hey, i'm sara, and i just adore harry potter! all seven books in the series are exquisite, and the fanfiction is generally pretty awesome too! some other favorite books of mine include: lord of the rings, pride and prejudice, wheel of time series, any books by shannon hale, terry pratchett, gerald morris or l.a. meyer, and many others that i'm inconveniently forgetting...
so, now that you know a little bit more about moi, i'll end by saying this little tid-bit: i love to read, i love to write and i love reviews. the three "r's". so how about i write, and you guys read and review, yes? great! oh, but please don't get angry at the three-month long gaps in between updates...
well, this story, in my opinion, needs some work. the sentences are all just about the same length and they don't flow together very well, and they are lacking in description. also, you have your tenses mixed up in a lot of places, switching from "is" to "was" and back again, which makes it kind of confusing to read. one other thing is this: when james, sirius, remus and peter walk into the compartment, you say "at that exact moment james potter and three other boys waltzed right through the door." how did they know right away who james was and not the other boys? and then, when james introduces himself, he says "hi" right after you descrbe peter, so it seems like peter is introducing himself as james. anyway, i don't mean to be really mean or anything, cause i know that no one likes to have their story corrected, but i know i want reviews even from people who don't like my story. so, keep up the good work, i'd suggest a beta reader, but until then, keep on writing!
Author's Response: thanks, i\'ll try to be more careful
i'm not a very good jucge of poetry, but i daresay i liked this one! good job, i'm a huge fan of lily/james and this was very sweet. i can't wait to read more of your writings!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love Lily/James, too.
awwwww, this is so sweet! i don't think i've read a molly/arthur fic before, and this was very good, how i imagined it would be. nice job!
very good job! you captured merope's emotions very well, really showed how she was feeling and the despair she was in. this is the first fic i've read with merope in it/narrating it, and it was very well done. great job!
Author's Response: thanks! I hope there are more fics with Merope soon! Glad you liked this!
this was great! short and sweet, and very well written. i really liked the relationship that remus and sirius had with regulus, they weren't all mean with each other, which was very original. great job, i look forward to reading more things from you!
wow. just, wow. that was very powerful. not too many details or chatacters or confusing plot twists, just simple and emotional. very good job, this is wonderfully written.
Author's Response: Thank you! *is getting teary eyed from all the good reviews*
wow! interesting start, very intriguing; it makes me want to know the whole story. good job, update soon!
hahaha, oh my gosh, i loved this! it showed really well james feelings of transiton and shock towards lily and then also why he was attracted to her. the ending was comical, and the story as a whole was well written. great job! :)
Author's Response: Thank you uberly! <3
squee! i love it! excellently written, very believable, very fun! great job.
oh god...that was sad! very good portrayal of both characters, and it's a very believable version of what might have happened. i like your writing style, too. simple but powerful, and you really get the feeling of the story through with not that many words. great job, this deserves to be in the featured!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m glad you enjoyed it! I\'ve always wondered what happened between the Founders when Salazar left. I never imagined that he just slipped away silently into the night. I\'ve always thought there had to be some kind of final confrontation. I\'m glad you liked my version of this. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
hehehe, very good job! i love your writing style and characters, and it was a very comical ending. i for one think that a sequel would be an excellent idea! just one tip: watch your spelling and grammar; for instance, here you say "remus was too nice either" which doesn't make sense, and there were a few spelling errors in there as well. otherwise, great job!
Author's Response: Yes, this story was definitely imperfect, but hey, I\'m only human. With humanity comes impatience, and I just couldn\'t wait for my beta to finish her vacation.
excellent chapter! i'm liking the developments between snape and hermione, and their characterization is wonderful. great job once again!
Author's Response: thank you!!!
oh. my. good. lord. above. you have to update! i just got hooked on this story and i am already addicted. i love the plot and the characters, although sometimes it's a litle hard to believe that hermione and snape keep encountering each other in all of their little mishaps--for instance, that snape happened to find hermione in the forbidden forest. otherwise, though, it's quite well written. i can't wait for the next chapter! great job.
Author's Response: oh yeah i forgot to explain that a little farther...hm, will do in the next chapter though. thanks for bringing that to my attention! and thanks for reading!!
great chapter! one of my favorite parts was when you showed how snape struggled with himself when hermione was being tortured, and i thought, "oh he's in love with her!" and then he made the excuse that he was just saving her life because she had saved his. hmm. some very interesting character developemets with frend and snape and hermione--an animagus! wow! oops, i hope i didn't give too much away in that review...anyway, great job, i love your writing style, the plot is flowing and wonderful, so, on to the next chapter!!
Author's Response: wow great review! thank you so much! the inner struggles of snape are probably the most fun to write :D
oh, wow. wow wow wow wow wow !!!!! that was an amazing chapter! it took me like ten minutes to read, it was so long! and i love snape!!! hehe, great chapter!
Author's Response: i do what i can :D thanks for reading!
oooh, absolutely delicious! *squirms and giggles happily* i love the anger between hermione and snape, and the terrifying danger they're in adds a lot of tension as well. i like your characterization, and also i love snape's darcy-esque manner of falling love. wonderful story, i can't wait for the update!
Author's Response: thank you! i\'m glad it went over well! (i didn\'t mean to make snape darcy-esque. oops, oh well)
aww, this is sweet and cute. it's well written and, while not too original, not clichéd either. good job, i really like your writing style. this was very good!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I appreciate your opinion. I\'m currently working on two uber original stories, but I don\'t know if they\'ll make here. I\'ll try though.
aww, this was very sweet! i must say though, i think having the ending as coming out of a pensieve memory kind of ruined the whole image for me. otherwise, though, the story was cute and comical. great job!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yes, I was afraid this would ruin the story for some people, but for others, it makes the story. So I decided to keep that specific ending in there. I\'m sure it\'s not for everyone, but I\'m glad you enjoyed the majority of it.
well, i must say, that while this wasn't phenomenal, it was fairly good! one problem was that it didn't really have a point; it was just kind of...random. it was well written though, and i like the last few paragraphs especially; they were clever and sweet. over all, a pretty good read! good job.
Author's Response: Yeah, it is kind of random, I know. I\'ve never written James/Lily before, but this idea kind of popped into my head that maybe there was a slow progression to them getting together before seventh year, that maybe something struck a chord with Lily that James wasn\'t just a marauding jokster who was hex-happy. I thought the train was a perfect place for her to start dawning on that.
Thank you for reviewing!
i love this! very sweet and fluffy, and i love the ending. great job, i like your writing style too. very cute!