Hi, I am 'TheLoonyHermione'.
I love to sing and play guitar. Some of my favorite bands/singers are: The Head and the Heart, Gotye, Taylor Swift, James Taylor, and The Beatles.
And, obviously, I like to write. Harry Potter fanfics are mostly what I write, but I have other stories and fanfics as well - I have one that I'm doing on my own about a boy who lost his best friend, his dog; 3 HP fanfics by myself and 3 with a friend; One Hunger Games Fanfic by myself, one with a friend; and one Warriors fanfic with a friend. I also enjoy writing plays that me and some friends 'star' in.
I'm American but can do a fairly good British accent (I wish I was British...waah) and once someone asked me and my friend which part of the UK we were from...haha!
My favorite books/series are: Harry Potter (duh), the Percy Jackson series (although I found the movie horrendous), and The Hunger Games (I am currently obsessed).
My top 3 favorite sports are: 1. Tennis!! 2. Swimming (if you count that as a sport) 3. Softball (I'm a pitcher :))
My top 3 favorite HP characters are: 1. Neville!!!! Extremely cute!!! Even cuter in the movies!!! 2. Hermione!! I have been told that I sound like her (while speaking in a British accent), that I have the same personality as her (I do, however, think that I am more loud and rule-breaking, and also not quite as obnoxious), and even once that I look like her (which I seriously doubt, and I seriously thought the person who said that was insane). 3. Uh....can't pick between these guys...Lupin, Tonks, Snape, Sirius, Dumbledore, and Luna. There may be more, but I can't think of them at the moment...
My BFFLE is Kreacher Feacher!! She's amazingly loony, and I think you should read her stories!!
Guess what? I also love reviews!
AAAAAH!!! OH MY GOSH I LOVED THIS!!! SHE KISSED HIM! SHE KISSED HIM!!!! AAAAH!!!!
Author's Response: :-D Thanks :-D
I really liked this and it's really good for your first poem! I am a new poet myself and I think you should keep going with poetry! I can almost imagine this being a song, it has that sort of rhythm to it.
Awww, I loved it! This was good! At first I thought it was going to be a neville/Luna, which I wish would have happened, but your version of Rolf made me like Luna/Rolf more. But the second-to-last paragraph did make me sad. I do like how you made Luna call Xenophilius 'daddy'. I think that's cute and very fitting. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I can never personally think of Neville/Luna like the movies imply; I'm stuck in my mental state of canon (Neville/Hannah, Luna/Rolf)!
Wow, this was really good. I thought you captured Molly perfectly, and the part about Andromeda was really sad. I'm sure that was the emotion you were trying to get across, though, so great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. ~ Megan
Wow! Way to leave me in suspense! I can't wait for the next chapter! And, for a few spelling errors:
I don't know if you meant to do this or not, but in your first sentence, you capitalized 'Breakfast'.
"And know you're finally speaking sense!" Audrey said happily, clapping her hands. This should be now, not know.
This was very good and kept me hanging. I can't wait to see what will happen next!
Author's Response: Thanks for the nitpick; I corrected them! And I'm glad you liked the story. :D I'm writing the second chapter right now, so I hope I'll be able to update soon.Thank you for the review!
Oh my gosh! This was awesome, and congrats on it being your first story! You had me nearly in tears one moment, and laughing the next. I've always loved Neville/Luna, and you should definitely write more with them. I'll be sure to read it.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I like Neville/Luna too, and initially I was annoyed with JKR for saying they didn't get married, although I've come to feel that Luna was probably really meant for somebody as weird as she is, and Neville just isn't.
Failure: fail·ure: a fracturing or giving way under stress, a falling short.
Hermione has faced a boggart before. The problem is, she didn't succeed.
This is Padfoot11333 of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Mini-Challenge: The Boggart Challenge.
IT WON--alongside Gmariam's Afraid of the Dark. I am shocked.
Nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill - Best Dark/Angst.
I really like the idea of this story and I think you write Hermione well. You really captured her worst fear in this story, more than just the dread of a third-year girl. Your writing style is unique but enjoyable.
I have a bit of crit, but who doesn't love it if it's constructive?
'(I am six yours old and work is what Dad...' This was a bit confusing because it wasn't in italics like the rest of the flashback, and I think that, if it were me, a good way to make it less confusing would be to change the tenses so that the flashbacks were in past tense and the current times in present. Not somehthing, I'm pushing you to do (because I don't have the power to do that anyway), but just a suggestion.
'I let him hold my hand.' This isn't crit, but I just loved this line. It was simple and gave you a very happy image. :) good job!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate all the compliments, particularly on the characterisation. That's something that I always struggle with.
Slide on in and kick off your shoes. Celestina’s Songbook is back! Here are the hits of the summer season, brought to you by the authors of MNFF.
OMG, I'm sorry but I hate this song (no offense), but this was hilarious!! I loved the reference to Simon Cowell!!
Author's Response: yes, i was struggling with a rhyme with owl - hahahaha. Oh, I love the song. It's so catchy and baaad, that it has to be celebrated. I was on holiday in USA this summer and it became our anthem - ha. Thank you. ~Carole~
This was just beautiful. :) Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it :)
This was really good and I can't wait to read what happens next! Your characterization is really nice, and your writing style easy to read. :) Adding to my favorites so that I can see when it's updated!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Hey, Georgia and Nagini! I’m glad to have read your story, it was very nice that you two wrote this together.
The beginning of it did open fairly quickly, but this could be changed by possibly adding a sort of opening sentence before what you have as a starter now. It’s not absolutely necessary to change this, though - just something I noticed. The writing was fairly easy to read and quick, but just slightly choppy. It was hardly noticeable, though, so there’s not too much to worry about. The ending was cute and sweet, leaving you with a nice feeling.
There weren’t many grammatical mistakes at all, but there were a few things I’d like to point out. I like the cute baby words but they seem to be a bit exaggerated in spots - babies can sometimes use the right words. Another thing I was a bit confused about was you using the word 'babysitting' - Ron is Hugo’s father, so this term doesn't really seem correct. You should probably say something about or explain why Ron has never been in charge of his second child by himself before now. Your slight humor throughout the story was something that I really enjoyed, it added something new to the story.
I really enjoyed the whole idea of Ron reading his baby a story, and straying towards the magical kind that Hermione didn't normally read him. Something I'd really like to know how old Hugo is - this would clear up a lot of questions I had about him and make things more clear. If you simply mentioned it in a point in the story, it would be better. I really liked the idea of the sticker - I never would have thought of that but it is very plausible.
Hugo did seem to be the typically written baby with the voice - I think this could be cleared up by him either not talking as much or talking a bit more, depending on where you are going with his age, as I’ve asked about before. The repetition was cute but got old after a while - maybe, if he's a bit older, he could ask questions about the story. I also enjoyed Ron and Hermione's squabbles, they were very realistic and added a nice touch to the story.
Thanks for giving me this pleasant read, both of you!
Warning is due to mentions of CD.
I was really glad to have read this story, for I saw the summary and expected complete D/A, though it wasn’t even categorized as this and it wasn’t completely. This set it apart from many other stories, because there have been so many about this loss and because of this, it is important to make a story on this topic your own. You did this very well.
I love the metaphors you used, they’re almost haunting and fit the mood perfectly. You describe things in fantastic detail that allows me to have images going through my mind as I read. Sometimes this doesn’t work as well, but here it’s great. I especially liked the description of the characters, and the cemetery was amazing as well. It’s almost like you’re characterizing an object, a place, and describing it. Something else I really enjoyed how you don’t call everyone by their name, or call them something different every time. It really helps so that we don’t get sick of hearing one character’s name.
The characterization of Molly is spot-on, even though we don’t see many stories focused on her. I really enjoyed the relationship that you’ve portrayed with Angelina and George - it suits what we’ve seen of Angelina so well, and George too. Your description of how people feel in loss is spot-on - at least, it’s exactly how I have felt, in the case of loss. This just made the story much more connectable and realistic.
I enjoyed the level of your vocabulary that you used - it’s slightly advanced, but not too much so. You did have a couple of SPaG errors, but they didn’t draw away from the story too much. Just giving it a read-through, or having someone else do so, would make it better.
“And Ginny's -- her beautiful, nothing-but-brave daughter, who bounced the semi-placated Teddy in her arms, Harry standing close behind.” This sentence bothered me slightly - it almost sounds like Molly is insulting Ginny by saying that she’s ‘nothing but brave’. Possibly change this to something like ‘oh so brave daughter’ or something of that sort, to make sure your readers know whether or not you’re trying to say something good about Ginny or not.
I enjoyed how you had the addition of Bill and Fleur’s child - it made it so that it wasn’t just George’s story. Another thing I loved was how Angelina came in, I wasn’t expecting her but it was a nice surprise. It gave us that little light, the little flicker of hope and romance, in a dark place. I liked the differences that Angelina pointed out between George and Fred, it is probably something not many of us would have thought of. I certainly haven’t, and it made me see both of them in a new light.
“The little dash separating two dates.” I swear, this sentence gave me chills and I had to read it over again. I don’t know if you created this, but I’ve never heard it before and it is fantastic.
I feel like your story gives us the message that, however well - or not - we may get over it, a loss will always stay with us. The snippet from the background of Angelina’s relationship with George was perfect. The little joke at the end made it all a bit resolved and happier, so that you didn’t leave us with a completely depressed feeling.
Thank you so much for writing this, and putting it out there so that people could read it. I enjoyed reading it, and reviewing as well and hope that this makes you feel good about your story. I’m glad that I clicked on the title! Great job again ~
Author's Response: I'm not even sure how to respond to such a thorough review. I really appreciate you taking the time to leave this, it was wonderful to read your thoughts.
Loss is so strange to write about, I think, because almost every one has experienced it to a degree and experienced it differently. It's hard to pinpoint feelings on the topic, so I would say I am pleased that you found it connectable in that regard, but that feels crude to me as I'm sorry that you had to experience it enough to have an opinion on it in the first place.
About the 'dash separating two dates' comment -- I think it is so interesting you found it to be fantastic. I remember the first funeral I ever attended, the person giving the eulogy said something along the line of how we are all so much more than the dash that represents our lives. It was ages ago, but it always stuck with me because I thought it was so very true and wonderful in a way. So I can't take credit for it, but I'm glad it seemed to give you the same feeling it gave me when I first heard it.
Thanks for suggestion on the 'nothing but brave' line, I never would have thought of it that way until you mentioned it, but I think you are right. I will also keep an eye out for the SPaG errors, as I know my mind gets ahead of my fingers way too often.
Thank you again for such an extensive review. It made my day that you took the time to leave it, and particularly that you said you were glad you clicked the title. That's really the best thing you can hear about something you write.
This was so adorable and sad and cute and sweet at the same time... aww :')
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. :)