One, I'd like to say that Olive Hornby is pure, loathsome evil! Two, I LOVED YOUR STORY! Continue!!! I loved your characterization of Myrtle, how she was too easy to give up information. How she was called Moaning Myrtle before she died. I had always assumed it afterwards for some reason, but I like your idea better. (I would also wish to complement your bannermaker [I know this might be off topic]. The reason I came to read your fic was because I saw your banner on the forums and thought the story would be interesting.) I liked how Tom used his basilisk to get information on Myrtle's blood status. Obviously this means that basilisks can tell the difference in your fic. Also, I thought that, despite her evil, Olive was very well written, spite and all. She was very cunning and manipulative, and seems to be the kind of person to put a dead animal in someone's bed. All your characters were wonderful. You wrote them in a way that they felt the way they were described. Their aura's sort of leaped from the screen. Well done! 10/10. Keep writing, and don't let the minimum number of reviews weigh you down. You have talent. Please contact me when you update, and I will come back to read and review! I loved this, and I'm putting it into my favorites.
Author's Response: wow, thank you! I love how you guys loved the story so much. As said before, this will probably stay a one-shot. I may write more about Olive Hornby, because she's an interesting character, but this will probably be the last you see of Moaning Myrtle Sawyer- at least for awhile. And the banner IS wonderful, isn't it? Fly to Dawn made it. You should definetely go check out her stories, and get in touch with her whenever you need a banner. You're the first person to add me to your favorites for any story- I seriously feel touched! I'll definetely let you know if I write another one-shot on these characters or if I decide to continue this one. Until then, your review definetely gets a 10/10!
Hello, this is the author of Sorrows More Peaceful (I changed the name, you might remember it as Love, Blood and Bellatrix Black), and I never properly thanked you for putting my fic on your favorites. So here goes: I really liked this beginning chapter, how you wrote Hermione, Ginny and Ron was wonderful. Your writing was fluent and I couldn't spot any conventional errors. By the way, Mrs. Weasley's cooking made me hungry just reading about it... yum! To wrap it up, you did a very good job on your first fanfiction, Bravo!
I liked how Hermione started reading three minutes into the game, very Hermione-ish. Now, I have just one thing to say about the arguement. Molly Weasley has always protected Harry like her son, so if she were to try and keep anyone from going it would be her kids AND Harry. I'm not sure she'd just stop at Ron and Ginny. However, the chapter was still very well written and I look forward to reading the next chapter. This is a very interesting tale, very. Good job!
oooh, this was my favorite chapter of all!!! The Ginny/Harry scene was very nicely done, and I liked the idea of Hermione's dress, it would go with her. Although I'm not sure about Ginny and Gabrielle's, but I suppose they're nice. I can't wait for the next chapter. Hurry up and update!!
Don't you know I'm sensitive? I am prone to cry over fic like that!!! This was beautiful, not my take on Bella/Rodolphus, but still beautiful. I liked your characterization of the two very much and the part with the Muggle boy in the alleyway was my favorite part, and it also almost caused me to have a heart attack, which wasn't your fault. Like I said, I'm sensitive. The last line tied things up very nicely, yes, and your fluency was brilliant. Now excuse me, I need to go get a Kleenex.
Author's Response: LOL, Thanks.
Another fab poem! I saw the banner for this one too somewhere. Maybe it was Queen Hals? Anyway, my favorite line was the last one. It is so.. strong. It really has a great way of ending it. Denying yourself the privilage of loving someone. That sounds so sad, but I guess that's why its soo beautiful!
Author's Response: Thanks. I was sporting the banner in my sig before \'Overlooked\', that\'s probably where you saw it ;-)
Submitted for Challenge 1: 'Apathy is Lethal' in the Monthly Poetry Challenge. By Foxy Wolf of Hufflepuff House.
Wow! Eloise Midgen?How original!!! Yes, I can finally log in! This was really good, and I think a lot more people than just Eloise Midgen can appreciate this! I can't believe I'm the only review. And I love this poem's banner, by the way!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I\'m really glad you liked it. And yay, you can finally log in.
Yay! You have a fic up! I never really properly thanked you for putting my story on your favorites list (chapter nine is in queue), so here it is. You character portrayl is good, even on the first chapter, whihc is usually rocky in most fics. Draco has that undertone of arrogance and Hermione has her wittiness. Maybe you could define Draco a little more but other than that it's fine. Your plot seems interesting too, I wonder what the rest of the story has to offer. When you update, I shall return!
Author's Response: I know, I\'m really enjoying writing this story.In the next chapters Draco is going to be a little more defined,I think. But I was and still am having a hard time updating the next chapter on this site. And as for your story I liked it way too much not to put it on my favorites! :)
What, you're just going to leave us hanging? You evil! This story was so original, I love original. It is so annoying to read all those Lily/James fics that go on and on and never stop and each fic says the same exact thing! Sheesh! But back to your story, it has so much emotion involved, and mystery, and the reader's curiosity gets the better of her. You fluency was wonderful, everything went smoothly, and in the English department everything was very good. The only thing that bothered me was Angelina's nickname, but that is so trivial that I wonder at my mentioning it. Bravo!
Author's Response: Wow, what a review. =D
Thank you for reading.
WOW Amy, you've done it again. Where did you learn to be so creative? Oh, and I'd love to read your secondary school survival guide. Send it to me, kay? This was definetly a job well done. You have redifined the one-shot. I especially liked the part about Hermione researching Lily. I wonder what her reaction was when she found out that Lily was Harry's mom- that would make a good sequel. YAY FOR AMY! YOU ROCK!!
Author's Response: Yay!!! *Is happy* I shall send you the real guide as soon as I\'ve finished writing this response ... I shall leave Hermione and her research to your imagination ... You rock too! Yay! ~~ Amy
Your fluency was definately very well done, unlike some other letter fics that turn out to have rocky transitions. You really captured Merope's hurt, and desperation. I could have cried had it not been for the fact that people sitting around me would proabably ask questions, awkward questions. An examle of her emotion was very well portrayed when he letter of declaration turned to pleading... "Tom, I miss you. Can't you miss me? I'd have died for you! I'd have done anything to make you stay with me! Please, Tom. Knowing that you are out there, not loving me, hurts so very much. Knowing you would not save me if you could tears at me from the inside." It's full of emotion, as is your strong point I believe. You did tend to repeat things, but that made it more realistic, because Merope was in such a state that she had to elaborate, and in reality, she porbably would have reapeated those key points to try and get the message through to Tom. Excellent job, and God bless!
Author's Response: Thanks! It\'s really nice to hear exactly what people liked. I\'m really happy you read and liked this story!
The fate of the light is forever
gone, as it should be.... That was my favorite line, by the way. It for some reason really touched me. This poem is sad and beautiful. It was really well done, and it had a trace of being mystic. I love that in poems. Good job, 10/10!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m glad it touched you. I was trying to get that acroos in this poem. Thanks again!
oh how i wish i were Liza Nott.. hehe! Ahh! I'm really hyper now! Reading Regulus makes me hyper, really hyper. I think I might pass out! Good job, funny and going on my favorites.
Author's Response: Thanks! *grins* So I\'m not the only one who wishes she were Liza Nott right about now, eh? Cheers!
I'm back, again. Firstly, i think that the title for this was very well chosen, it instantly grabbed my attention. Petunia's reasons for hating Lily are well explained, after all, she never liked her magic and now it's killed her parents. You put both Lily and Petunia in understandable context, and they are both very believable characters, which doesn't happen a lot in adult Lily fics. To tell you the truth, I was hesitant about reading this, as your forte is really Black and Malfoy family memeber fics, but this one turned out just as good as any of them, with the exception of Beneath the Shell, which is my all time favorite story of yours. As always, well done. I look forward to reading more stories by you. Maybe you'll be kind enough to post another Bellatrix story? Until then, I offer you my congatulations on being such an accomplsihed writer.
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much. This really means a lot. I\'m glad you enjoyed this story, and my others. I will admit that it was a little different writing it because, as you said, I generally work with the Blacks and the Malfoys, but this was fun to do. Beneath the Shell, is also my favorite of my stoies. And as for Bella, I have started outlining a chaptered fic on her. I can\'t gurentee anything, but I\'m hoping it works out well, and you will see it here in the future. I also have a couple of one-shots in mind about her, as she is quickly becoming my favorite character. So, thanks so much for the review and your kind words!
A/N:Bella probably seems OOC to most people in this fic. That is because I have an intense believe that she cannot be as bad as she seems. This is a private moment for Bella, no one is watching her, and she is free to act however she chooses without repercussions. I also believe that she was probably, at least somewhat, kinder before her years in Azkaban. I could not have agreed more!! I loved the shell metaphor, how it was pretty on the outside but ugly on the inside, and how that could also be washed away. This was as beautiful as your other fic in the Bella Files, but I must say I liked this one more. This is oh so beautiful! You are a very talented writer! God bless!
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I love writing about Bella. And it was weird how the shell metaphor came into existence. I hadn\'t thought of it prior to starting the story. It just popped into my head around the time Tonks and Andromeda were walking back to their towels. I have no idea where it came from, but I instantly fell in love with the idea. This is my personal favorite of my own fan fic. I\'m glad you enjoyed it too, and thanks for reviewing!
Very nice beggining chapter! Lucius has this innocence that we've never seen from him before, and I certainly haven't seen that in a fic until this one. It was an interesting idea to have Lucius pause by the lake and think, that was a very revealing moment. Usually, a character's thoughts define them more than anything. Before reading your fics, I was a pure Black family fan, but I am coming to new terms with the Malfoys as well. Once again, great job.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed. This chapter was actually kind of hard to write. The whole point was for Lucius to receive the assignment, and in some way show that he didn\'t want to do it. It was difficult to give the chapter much length, and make it interesting.
It\'s interesting that you say you started as a pure Black fan. I started as Sirius fan, then it grew to include Severus, then I fell in love with the Blacks, and I\'ve only recently gotten attached to Lucius, as I\'ve started writing him.
Anyway, thanks for the review. They always mean so much!
Oh, poor Lucius! Having to watch the house burn up and hear Mrs. Evans's screaming, and then having to see Lily like that!! Ahhh! Hey, here's an idea, one of us could do a one-shot about Bella's thoughts during her "killing of Sirius". (look how I even manage to bring her up in reviews). If you want to, I won't, but if don't, I will. Just let me know in the response. Anyways, back to your beautiful story. At the end, I was expecting Lily to not let him go, to attack or something, but she let him go. Was it because she knew he would if he didn't give her the message? Her charity must've caused Lucius more pain. I've never felt sorrier for him, and this is coming from the girl who feels sorry for the devil because he lives in such a warm place =]. Your story is moving. Here's another one for my favorites!
Author's Response: Hehe. I love writing stories that make people say poor Lucius. It\'s just not a phrase you here very often.
It\'s funny that you would mention a one-shot involving Bella\'s feelings when she killed Sirius, as I am currently outlining a Bella chaptered fic, that does indeed deal with that, to a certain extent. There\'s a lot of other stuff going on too. So I\'ve actually already given her feelings on the matter some consideration, but there\'s a strange twist that makes it hard to explain here. But if you would like to try on one-shot on the topic, please feel free. I can almost gurentee that we will not be going in the exact same direction.
And Lily. Well, I debated what she should do, but her character never seemed to be the violent type. In the end, she let him go because he was just a pawn, and she knew it. He did what he was told to stay alive; he didn\'t want to kill her parents. Attacking him would serve no purpose, when Voldie was the one to blame. I also think of Lily as a very perceptive person, and therefore, she could already see the large amount of pain that he was in. She realized that he was already suffering, and there was nothing more for her to do to him.
Also, I absolutly loved your line about feeling sorry for the devil because he lives in such a hot place. I swear I laughed for ten minutes!
Once again, thak you for the lovely review, and adding my story to your favorites. It is always greatly appreciated! :D
Ahhh! Somebody should kick Voldemort out, and let Bellatrix be ruler (I know, I know, I'm obsessive). He's such a meanie beanie baby! First he send Lucius on this mission that could have been easily completed by himself or another experienced Cookie Eater and then when Lucius completes it, he tortures him because of a little white lie. I mean, c'mon, Voldy, like you've never lied before. I loved how Narcissa tried to comfort him... ahh, love can cure almost anything... a little. I mean, it must've helped him to know that Narcissa was there for him. Poor, poor, Lucius...
Author's Response: Bellatrix almightly ruler of the Death Eaters...hmmm. I like it! :D But people have been trying to kick ol\' Volie out for years and the jerk just won\'t go down!
I tried to demonstrate the ultimate cruelty of Voldie, especially to his supporters. I mean come on, these people were stupid enough to follow him, he really doesn\'t need to Crucio them all the time!
The part with Narcissa comforting him was weird to write because I never believed these two to be in love. I don\'t for the purpose of this story either. However, I do believe they have a certain bond, and care about each other very much. So I didn\'t find it hard to believe that Narcissa would do everything she could to comfort her guilt stricken husband.
As always, thank you very much for the review!
Good job, and an interesting portrayl of my favorite character. I've never quite imagined Regulus that way, I've always seen him as soo innocent sex-wise. Yes, I know, poor blind me. This way makes much more sense. Nobody's completely innocent, right? Anyway, your writing was good, and the last line tied things up nicely, and the idea of him going to see a Muggle was very original. Good job!
It must be Snape right? Whoever it was about, it was lovely. There's no need to be envious of me when you have such talent yourself. I'm glad you recommended this to me, I loved it and I'm putting it on my favorites.
Author's Response: Awww!!! Thank you!!! Yay, somebody likes my story \"does a little dance\" Yeah, it was about Snape, I\'m glad somebody got it. I\'ve had \"is it about Harry/Ginny, Ron/Hermione, Draco/Ginny...\" x x x long live the fairies x x x