Summary: One simple incantation and you will enter a top-quality, highly realistic, thirty-minute daydream, easy to fit into the average school lesson and virtually undetectable (side effects include vacant expression and minor drooling). Not for sale to under-sixteens.
-from p. 117 of Harry Potter and the Half Blood Prince, American Editioin
When Headmaster Severus Snape discovers an abandoned box of Patented Daydream Charms while patrolling the corridors of Hogwarts one night, he’s about to discover magical, melancholy daydreams of Lily…
…and the reasons why Patented Daydream Charms aren’t sold to younger wizards and witches.
Nice story! Amusing,and I felt glad that Snape at least got to enjoy some pleasant dreams.
Summary: Could Snape’s worst memory be eclipsed by his best? All he ever wanted was to love and be loved by her. Severus finally gets the chance when he and Lily say their last goodbye. This is how it should have happened.
I liked it. I thought they were both in character, and the scene was quite believable, and sad.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. <3
Summary: Severus waits alone in a park to make the ultimate choice - Voldemort or Love? But, of course, Severus can decide only when he gets there first.
I thank my LJ pals for their love, support and sense of humour.
DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling; she would be mortified if she read this.
Not a bad read, but no, I don't support this ship either.
Author's Response: Hahaha!
Summary: HP/SS SLASH Severus Snape is summoned by the Dark Lord for the second time in one night. Harry Potter asks for the impossible and then has to deal with the consequences. A tale of two lovers parting and the events that follow. AU after OotP, but with some elements from the last two books.
This is a good story, but when I chose to read a HP/SS story, what I really wanted to know was how the hell those two ended up together. You covered that some in the last chapter, when Harry thinks about what he loved about Shape, and that was good. I would have liked more of that, and earlier in the story. Understanding more about his feelings for Snape would have made his grief more moving to me, as I would have felt his loss myself. Hope this helps and doesn't offend. I think you're a good writer, otherwise I wouldn't have bothered. Feel free to comment on any of my stories.
*These are the times that try men's souls.
Well, that couldn't be any more real for Draco Malfoy than on the eve of his wedding. He was getting married the next day, but all he could think about is how his life was about to become so much more damned complicated.
He had no idea.
*Quote - Thomas Paine, American revolutionary.
This fic was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Humour
So, no happy ending for Draco. He seems the same as before-- as in canon, I mean--, not much more mature and no wiser. He pretty much got what he deserved, though I found myself hoping he would learn something, be enlightened a little about life and people, and about himself. I would have liked to know more about Astoria, too. Not sure why she has all the power in this relationship. Doesn't her family need the Malfoys as much as Draco's family needs them?
One detail I really liked was the tradition of the bride and groom entering from opposite sides of the room and meeting together in the middle. I've always thought weddings should be that way-- symbolically, it makes more sense. These days, women are independent and free to marry whomever they choose. They aren't handed over from their fathers to their new husbands. That's so archaic.
I think, of everything in this fic, I angsted the most over the wedding ceremonies. I knew they would have to be different from Muggle weddings, but not unrecognisably so (both had to have similar roots, so they should at least be derivatives of one another). The idea for that I ended up scrapping was that the bride and groom had to pass through a people!tunnel of the other's kin and friends, so if any of them felt the bride or groom was unworthy, they could stop them physically. Then I realised that I got the idea from a Klingon rite of passage from an episode of Star Trek and went a less obscure route.
I will defend my characterisation of Draco because of his age. In this, he's 22. By now, he would have had the chance to be more complacent about his family's place after the war but still understanding that marrying into a respected family was still something he had to do, whether he wanted to or not. It isn't so much an arranged marriage more than the accepted inevitability of one he might not have chosen for himself under different circumstances. And after all, once a git, always a git. Draco couldn't lose all that in a few short years, no matter what happened to him. Plus, it's a humour story, so if it didn't have levity at the expense of someone who has deserved comeuppance on several occasions, then I wouldn't be doing it right.
As for Astoria, my head canon is that the Greengrasses are a well-connected family, but they have difficulty finding a good match for Astoria because she is a wilful wild child. Fortunately for the, the Malfoys are desperate and the Greengrasses can look past some unfortunate past alliances (their words, not mine) to hopefully settle down their rambunctious youngest daughter. However, as this story is more about Draco and the ridiculousness he faced during the wedding preparations, that backstory didn't have much place in the story and would've felt extraneous. The ending is as it is because Draco doesn't know her that well and was a bit gobsmacked at how forceful she is, plus the fact that he knows that if she divorces him, it will look very bad for his family. But, as I said...humour fic. Not very happy trimmings for this particular cake.
Anyway, thanks for reading. :)
Summary: Before she became a Death Eater, Bellatrix Black was young, bored, and went slumming places no other pureblood would go. What she found and who she met was kept secret. Until now.
You've taken on a challenge with a protagonist who is so despicable in the HP stories. She seems interesting, and I like the story so far.
Author's Response: Believe it or not, Bella is one of my favorite characters. I found the actress who portrayed the evil Bella to be so beautiful and when I think of Bellatrix that's who I see. It is hard to write her as a halfway decent person but I'm going under the premise that she started out as a regular person but a big tragedy befalls her and she turns dark. So she has her Slytherin qualities and the pureblood family background but something had to cause her turn for the worse. That's the point of my story--to explain what went so wrong in her life.
Gabe is an interesting character.
Author's Response: I was so excited to see your reviews. It seems I get a lot of readers but not many reviews. Gabe is mdeled after my son--with some extraordinary talents added. I'm trying to write how I think he'd react to these many situations. I hope I'm not too far off the mark:D
She seems pretty rebellious all right, and doesn't give a crap what anyone thinks of her, except maybe Gabe. Good.
Author's Response: Gabe started out to be her rebellion but you have to ask what's going on with that. She seems more concerned about protecting him and doesn't flaunt him in her family's face which you'd think she would do if she wants them to know she's rebelling. I mean, what fun is rebellion if no one knows about it.
Tom sure sounds like a Nazi.
Author's Response: I guess I've always seen the Death Eaters as Nazis. I couldn't resist making the comparison. At this point Tom is a handsome young man and he's charismatic. He's trying to bring people into his cause and the purebloods are flocking to him, buying all of his propaganda. I think that's what Hitler did. He didn't start out well known and wealthy. He had to sell his ideas. Some people need someone or something to blame their problems on; for Hitler it was the Jews and for Tom it was non-purebloods.
Gabe is too good for Bella. I wonder what will happen when she tires of toying with him. Maybe she'll be sorry. She may end up actually falling in love with him.
Author's Response: He is too good for her. And, he's an innocent victim and very vulnerable right now. Bella pursued him from the start, more or less as a challenge. She heard someone else talk about him and she decided to play the game and win. You have to wonder how deep her feelings go. Would a pureblood Black really fall for an American Muggle. All I can say is God bless both of them. It would be nice though if this story has a happy ending. Bella is such an intense person and she experiences all of her emotions more than others do.
Sorry to hear about your troubles, Fynnsmom. Hope things are better now. I'm curious about what will happen next in the story, but now I have to wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: One thing I've discovered over time is that whenever you lose hope, something wonderful will always happen to bring that hope back. I really shouldn't complain about things because it all adds to my life experiences. Anyway, I have the next chapter written but it needs editing by me and then my beta friend. I hope to get that chapter up shortly after Thanksgiving. After that crazy, exciting things start to happen in the story. It's time to bring the story to its high point and then watch it crash. Finally, we will have a last flash of hope in the epilogue.
Finally! I'm glad I decided to check and see if you updated this story. Sounds like Gabe and Bella are having a good time. The plot thickens...
Author's Response: I never expect to have reviews so I don't look at my chapters very often--pitiful. Anyway, many thanks for the review. This could be one of the last good times Gabe and Bella have. Things are getting more tense in the wizarding world. If Gabe knew I think he could handle it but Bella--I don't know. I need to get to writing. My real life keeps getting in the way. But, hang on, the exciting stuff is coming up next.
“Lord Voldemort has never had a friend, nor do I believe that he has ever wanted one.”
-Dumbledore, HBP, ch 13
Dumbledore was rarely wrong, only once did Lord Voldemort desire a friend. It started out as only a game, but became so much more…
This is the story of how the teenaged Tom Riddle met a unique individual and slipped from cold indifference, to affection, to friendship, to romance. Discover how even Voldemort’s cold and callow heart was once broken beyond repair. This is for anyone curious about how an imperfect love warped and twisted a corrupt young man into the Dark Lord.
This was some long and complex story. Well done, especially for taking on the challenge of showing us the thoughts and feeling of Tom/LV. For me, you could have left out the song lyrics you so painstakingly included. I didn't bother trying to read them, and anyway, Lydia explained what they meant. Perhaps if you more fully described how the song sounded, that would have done more for me. Your characterization of Tom was good, I thought. Quite appropriate that he was so arrogant and self centered that he just assumed that Lydia would wait for him, and would be glad to be his queen, though he never discussed his plans with her. To me it seemed wrong, though, that he whispered "I love you" to her dead body. I don't believe he would have done that. Lydia was a good character, and I understood why she fell for him. Unfortunately, I don't recall who Hestia Prince was, so I'll have to look through the books again to figure out the significance of her. Anyway, good job. Write more.
Author's Response: Thanks! Hopefully you find that the plot will continue to thicken. :)
Summary: Pansy Parkinson’s carefree world was toppled when she overheard her father’s murder and caught a glimpse of the killer. Forced into hiding by the Ministry, she is compelled to co-habitate with, of all the bloody people on the planet, Harry Potter. Can these two live together in cramped quarters without there being another murder, or can they find common ground that had eluded them since they last encountered one another?
Good story. You did a good job of creating Pansy's character pretty much from scratch. She was believable, and easiet to sympathise with than in canon, though I didn't find her all that likable. Harry's break-up with Ginny seems like real life, and I didn't mind him shagging Pansy too much, though it seems obvious to me that their relationship won't last long. Personally, I think she isn't good enough for him.
Well, reviews for this story are generally unexpected, so hello!
I'm glad you understood Pansy in ways that canon wouldn't allow. If you think about it, Jo did rather demonise the Slytherins throughout the series, and many are hard on Pansy for wanting to turn Harry over and keep a bunch of people from dying. If Harry had known what would happen in the battle and that he was meant to die all along, he would've happily gone when she pointed him out in the first place.
Really, Pansy isn't terribly likeable, but deep down, she isn't a bad person so much as someone who's not had the best of priorities. I think Harry was surprised to find that she wasn't as awful as he thought she was, just as much as she didn't think she would like Harry as a person at all (considering she'd barely spoken to him in her life yet spoke *about* him at great length).
I think Harry is one of those people who needs someone to keep him anchored. During school, it was Ron and Hermione who kept him grounded and gave him the ability to work through all the crap that happened to him. But as they move on with their lives and if Ginny just didn't have the time to be there every time Harry needed to remember who he was and where he was going, Harry could very well slip in a self-absorbed wangst coma like he did in OotP. Pansy just lit a fire under his butt, lol.
No, I don't think they'd last, which is why I ended the story where I did. It was just fun to see Harry come to life because of someone completely odd and unexpected. Maybe it's something they both need: Harry needs to start feeling again, and Pansy needs to care about someone other than herself.
Anyway, thanks for the visit. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :)
Summary: Frank had hoped that his and Alice's first Christmas together would have just a little more hope and cheer than this.
Second Place Winner for the Great Hall-iday Challenge of 2011, for the prompt "Christmas at Ground Zero."
Nice story. I liked your Frank and Alice. Hope you'll write more stories about them.
Summary: Dean Thomas slaves hard in the Department of Magical Sports and Games (or rather he doodles on his blotter and ignores his ever expanding in tray). But the work is deathly dull, until one day his boss hands him a pair of tickets for the Appleby Arrows V Holyhead Harpies game.
He's delighted to be going until he realises that Ginny Weasley will be flying.
For although she's now single, Dean isn't sure they can ever go back.
Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. For one thing I've disregarded her epilogue - ooopsie
Thank you, thank you, to mah flist, especially Kara who has listened to me moan, Natalie who urged me to write Dean!Smut, Alex for commiserating with spiralling word counts, Emmah for 'langered' and Jess for cheerleading.
This is that annoying Equinox person writing her eighth story for the GH Cotillion thingie. *wibble*
To my utter delight and complete surprise, this story won Best Chaptered Story in the 2012 QSQ's ~ Non-Canon Romance.
Nice story! I liked how you portrayed the characters of Ginny and Dean. It seemed like it could have happened that way.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I tend to be pretty much canon bound but this challenged me. Glad you liked it. ~Carole~
Michael Corner muses on his short-lived relationship with Daphne Greengrass.
Originally a drabble written for the amazing Jess/ToBeOrNotToBe…in the SBBC's Musical Drabble Exchange. It was based off the song "Ain't that a B*tch" by Aerosmith and the title is taken from the lyrics of that song.
A big thank you to Natalie, the impeccably wonderful beta for this in its drabble form.
Winner of the 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Non-Canon Romance.
Good story. I don't really remember these characters, but you made them seem real. Also, this story isn't too deeply embedded into Potterverse, so you could easily make it a non-fan fiction story if you wanted to.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I like working with minor characters, because it gives me more leeway :). I'd like to write something non-fanfiction in the future, and maybe if I add a few more things to spice it up this could be one. Thank you again! xx Ariana
Summary: Things were never what they seemed to be.Written for the lovely Gmariam/Gina whose J/L fics make my knees go weak :)
Whoa! When the summary said things aren't what they seem, I thought it would be Polyjuice Potion or something. The Dark Lord felt what? I'll have to think about that a bit.
Author's Response: Ha! This was just a joke to amuse myself and friends. :)
She was the first to accept me for who I was, Muggle father and all. The teachers didn’t count. Dumbledore accepted me out of duty; Slughorn accepted me for his own personal gain. She accepted me out of love.
Would you have been any different if you had had your world ripped apart and your heart shattered until there was nothing left to love with?
This is a story about a boy and a decision that he regretted. A decision he had made a few times before. Tom Riddle made the decision to say so many times those words that would eventually be his downfall.
I liked this story. You portray Tom accurately, I think, and I believed he could have such feelings for this girl. The ending was good, and made sense for his character, but I felt that it came a bit too soon. I would have liked the story to be longer and more fully developed in the middle.
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I definitely agree that it could've used some development but I wasn't (and still am not really) very good at that kind of thing, and I think most people would prefer concision to unnecessary filler in the middle. Thank you for your review on this old thing though, glad to see it's still being read!