Summary: I guess I should write AU… Anyway, this is how I would like the last chapter of Book Seven to be… What do you say?
I love how you added that part where Bellatrix wasn't really a complete physcopath but just had her different views. I laughed at that. But if JK ever ended it like this, I'd have to go through up somewhere. As a fanfiction it was a great idea and very well written too, but I can't bear to believe that after seven books it was all a dream. That would be so harsh of Jo. Well, anyway, I hope that didn't sound like critism, because it wasn't. You did a very good job on this!
Author's Response: Oh no don\'t worry! I don\'t think the story will end this way, either... but I really want Sirius to live!!
Summary: Seventh year has begun and Hermione Granger has found herself in great danger. What is the secret behind Voldemort's sudden change in targets, and what dangers lie in store for the trio? Riddled with plot twists and cliffhangers--the Potter Universe is in for a surprise. (This story is Pre-HBP)
Okay, responding to your first response, I quite like the long chapters. However they do tend to lose their charm after 3,500 words. I guess that's what I'd prefer. But, if you need the extra few thousand to fit in Bella, I might just forget what I said....
Ha! Well, Bye
Author's Response: Haha! Well...I guess I'll have to shorten it down into the 3000 word area! Thanks for the tip!
Yay! Bellatrix's name kept popping up! Yahoo! Great chapter, Ryan. By far the best!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!!!! :D!!!!!! Which one though? It says you reviewed for A Glimpse of the Future :P If so, wut\'d you like about it? :D (It\'ll help me and my future chapters ^-^) By the way, Bellatrix makes an appearance in chapter 12 and 13 :) ) Thanks for your review!
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"Vernon!" Petunia wailed. Uncle Vernon had fallen over and his face was like a corpse. His pale skin was contrasted by his eyes which were giving somewhat of a death glare. She felt for a pulse. Nothing. " VERNON!" Petunia wailed, crying at his side. Petunia stood up, her mascara was smudged from her tears and her heart had been broken as her husband had just died. She moved quietly over to the front door and walked up the stairs with a face that could scare even the bravest of people. The Death Eaters seemed to be enjoying this little taunting to Uncle Vernon and began firing hexes and jinxes at him even though he was already dead, not noticing the stealthy Petunia. She walked into her bedroom and opened her dresser drawer. I swore to myself that I would never use this, she thought to herself. She pulled out a wand. Seventeen inch with a maple trim. All this time, I had been a witch. Just like my sister. I didn't even know it. But now that I am a witch, even though it is the worst of disciplines, I can have vengeance on those you have killed my husband. Murdered him. All my confusions began when I received the howler two years ago. She walked down the steps and stared angrily at the dullard Death Eaters. You killed my husband. My husband. The only person I had loved. Why did you have to kill him. You should never have killed him. You're filthy little Dark Lord will never see you again when I murder you. Yes, murder. I will share with the world my murderous tale at how I had killed three Death Eaters from the wizarding community. I will be a legend. A hero. But all your little sneers and smirks will be wiped away when I kill you, Petunia thought ravenously to herself.
That was my favorite part for some reason. It just grabbed my attention as soon as I read it. (Maybe it was the word "Death Eater" that attracted me. just kidding.) This was a really good chapter and I hope your writing continues to be as great for the remainder of the story. I'm going to put this in my faves.
Author's Response: :o Yay!!!!! :D!!!!!!!!! Thanks for your review!!!! But tell me....did you like the long chapter? or do you want it in the 2000 - 3000 word area....I didn't know if it was too long :/ Thanks for the review!! :D!
Hey,awesome story. Made my jaw drop. From the beggining of this story your unique talent was unmistakable. I think you deserve a ten on this one!
Author's Response: :O! Wow!!! Thanks so much!!!! Chapter 8 is in queue and chapter 9 is finished but I sent it to my beta! Chapter 9 is the longest chapter that I'm probably ever going to write. It's close to 5000 words! I hope you stick with me through the end! Thanks a lot!!! ;)!!
Okay, hang on a moment. This story is... is... AWESOME! Had to review again. Okay,I will stop talking now because I really never know when to stop. Loved your story. It was great! Lots of detail, lots of Death Eaters (will Bella make an appearance?) (MUAHAHAHA!) Yay! Didn't i say i'd stop talking a few words ago? Oh well, darn that. LOVE THIS STORY! 100000000000/10... and, frankly, I don't care whether or not there's no 1000000000 option!
Author's Response: ;o!!!!!!! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!! THANKS SO MUCH!!! :D!!!!! And hmmm.....Bella is going to be in this story :) But.....I'm not sure wut chapter.....Right now I'm thinking the last chapter which will be far from now....But she could make an earlier appearance ;D!!! Thanks for your review!!! :D!!
I can't wait for the next chapter, so I am going to say again how much I love your story!!! I love how everything is so mysterious!!! I love mystery!!! You really don't know what's going to happen next so it keeps you on tenterhooks for the next chapter, which is what a good fic should do!! Keep writing Ryan! You do a great job!!!
Author's Response: ;O! Thank you so much!!! :\')!!! I don\'t really know why but this has been my favorite review of the whole book!!! ;D!!!! You are awesome!! And so now, since I have 60 reviews I will submit chapter 12 into the queue!! =D!! I hope it\'ll be up soon! And thanks for the enthusiasm!!! =D!!!
Author's Response: And oh my goodness ;o!!! I just read your response to my review!! =D!! Thank you so much for advertising my fiction! Your my bestest bestest Harry Potter Mugglnet Fanfiction Friend Ever! :)!!!! You so rock!! :D!
Author's Response: Oh yeah! For anyone reading these reviews.... Read Sorrows More Peaceful by ForbiddenLove It\'s the bestest story in da whole world!! READ IT NOW!!! :D!!!!
Yay! Chappie twelve is up! Yay! Guess my betaing is good for something... =]. By the way, I can't beta anymore because I'm a little tied up, I'm very, very sorry about that. I hope you're not mad at me! Anyways, great chapter, very enjoyable. So much of Bellatrix!! She's so evil , I love it. Like I said, wonderful chapter! Keep going!!! And again, sorry I can't beta (by the way, chapter twelve of my fic is up but you haven't reviewed yet. Is something wrong? Just wondering). Your Fan, ForbiddenLove
Author's Response: it is? ;O! OH GOODIE! :D! Ill read it right now :D! Btw, can u maybe help me get a beta :( Because Ive had absolutely NO luck whatsoever with betas :( Such as either they stop betaing such as yourself or I don\'t hear back from them...but in one case the person became a MOD on here :P So can you maybe help me please :) Thanks for ur review! :D!
I just finishe reading your first chapter, and I really love your writing. Its all a reader could ask for, especially your potrayal of all the characters. I loved the beggining especially. The way you started with the letter instead of introducing the owl, the surroundings, then the letter was very original. I love how the name Tipsy!!! That was the best! Great job! I promise that I will read the other chapters when I have time. 10/10
I love that song even though it came out many years ago. Evanesence is awesome. Evanesence+your writing=pure heaven! 100000000000000!
Wow! Harry vouched for Draco! Yay, Harry, Yay, Draco!! This was a really good chapter. I think this one was my favorite so far, but I still have a few chapters to go. I think you portrayed the Wizengamot fairly well, and the part about Draco not liking Pansy is great! Keep it up!
Oh, so this is her, huh? Cool. Love her description. How very Bellatrix like! So she's the girl in that banner I asked you about. Ahhh... I can't stop drooling over your story. I'm telling everyone I know as soon as Monday comes. And I'll e-mail all my enemies this very weekend...lol! 10/10 This is going in my faves!
YAY1 This was really good too! I can't believe how in love I am with this story! It is awesome! Gotta go read next chapter!
Wow! I cannot wait for you to update! I like read the whole story in half an hour, it was so good! Your talent is brilliant! Your story perfect! Keep it up! Keep writing! YAY for you! You are awesome! ONE MILLION/TEN! *does happy dance*
Summary: Hermione goes back in time with one mission: to kill Tom Riddle before he ever comes to power. A difficult task, correct? An impossible one, she realizes, as a love between them grows stronger than anything she has ever known. Now Hermione has a choice to make. Will she condemn the Wizarding world to almost certain destruction, or will she take the life of the one boy she has ever loved?
Hermione stopped dead in her tracks as the sentence hung in the air. “You pervert! If you really think I am going to—” Ha! Ha! Now that's a scary thought! I cracked up at that and, as I'm in a room full of studying students at the moment, that didn't exactly go unnoticed (lol). This is one of the orignial stories I love so much! I've put it on my favorites list, it's awesome! I can't get enough of it! Must read further on now. On to the next chapter!
I just wanted to say im really sorry for not having reviewed this before. its been on my favs list forever but now ive actually finished reading. this fic broke my heart into smithereens. and whats more, you did that in a truly inventive way. you are a brilliant writer. and the funny thing is, that i am a person who tries to avoid cliches but i loved every single cliche in this story. it was beautiful. very well don. lovely story. im almost sorry i finished reading it because now there's no more left...*sobs*
This story is just too good to be true. If only I could write like that! You're brilliant! Amazing! Wonderful!! The way you protray Tom is stangely not OOC like you'd expect it to be. You believe that momentary emotion from him when you write it. Voldemort is such an untouchable topic to write about, this must have been termedously difficult! Kudos to you!
“You make me sick,” Hermione said, once the professor was out of earshot." That was what Lily said to James once.. hmmm. Interesting, very interested. Anxious to find out more.
Author's Response: That is what Lily said to James in the pensieve, isn\'t it? Oops, I didn\'t notice. :P More coming soon. :)
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ooh! such good writing! im sorry I haven't reviewed in such a long time, I've been busy with my own Bellatrix story. This is such a good example of fanfiction literature, especially a Bellatrix one-- I've never read one quite as detailed! I cannot wait for the next chapter, I''m becoming quite obsessive about this one! God bless!
Author's Response: Thanks loads for the review! Yeah I can see you have wrote a lot! I\'ll try and get round to reading it. I\'m just busy with school and careers at the moment so its difficult to find the time to finish the 4th chapter. It\'ll be along soon and when it is the story will be moved to dark/angsty fics as it seems more appropriate. xXxXx
Oh,scaary! *Chills running up spine.*
I really love the fact that you had Grindelwald included into your story because he is only mention once or twice throughout the first book and then not again in the rest of the saga.
By the way, I'm really glad you didn't mention anything about Bella being pale because I hate it when authors do that. It clearly states that Bella's skin is dark in Book Six.
Great Job! You deserve a ten!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the 10! (yay) Yeah I know what you mean. I don't like the kind of "pale goth" idea of Bella either. I thought I should mention Grindelwald as the Blacks are a pretty dark family and you would have expected them to be involved with him.