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A Second Chance by Dracosgirl1992
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Draco Malfoy never thought he would get s second chance. But after he receives a letter inviting him to finish his education at Hogwarts, he is thrilled, but still scared of the reception he will get. He thinks he will be all alone.

Astoria Greengrass makes sure this is not the case.

As the year goes on, Draco and Astoria get closer and closer, and Draco realises that maybe he does deserve a Second Chance...

Categories: Draco/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1212 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
01/15/11 Updated: 01/21/11


Reviewer: Moody Signed
Date: 01/23/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

An interesting premise although with slightly too much focus on dialogue. It would be more interesting to see how the characters unfold rather than having them display all their emotions through their dialogue; this goes specifically for the conversation between Narcissa and Draco. Otherwise, interesting work and I'd like to see more of this!

Author's Response: First of all, thanks for taking the time to read :) I think I focused more on dialogue in this chapter because it's what I think my strong point is. I understand what you mean about the amount of dialogue. I hope you continue to read and tell me if the amount of dialogue is getting better! :)

 
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