Two quotes where I'm getting at:
In a world where I am so small,
I can't help thinking big!
--Neil Peart (Caravan)
Wit beyond reality
Is man's greatest fatality.
--Christopher Tegel (Adaptation of Ravenclaw motto)
I didn't get this. Sure it seems like maybe a good plot, but I really didn't get it. There are a lot of things messed up about the story, including the fact that Harry didn't know about the Order yet and that when he used Alohamora, he would have been arrested for Under-Age Magic. SO Harry knew things he didn't and wasn't arrested when he should have been???
??? What a weird story...
Author's Response: How so? Could you provide some constructive criticism so that I know how to write better in the future? Or is your intent to simply cause me anxiety over something I don't even think I've done wrong?
Sorry, I didn't mean to upset you. I didn't have much time to read so I just submitted that.
Though the concept is very, well, out there, it is a well-written story. I really like Neville and his antics, and now that I have put some thought into it, if Neville had become an Auror in JKR's adaptation, which we know he doesn't, I could in fact see this happening. Well-written, and at the time of the previous review I had thought it a very weird story, but good job in general.
Haha very funny story. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Very good story! I can see that you have put a lot of work into this and I will say that your work pays off. After reading this, it becomes easier to understand Wormtail's betrayal and a reason why James and Lily finally ended up together. Overall, very thoughtful story and congrats for your hard work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I'm especially glad you found Peter's part interesting, because I sometimes hate thinking they were friends with someone who betrayed them, so there must have been a reason, and there should be some depth to it. Hopefully this got at that a bit. I really appreciate the amazing first review, thank you! ~Gina :)