I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!
EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!
Summary: On May 4th, 2012, Petunia Dursley found herself hanging.This is a prose-poem written for the Who Arted? challenge at Poetry Anyone (?). It is based on a sketch done by welshdevondragon/Alex.
I loved this in PA even though I don't think I left a review.... But it is gorgeous prose! And I feel so bad for petunia. I'm happy to be seeing so many petunia stories now! Jut because it means that we realize Muggles are a part of this world, too! :)
Summary: What is Gellert Grindelwald. A young man with so many sides.
This poem was written for The Sharp Challenge in Poetry, Anyone? Thank you Julia, for running such fab challenges and being an inspiration.
Disclaimer: JKR? Me? Noooooooooo.
So, I have returned to give a much longer (okay, much more in depth) review! :)
First, I am amazed at the ideas you came up with to describe Gellert, because I always have trouble coming up with these types of connections that don't actually exist in canon but have to come from my own perceptions. So kudos to you! The first stanza is rather perfect- I mean, you captured Grindelwald's intrigue and tempting personality, but showed how dangerous he was, and you did so in a refreshing way. True, sweets are usually used to show temptation, but I loved that Grindelwald was a "basket...[l]ined with glass shards." It really demonstrates the effect that he has on other people, pulling them in with his dreams and ideas, but he is not altogether a good person- that is, he is ambitious and his morals allow him to do just about anything in order to achieve his goals, and therefore, he is very much like sharp glass in a basket.
The second stanza, I think, is my favorite of them all. First, you used "lilting," which is quickly becoming one of my favorite words. So that definitely gains you some stars. But this is where I felt you really captured the image JKR painted for us readers- that of a laughing, golden-haired boy. Here is a playful nature associated with him, and he pretty much has a youthful spirit.
The next few stanzas once more reiterated that sense of Grindelwald reeling people in. It's what people in power do: they want followers. And people who are seeking power seek followers as well. So for me, this shows that Grindelwald has been the same man all his life, always enticing people into his plans and gathering followers.
Shift in tone! I am assuming that the second to last stanza refers to his reign, and subsequently, his downfall with the battle against Dumbledore. Here, though, is where his true colors are shown. What I really liked was the tie-in here to Harry- it was interesting that you described Gellert as a lightning bolt when one decorates the forehead of Harry. :) Not sure if it was intentional, but I think it's a nice way of relating lightning to power, and perhaps not always good power. I mean, Zeus was the god of lightning- and he wasn't exactly friendly or kind. And the lightning bolt on Harry came from an evil curse and power. And here, Gellert has power, but he is misusing it, and the chaos he creates is similar to a lightning storm. It was an excellent analogy. :)
And then the last stanza captures him in his last days. He is no longer a basket, but a bag of bones. The transition was very nice! It kind of makes me pity Gellert, because in the end, he is just like any other man, destined to die, and all that power couldn't have stopped it. If only he had seen it sooner...
So, in case you couldn't tell, I loved this poem! I liked the transitions, and how this poem not only defined Gellert, but also followed the path he took in life, demonstrating that the choices he made only led to him regretting what he had done, instead of being a happy man in power. It's a good lesson to learn, really: power doesn't necessarily equate to happiness and invincibility (and immortality). You would think man would have learned that by now from all the history we learn. Alas, men always seem to think they can do better than those before them.
Okay, enough of that tangent. Great poem, Carole. :) I have enjoyed reading and learning from it! ~Nagini
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Yes, i like the word lilting, too, but I possibly overuse it, especially in poetry - ooops - so I'm trying to wean myself off it - ha ha.
The lightning bolt and Harry reference was intentional because we always associate lightning with Harry and something good, but really he had the scar because of something destructive. And Gellert was a destructive person, until the end when I think he showed real regrets. -sigh- Thank you, again ~Carole~
Yay! A definition poem of some sort. I loved the crab apple tree part. An the lightning part. and the bag of bones part. Okay, all the parts. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I liked the definition poems , they were fun. ~Carole~
Summary: Lily Evans is different things to different people.
This poem was originally written for The Sharp Challenge in PA. Thank you Julia, for bringing such inspiration.
Disclaimer: Tis not I who be JK Rowling.
It was happy... And then very sad. I love these definition poems so much! And you have a great knack for them. :) Beautiful job.
Author's Response: Definition poems are interesting (and fun) to write. You should give it a go. Thanks again for this review and all the others. ~Carole~
Summary: A love song for Lily from an unusually poetic James Potter.
This poem has been written for the Queen of James/Lily romance, Gina (gmariam) for her birthday.
Disclaimer: JKR, Moi? No, no, a thousand times, no.
Wow, he is suddenly very romantic. *chuckles* But it was exquisite. I especially liked how he described her hair as burnished copper! Beautiful! :)
Author's Response: I think he could be romantic when not with his friends. Although I'm not sure he's saying this as much as thinking it. Thank you. ~Carole~
Summary: With a bit of help from their dad, Rose and Hugo Weasley prepare a short play for their mum's birthday.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw submitting for the Character Clinic Triatholon-Minor Characters.
Happy birthday again! :)
This was so sweet. I love to perform, too, and I just adored the play those two put on! I hope my future children can be like this! But no matter what, I will love them.
Great story! :D
Summary: Late at night, Lily reflects on how lucky she really is.
Geez, you certainly love Lily don't you?
This was so sweet! How did Harry take the news that his daughter was marrying Scorpius????? :)
Very nice! I loved it. :D
Author's Response: Ahaha, SPEW007 makes us write about one character only :) As for Harry, I don't really think he cared. In my head canon, Harry no longer hates Draco. They aren't friends, but he doesn't hate him. Thanks for the reviewwww! Maple
Helena Ravenclaw has seen many things as a ghost and as a girl.This poem placed third in the Negotioting with the Dead challenge over at Poetry Anyone, for which it was originally written.
A big thank you to Natalie/hestiajones for giving me feedback in PA and made this poem what it is now!
I enjoyed this on the PA, and it is still lovely now! :) I, too, wrote on Helena for this challenge, but I admit yours had a depth that was beautiful!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I saw your pome, actually, and I thought it was really good. As for the depth, well, originally it was a far more cumbersome poem, but Natalie encouraged me to shorten it to what it is today. :)
Summary: A storm bears down on Hogwarts as the Gryffindor-Hufflepuff match draws near.
Nice imagery!!!!! I love your poetry a lot! Great job. :)
Author's Response: Thanks. :)
Summary: Hannah Abbott and her mother have never gotten along. But that is about to change.
This is Peppermint Toads of Gryffindor writing for Madame Pomfrey's Character Triathalon.
Before I say how emotional this made me feel, first, I just want to point out this line-"There were so markings on the body," McGonagall replied. "So" should be "no." Just a quick edit!
Anyways, the ending made me so depressed! This was very powerful. I am so impressed by the maturity of your writing! I especially loved the anaphoric lines at the end of each section. It was so beautiful! I could really feel the numbness and then the regret that Hannah had. If this doesn't win, it has, at least, won in my heart. :)
Author's Response: Haha, sorry about the typo. I shall fix it immediately! Thanks for the lovely review, I'll be sure to return the favor ASAP <3
Summary: Ginny waits
Yay!!!!!! Goodness, I love the refrain in this poem! It is so beautiful! I especially loved how you broke up the lines and stanzas, because it really stabbed at my heart with each despairing adjective! Really wonderful! My only critique is that you used punctuation wonderfully in the poem, but I feel perhaps that maybe the first stanza could have used some, or maybe been broken up into two stanzas of two lines each. I only say that because there are pretty much two ideas there, and yet they seem to run together in an odd way. It could be that I am reading it wrong. I still loved the poem!!!!!! :) I think the best part was the very end, when You threw in dialogue- I thought that was a great way to make it stand out from her thoughts and emphasize that hope hadn't actually left Ginny! Great job. I hope to read more soon.
Author's Response: Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I've just submitted another poem!!! ~Nidhi
Summary: Life and love go hand in hand, and two people know that more than anybody else in the world.
Wow! You have a great writing style. You should definitely think of joining Poetry Anyone? in the beta forums! You would be a great addition! :) that is, if you haven't already joined. :)
Anyways, I really loved the last line- it was amazing! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I'm thinking about joining PA? but my poetry output is SO SLOW, lol. But, anyways thank you for the kind words!
Summary: A short poem from George to his Twin.
This is a very nice poem, especially for a first one. :) Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you I'm planning on writing some more now :) EL
Summary: A series of vignettes taken from Sirius' mind when he is in Azkaban, and the threads that hold them together.Expanded from a drabble written for an SBBC Challenge.
LOVE! Wow, I absolutely enjoyed the contrast of Sirius' different mentalities. He was hopeless, and serious, then crazy and silly... Made me enjoy his character all the more! I really liked the little flash back, and am still pondering if the question James asked was meant to be asking Sirius to join him in death... There were several instances where I saw double meanings, and it made this stroy have so much depth. Really great job!!!!!! I have enjoyed all your work. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Kaylee, thank you for this lovely review! It really makes me want to write more!!!! :D
Summary: Neville hadn't expected his boggart to ever change. Perhaps he should have done.
I am very impressed with this piece! What a smart way to incorporate boggarts!!! I actually felt like I was there, and Tobias felt like he belonged. How do you do it? Gah! I love how Neville's Boggart made sense, and the juxtaposition of him being in Snape's dungeons made it even better!
If I had to find anything to change, it might be Professor McGonagall's character. She needs to be a bit more brisk and stern in manner. Perhaps add in things like her bun being tight, or looking none to pleased at the prospect of banishing boggarts. You have great attention to detail, so I know you can strengthen McGonagall a little more. I realize the story isn't about her, but rounding her out a little more in the beginning will help make the situation seem even more real!
Overall, though, I really enjoyed this story! Good luck on the challenge. :D
~Nagini Riddle, a fellow Boggart challenger
Failure: fail·ure: a fracturing or giving way under stress, a falling short.
Hermione has faced a boggart before. The problem is, she didn't succeed.
This is Padfoot11333 of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Mini-Challenge: The Boggart Challenge.
IT WON--alongside Gmariam's Afraid of the Dark. I am shocked.
Nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill - Best Dark/Angst.
Ooh!!! I am rather jealous of how you wrote this! Very beautiful in how you rummaged through hermione's mind. It fit so well, the idea of failure. I think, in a way, we all fear that same relative concept.
Good luck on the challenge! This is eons better than my two entries!!!
~Nagini Riddle, a fellow challenger
Author's Response: Oooh, thank you so much for the review. I really wasn't happy with the way this story turned out--it was written rather quickly, and I haven't written something that fast since the Great Hall Cotillion! But I'm glad you liked it at any rate. Good luck on the challenge!
Summary: The fears of one's youth are often quite different than the fears of adulthood. For some, it remains the same, simply shifting form as one's fear moves from without to within.
For Sirius Black, light will always conquer any fear of the dark.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Boggart Challenge.
I don't even know what to say. I felt as though I was Sirius. And suddenly, he didn't seem like an arrogant, careless person like he is often made out to be by those around him. I connected to him, strongly felt the fears and inner feelings. In fact, I think his Boggart would be mine- to see myself consumed by darkness. It would be a failure of myself, and I don't think I could live with that.
Anyways, I was really impressed. I think you need to trade brains with me for a day so I can write something this good. :)
Good luck on the challenge!
~Nagini Riddle, a fellow challenger
Author's Response: Thanks for reading this, Nagini! I'm glad you liked it. :) It was tricky at times, trying to suss out just what Sirius's boggart would be. I'm glad it made sense and came across well enough. I'll keep my brain--you wouldn't want it anyway, there is also a lot of useless fluff floating around, lol. Thanks again for the lovely review - and good luck yourself! ~Gina :)
Summary: Even though Harry has had a good life after Hogwarts, he still thinks what if...
I really enjoyed getting to read this, and there are some things you did really well, especially with your metaphors.
I would have liked to see less of the ellipses, because they were somewhat distracting. They worked well for the lines "And I hope," and "Let it take you home," and maybe even "And I sink," but in the other areas, it really made me try to slow down and understand what you were going for, and I think it works far better without the ellipses.
I also would have liked a little more repetition of certain phrases. One more time for "Warm sunny days," would have really helped to tie the poem together. I also feel like perhaps your title doesn't fit for the poem because of the certain phrases you emphasized. I would title it "Nostalgia," or "Reminiscence." Or, to make it fit even more, I would title it "One Last Shining Moment." Your title makes me think of something happier, but here you have a memory turning to something dark and then the hope to be able to return to those memories. At least, that's how I interpreted it. I may be wrong.
Overall, though, I think you did very well. :) If you want to get better feedback on poetry, join Poetry Anyone? in the beta forums. They are super helpful and a delightful group to share poetry with.
Keep writing! :)
Author's Response: Hi Nagini! Thank you for the throughly amazing review!! You have definitely given me a lot of things to think about! I hope I can take this and apply it to get better. You didn't interpret it wrong it all. I did fear that that might be the case, concerning the title I mean. What do you think about "When Dreams Become Nightmares" or "A Beautiful Lie"? But can I still change the title? Anyways, you're suggestions will be rattling in my noggin for awhile, and I will definitely check that club out. Thank you again for the amazing review! It really made my day! :)
Summary: Some things are worse than losing someone, like never having them at all. A short Shell Cottage missing moment.
Warning is for implication, just to be safe.
Can I just say wow? :)
This narrative was exquisite, and I could really feel the pain and anguish Hermione felt. I really liked the nightmare she had- it felt and read like a nightmare, and I was rather impressed. I think, Joe, that you need to have more nightmares and write! *crickets* Okay, maybe not nightmares... :)
Anyways, this was awesome! I haven't read much of your work (and am regretting it), but from the little I've read, I can see that you are a great writer! Keep it up. I want to see more! I want to read more! So appease me, opti. *chuckles* Goodness, when did I become so demanding?
I'll be sure to help you out in appeasing my demand. Maybe I'll come up with some ridiculous prompt and pm you later. :)
Author's Response: First of all, thanks so much for the review!
I've so far wrote two stories based on dreams and both of them went over pretty well, so maybe I'll have to look in that wellspring more often. Or not, whatever I'll play by ear. And yes, a challenge would do me good - especially since all I can seem to write these days is either R/Hr fluff or 'oh, woe is me!' from either Hermione's or Draco's perspective.
Summary: Firenze ponders his loyalty to the herd against his knowledge of what is right.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I suspect her poetry, like her prose, is far better than mine.
Thank you, Minna for the crit in Poetry, Anyone? and Julia for setting the challenge.
It does get so little love! Why do people not like it???? Especially when you have this beautiful piece that I was just dying to read and review here on the archives after seeing it in the PA. :)
Anyways, what more can I say after my critique? It's such a great subject to write a poem on, and I was rather surprised to see that you thought outside the box. :) Plus, the words you choose are very elegant and graceful and just plain awesome. I really need your vocabulary list!
Best Potter villanelle I've read to date. And poor Firenze. I wonder what happened to him after the war...
Author's Response: I was quite stuck with the prompt, but knew I wanted to write about Centaurs. the thing is, they don;t think of themselves as discriminated against because they know they're better - ha.
Thank you very much for the lovely review. I'm not sure where my vocab comes from, years on this earth perhaps, butI pick up new ones every week by reading prose and poetry from different people, I guess.
Thanks again ~Carole~