Hello readers and writers!
I am WrenWinterSong, though I would prefer to be simply called Wren. I have been writing since a very young age and would consider myself at least fairly decent at it. Although I mostly concentrate on my own stories that I hope to actually publish as novels one day, I have recently decided to try my hand at fanfiction and gain some constructive views on my writing. I am constantly looking for ways to improve my work, so if you see something that I could be doing to make my writing better, please let me know! I promise not to be offended by critism.
Thank you for taking the time to read this and I hope to have something up for you to read soon!
This chapter made me tear up at the end. You're characterization of Ron and Hermione is absolute perfection and you write their relationship so believable and realistic. Are you sure your not JKR?
All jokes aside, I felt I should probably leave a review since I added this story to my favorites months ago. I really have nothing but compliments to give. I've read all your other stories and enjoyed them all, but this is definitely my favorite story.
I've always wanted to read a well-written fanfiction about all the missing Ron/Hermione moments, and my search as finally come to an end. I am really looking forward to reading the rest of this and yell in excitement every time I see there's a new chapter here. I think the best part about your story is that it's not the over-used moments that people always write fics about. Instead, you've created your own moments and really expanded on what JKR originally wrote. They fit so well with the actual story and really show the behind-the-scenes progression of their relationship. As far as I am concerned, this is canon. Keep up the amazing work and I can't wait to see what you come up with next!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) *checks name badge* I'm pretty sure I'm not her... Thank you so much. It's incredible to hear that people are enjoying this. There are so many missing moments fics so it's great that you think this one stands out. I really did try to avoid the over-done moments as much as possible, but a few of them do show up (see the next chapter...).
I think this is my favorite chapter yet. You've captured Ron's desperation at Malfoy Manor perfectly without even writing about those specific events, which was wonderfully refreshing. The conversation with Luna basically summed up the last fourteen chapters, and I loved your take on her. Luna is one of those characters I personally don't understand (and avoid writing about at all costs) but this scene is so... Luna. I also loved the ending conversation about baby names. I've never been fully comfortable with the name 'Hugo' and always wondered where in the world that name came from, but you're explanation made perfect sense. Keep up the wonderful work and I looked forward to the rest of the story!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you liked this! The Malfoy Manor bit has been written so many times so it's great that you think this version was refreshing. Thank you! Luna is hard to write, but she is one of my favourite characters. Hugo really did come from nowhere, didn't it? I mean - where? Thank you! Hopefully it shouldn't be too far away :)
So, after practically sobbing at this ending, I'm finally coherent enough to write a review.
This was an extremely powerful story in each and every chapter and really sums about the feelings I imagine going through the Weasley family so soon after the battle. I love all the little details to add to the story, such as Molly's choices for naming her children in this latest chapter. They really add to the depth of the story and fit so well with canon that I think you must have secret connections to JKR, haha. Anyways, this was a wonderful story that I thoroughly enjoyed and the only thing that would have made it better is if you had written nineteen chapter instead of only six. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Sorry about the sobbing. Thank you so much for saying that. The little things like the names are really fun to think of so I'm really happy that they are appreciated. Haha, yes, we do have a connection. Well, I stalk her, but I am sure that counts. Nineteen would have been nice really, but I was running out of main characters. ANyway, thank you so much for reviewing and I'm glad that you enjoyed the story :)
This turned out amazingly! I am so glad that I could help with this. The parts you added a perfection and really bring out the depths of not only Hannah, but her mother as well. I also love the foreshadowing when she mentions she'll probably end up marrying a Gryffindor who is like her father. That part definitely made me smile! Wonderful, lovely, awesome job on this!
Author's Response: Thank you so so so much! This was reworked from something I wrote for English last year--a character sketch of my own mom--so I guess it was always going to be about the characterization of the family members. Your pointing out the things I could expound on helped with that a lot! Foreshadowing, teehee...I wanted to make it seem like she did respect Gryffindors, too, so I was writing about that, and then I just couldn't help adding the Neville bit.
Well, since you said please...
These last two chapters were actually a very pleasant surprise to me since I assumed the first chapter was simply a one shot, then I checked my email to find that there were other chapters! I was very happy, to say the least.
Katie and Oliver have a special place in my heart since they are one of my (increasing growing number of) OTPs, and the strange relationship, or lack of, that you've created here is perfect for them. I've always preferred Katie as one of the more dark and depressing Post-Hogwarts characters (after being cursed by a necklace, who wouldn't be a little off?), but the depth of her character with the added tragedy of Leanne is simply heartbreakingly wonderful. As for Oliver, you've really captured his character. I was very confused at seeing him in the Hog's Head at first, and your explanation is something I've never given much thought to. I suppose that a lot of organization would be taken over by DeathEaters, as you've pointed out. With the addition of Colin, Dennis, and Lisa, I'm really looking forward to more interaction with them and Kater, who seems to be finally sobering up and coming to terms, yay! I'm anxiously waiting for the next chapter and the plot twists I know have to be coming soon. (Things are starting to get just a little too happy...)
Author's Response: Hello! :D
I'm so glad you decided to continue reading. To be honest, I had a lot of problems with this story once it got going -- I churned out the first two chapters in a matter of hours, but then I got stuck and decided to go to the end -- LOL. Well, not quite the end, more the smut, hehehehe, which comes up later. But anyway, my point (which has been buried in the rubble of ramble here, lol) was that I'm really glad you enjoyed this chapter because it isn't the strongest, tbh.
Yayayay to liking OliKatie :D I love it, too, after writing this, but the main reason for the pairing is actually because of my recipient (this story was written for SPEW's Secret Swap), Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor, who writes sublime Katie/Oliver herself and hearts this pairing lots. And yes, you could say their relationship is weird -- she's... kind of gay and he's a sort of jaded ex-Quidditch player turned barman who lives in a tiny bedsit, hehehe. Buuut Jess did say that after writing them, I would want them to get married, and she was right ;)
You're right that being cursed by a necklace would certainly be a traumatic experience for Katie. If you're interested, you might want to read the prequel to this story, Flicker and Fail, which deals a lot more with Katie and Leanne's relationship as well as what happened immediately after Katie first woke up in St. Mungo's after being cursed.
I'm very happy you liked Oliver. Yeah, I didn't make it clear why he was working at The Hog's Head, but now you know :) And hmm, you won't see as much of Dennis, Colin and Lisa (I thought it clogged up the narrative a bit too much but I might write an outtake with them and post it -- we shall see :) ), but you are right about the plot twists. I won't, however, give anything away, but rest assured things will soon get shaken up, as is my custom.
Thank youuuu for the lovely, in-depth review and I hope you don't mind my rambling response too much!
I really enjoyed this opening chapter. I thought it captured Sirius's state of mind perfectly. Looking forward to reading more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!