I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!
EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!
Summary: The war is over, but going on with life is another war in itself.
Ooooooo! This was awesome! I especially enjoyed the second to last stanza- haunted by what we did, what we didn't do. It sends chills up my spine! I never liked guilt, but this type of guilt I'm sure would cause people to go crazy...
Author's Response: This is the first thing I wrote after returning from a very long hiatus. It sort of just came to me. I've always wondered how the survivors could really move on after the war, especially the ones who have seen so much violence.
Summary: Fred and George make their way through life with purpose and passion, fearing nothing.
This prose poem was written for the Random Song Challenge in Poetry Anyone? It came second!!!!!
Thank you Julia for setting such inspiring challenges.
Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling.
To my delight and surprise, this poem won the 2012 QSQ for Best Poetry. Thank youuu.
Wow! And the golden review goes to... JK!
I agree with everyone else in that this was magnificent. Especially those last two lines that stand alone. So much emotion is wrapped up in so little words... Profound impact! Great job. I stand in awe...
Author's Response: Thank you! I was rather pleased with the way this turned out especially as when I tried writing it in a more conventional style it didn't work at all. ~Carole~
A young woman finds inspiration in the flight of a lone Hippogriff...
I will be the first review, because I am a review fairy, and just have to leave behind reviews!
I love the message this conveyed- I think you could have played around more with the structure, though. Don't be afraid to break up the lines in between the sentences! When you do, you emphasize certain words and ideas. In the format it is right now, it seems more like prose, which is fine, and still poetic, but I think this poem would have worked well with the structure divided up on a different way.
That being said, I still enjoyed the poem! Have you thought of joining Poetry Anyone? in the beta forums? People over there will be able to give you more constructive critiques, and you will find that their advice really helps your poetry become flawless! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for being the first reviewer! I figured I needed a more optimistic poem to balance out the last one, so I came up with this. Although I've always loved the type of poems that rhyme, they've always been very difficult for me. Occassionally experimenting with rhymes is fun, but I'm finding that the non-rhyming type is probably more my style. I could definitely work on the structure more, and I might play with that a little more next time. I really appreciate your advice with that. And I've definitely thought about joining Poetry Anyone in the very near future, so hopefully I'll be a part of that soon. :) Thanks again for the review! ~Ashleigh
Summary: They are adrift in a warm sea, a seething ocean of sensation. Fleur/Hermione.
Nominated for Best Poem in the 2012 and 2013 Quicksilver Quill Awards
Goodness gracious, there are so many innuendos! Or perhaps not... :)
This reminds me of the song "Rock the Boat," although that song is more about the ups and downs of relationships rather than sexual situations. Still, the concept is fabulous here. You took an idea of love that isn't altogether "new" and you made it rather fresh. Very nice.
I wish I could review more, but I am so not an expert in this kind of theme, so I will just leave you with my praise. Keep it up, minna! ~Nagini
Summary: Before: Wife of a strong, powerful man, mother of a bright, beautiful son, lady of the Manor, proud, fulfilled, content, respected.
After: Wife of a weary, downtrodden man, mother of a scared, lost boy, slave, ashamed, miserable, afraid, disregarded.
It started with him and damn it all if I'll let him finish it too.
I was always somewhat happy that the Malfoys cared so much for their son, and that their son, too, was not really supportive of Voldemort. This story only makes me that much happier! It lets me know that even people who seem " evil" ( for lack of a better word) still have feelings, reasons, logic, and some "good" in them. I really liked that nobody died in this story, but it wouldn't have really surprised me if Narcissa had killed herself. I completely understood why she wanted to get away- Voldemort had ruined her, and she no longer had the hope or strength to fight it... I just hope that people who read this realize that there are always ups and downs in life, and focus on the positive! :)
Summary: Neville Longbottom is tired of being a war hero, tired of missing the girl who left him behind, tired of feeling like his life isn't fulfilled by his passion in Herbology. With the help of some friends, the example of his parents, and one incredible girl, he realizes that sometimes, the biggest strength lies in believing in the magic of love. [Neville/OC]
Okay, I loved this story! And it definitely needs a sequel! I love how Neville was able to find solace in a girl so similar to him, and also that she was actually able to accept him as a wizard. It's just what he needed! I couldn't have written a better story.
Great job, and keep it up! It's a beautiful story!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much for your kind words; I really appreciate it. :)
Summary: Haunted by his many failures and by the memory of his friends, Sirius Black comes to Hogwarts to seek the counsel of the only wizard who can help him. Until Justice is done, however, his only master is Truth.
Actually, I think it worked great. It made sense that Dumbledore knew about Sirius- or else how could Sirius have gotten away with what he did? Also, if Dumbledore did know about Sirius, he wouldn't have been so scared for his students, and in the books, he didn't act like he was, not like in the sixth book when he had extra security on the castle. Your explanation is sound with me!
Keep up the good work! I'm very impressed with your work.
Author's Response: I'm glad this missing moment seemed appropriate to you; I wondered why Dumbledore had been so calm about the whole thing in PoA as well, and this was my response to it as an author, hehe. :) Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!
Summary: Severus Snape is bound to watch and wait.
This is AidaLuthien of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Challenge, Illustration for Inspiration.
We never fully appreciate what Snape did for everyone else, do we?
This was a great story! I loved how tragic it was that Snape had to watch all the time but not intervene. I also found it highly funny that Snape put the sword in Bellatrix's vault, because he had no idea that it would cause trouble later when Harry ended up at Malfoy manner with the real sword... :)
Summary: Bellatrix and Narcissa argue before approaching Severus about Draco’s task.
My goodness! I loved it! How can there be no reviews for this?
Your characterization of Cissy was so great! It felt like JKR had actually written this! I also thoroughly enjoyed the relationship these two had! It's nice to know Bellatrix isn't completely crazy- she seemed almost human on this... :)
Author's Response: Thanks for being the first reviewer. This story hasn't been up too long, but it's nice to see that someone's been reading it. Thanks so much for the kind words. I'm glad my characterization of Narcissa came through well. She's quickly becoming my favorite character. As for Bella, I love your comment. Almost human. Perfect. I have a soft spot for Bella and tend to skew her canon character, making her more humane than she's ever portrayed. I still believe she has a certain amount of love left in her and that is reserved almost entirely for her sister. Thanks so much for the lovely review.
Summary: The Grey Lady reflects.
Nominated for Best Poem in the 2012 Quicksilver Quill Awards
So sad! A beautiful short poem. I loved the imagery of the moths, and also that you used her name to show her personality. Grey, grey, grey... :)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
When a Dementor approaches, one feels cold in places that the nerves of the skin can only dream of approaching.
Those places, for Harry, were dark, indeed.
Do the colors red and green refer to the color of spells being thrown? I realize this is about dementors but I remember that Harry kept relieving flashes of green light...
This is exquisitely beautiful! Dangerous, but ravishing and somewhat mind opening... I especially loved your last sentence "So dark." it really paints the picture of falling into the eternal black abyss that our minds create for us.
Great job and keep it up!!!
In this particular poem, the green does refer to the curse used to kill his mother, and the red references many things - Lily's red hair, the colour of Voldemort's eyes, and well...when the second killing curse rebounded, the room did basically explode. Red also symbolises courage, danger, aggression, and blood (therefore life and death). It seemed an appropriate time to put that in there, because it's where Harry is starting to question what all of these memories mean for him.
The 'So Dark' part, I was going for not only Harry passing out, but also realising that there are far more sinister things out there than Voldemort, like creatures that can suck out your soul while making you watch a film in your head of all the most horrible things that have ever happened to you. Harry chose his boggart well, because being afraid of a dementor is definitely more something that one should fear than silly little things like spiders and snakes.
I'm glad you liked the poem. It's really dark, but if one doesn't look at the dark here and there, who's to say what things look like in the light? Thanks for reviewing and reading. <3
Hi! I have already reviewed, I know, but I decided to review again, because I found the reviewing poetry circle on the Beta Forums and just had to review this poem! So here it is:
Okay! First off, I have to say that this poem was genius in its diction, syntax, and also in its paragraph style. So many people think that poetry needs to be broken up into halted lines, but I loved how you broke the tradition- it makes you stand out from the others. Also, the choice to use, "you" works out great because now the reader feels why the character feels and it leaves a deeper impression. As for your word choice:
"Shivers EXALT your skin." I enjoyed how you chose exalt, as though the shivers could be pleasurable or not. Not only that, but they seem to last forever on your skin, and trust me, they still EXALT mine!
"You shudder. So cold." Lovely syntax. The sharp terseness makes one catch their breath and feel the short coming breaths that are so sharp and sudden and jarring. The syntax really reflects how the character feels.
"They permeate far, far, far down." Nice repetition! It really emphasizes just how these shivers affect the person and invade their mind.
"Neurons fire and photons dance." Again, nice diction choice! I love how you chose something more scientific instead of just saying "nerves." It really paints the picture of every part of the body being affected.
"Things long forgotten burn amidst frozen flesh." Ooh!!! Makes me shiver again! The contrast of fire and ice, plus the allusion to how dementors freeze everything is so effective and beautiful!
"Relentless tattoo of remember." I love the word tattoo. It brings to mind not only permanence, but also reminds me of the dark mark. Even if the poem is about Harry, I assume it could apply to any unfortunate person, like Snape or even Draco, who regret becoming death eaters and would definitely feel the dark mark burning a "relentless remember."
"Bathed in terrible colours." Again my mind and skin crawls! The image of drowning or being submerged in the terrible sea comes to mind.
"Screams of green slide down the walls." AUGH!!! Okay, again beautiful diction! It's great how you said "screams" as if the spells have noise to them (like the sound of rushing death) and they "slide" down walls (whether real or memory walls, it still causes me to squirm). The image of poor Lily falling to the ground only makes this line that much more penetrating.
"Seeping into the woodwork into a pool of red." I think of blood, of course, but not physical blood. More of the mental kind, the cause of pain, hurt, and agony as Lily realizes she's gone and Harry is left "unprotected." also, it has a double-meaning for Harry, who probably has his own "blood" acting like this as he relives the memory. And he can't handle it.
"Wild and loud and indecent and chases you until there is nothing but black." Nice choice of the word "and." Instead of using commas, this word actually makes it more pressing and jarring and imprints it more on the mind. Plus, it creates a pounding chaos and hurt, as though the person is unable to escape and succumbs to the pain.
"So dark." I have always loves this ending. :) Sigh. It's to the point and short and so memorable and leaves me in my own abyss. Augh!!!
I didn't touch in every line, but I have to say I enjoyed the changing sentence structure- long sentences, the short, rapid ones. It caused a sense of panic in me, which is actually a good thing for this poem.
Okay, now I can criticize! Don't worry. I loves this poem and it's great the way it is. However, I think it could have been stretched a bit longer. Not because the shortness of it isn't great (it is) but because it would help the reader see even more of the torment that haunts those poor people. I know it's more about Harry, so perhaps you could add a bit about him falling into nothingness (like in the third book when he experienced this at the Quidditch match). You have screams, which is good, but maybe you could add "pleadings" or something that alluded more to the scary image of Voldemort murdering. And maybe, just maybe, to make it more defined, add a tinge of hope that may or may not be extinguished, to show how Harry longs to hear his parents' voices (quite like he longed to see their faces in the mirror).
Other than that, it is still beautiful! :)
Thanks for letting me get to read it and review!
Summary: Draco reflects on his future directly after the Battle of Hogwarts.
I loved the scarlet letter allusion!
I have a great appreciation for people who write about characters in ways we never thought of. This was beautifully tragic! And I can look at the Malfoys in a new perspective. Good job!
Author's Response: Yeah, it was probably difficult for the Malfoys directly after the battle, and for a long time afterwards, even if Harry did speak up for Narcissa and/or Draco. Would be a nightmare to be born into their family after the war, given that they were probably the biggest social pariahs around for a good long time. Ta muchly for the feedback CbK
Summary: She had loved Draco Malfoy since she was 13 years old, had studied him alongside her books when she was a Hogwarts student--but the War has destroyed more than just the lives of those who were gone. Her seven year betrothal broken, she must now learn to understand the man whose ring she wears. [Pansy/Theo]
Awwwwww! You captured these emotions do well and I am just speechless! So many things are reeling in my mind and I do not know how to organize them!!! I will just have to settle for saying that you have done a fantastic job with this story. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Summary: In the aftermath of the battle, Argus does the only thing he can.
Wow! I loved every minute of this story. The way you wrote it was perfect- in Argus' own language. I think I can appreciate Filch more now- yes, he was a squib, but for some reason, the books never really gave us understanding of what happened to squibs. So thank you for your own input of how they might manage their lives.
My favorite bit was that he decided to help clean the castle- when in the books, he hated having to clean up, and gave detention to students who ruined the cleanliness! Yet what else could Filch do after the battle?
Great job! :)
Author's Response: Many thanks. It was a fun challenge to try to get the flavor of Filch's dialect without going overboard. The story was inspired by the moment in the last film in which we see Filch sweeping up the rubble. Thanks for reading!
Summary: You have always loved the chase. The pursuit of Quaffles and dragons have carried you through decades. But before you discovered your childhood hobby or your career, before you can even remember, you have sought (loved) him. [reposted under new account name]
Interesting! I loved how you broke apart the stories with parentheses, but the story itself- it made me so confused! Not in a bad way! I mean, has Charlie always been with Fleur (since the wedding)? If so, is it possible, then, that Victoire is Charlie's daughter and not Bill's? The thought makes me shudder!
Jealousy and revenge are not the answer! Children, please do not ever follow Charlie's example!!!!!!!!!!!!! *chuckles* ;)
Author's Response: Their interactions started at Bill and Fleur's wedding, but it's open to interpretation whether their relationship started then... all I describe in the story is them dancing together. Glad you liked the use of parentheses!
A little postscript (if you don't mind): I love the song, Hallelujah!!!!!! My favorite version is by Rufus Wainwright, and I listen to it all the time!
Keep letting music inspire you, and keep writing!
Author's Response: Haha, yes, me too. :) Thanks again!
Harry waits for someone to meet him at Godric's Hollow on Christmas Eve. This is a story about growing up, moving on and remembering your past without taking it with you.
H/Hr friendship with a bit of H/G
How bittersweet! Goodness, you captured these emotions so well, and it tugged my heart strings... I struggled like Hermione to not cry...
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) Sorry about the almost-tears! Thank you, I am glad you liked it :)
Summary: Sirius has a problem. He doesn't want to ask James's help. But could an unexpected offer from Madam Rosmerta solve everything? And will James realise that the bravado and good looks of his best friend are just a facade?
CAN IT BE TRUE? This story achieved an honorable mention in the Illustration for Inspiration Challenge
Wow! I laughed so hard when James burst into the shop! I loved the different perspectives you had in this story, and the idea was great! Sirius, not always great with women! I adored your characterizations, too. Great job!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I struggled a lot with this one, and I'm glad you thought I got the characterisation right!
Summary: It is the beginning of seventh year, and Neville has had just about enough of Amycus Carrow.
This is Acacia Carter of Hufflepuff writing for the first third of the Character Triathalon, for the "missing moment" prompt.
Many thanks to Jess for the lightning-fast beta.
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Your characterization was just perfect! I loved this story, and i especially loved that Neville called it his badge. It's true that in war, we end up getting scars and bruises that show our bravery. I'm proud of Neville! And I'm proud of you!