Nice job displaying a "quick-witted tongue" by using phrases that flow quickly off the tongue with alliteration and rhyme. Closing the poem with a sly smile makes the relationship real, human - not just an idealization. Good stuff.
Author's Response: Why, thank you very much! I was not expecting any reviews- and then yours showed up, and I had skipping puppies within my stomach. I am excited that you enjoyed it. :) Keep reading!
Not sure why, but your poem reminded me of this - "Ah, distinctly I remember it was in the bleak December,
And each separate dying ember wrought its ghost upon the floor.
Eagerly I wished the morrow; - vainly I had sought to borrow
From my books surcease of sorrow - sorrow for the lost Lenore -
For the rare and radiant maiden whom the angels named Lenore -
Nameless here for evermore."
Not a bad comparison to conjure!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I am flattered that you would want to compare my poetry to more well-known poets. :)