Summary: Harry's sixth year; the burden of the prophecy, the grief over the loss of Sirius, the wizarding war, blossoming romances, the new Quidditch Captain, Weasley family drama - and that's just part of it.
Bad you! Taking away both of Harry's girls - well, the two I see as his girls, anyway. I guess you had a reason to, I just can't see it right now... Damn, I'm close to tears here. Please post more chapters soon - and they better have something positive for Harry in them! /A very sad Fantasium
All's fair in love and war
Lily thinks herself too clever to fall for James Potters charm. Yet, as the two of them are appointed Head Boy and Girl, will Lily regret her negative feelings towards James? Pre-HBP
Chapter 12 was a bit wierd - I recognize your storytelling better in this chapter. :) And I notice that I've started commenting regularly - I don't usually do that, just the one comment for the whole story - but this is different.
Ah, but COME ON Prongs! (I don't know what's gotten into me, I would normally do more serious reviews...) He simply MUST come to his senses - I mean, it's LILY for Merlin's sake! :) And please, keep the chapters coming, fast! /Fantasium - badly addicted
No quote this time - I can't quote the whole chapter, can I? :) Sirius is just the best. Not to appear to be one of his fan club, but can I please date him? Please? Anyway, I'm really looking forward to next chapter, you take the gang out of Hogwarts with such confidence - I love it!
Right, this is my choice: " "I'll kill them Malfoy. I'll kill them all. I'll kill you if you hurt her in any way," James said. Malfoy slammed her head against the wall at the precise moment that something erupted inside James. Power, power beyond belief. "AVADA KEDAVRA!" he screamed. The shack glowed in luminescent green light and three nameless Death Eaters were lying sprawled out on the floor. " - So much for not hurting a fly, eh? Well written as ever, and I'm impatient for more chapters as ever! :)
I can't help smiling a bit... This is good stuff, I can tell already. And I like to see someone who knows HP in and out - obviosly you do because I haven't found a single mistake - something which can be SO annyoing when reading ff, at least if you suffer from Perfectionism like me. :) Enough of this now, on to the next chapter!
Author's Response: well, i happen to be reading HP series once again for like the 50th time. Does that tell you how much i can be a HP perfectionist as well? i try to stay true to the books. i am sure there are mistakes but i am glad you can overlook them!
The quote is, without a doubt:
"“We threatened him,” Sirius said. “It may not look it to you, but you’re dating a dangerous man, Addison McKinnon.”
“If looks really were the substance of judgment, dangerous would not be the first thing to come to mind,” Addison said.
“It would be sexy animal, wouldn’t it?” Sirius asked cockily, winking at her.
“Psycho is the word that sprung out to me,” she said, smiling."
I'm really happy about the huge amount of Sirius you're giving us at the moment - he happens to be my absolute favourite Maradeur (or character at all, actually). More chapters sooner - that's the way we like it! :)
Author's Response: James happens to be my favorite Marauder as I find his and Lily's relationship fascinating. So many people have done different aspects as to how they could have gotten together. Yet, undeniably, Sirius is my favorite to write.
I must say you're all happy now about the amount of Sirius, but I have a feeling my readers are going to hate me soon. I've gotten some bad reactions recently regarding this story. Yet, it's still my favorite to write. Trust me, there's plenty more of Sirius to go around. When I get a little more reviews I'll submit the next chapter. Thanks for your review.
I haven't reviewed for a while, barely had time to read the chapters but I do enjoy your stories and I hope I'll have some more time from now on. Alright, I'll try on this favourite quote thing. I think I like... this one best: " "James Potter, the son of two of the finest Aurors around, great-great-grandson of the third previous Headmaster of Hogwarts, thinks he is going to kill someone? You wouldn't hurt a fly, Potter," Malfoy said. "Ever heard of a bad seed?" James asked. " Now I'm waiting for another great chapter!
Sitting here, nodding approvingly. Very good chapter! You write such good dialouges, I loose myself in them! Especially when there's lots of emotions in them, you never over do it, you get it just right. Wonderful. Ah, I must get back to reading now! :)
Here comes the quote, to start with: "I refuse to participate in any of this mindless babble any longer. I think there’s something seriously wrong with you. Don’t you mean Sirius-ly? Do you want me to Sirius-ly hurt you?" The reason I really like that one is because we keep doing the same joke at home (my dog is called Sirius), always ending up in total confusion. :) Anyway, nice chapter as ever, and James is just so totally right about Snape. Hope you're a little bit happier now - keep the fab chapters coming!
I'm really enjoying the story so far, and I'm finally about to read Chapter 11 - I've got high expectations after your hints! :)
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He-hee, this is where I step on the brake again. Bad habit of mine, this quick reading. Not that it’s solely my fault – if the story wasn’t so captivating... I can honestly say I’ve pushed that idea with the teasing one-shots to the side by now, and it’s the chapters alone that have got me hooked.
I’ve already mentioned enjoying your style, but oh, dear Merlin, I love the humorous part of your writing! From this chapter, the whole scene with Luna floating in to the compartment, from when she almost sat on Harry, until she kissed his cheek and left, was just perfect. This impresses me so much, because humour (well, along with a lot of other things) is what I cannot write myself. An opportunity might pop up very rarely when I try to work, but you can keep it going for chapters and paragraphs without going over the top at all. Not only do I grin a little – I actually laugh. I just have to throw in a favourite quote: ‘ “O, the hilarity!” laughed Ron. “Ha ha. She’ll settle for you!” ’ - most entertaining. :)
And grrr, why must brilliant writers keep doing this to me? Aswhinder, Maeve, and yourself – it’s really rather difficult to keep my secret Harry/Ginny shipper self, well, secret the way you go about. No, seriously, I normally enjoy reading this relationship more in General than Romance fics, where it will only serve as part of something bigger. I think you’ve got it on a very nice level here, nothing disturbing but still a good treat for readers in general and shippers *looking innocent* in particular. Bonus for not just skipping past the Dean thing, as I’ve seen too many authors do.
I think you’ve got such an intelligent and thought-through approach on the brain issue, very original and believable. We know from canon that Ron has these problems, and it adds further to your already very nice characterization when you spin the brain matter along that line.
As I’ve somehow babbled my way onto the characters, let’s go there. I think you captivated Ron so nicely in one single sentence: ‘ He obviously enjoyed knowing what was going on, but still had no clue.’. I’m not a member of the group who dislikes Ron, but even less of the people who put him down as overly intelligent. You’ve given us a nice excuse for him to connect with his emotions a little, but still you keep most of his old self. All very well and dandy! :)
Ginny – I mentioned in the last review that I like how you write her, and that liking has only increased. There was one line of dialogue that was just spot on to me: ‘ “Like we’d risk your displeasure,” smiled Ginny.’. Clearly, simply – Ginny.
I see that you’ve got a sort of ‘sharper’ Mrs Weasley than many other fanfiction writers. I don’t really have a preference here, but ‘your Molly’ certainly serves her purpose with the way you’ve chosen to portrait the teenagers, and that’s what’s important to me when reading. I certainly like how she’s taking to Hermione as a potential daughter in law, and how she was diverted by Ginny’s girl stuff. And oh, I really like the idea that she goes ‘mushy’ over Ginny’s boyfriends, instead of being over-protective and meddling as in so many other fanfics.
And Malfoy Senior is out of the picture… at the moment? (And this is becoming really rather worrying; I found myself wondering what Jenna thought of you killing him off so unceremoniously…) I’ll be interested to learn more about the circumstances around his death.
Well, to be a bit more useful one of a reviewer – things are moving forwards so nicely, you’ve got my mind on edge wondering how the plot will twist and turn. And now I’ve definitely been reviewing for too long, when I could have spent that time reading!.
Right. Having no control of myself I’ve raced and read right through to chapter nine almost in one go, without leaving as much as a line of a review. Bad me. But now I’ve managed to stop myself, and I will try to put something together.
First of all, this is not my first attempt to read your sixth year story, I’ve read chapter one a couple of times before, but I my mind was already confused by three stories around Harry’s sixth year that I was already reading, so I left yours for the future. I will not lie about what brought me here now. I’ve heard such nice things said about your OC, that I of course want to read her. But I decided that I wasn’t going to cheat and jump straight to the one-shots, but read Harry’s Sixth Year first. And my, am I glad I made that decision!
It’s obviously interesting to be reading this story after having read HBP, plus the fact that I’ve begun my actual reading after this story is completed. Every chapter has already got several reviews, most of which are pointing out things I might have done myself if the story was a WIP. So, at this point I will try not to point out the same things as many others, which will probably lead to me being a little more general.
First of all, your writing style. For the first two chapters, I was a little lost. I’m normally a sucker for long, very detailed chapters like the ones Magical Maeve delivers, and I had an undefined feeling that something was missing. But right about where Harry walks downstairs and lets go of his very amusing line, ‘ “Well, I decided to move into the kitchen, you see-” ’, I had become very comfortable with your way of writing. I’m almost surprised how much I like it, and it’s nice to finally see evidence of what people and textbook says – that being economical with the words often serves a story better than over-detailing or over-describing things.
I would normally like slightly longer chapters (otherwise I’ll just run through to chapter nine in my delight, ehrm...), but at the same time I don’t know if I’ve ever read another fanfiction writer who makes things move so effectively and still with a pleasant flow. This must be a huge advantage for you when moving the plot forward. Also, your style reminds me of JKR’s in the earlier books, which is very nice to see. Well done!
I want to bring up the matter of you re-telling us things that people are ‘supposed to know’ from the books, like ‘Sirius died in a dueling battle with a Death Eater, a follower of Voldemort.’, that I’ve seen other’s not being so happy about. Myself, I haven’t got a problem with it. I don’t need the lines myself (constantly re-reading some book in the series, after all), but I think they serve as nice foundation and background information to the, eh, less obsessive fanfiction readers who might need reminders. It also shows that you know what you’re doing, and gives a very complete feeling to the story. Plus, I expect the reminders will lessen and then completely go away, as the story proceeds.
I’m happy with Harry. I’ve obviously read HBP (only three times, ahem), and the mature young man who met us there was a pleasant surprise for me. I expected him to be much more of what you’re showing us here, and therefore he seems very real despite the fact your story has now become AU. I’m going to enjoy seeing what you make of ‘your Harry’ through this story.
Apart from Harry, the characters I’m most impressed with at the moment are the twins, Moody and Ginny. Ginny does tease Ron, but I thought some of her behaviours in HBP were right down evil, and even if I’ve come to terms with and explained that to myself, it’s still nice to be able to escape to fanfiction and see a ‘nicer’ version of her.
All in all, the story feels very solid so far, and to use simple words – it’s good, and I like it!
Summary: Harry suffers through another horrible day at the Dursleys'. Little does he know that this day will start him on a road of discovery and renewal.
Right, I have finally caught up with your chapters (and are now amongst the crowd eagerly waiting for more!) and feel ready for my first review. What can I say? This has turned out to be a great story. The only major thing that bothers me is that Harry isn't more upset about losing Sirius. I know that Kevin probably is a good substitute, but it shouldn't be the same. Talking about Kevin, I really like your own characters, they blend in very well with JKR's. And the dogs! This is a true dog-maniac reviewing - I currently live and work with... *counting on my fingers*... 27 dogs! I'm just a bit disappointed that there wasn't a border collie in the group since that's "my" breed. Right, as for Harry and Ginny, I generally like them as a couple. To me it's fairly obvious that we're going to see Ron and Hermione together in the actual books and I cross my fingers for Harry and Ginny. Good of you to make their "getting together" a bit more original than most people do, and to include a closure with Cho. Right, I'm going to stop writing now and wait (although impatiently) for your next excellent chapter. I'm proud to have joined your pack of pets. ;)
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I've been checking for new chapters every day since I found your story and read the three first chapters. I'm glad to see that the story is still as good, superb even. I love the way you picture Sirius. Now when I've done my part, I'll hold you to the promise of more chapters! ;)
Author's Response: Wow! I don't know what to say . . . thank you for reading and I hope not to let you down!
Oooh, this is the best so far! I absolutely love this chapter! Especially the end of it (except for the fact that it was the end, making me long for another chapter!), the two little words "Me too". Excellent! And don't even think about stop writing this story - it's the best on this site, I wouldn't know where to go. (Just a little bit addicted, as you can see). Thanks again for sharing your story with us.
Author's Response: I really liked the ending too . . . I thought it was rather moving. :-) Thanks for reading so faithfully!
Oh, another chapter! Well written as ever, and all of Marin's emotions and reactions seemed very realistic to me. But this chapter also made me veeery impatient for the next one, where I hope to see some more Sirius/Marin interaction - I think that's what you do best, including portraiting Sirius.
Author's Response: I thought she seemed pretty convincing . . . I think it's how I would have reacted . . . I've got at least three more chapters written; it took forever to get that last chapter posted because of errors on my part . . . so hopefully the next chapter will be added soon!
I really like this story so far! Obviously you like Sirius, and your info says you like puppies - guess what, I happen to have a puppy called Sirius! He's actually not named after Sirius Black, but after the actual Dog Star, which I first read about in D.W. Jones' "Dogsbody".
Anyway... I can't understand why this story hasn't got more stars - I think it's great and I'll keep checking for updates!
Author's Response: You are so very kind, thank you for that wonderful review. I do like Sirius, this is true. I have a black lab named Toby, I got him long before I learned of Harry Potter and Sirius. However, I have every intention of naming a future black dog of mine Sirius. ALSO, just a little fact for fun, one of the XM radio programs (in America) is called Sirius and their emblem is a little black dog . . .
Excellent! Another chapter to enlight my Sunday morning here in England. And I surely did enjoy it, especially the more extensive description of Marin's looks and their dialouge during "therapy". :) And you now you can't stop writing on the story - Fantasium would have a major brakedown! ;) Anyway, well written and keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Oooh, from England ? Awesome! I'm hopefully studying abroad there next fall . . . Went there when I was 16 and fell in love . . . ANYWAYS, thank you very much for your continued support. I do hope that there will be no breakdown, drink plenty of water and get some sleep ;-)
Excellent! Finally! Alright, it was a long wait, but it was well worth waiting for. Very sweet, and SO well written. Nothing over done, just perfect. Sirius is, I have to say it again, my very favourite character. Reading him the way you picture him makes me so happy! Right, I hope there will be another update soon, but if it's going to be a while I'll wait - all the best things are worth waiting for, like the Half-Blood Prince and next chapter of Dog Star! :)