Wow. I don't ship Draco/Hermione, but that poem was fantastic. Beautiful and sad. 9/10
Very cute story! Nice job on keeping Luna and Ron in character
This was a great first chapter! Your story really flows well, and your style seems similar to J.K. Rowling's.
But Harry seemed a little out of character. I can see that he would be upset over Sirius's death, but he just seems a little too angsty. I don't think he is the type of person that would write swearwords in the air with magic.
You described the setting well, but you didn't describe Harry's appearance. Has he changed at all? Is he taller? Does his depression and grief from Sirius's death affect his appearance at all? It's important to add description for both the setting and the characters.
I'll definitely keep reading. I can tell this fic is going to improve in later chapters. 8/10
You wrote Luna very well. It was a great one shot. I loved it, and I'm adding it to my favorites. 9/10
It is ambitious Lily Evans' 7th and final year at Hogwarts. She is very excited about being one step closer to becoming an Auror and thrilled about being back to school altogether.
But there is one little annoyance: the Marauders. Specificially arrogant James Potter. He has been pestering her to go out with him, but she has coldly denied his wishes. She thinks this year will be no different to the past six school years.
But life is full of mistakes...::~!~::..
"Just one minute.” Lily noticed footsteps heading in her direction. She saw a hand reach from between the screens and drop a flower onto her bedside table.
“Mr. Potter! Return to your dormitory immediately!”
“Alright, alright…” The hand disappeared.
Once Lily was sure that no one was in the wing, he lifted her head and saw what flower Potter had dropped.
Lily stuffed her head in her pillow and screamed a muffled scream that no one could hear.
Hmmm. It seems a bit rushed, but I know you wrote this when you were twelve, maybe even eleven, so it's really good for a kid that age. I'm sure the later chapters are better, so I'll keep reading. 6/10
It seems a bit rushed. Remember to take your time on it. Not a bad first chapter. I'm going to go read the second chapter now....6/10
That was good. *laughs*
Lily Evans and James Potter share absolutely nothing in common, not even their feelings for each other. Lily, perceived as a ‘model student,’ detests the handsome, popular, Quidditch star James, who she thinks to be something of a git. James, on the contrary, has been infatuated with Lily for years, and has let her and the whole school know it.
As time progresses into Voldemort’s ‘reign of terror,’ the two have to learn to trust, tolerate, and love each other.
Please note, this story is incomplete, and will likely remain so for a long time. I apologize!
This is by far the best fanfic I have read. It's very funny and I can't wait for the next chapter. Kepp up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!! :) The next chapter is in queue. :)
I love it! I love the way you're writing everything. All your fanfics are great! You're very talented. I can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10
Please update soon! You're killing us! We need another chapter ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I am crazy about all of your stories! This one is such a fun read. I'd recommend it to anyone. The best one shot I've read, by far. Keep up the great work! 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :)
I like the way it started. Hardly any other fanfics start with Harry in the slythein common room. Very good.
That is really good for an eleven year old! If you really are eleven, you sure have a talent for writing. I'm impressed.
Author's Response: yeah, I was really 11 when I wrote those lol. I\'m 12 now, almost 13 (in a couple months). Thankyou a lot!
The eagle and dragon part is a bit strange, but I still liked it.
It's good so far, but try to write Peter in. You just said he was the oddball that didn't fit in, and we didn't hear anything else from him. Overall, not bad. I'm going to go read chapter two! 7/10
Clever Rhyming! Some of the best I've seen. Simple yet great.
Author's Response: Wow thanks! It's always great to get a review on something that has been posted for a long time.
Wow that was amazing. You really had me feeling so sad there.
I loved how you wrote Neville's Grandmother. I can see she really loved her son, and how she really wishes Neville was more like him at times. She also seemed a bit scatterbrained in the story, which really shows great character development.
Great description. Just enough. Not so much that it bores me, but not so little that I can't get a good picture inside my head.
This story is very touching. I absolutly loved it. 10
Very good. I think you really captured the way Harry felt in forth year.
Wow I have tears in my eyes. That was so great and true. But sad at the same time. I loved it.
Interesting. Different, but good plot. I thought the part about Harry's adolescent mood swings and excessive worrying seemed a little ooc, but it's an AU fic, so maybe it's supposed to be that way? I'll keep reading....7/10