Books: the infernal devices
Authors: Garth Nix, Tamora Pierce, Laurie Halse Anderson
HP characters: Draco, Luna
Random Info: not a twilight fan.
I love this story! It was great how you centered the story around the one class. I really felt like I was getting to know the characters, by what they said and did. Teddy is such a solid character, and it's very easy to imagine him getting the students excited- about anything really. It's very sweet. :)
This poem sums up Bellatrix perfectly. I really love the conflicting decisions she makes in her feelings- 'everything feels fake, feels wrong, feels right'. And 'hypocrite all out of lies'- that was fantastic. It's like Bellatrix knows she's lying about everything, but just doesn't care. Who's she talking to, I wonder. Is it Rodolphus, or maybe Voldemort? Great job, anyway.
Author's Response: I always thought Bellatrix would be a terrifying and convincing recruiter for the Dark side. Thank you for the review! You get a squishy hug :P
This is great! I love how the hourglasses see themselves as helping people to grow and prove their House the best. I especially like how there's no gloating after the students' House wins and they have to go back and keep working for the honor. (Maybe that's the Slytherins problem, they gloat too much instead of working.) I really liked this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for writing a review. I think there are enough ideas in this poem that everyone can pick his favorite. I particularly like the part that reminds us there's a certain amount of luck in how things turn out, and that after bad times, things can get better.
I love this topic! I've always wondered what would happen to the Dursleys after the war was over. I also like the flow of this- especially the last paragraph. There is one thing I found strange, though. You started the first two paragraphs with the character's name- Dudley and then Vernon. However, you didn't do the same with Petunia's paragraph. It seems a bit off balance, but maybe I'm just imagining it. Great job!
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed this and I know what you mean about the poem feeling a bit disjointed because of it. Petunia is just different from the rest of her family: she's not concerned with herself so much, which is why I decided not to start the paragraph with her name. Thank you for your review!
I love that you used the metaphor of clay and molder. Stubborn clay seems to fit Harry's personality well. The personification makes the clay more relatable to Harry as well. Rebellious, courageous- those are words that really describe Harry. Great job. I also really like the flow of the poem, the shift between the two characters. It's like a battle. I really like it.
Author's Response: Thank you!!!! :) I thought stubborn clay fir him rather well, also. ~Nagini
Author's Response: Thank you!!!! :) I thought stubborn clay fit him rather well, also. ~Nagini