Penname: Nagini Riddle [Contact]
Real name: Kaylee
Member Since: 04/28/12
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I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!

EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!

Since I write so much poetry, I thought I would make a list of my actual stories that are on the archives:

Completed:
If I Die Young
His Last Descendant
In the Realms of Jealousy
The Autumn Air
A Darker Nightmare
Vanishing Point
The Ghosts that Follow
The Baby-Sitter
Kill It Before It Dies
The Sight of Her
A Christmas Meal of Snow
The Man of Hogsmeade
Set in Silver Stone
Unfaithful
Pills and Potions
The Purity of the Turf
Pearls Mean Tears
The Ties That Bind
The Full House
Delayed Arrival
Hot Off the Press

WIP:
Murder in the Moonlight

To Follow:
I Stood in the Ruins
Questions (tentative title)
Eclipse of the Heart
Lines in the Sand


Here are all my poems (in order of update):

Poetry
Her Hand
His Only Friend
Mad World
Refusal
Negotiation With Death
An Unexpected Turn
The Coffin Brawl
Wasted Space
One Sweet Night
Life in Technicolor
The Bice Day
Dark Side
The Day the Music Died
Shades of Grey
The Endless Road
The Foulest Creature
The Lone Sentry
If No One Will Listen
Soiled
Just a Diary
Frozen
An Empty Photograph
Moonlight
Death's Horizon
The Canvas Life
The Sun Sets in Paradise
Grand Adage
The Banished Howl
Hear Me
Celestina's Songbook: Summer Lovin'
The Certain Dark
The Cursed Ruin
A Greying View
Silent Ash
Left Behind
Save You
With Silent Wounds
The Snow Globe
A Wintry Lust
Hogsmeade Lights
The Calming
The Possibility
Today I Do Not Want To Be...
Walls
A Brief Star
Beautiful Disaster
Where is Your Heart
Fix You
The Black Rose
A Failing Mission
The Darkest Realm
Godric's Hollow
Halo
Unspeakable
Hidden Mysteries
Salire
The Seasons Change
Petrified Desire
In Anguish
Paradeisos
In Final Minutes
The Wrong Child
For the Man on the Street
Something Better
Faust Arp
The Silver Doe/The Silver Stag
Fallen Leaves
Red is the color of death
Living Shroud
Little Bruno and the Evil Elf
Eternal Ice
For the Hero
Magical
The Frost in Melancholy
It's Christmas Time in Diagon Alley
It Came Upon A Charm So Clear
A Ravenclaw's Blue Christmas
Frēodōm
Corpses of the Shadow and the Night
You Just Wink (First Impressions)
His
In Agony
Killing Me Softly
Separation
Absentia
Don't Let Me Go
Pax Tecum (Peace Be With You)
Casualties
Blind Weakness
The Show Must Go On
A Coming War?
At the Battlefront
No One Can Ever Know
Do you think of me the same?
Into the Forest
A Lesson with Biscuits
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 1
Sacrificium
A Restless Wait
Dawn (Go Away)
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 2
Betty
BTSK
on this side of heaven
Colorblind
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Pressing Flowers by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: When Alice could still remember her mother, she always thought of flowers.

Nominated for Best Poem in the 2013 Quicksilver Quill Awards

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 122 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/09/13 Updated: 02/11/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 02/11/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Amazing job, minna. :) I am in awe of its beauty, and you have left me speechless.

 

The Spark by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Salazar watches his home burn. A prose poem.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 98 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/11/13 Updated: 02/11/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 02/12/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I love prose poetry! You did a magnificent job, minna. ;)

 

Growth by teh tarik
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Past Featured Story

Something has changed in Merope Gaunt, a thrumming of insect wings, a pulse kickstarting to life.

Merope is alone. Penniless, undernourished and pregnant - these are the last three trimesters of her life.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 3910 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/14/13 Updated: 02/15/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 11/14/13 Title: Chapter 1: dull as dirt

I am thoroughly disturbed! But I really enjoyed this dark story. And now I can't get the image of Merope eating matches and dirt out of my head. :) For a more thorough review of this, you will have to see my discussion post on the beta boards... :) But I thought I would let you know that this story was fantastic!

Author's Response: Hiya Nagini!

Wow, thank you so much for this lovely review! ♥ I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that it left an impact on you; that's always what I hope to achieve with my writing :) Merope certainly had one of the more difficult lives, and I can't imagine that she was ever truly happy. And I have read your post in the SBBC! Thank you so much for such an in-depth and detailed discussion, and I'll be sure to answer your TQ for me before the end of the month. Thank you once again! ♥

-teh

 

Penumbra by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: What promises could a cursed Ring possibly offer that could convince Dumbledore to put it on his finger, even knowing the consequences?



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 106 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/16/13 Updated: 02/16/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 03/26/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed the asides you used. They add so much dimension to the piece!

Great subject, by the way. Trying to capture the struggle of Dumbledore's when he finds the resurrection stone. :) I liked how the poem didn't read overly fast, like he was greatly contemplating his decision.

I feel, though, that it could have had a bit more of a rushed feeling to it only to add the complex dimensionality of a rash decision. But honestly, it does well the way it is. The last line really says it all and spells out that regret. :)

I can't wait to read more of your work (again). :)

 

Lost by dmbw7052
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Does Mrs. Granger remember Hermione in any way? Is there a subconscious memory in the back of her mind?

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 86 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/04/13 Updated: 03/05/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 03/05/13 Title: Chapter 1: Lost

I think you have a very good start for your first poem. :) I like the simplicity of it that allows the emotion to really shine.

I only wish that last stanza was a little longer and more complete. Perhaps with a message to tie it all in. Perhaps like, "Til then I'll keep waiting,/Endlessly waiting for what I seek."

Other than that, very nice. I look forward to more poetry from you.

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thanks Nagini. I did add a few lines now. I agree, it did need a little more at the end. -Georgia

 

Believing in Fairytales by HalfASlug
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Hermione was his daughter and, therefore, was as perfect as a ten year old could be in his eyes. Sometimes the rest of the world didn't agree though.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 2289 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/12/13 Updated: 03/13/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/29/13 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

I love dramatic irony, and this story fits it so perfectly. :) I want to reach out to the characters and tell them that I know what is happening!!!!!! I really wonder what exactly a parent would feel when they found out their child was magical. I wonder how I would react...

Anyways, this was a cute story and I loved the interaction between father and daughter. Very nice!

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! Yeah, I think without knowing that it all turns out okay in the end this story would have been very sad indeed. I guess as a kid you'd be more accepting of things like magic, but as an adult it would seem crazy. Although if my kid was magic the overwhelming emotion would be jealousy! Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it!

 

Musings by 1000timesingoldenink
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Luna ought to be working on her History of Magic essay, but instead she’s scribbling a poem in the margin of her paper, contemplating the definition of reality.

Nominated for a 2013 QSQ.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 108 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/29/13 Updated: 04/03/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 06/02/13 Title: Chapter 1: musings

Why did I never see this????????? I need to get on the site more often!

WOW! I loved this! It seems just like Luna, and I am so impressed. And, Jenny, you are one of those poets that can render me speechless, no matter how much you try to deny it.

I thought the structure was genius, by the way. And the simplicity of it made it so much more poignant. I especially liked the part where she described proof as "dull," and faith as "bright." I sometimes feel the same way... :)

 

Summary: Voldemort laments his final battle from beyond the grave …

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Violence

Word count: 277 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/16/13 Updated: 04/27/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/14/13 Title: Chapter 1: Superharrywentballistichexedmesoferocious

Hahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!! That is all I can say right now. :) :) :)

 

Beware by dmbw7052
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Hermione Granger is many things, and she is not just a sweet little girl.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 141 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/27/13 Updated: 04/28/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 04/29/13 Title: Chapter 1: Beware

Ah, Hermione! :) I really liked this poem! The refrains were beautiful, and I found that this described Hermione quite well. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks Ngini! I liked writing Hermione also, and find that I often tend to write poems about her. -Georgia

 

Philosopher's Stone by 1000timesingoldenink
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary:

He who robs me of my purse robs me of nothing.
Twas mine, tis his, and has been slave to thousands.

--William Shakespeare

The stars are far brighter
Than gems without measure,
The moon is far whiter
Than silver in treasure.

--J. R. R. Tolkien

There are some who, were the sun pure gold, would snatch it from the sky.

Not I.


This poem got third place in the first PA challenge I ever participated in, The Anniversary Challenge v.2. :D It has also been nominated for a 2013 QSQ.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 168 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/04/13 Updated: 05/08/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 06/02/13 Title: Chapter 1: A Perenelle Villanelle

Well, I have to say that you have mastered the Villanelle form! :) I just loved all the imagery, and Perenelle's wisdom, although glory of the world is probably not one of the top things on my list to want. Fabulous job, Jenny. I'm sorry that I never critiqued or reviewed this before now, but I didn't feel worthy enough to do so. *chuckles* still don't, but I thought I would tell you that I enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Thank you! I know what you mean...when you read a piece of utter brilliance by Julia or Natalie or Minna or Carole, and you simultaneously feel awe and unworthiness...it's a lovely feeling, but it makes reviewing very difficult! I maintain that none of my poetry ought to make anyone feel unworthy (especially not you, what with your plethora of amazing free verse poems!), but I am really glad you enjoyed it. Writing as Perenelle came naturally somehow. Her wisdom is not, after all, very complicated: it is just the opposite. Simple, and beautiful. And that's all I was trying to capture...within the rhyme and pattern confines of a villanelle! It took a quite a while to write and draft... ;D Anyway, thanks again for your ever-so-delightful review!

 

The Storm by BrokenPromise
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Hermione reflects during Ron's absence.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 123 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/07/13 Updated: 05/15/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/16/13 Title: Chapter 1: The Storm

Wow! :) This was so dramatic, but in a good way. I really liked your direct tone, which felt very Hermione-ish to me. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

 

The Peverell Prophecy by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: The Peverell brothers attempted to cheat Death.

Only one came close.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 105 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/13/13 Updated: 05/13/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 10/21/13 Title: Chapter 1: The Peverell Prophecy

Hello! Thought I would return the favor of you reviewing my poetry. :)

I really like the refrain, and how it is used to show what happens to each brother. That in itself was genius.

Overall, I loved the rhythm and the length of the poem, which really helped to capture each brother in a snapshot!

A couple things stood out that bothered me:

1. Punctutation. The first stanza might work better if there were commas after the first and second lines, but not the third. And then the last line needs a period, since you have every other stanza ending with one. For the second stanza, I would take out the comma on the third line. And then for the third stanza, the second line feels like an aside, which needs appropriate punctuation to set it off. So visually, the poem should look like this:

The combative man seeking to defeat,
With wand of elder grown,
Will meet an end inglorious
When Death marks him as his own.

The doleful man who yearns to steal
Souls by turn of stone,
Through endless grief will meet his fate
When Death marks him as his own.

But the clever man wishing to hide,
To tarry longer at his home-
His lifelong days will be strifeless.
And he’ll mark Death as his own.


2. Meter. This is only for the very last line. I feel like this statement would be stronger and flow a little smoother if you took out the "and" at the beginning of the last line. Of course, it isn't necessary, but it just felt like it needed to be a little stronger.

Thanks for a great read, Carole. I always enjoy your poetry. :) ~Nagini

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Yes, I was very sloppy with that full stop. It should have been there. I'm going to take another look through. I like the last line through. The additional word was deliberate because the third brother's life and death are very different from his older brothers. Thank you again. Carole

PS: SO sorry I called you Hayley. I know you're Kaylee, but my mind was elsewhere.

 

Taboos by William Brennan
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: After the war, the Auror Office decides to Taboo the Unforgivable Curses so that any use of them can be detected. This doesn't quite go as planned however...

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1879 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/20/13 Updated: 05/30/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/31/13 Title: Chapter 1: Taboos

Shouldn't it detect the actual curse, rather than the word? *smiles* I mean, if someone did it nonverbally, the taboo wouldn't catch that, but it should catch the magic of it. If the ministry did that, I think it would be better.

Anyways, I didn't mean to pull it apart and dissect it like that. I had a fun time reading this and I was laughing, wondering how in the world the Ministry never foresaw the problem!

Does anything sound like Voldemort? Perhaps not in English, but in French and Latin something might... :) His Taboo was probably more refined, though, being a great wizard and all.

Okay, I shall stop talking. Great story!

Author's Response: Detection of the magic itself can't be done. The Trace does it, but that doesn't work for adults. As for nonverbal, the Unforgivable Curses are hard as it is (consider what the fake Moody said when demonstrating them) and very few wizards would be able to do them nonverbally, which is considerably more difficult. Even Voldemort said the incantations if in a situation in which it didn't create a big tactical disadvantage.

 

The Interview by HalfASlug
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: 10th November, 1981. Severus Snape has been summoned to Hogwarts for the first time since the war. For everyone else the fighting has finished, but for him it must continue. He is about to learn the true meaning of 'anything' and who better to teach him than the Hogwarts Headmaster.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Suicide

Word count: 6044 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/22/13 Updated: 05/22/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/25/13 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

Oh my goodness! This is my new favorite story, and I think you capture Severus' character extremely well. :) What a read! It makes me want to write more about Severus' pain. And wow! Dumbledore was spot on. This was extremely entertaining, poignant, and depressing all at th same time. Thank you for taking the time to share it with us. ~Nagini

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Oh wow! I am honoured! They are both so hard to write because of all the layers and lies and ulterior motives so I'm over the moon that you thought they were in character. Thanks again for the lovely review :)

 

Uncertainty by 1000timesingoldenink
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Somebody seems to have written a quintet of impatient love couplets and then cast Diffindo on each one.

Definitely wasn't me.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 107 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/15/13 Updated: 06/22/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 06/22/13 Title: Chapter 1: Fluff

*snickers* Nice summary, Jenny. Just popping in to say that I still love this poem, even if it is fluff. And my favorite part is still that first stanza were you interrupt the lines with "if knuts were wishes!" Teehee!

 

Goodbye by phoenix_tearPatronus
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: It's time for Ted to turn and face his fate.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 193 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/20/13 Updated: 07/21/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 07/25/13 Title: Chapter 1: Goodbye

Cookies!

Hello, Abi. ;) I am so happy to see other people branching out into poetry, and I really liked your poem. I loved the type of narrative it was in, and especially found the rhyme scheme to be very effective. Great job! Perhaps I will see more from you...

~Nagini, fellow poet

Author's Response: Hi, Nagini =) Thank you for the lovely review! Hopefully there may be some more in the future.. As promised, here are you cookies ;) ~Abi~

 

The Edge by Reckless
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Darkness was never as alluring as in the form of Bellatrix Lestrange.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 96 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/01/13 Updated: 09/01/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 12/19/13 Title: Chapter 1: Down. Down. Down

Hello! I really am impressed by your meter, especially in the second stanza. :) I also love your fourth line- "a cross on the heart, and a heart full of ice."

I wonder why you broke your rhyme scheme at the end, but it still works, since "paradise" has the same vowel sound as "side" and "guide," making it a half-rhyme, and it really didn't detract from the over all poem. I am curious, though, as to why you chose to do that. Your rhyme scheme worked as AABBCCDDEE-and then it stopped for your last two lines. For me, I could put some symbolism into it and say that Bellatrix is twisted and mad, and therefore, the ending breaking the rhyme pattern shows that. ;) Okay, no need for me to go off on some wild analysis, here.

Nice job! I hope to see more. :) In case you didn't know, I love poetry (my author page will reflect that), and I always look forward to seeing another poet's work!

Welcome to the fansite! ~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thanks for the welcome! *Goes to check out Nagini's work*

 

The Hourglasses by Oregonian
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThey have existed for centuries, seeing generations of students. What have they learned that we need to know?

This poem won Second Place in the 2013 Aisling Challenge.

This poem was nominated for the 2014 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Poetry.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 453 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/29/13 Updated: 09/30/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 10/21/13 Title: Chapter 1: The Hourglasses

Wow! Very nice. I love the advice at the end. One shouldn't focus on prizes, because doing good is its own reward. I think the world in general needs to hear this advice daily. :) Thank you for a lesson learned, Vicky.

Author's Response: Oh thank you for writing a review. (Poetry doesn't get a lot of reviews.) I think that the lesson is one that we appreciate more in adulthood than we did in childhood, when we still responded very positively to rewards and bribes ("If you are good, I will read you a story.")

 

Beaten and Blown by dreamsnape
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Snape meets with Lily in a graveyard, hoping to continue his friendship with her, and hoping that it may become something more. But she isn't who she seems to be, and years will pass before either of them learn the truth.

Categories: Severus/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6638 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/23/13 Updated: 10/27/13


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 10/28/13 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Devotion

Plot twists! :)

I rather liked his, because I think it would fit into the books rather well (then again, I am a sucker for Sev/Lily). I love that in this story, Lily was able to find out everything Severus did, and how he was now trying to save her from Voldemort, because I would hate for Lily to have died and not known the truth about Snape. But knowing the type of person Lily is, she probably understood a lot more about Severus than other people did, and I am willing to bet that she thought of him often.
Thanks for a good read. Good luck with the challenge!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

 

Summary:

On the very last day of his life, Sirius Black was bored. Bored, bored, bored.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 4057 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/12/14 Updated: 04/17/14


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 04/18/14 Title: Chapter 1: for old times' sake

Augh! I don't know what to say! At the beginning, you captured the boredom so well, the way that every little detail was paid attention to in the house to signify that Sirius has too much time on his hands in which to accomplish nothing. The fact that Sirius passes said time by breaking and fixing his mother's crystal tells me that he has resorted to trying to find ways of getting some satisfaction out of spite towards his family, but all he can really do is drink.
I never realized before that Sirius and James had both shared that feeling! What a great comparison, showing that James had been in a similar situation, but at least he was protecting Harry and his wife. But what was Sirius protecting besides his own life? I can see why Sirius would be so happy, then, to get out of the house and rush off to defend Harry, because his pride and ego thrive off of it, and also because he cannot stand to do nothing.
But the saddest part of all is Sirius forgetting it all. Though I think you really aptly captured his character with the fact that he could not forget laughter, which is rather bittersweet when you think about it. On the one hand, it is a really good and special thing to hold onto, remembering laughter. But on the other, it is all he remembers, and he can't even remember his best friends names. *silently cries*
I also think that the last line of your story was perfect. The fact that those words echo and whisper is a great way of showing that he is not only falling through the veil (where the voices whisper), but also that he is slowly fading away (though, perhaps, not as slow as I described there). I particularly like the words "I am," because it gives this sense that even though Sirius is no longer living in his mortal body, he does still exist, and therefore, "he is." And at the same time, it also gives a echo of his own joke, which, in a way, shows that Sirius was the embodiment of merriment and laughter, despite the fact that his name is a homophone. :)
A very good read! Thank you for taking the time to share it with us. ~Nagini

Author's Response:

Oh my goodness, Nagini! What a wonderful surprise review! And such a lovely detailed one as well! b25; Thank you so much, love!

I was indeed trying to capture Sirius's boredom and sense of entrapment - poor Sirius; he always seems doomed to experience one kind of imprisonment or other, whether Azkaban, or Grimmauld Place, or his own sense of guilt. He is indeed unnecessarily spiteful in some parts of the story, toward Kreacher, and possibly toward that portrait of his mother. I was trying to show Sirius as someone who's lost touch a little, who's alienation has made him lose a little empathy for others. He's also lost touch with reality a bit, which is why he's so eager to rush out for a fight, and that he becomes reckless, which proves to be a fatal mistake. Kind of takes the battle as a game, actually.

Oh, I love your interpretation of the ending, with Sirius being unable to forget laughter! As for the forgetting bits, I'd say it was necessary, I guess. But as you can see from DH, it's not the end for him. Do not be upset. :)

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Nagini!

 
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