Hey there! I'm Georgia, or Draco7052 on the beta boards.
ne of the reasons I love this site so much is the quality of the stories. They really are exceptional. So I am trying to live up to that reputation in my own writing. At the moment, I'm working on like a billion different stories. Actually, it's more like seven or so. I'll tell you about about them.
Lily Potter and the Contradictory Malfoys
This is my biggest project so far. I plan on it being part of a trilogy, with twelve chapters each. So far, I have three chapters done and still need to get it validated.
This is a two part one-shot that is from both Dudley and Harry's perspective. Finished, but need to submit it.
You and Al, you were best friends until the end. It didn't matter that you were a Gryffindor and he was a Slytherin. It just didn't matter.
This is an (albeit super tiny) Christmas present for the fabulous Ellllieeee, an amazingly awesome person who is one of my very best friends here on MNFF. I super-duper hope that this proves your mindset about Slytherins, Ellie. Mostly because it was really hard to write Albus-flavoured Next-Gen, and you better appreciate it! Merry Christmas!
First of all, I just want to say-Wow. This is simply amazing. I am very picky about my next generation, (at least one Potter has to be a Slytherin, Slytherins cannot be seen in a bad light, no Quidditch rivalries, etc.) and this story fit all my criteria. The abstract feeling, with the song lyrics, was very enjoyable and was perfect for the mood of the story.
I do feel, however, that the word "you" was used a bit too much. It seemed fine at first, but as time went on, it got a bit repetitive.
That is my only suggestion, and I love this story! It was amazingly done.
Summary: Albus Potter is in a tight position. Faced with the possibility of being kicked off of the Quidditch team and losing the Cup after eight years, Albus turns to his cousin Rose Weasley for help. Can the two of them work together to save the Gryffindor team, or will Albus be forever remembered as the Boy Who Lost?
This was a great story! I have always liked ones about Qudfitch, and this one captured both the difficulty and the excitement of the sport.
It's just that in the summary, it seemed as if Albus' struggle to stay on the team was a major factor. However, in the story, it is really only in the first scene. Perhaps a few more paragraphs of his struggle internally would have improved it.
Over all, it was an excellent story, and the characterization of Albus was very nice. Rose also seemed just like I imagined her.
Summary: In his first year at Hogwarts,Louis Weasley hadn't really expected to see Lord Voldemort appearing from a turban, and he never actually imagined that he'd discover the Chamber of Secrets, despite the attempts with his cousin. But he had expected something more from his school than a few mundane magical accidents.
Then, in his third year, he faced his Boggart and everything changed. For how can you defeat a fear that has no form?
Disclaimer: I am no JKR.
Thank you, Jess, for the original prompt and mah flist for encouraging me to write anyway, despite missing the deadline.
this was a really good story with a lot of depth and emotion.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it because it was a story I've had in my head for some time but sometimes they don't translate well on the page. ~Carole~
Summary: All Scorpius Malfoy had wanted on the Saturday before Halloween was to spend some time in Hogsmeade alone with his girlfriend, Lily Potter. But Fate appeared to have other plans. Not only is her annoying cousin Hugo Weasley tagging along, but in the aftermath of a violent storm, a body is uncovered.
Working with his boss, Head Auror Harry Potter, to discover the identity of the victim, and the truth of her death, Scorpius quickly learns that not all skeletons are buried underground.
This is a the sequel to High. It is not necessary to read that to understand this, but what the heck, you might just enjoy it!
Many, many thanks to Kara (Karaley Dargen) for not only beta'ing this story, but putting up with the tortuous search for a title.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I think you know that.
really good! but what does higgledy-piggledy mean?
Author's Response: higgledy- piggledy means a mess, so everything is mixed up. Thanks for the review ~Carole~
Summary: Argus Filch has a cat. That cat is not normal. Nothing is normal with the two of them. One day, everything changes, and Argus' life is shattered.
This is Draco7052 of Slytherin writing for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion
Thanks guys! I really appreciate the encouragement. Glad you liked the story!
Summary: Their wands are raised, they bow, and now they begin...
I really liked the theme of the poem, especially the anticipation it portrays. The style it is written in is spectacularly done. It is very graceful and magnificent.
I feel that this line,
"Spells like heat lightning, slow and bright,"
Is a but confusing. I'm not sure what "heat lightning" is so maybe that's what makes me confused.
I also wish it was a bit longer. Perhaps showing a little more of the winner's feelings after the duel?
All in all, it is very nice, and might be one if my favorite poems yet.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the kind review. As for 'heat lightning', I guess it might not happen some places - oops. When it's very hot out in summer here, you get sort of lightning in the clouds unaccompanied by either rain or thunder and we call it heat lightning.
Summary: A man walks into Madam Malkin's and hands over some torn robes that need to be fixed.
I saw this poem in the exchange, and really likes it.. And when I saw it in t review circle, it was the opportune time to,read it and review. So here I am.
The story this poem tells is beautiful. I have no idea how you came up with it, bit congratulations, it's gorgeous. The whole symbolism of the robes being torn up and unfit able is so perfect for Cedric, it just makes my eyes tear up reading it.
I have a few suggestions though.
There are tears in the sleeve, holes in the breast, scars
of a curse.
It sounds like a series of things that are visible on the robes. Yet the last, scars of a curse, is telling the reason why they are there. It might be better to put the word "the" before "scars." Just sounds better to me. It's tiny, but it stood out to me for some reason.
The only other issue I have is the title. It seems to me as if it is talking about a girl going into Madam Malkin's, when in reality, she is just the clerk. I'm really not sure what you could change, and it just might be my opinion.
Over all, I loved it, and it was very well written.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Georgia! I see what you mean about adding "the" but I feel like it disrupts the flow so I think I shall leave it as is. The title is supposed to be misleading. In essence, this is an everyday scene: someone goes into a shop to get something fixed. I wanted the title to be as mundane as possible to make the impact of the poem that much greater. Again, thanks for the review and the crit :) Julia x
Summary: Shell Cottage is made of the days spent there, but what are the days made of?
When I first read this poem on the beta boards, I was amazed. Like, jaw droppingly amazed. The way you divide it into the five senses is so creative. I love it.
So basically, all I'm saying is that it's awesome and amazing and wonderful. One of my favorite poems ever.
I should stop gushing now:)
Author's Response: Oh, wow! Thank you for such a nice review! :D You know, I was so worried I wouldn't have the poem done in time for the exchange deadline--the five senses thing meant that writing it took a lot longer than usual...but I'm glad I wrote it that way. And I'm also really glad you like it!
Summary: Hermione Granger is many things, and she is not just a sweet little girl.
Thanks so much Nagini! It was fun to right, and very easy. Just seemed to come right out of my pen without thinking.
Wow, that sounded really cheesy!
Author's Response: And my spelling needs help.