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The Traveler's Secret by eternalangel
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 51]

Summary: It’s 1940 and Paris has just fallen to the Nazi Regime. The Muggle world is in turmoil, but little do the Muggles know that the Wizarding world is also at war. A weary traveler comes to England carrying a secret that will change both worlds for better or worse . He comes seeking protection and help from the adept Albus Dumbledore, a Professor at the famous Hogwarts school of Witchcraft and Wizardry. But there is more danger about than even Albus has anticipated. Can Dumbledore protect the traveler and his secret?

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 82554 Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/09/08 Updated: 12/17/09


Reviewer: MrsHTX Signed
Date: 12/30/12 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 A Meeting Between Friends

Intresting story, and well written. The only critique I can offer is that the author's notes are distracting, especially the way they are formatted. I'd prefer to see them at the bottom of the page -- if you were publishing this story as a printed book or e-Book through a traditional publisher, you'd have no way to address your readers directly, and I find the "notes to readers" very distracting. It's almost as if you don't think your story is well-written enough to stand on its own, and it is. They're not necessary -- you're quite a good enough writer to just tell your story, without explanation before each chapter. I hope you come to trust yourself and your talent more!

 

Summary: Hermione Granger and Draco Malfoy attend their sophomore year at the Wizarding University of Paris. This is a sequel to both the Dragon Does the Tickling, where Hermione Granger and Draco Malfoy complete their seventh year at Hogwarts after the war and fall in love and More Wandless Magic with Malfoy, where they complete their freshman year at WUP. I strongly recommend reading both those stories first.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Epilogue? What Epilogue?

Word count: 162696 Chapters: 45 Completed: No
Published:
09/03/12 Updated: 02/09/14


Reviewer: MrsHTX Signed
Date: 12/27/12 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Draco visits Azkaban

I have enjoyed the three stories in your series very much -- so much so that I started reading this one knowing it was still WIP, when I usually avoid WIP stories. Your characters are realistic, your plots are interesting, and you give just enough details to paint a vivid story without boring your readers with irrelevant "padding". I am very much looking forward to reading the rest of this story. Thanks so much for sharing it!

Author's Response: Thank you for your nice review! I'm afraid the WIP story may frustrate you. I'm only able to post about once a week, so it may be slow going. I have the whole story mapped out, so I promise I will finish it and not leave you hanging. I'm glad you've enjoyed the other stories as well! Thanks, Jenny

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