. I can see that he would be upset over Sirius's death, but he just seems a little too angsty. I don't think he is the type of person that would write swearwords in the air with magic.
You described the setting well, but you didn't describe Harry's appearance. Has he changed at all? Is he taller? Does his depression and grief from Sirius's death affect his appearance at all? It's important to add description for both the setting and the characters.
I'll definitely keep reading. I can tell this fic is going to improve in later chapters. 8/10
Summary: “They’re alive, you know,” said Luna. “The stars. You can tell, if you know them well enough. They’re full of emotion. Like that one—” she took an arm from behind her head and pointed at some faraway star, “—is quite unhappy tonight.”
You wrote Luna very well. It was a great one shot. I loved it, and I'm adding it to my favorites. 9/10
It is ambitious Lily Evans' 7th and final year at Hogwarts. She is very excited about being one step closer to becoming an Auror and thrilled about being back to school altogether.
But there is one little annoyance: the Marauders. Specificially arrogant James Potter. He has been pestering her to go out with him, but she has coldly denied his wishes. She thinks this year will be no different to the past six school years.
But life is full of mistakes...::~!~::..
"Just one minute.” Lily noticed footsteps heading in her direction. She saw a hand reach from between the screens and drop a flower onto her bedside table.
“Mr. Potter! Return to your dormitory immediately!”
“Alright, alright…” The hand disappeared.
Once Lily was sure that no one was in the wing, he lifted her head and saw what flower Potter had dropped.
Lily stuffed her head in her pillow and screamed a muffled scream that no one could hear.
Hmmm. It seems a bit rushed, but I know you wrote this when you were twelve, maybe even eleven, so it's really good for a kid that age. I'm sure the later chapters are better, so I'll keep reading. 6/10
Summary: This is my second Lily/James story and I am so pumped about it! Plese read, this is mainly about James and Lily with a bit of action thrown in and a whole lot of tears.
Lily Evans thought that her 7th year would be THE best. But, she finds out it's all going to fall apart! With James Potter as Head Boy and her two closest friends moving to foreign countries, how will she survive?
CHAPTER 7 IS FINALLY UP! THANK THE LORD! (if i was my friend jenna, i would probably start singing the following song>>) joyful joyful, lord we adore thee, god of glory, lord of love. hearts unfold like flowers before thee. hail thee as the SUN above!
It seems a bit rushed. Remember to take your time on it. Not a bad first chapter. I'm going to go read the second chapter now....6/10
Summary: Hey! It's me again with another one of my poems! This time, it's a poem about Umbridge from Harry's point of view. Enjoy!
That was good. *laughs*
Summary: "What can I say?" James shrugged his shoulders. "We are just obviously,"
James laughed, "Meant to be."
Lily Evans and James Potter share absolutely nothing in common, not even their feelings for each other. Lily, perceived as a ‘model student,’ detests the handsome, popular, Quidditch star James, who she thinks to be something of a git. James, on the contrary, has been infatuated with Lily for years, and has let her and the whole school know it.
As time progresses into Voldemort’s ‘reign of terror,’ the two have to learn to trust, tolerate, and love each other.
Please note, this story is incomplete, and will likely remain so for a long time. I apologize!
This is by far the best fanfic I have read. It's very funny and I can't wait for the next chapter. Kepp up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!! :) The next chapter is in queue. :)
I love it! I love the way you're writing everything. All your fanfics are great! You're very talented. I can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10
Please update soon! You're killing us! We need another chapter ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Summary: It's our favorite couple-to-be's 6th year! Lily is outside studying, and James is playing with that darn snitch again, distracting her. Irritated, she goes to confront him and 'politely' (cough) ask him to stop. Madness ensues, and the two have a civil conversation (gasp!). James ends up giving Lily something to think about, though it may not be exactly what he intended.... [One-shot L/J - fluffy]
I am crazy about all of your stories! This one is such a fun read. I'd recommend it to anyone. The best one shot I've read, by far. Keep up the great work! 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
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I like the way it started. Hardly any other fanfics start with Harry in the slythein common room. Very good.
Summary: A cute little one shot I dreamed up. Remus Lupin finds a box of James' old poems and gives them to Harry to read.
That is really good for an eleven year old! If you really are eleven, you sure have a talent for writing. I'm impressed.
Author's Response: yeah, I was really 11 when I wrote those lol. I\'m 12 now, almost 13 (in a couple months). Thankyou a lot!
Summary: How the Marauders came to be...
The eagle and dragon part is a bit strange, but I still liked it.
Summary: It's the seventh year for the Marauders and Lily. James still hasn't given up on his dream girl and is trying his best to woo her. Lily unfortunately is stuck being head girl with the boy she never would have thought of. James Potter. Read this story as James has his ways of wooing such a girl.
OMG! Chapter 2 has been accepted! Wow! I am just... so happy! *burst into tears*
It's good so far, but try to write Peter in. You just said he was the oddball that didn't fit in, and we didn't hear anything else from him. Overall, not bad. I'm going to go read chapter two! 7/10
Summary: A short poem about Harry Potter.
Clever Rhyming! Some of the best I've seen. Simple yet great.
Author's Response: Wow thanks! It's always great to get a review on something that has been posted for a long time.
Summary: A little character exploration. How did Neville's Gran take the news of her son's torture and what does she really think of her grandson?
Wow that was amazing. You really had me feeling so sad there.
I loved how you wrote Neville's Grandmother. I can see she really loved her son, and how she really wishes Neville was more like him at times. She also seemed a bit scatterbrained in the story, which really shows great character development.
Great description. Just enough. Not so much that it bores me, but not so little that I can't get a good picture inside my head.
This story is very touching. I absolutly loved it. 10
Summary: A poem about Harry's 4th year. Please R&R!!!
I am open to suggestions!!!
Very good. I think you really captured the way Harry felt in forth year.
Summary: This poem is about Remus and how he fills after the war. (might make you cry). Please, Please, Please R & R.
Wow I have tears in my eyes. That was so great and true. But sad at the same time. I loved it.