Oh, poor little in-love Regulus. He's crying? I'm crying too!! Ahhh! This was so beautiful. I liked how you casually slipped the Marauders in and I wish he could just forget his mother and marry her... and why did she remind him?? Now I'm gettting emotionl, but that's good because it means your story was great! I'm putting it on my favorites.
Hey, way to go. No body ever seems to write about Bellatrix anymore! I myself like writing about her. There was just one thing I noticed- you say Bellatrix was pale, when actually it describes her as dark in HBP, chapter 2.
Author's Response: oh yeah, it does doesn't it? Never mind - let's just say she was worried about something... :\ thanks anyway!
Oh my god, I finally back to reviewing!!! Anyway, your first chappie was pretty good in all. But (and you'll find that there are always buts when it comes to writing) the first paragraph was a little repetative. You focused more on Lily's surroundings than on her. Having said that, I'll give you a nine. Keep up the nice work!
Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm glad that you liked it. And I also thank you for the constructive criticism, as it helps me write better chapters in the future (I love it when reviewers do that). I hope you find the later chapters of the story better =)
Even though I didn't think very highly of the beggining chapters, this one was rather well done. It showed the difference between two boys who are often depicted as almost identical in the world of fandom. Lily played her part well. Her charcter really shone through in this chapter despite a rocky start in the beggining. Good job.
Author's Response: Thanks for this really kind review. I really enjoyed writing these two chapters (are you talking about the third or fourth chapters?) The first two chapters were my first attempts at fanfic, but when I wrote those two chapters I had two chapters, as well as a serious, dramatic (OK in my opinion, dramatic) one shot under my belt. In other words, I feel I matured as a writer in between those chapters. This review is proof. Thank you.
Umm, some parts were funny, but mostly it was really hard to read. I don't like to give out crit., but I think a little now and then is neccessary. Your dialouge was kind of... unpunctuated at times, and your grammar needs improvement. You also need to add more detail to the story, whether it's a humor fic or not. Otherwise, I thought it was very funny- I loved your imitations of Trelawny and Dumbledore, and that bit about "bald, retarded..." was funny, too. Good job!
Author's Response: im not very good at grammar in school. So thats probably why
Who is he, can you please tell me?? I love this, go you!
Good job. That is a really unique story!
Author's Response: Thanks! ^^ I like being different...it makes me stand out more. ^^
This put me through a bit of pain. I'm a Bellatrix fan and I'm a Bellatrix/Rodolphus shipper, so I believe they love each other. But don't worry. That didn't lessen my liking of this story, in fact, I've added it to my favorites. It was so beautifly written, and it is hard to come by a story from Rodolphus's point of view, so it is superbly original. I felt like crying for him a few times [okay, I'm in love with the guy] especially in the last sentence. That's so tragic! This was amazing, I've never been so attached to a fanfiction. I prefer this one to my own actually. And Belonging To Bellatrix definetly dominates my favorites list right now. Kudos to you, and God bless!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you for such a lovely review! I realise what high praise it is, especially coming from a Bellatrix/Rodolphus shipper. And I know what you mean, I\'ve come across different interpretations of their marriage myself, and I\'m open to other ideas about their feelings. I\'ve just always noticed how much attention Bellatrix gets in the books and how Rodolphus is barely mentioned, and I figured that she must be a VERY difficult woman to live with. ;) This was written over a year ago, but would you believe it - the other day I suddenly got a new Bellatrix/Rodolphus \"plot bunny\". If I get around to writing it and publishing it here, it will be with the greatest hopes that it will also win your liking. Again, thanks for the wonderful review!
This was amazing. I loved Regulus, as I always love Regulus, but your fic painted him so beautifully, so angsty. Your descriptions were absolutely wonderful, especially of Bellatrix and her diamonds. It all flowed so smoothly.Your fic= love.
Sorry for not reviewing in a while. I've been busy. This chapter was as wonderful as the last. I was so sad for Ginny. It was horrible that Hermione was the one to tell Harry, that shouldn't have been that way. Great writing, on to read the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m going to read your next review now! lol. =) --RP
Oh man, I thought Ginny was going to go with them. I don't know if I was really satisfied with this ending, but it's your story and you have the right to end it any way you want. Your writing was still brilliant though, and I'm sorry that there won't be any more chapters. I liked how you characterized Ginny throughout the story, adn that is a big, big compliment because Ginny is probably my least favorite character in the books *runs and hides from Ginny fans*. Well done, I hope to see more stories from you!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much!! I really appriciate this review. I\'m sorry that you weren\'t satisified with the ending, but I mgiht just write a sequel/epilogue... Not usre yet, though. Thanks for the huge compliment!! =) I feel like Ginny needs to be described, characterized, and analyzied (sp?) because she isn\'t in the books. And I like to add myself into her... I don\'t know why... Hmm. But anyways, thanks so much for being a faithful reader and reviewer! Thanks! =) --RP
Hermione/Ron!!!! Yes! She better dump Ernie! This chapter was very well written. I think it has to be my favorite one so far! Keep up the great work. I can't wait till Ginny tells Harry!
Author's Response: Aww, I love your reviews! They\'re always so nice! lol. Thanks for the review! =) --RP
Ahhh! That was awesome. I was going to review all the chapters together but I was afriad I'd run out of time and have to leave the computer. This is definetly going on my favorites! It's very nicely written, and absolutely loved the part about Ron screaming that he loved Hermione. This is all very original. I've never read a fic where Ginny is unhappy about the end of her and Harry's relationship. She's usually playing "the Saint" where she's all understadning and what not. You definetly made her more human in your fic. Good Start! Now I'm on to chapter two!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks! I\'m really glad you saw how I portray Ginny as a good thing. Some people don\'t get it, but I\'d be really displeased, so I tried adding a bit of how I would feel in the situation. I\'m so happy you liked it! And you reviewing each chapter, it totally makes sense, plus it gives me more reviews! lol. Thank you for the review! --RP
Oh! Ron always over-reacts! Poor Hermione! Poor Ron! I mean, he loves he NOW after she's going out with Ernie (by the way, that was ingenious!) and Ron finds that out AFTER he snogs her and then he finds Harry and Ginny eazvsdropping on the whole thing. It's quite the teenage tradgedy. Very inticing! Hope chapters three and four are just as good!
Author's Response: Ooh, thanks! It took me a bit, when I was writing this chapter, to come up with who I wanted her to date. I knew I wanted there to be complications, but... Well, you get what I\'m saying. Glad it worked for ya! Thanks for reviewing! =) --RP
ARRGH! Just fess up, Ginny! This is getting so interesting! I liked how the twins ganged up on Harry, a formidable force, I'm sure! Ron and Hermione need to get together soon or I will kick the can for all the suspense! But "Mione's" and Ginny's plan seems to be working...!!!
Author's Response: LOL, glad you\'re getting into the story. =) Thnaks for reviewing! -RP
Update ASAP! That was amazing! I can't wait until Ginny tells Harry. I mean, I understand that she would be morecomfortable telling Hermione but like Hermione said, harry is the father. It must have felt horrible when Harry told Ginny about his plan to destroy Voldemort. Now she must be worried about ifher baby will have a dad or not! Oh poor Ginny! This is such an emotional story, update soon, I'm on tenterhooks here!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! Today is nice review day! lol. =) I\'m so glad you like the story!! It should be updated soon, too. =) Thanks, as always, for reviewing! --RP
Oh, why did Ginny have to chicken out like that!! Bad Ginny! I love reading about Ron's thoughts, he's hilarious, and I like your portrayl of him. Another wonderful chapter, update soon!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I think Ron is one of my favourite characters to write, mainly because he doesn\'t fit into a certain category--Hermione\'s book smart, Harry\'s the hero, but Ron\'s almost undefined, so compliments on how I see one of the less \"defined\" characters really make me feel good! I love getting your reviews--they always make me smile!! Thanks! --RP =)
Ha ha, I just read the review below and laughed ove how it said almost the same things I did. Heee hee! Again, great chapter!
Author's Response: LOL, I thought (while reading the reviews), \"Wow, those are almost the same...\" And then I read this, lol!! Thanks again for the review!! =) --RP
Oh my goodness, I laughed my guts out at this one! I thought I'd- well, you know... It was just a good as your Sirius: The Black Knight story. You know, for a person who writes about Death Eaters, I sure do read a lot of Marauder fanfictions. I guess it's because yours and a few others are written so well. I am your fan, Pussycat123! 10! Love, Queen LaLa
Author's Response: Hey, I just realised that I never responded to this ... sorry. And even though it's a LITTLE late, thanks for your review. You rock!
I'm back! That was a really good chapter. It made me laugh! I love fics that make me laugh. I try some humor in my fics but I think they usually go AWOL. Do mind reading my fic and telling me what you think about that? Anyway, you deserve a ten! Again!
Author's Response: Haha thanks! I don't think a marauder-fic is complete without a bit of humor! I mean the foursome were such witty characters! And sure, I'll check out your story=)