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Well, I am quite glad indeed to find Remus alive at the end of the chapter. *hides hands, shaking from nervousness* Whew! Now...I'm glad that Ron got to go along. He and Maeve are developing a better relationship. I love that he can play the trumpet, and Rule Britannia just made me grin. Roderick! Well! We'll be seeing more of him in the future, won't we? Is he a spy? Oh, and the gum! Only Ron would pick up a single piece of gum from the floor of the woods. Can't wait to see where that goes as well!
I'm so glad to see someone taking on Molly and Arthur! They're one of my favorite canon couples, and people tend to set them aside in the fanfic world. I enjoyed this beginning. Molly and Arthur's older selves are clearly evident in these teenage versions (Molly's adherence to rules and dislike of long hair :) and Arthur's obsession with Muggles and ambivalence towards rules), which is good. There's still room for development into their adult selves, though, which I like. Also, the way you had Arthur come across as a bit of a nerd for liking Muggles seemed like the Wizard's equivalent to people who are obsessed with aliens, which seemed very realistic. Great beginning! I'm looking forward to reading on!
Very interesting! Hermione never seems to be home for the holidays, so you already have an original start! What on earth are her parents up to??? I can't wait to find out! And I know it's Draco who's in that bundle of robes, but I can't fathom what he's doing at her house at this point! This is an excellent opening chapter, you've certainly hooked the readers' attention. I can't wait to continue!
Wow. I'm basically speechless. I don't want to use the word beautiful, because some of the images you created certainly weren't, but it's the first word that comes to mind. The strength of her friends, I think, is where it's coming from. I can understand the pain Ginny was going through, and I can understand why she wanted to hurt herself for it. I really felt for her. And then for her to be so lucky, to have people who cared for her. I really think you got her relationships with them all just right. The ending was perfect, as well. We all need something to believe in. Wonderful story.
Ooh, good chapter! I really liked all the details you went into with the exams. It seems like often writers just skip over them and say that they were horribly difficult, and that's that. You did a good job of describing them, and keeping it light and entertaining. I also (and I don't know if this was intentional or not) like the parallel between Harry's OotP Astronomy exam and James'. As soon as he saw people moving by the Forest, that was exactly where my mind went. Can't wait to see what's going to happen with Bethany!
Author's Response: ahhhhhhhhhh weasley friend you found the wee little parallel! i have to admit, i did purposefuly do that ( i think, it was a very long time ago, but if i did it was frightfully clever of me ;) ) thanks for the review and OH BETHANY!! the plot thickens...
I thought this was very well done indeed! Especially considering half of it was improvised...I certainly couldn't do that if I tried! You used a very interesting idea here, playing with a character who's mentioned twice or so in the course of the books. Very ambitious! You have a nice, snappy writing style, and it get's the reader right into the character's head. I can fully understand his addiction to coffee, I have it too! Also, his conclusion that being late is exhilarating is hilarious! I've had that thought myself, but it always gives way to reason. Can't be late for everything! Oh, and the monacle is perfect for his character. Just the right touch! So all in all, very well done indeed!
Oh dear! I'm still laughing, this was quite entertaining! I liked every little part, from Hagrid cuddleing little Buster, to Artie the giant spider, to the fantastic dating show! Dumbledore should henceforth be written in ghetto-style! I also really liked the moonwalking. Just seemed very appropriate to me! The fact that we shouldn't be able to understand Hippogriffian was a nice touch as well. All in all, this was an excellent addition to your collection, and I'm looking forward to reading the next one!
Rita and Hermione! Who would have thought it??? Now, however, I'm considering it. They're clearly both incredibly intelligent, so there could be some attraction there. I'm sure they both have some respect for each other. Although you made the pairing mostly physical. Either way, I really enjoyed this, it was very well written! I was entertained all the way through! The descriptions of the club were fantastic, and all those former musicians were inspired! You must have had a fabulous time coming up with names! All of your people were really in character, especially Luna. She really got me laughing! The ending was a little abrupt, though. Is another chapter in the works? I'd certainly read it!
This was very interesting. I was just wondering where you got the idea...was it just what you wanted to have happen, or did something trigger it? I think you have an excellent grasp of Fred and George, that's for sure. Are you planning to play up Ron a little more? He seems a little bit absent to me. Like you said, Hermione is very OOC, but that's okay. I'm looking forward to seeing how her change of character is going to affect the rest of the plot. Good start!
Me again. I just read your summary again and realised I missed the whole point. Sorry! So now that I know you won't be playing up Ron, how did you get the idea of using the twins as a vehicle for Harry and Hermione's relationship? Can't wait to see what's coming!
This is certainly a different twist on the Masquerade ball idea! You did a very nice job with it! I liked how you wrote everyone, including Ron and Hermione. I do think that it was a little strange that Harry and Ginny didn't recognize each other through their letters almost immediately, since they bonded so much over the summer. And I'm definitely surprised Harry didn't know who she was when he actually saw her, but putting that aside, it was very cute! I liked the ending, the way you finally got them together. It was very nice, light and happy. Well done!
Wow. Okay, so let me say that I've just read your entire fic through as fast as I could, because I couldn't get enough. Truly outstanding! I love your characterization of everyone. You've managed to create really solid personalities for everyone and they're so believeable! I always think that's the hardest part about Marauder fics--they tend to get cliched. So, about this chapter. Amazing! Poor Remus! I can't believe they suspect him! And evil Peter! Argh! You can just see everyone's trust deteriorating and it's really scary! Oh, and I loved baby Harry! What a cutie! Great job!
Oh my! This is interesting. Usually in the whole world of arranged marriage fics the two aren't allowed to have any say in things. You've certainly gotten my attention by changing that around right away! Clearly they're going to grow closer as Heads, though, right? I especially liked your portrayals of Lucius and Narcissa. 'Constipated smile' was the phrase I best liked. It seemed to exactly fit how he would look in that situation. I'm looking forward to reading on!
Author's Response: I'm glad to hear you found this one interesting and the concept different! There are many arranged marriage fics out there (many wonderful ones), so it’s great to hear that this particular one caught your attention! Yup, they're certainly going to grow closer as Heads (and with the Love-Knot). And somehow, when I envision Lucius smiling, I imagine it to be extremely forced, to the extent that he looks… well, constipated (there’s no other way to describe it!). Heehee…
Excellent chapter! I can't decide if I like Rick or not (putting Muggles into Hogwarts is dangerous), what with all his special powers and everything, but I still think you're doing a good job with him. You've shown that he's not perfect and he has to control himself, which helps. And then he can use the power when he needs to help Harry. Malfoy sure was nasty in that chapter! Which is good, by the way. I don't see him getting any nicer. And of course, Hermione is starting to figure things out. Not much longer before something happens between those two, am I right? Hmm. I also really like your writing style. It flows very nicely, making it a pleasure to read. I can't wait to continue!
I thought this was brilliant! I love missing moments, and you did a great job with it. The portrayal of Ginny was good, but Luna was spot on. Really a perfect balance between her spacy-ness and her blunt honesty. We got to see the smart side of her, which has to be in there somewhere if she's a Ravenclaw. You worked it in there masterfully. She went from a serious conversation with Ginny about the DoM to the whole thing about yetis and sasquatches to the weight on Ginny's shoulders. It's perfect Luna. Really beautifully done, I hope you keep it up!
I'm sorry, Jenna, this is a completely spammy review, but I felt compelled to do it.
Rosen Krantz and Guilden Stern?! *dies laughing* *hearts Shakespeare* Excellent. Marvelous. Wonderful.
I mean that about the fic, too, of course. ;-)
I started reading this story a LONG time ago and never put it in my favorites. So I lost track of it. I'm sooooo glad I found it again! This is really amazing...I love every word of it! I can't wait for you to update. It's definitely on my favorites list this time! 10/10
PS I'm so sorry to hear about your sister. Please accept my sympathies. This story is a wonderful way to remember her.
Author's Response: Thanks. I just finished chapter 27, which my sister helped design some key parts of. I hope you enjoy it.
Great job! I really liked how you used the song, it fit perfectly. The interaction between the two of them in the locked room was perfect. A little fight, a little uncertainty, and then a little love! The only (small) complaint I have is that it's tough for affection to turn around like that in a week. I know this is a one-shot, so you don't have time for tons of development, but making it happen over a month, just showing a small incident or two here and there might be more believeable. Otherwise, not a complaint in sight! And I love this quote: "Hate is only love that's missed its mark." I may have to use that in a fic myself sometime...
Excellent job! Your balance of describing what's happening around Harry and describing his feelings is perfect! Then you tie the two together and it just flows. The stanza starting with The light bulbs flash is the best example of this. It also happens to be my favorite stanza! Occasionally the rhythm threw me off, but I could figure out where the stresses were meant to go, and then it was fine! All in all, a wonderful poem!
I've been reading nonstop, and I have to stop, so I'm gonna review to here and then come back and finish later. So. Amazing fic! Wow. I love the way you portray Harry and Ginny's relationship throughout. It seems so realistic to me! And your fight scenes! I tend to lose interest in those pretty rapidly, but you just keep my attention the whole way through! How do you come up with new spells? I use Latin generally, but I like to know how everyone else does it. And Percy saved Ginny! Wow. I suppose we have to like him now. What else? Well, in general, I like Nathan and Anna. They're good solid OCs, which I know is hard to do. One question: Why did they have to go to Knockturn Alley? COuldn't they have gone straight to him? I suppose there must be a reason, which I will no doubt learn later. Anyway, excellent work!
Author's Response: lol - thank you! Yes, take a break. The new spells are just latin - I try to figure out what I want to do and pick something that sounds good. Wish I could say there was more to it! Why they went to Knockturn Alley - Lucius had switched portkeys on them. The original one was to take them back to Hogwarts.