I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!
EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!
Summary: A poem about Ginny Weasley after the Battle of Hogwarts.
First off, I want to say that you had beautiful imagery. My favorite line was "mingle in me like a storm." I love how that ties into your title. :)
Now I want to talk about punctuation. I love that you branched away from the norm. I generally enjoy not using punctuation in poetry, too. However, I think in this case that punctuation would have been better to emphasize some certain points, like in the last stanza when "hope" doesn't stand out. Now, I realize that it could have been done on purpose, to indicate that hope is hidden within everything else and doesn't always surface. It could also indicate that hope is used so many times it has lost its meaning. But I am wondering if perhaps it should be emphasized a little more. It doesn't have to be with punctuation. By simply hitting "enter" and making the word its own stanza would help. That was just something I noticed. Again, it doesn't actually need punctuation. I'm just musing whether it's effective without it or not. I think in some cases it is, like with your first stanza. Each idea is very separate and disconnected, helping to give that illusion of a person trying to take it all in. So, I think you did a very nice job by leaving out cumbersome commas to really help make this piece more jerky in an emotional way.
However, the capitalization threw me off. I think it would have worked better to not use any capitalization. Making the "I" be lowercase would definitely help to emphasize insignificance or feeling detached. Making all the letters be lowercase would also contribute to the sense that the world is not as it seems anymore. Just a thought.
Overall, though, I really did enjoy how emotive this piece was. Pretty raw and simple, cultivating that hollow part in me. :) Good job!
A haunted house that isn’t haunted, a Muggle fortune teller who can’t actually tell fortunes and the legend of the Cursed Green Pearl! What happens when “the nation’s favourite television ghost-hunters” stumble onto something really magical? What (apart from a mysterious chest, a broken red stiletto and a corpse) lies within the topmost room of the Haunted Tower?
It’s time for the Auror Office’s Muggle Interface Team - Brown, Bones and Beadle - to investigate.
This is Northumbrian of Ravenclaw house writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall - Extra Credit Prompt
This is one of four mystery stories I wrote for the Challenge. Until now I’ve resisted editing this story as to do so will (I believe) mean that it can’t be judged as part of the challenge (editing after the closing date is cheating). I can’t wait any longer.
Ooh!!!!!! I love a good mystery! What an awesome story! You sounded like you knew a lot about police work! I'm very impressed with this. I don't know what else to say, really, except that I am never going near cursed objects again!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I’m glad you liked it.
My knowledge of police work is a combination of research and cop-shows.Again!? When did you last go near a cursed item? :-D
Summary: One year after the defeat of Voldemort, the international wizarding community decides to commemorate the occasion with a magical convention in the American city of Phoenix, Arizona; the city had been chosen to honor the bravery of the members of the Order of the Phoenix. When Harry, Ron, and Hermione are invited to attend the convention as special guest speakers, Harry asks his American Godmother to come with them, to act as a tour guide during their travels in the desert. In this first sequel to The Accidental Godmother, Celie, Snape (her ever reluctant husband), Harry, Ron, and Hermione embark on a memorable – and hilarious – journey through the American southwest.
Oh, jealousy spreads throughout me for such a great opening to the next story in this series... I still wish that I was Celie!!
Author's Response: I'm super happy that you found this first chapter intriguing enough to make you want to read more. All I can say is that these travelers are in for a wild vacation! :) Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Oh, I can't stop laughing and I'm eager for more!
Disclaimer: I am not JKR either, nor am I a professional critic. I'm an ordinary person looking for a fun read. ;)
Author's Response: I'm glad that you found the chapter amusing! :) I had so much fun writing this story. Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Aw!!!! I still can't imagine their muggle fight, but I loved the description of it! ;) going off to read more...
Author's Response: I have to admit that the bar brawl with the bikers is one of my favorites parts in this story. Thanks for sending me your thoughts! :) Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Oh, camping, camping, camping out under the stars, we're camping, camping, camping out under the stars! We're bringing out food and gear along! Camping out under the stars...
(just a road trip song:D)
I love the idea of Sev camping!!!!!!! :) I have loved every minute of this story!
Author's Response: Thank you for continuing to read and review! :) I'm thrilled to hear that you are still enjoying the story. Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Okay, I love it. I give up all my trying to hide my excitement and tears!!!! Love Sev's character! I loved the bracelets (especially since I know the predictions come true!) and I especially loved Celie! :)
Author's Response: Thank you for being such an enthusiastic reader! :) I look forward to hearing your thoughts on the next chapter. Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Author's Response: Thank you for being such an enthusiastic reader! :) I look forward to hearing your thoughts on the next chapter. Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Here is a review: :) :) I loved it! It was awesome! What an adventure (although I probably would have snapped, too). Still wishing I was Celie... *sighs*
Author's Response: I'm glad to hear that you are still enjoying the story! :) They are definitely having a most unusual adventure! Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Teehee!!!!!!!!! I just realized that Sev and Celie got married secretly, and then his daughter followed suit! So why did Snape explode? What a great dad he is. But that's totally off topic to this story!
Great job, again! I hope Sev and Celie can catch a break! :)
Author's Response: To answer your question about Snape's anger when his daughter secretly eloped, I think it is a pretty universal trait for parents to want their children to "do as I say, not as I do" in terms of their behavior. Thanks for continuing to read and review! :) Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Goodness! How old is Celie when she has her children? That poor woman has to keep waiting? *chuckles* I still loved this story!!!!!!!!!!!! Off to read the next in the series!
Much love and happiness,
Author's Response: Celie is 43 years old when she finally has her children. Thank you for reading and sending me your thoughts! :) I'm glad that you enjoyed this story. Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Summary: A poem about the moments where Lily Evans realized she was falling for James Potter against her better judgement.
I have to say that I was rather impressed by the structure you used! :)
Before I stand in awe, there is one note I would like to make: I expected in the last stanza for the first line to read "that dreamy man bent down on one dreamy knee." So what happened? You may want to fix this, unless you feel that it is unnecessary.
Anyways, I absolutely enjoyed seeing Lily's growth in this poem, and the stages of her crush getting worse and worse. Of all the lines, my favorite had to be "and proudly struts to the winner's ring" because it was the line that gave me a mental image of arrogant James Potter strutting about.
I also really enjoyed the emphasis placed on each stanza of the "chosen" words: silly, stupid, crazy, dreamy. These are all words I usually associate with crushes, because it is so true- they are silly and stupid and crazy, but the guy is so... dreamy!!!!!! You captured this so well! Fantastic job.
The rhyme scheme was brilliant for the subject of the poem, because it was slightly goofy, suggesting that James is ridiculous and that Lily is being driven mad by it, but it is a light tone, rather than dark. I'm rambling now... :)
Searching for my silly crush, stupid dream, crazy love, dreamy groom...
Summary: Each of us wears a mask. It is invisible to many and visible to some. But what happens to us when we take off the mask? What happens when we’re given a third chance at life to make things right?
Severus Snape has been given this exact opportunity. Since his death, Snape finds himself somewhere stuck between the veil and the Wizarding world. As Snape finds himself moping around his old flat, he has unexpected visitors that change the rest of his existence. Can the trio help Severus? And will he, the man in the mask, revel more of his past?
This was a pretty emotional piece, and I had to force myself not to cry, but I was truly touched. It seemed the perfect way to send someone off into the Great Beyond. I'm glad for what you wrote and it has changed my perception on life, surely.
Keep it up! This is a great story.
Author's Response: For what it's worth, I was crying my eyes out when I wrote this and that's saying something because I never, ever cry when I write no matter what. I don't know how I changed your perception, but thank you. I'm glad that I could "shed some light" on what I believe in. Thank you (again) for the review! ~MJ
I wonder what else Snape has to tell Harry! I thought he had told him everything! What a cliff hanger, and now I have to read more!!!!!!
Author's Response: I know! I'm sure that everyone just hates me since I haven't updated for months! BUT don't worry. I'll have an update in by next week. Promise. (And that will happen since I just promised you and I like to keep my readers happy) :) So that update will be in queue no later than May 16, 2012. Deal? Deal. Thank you (again--honestly, you're so great for reviewing every chapter!) for your review!!! ~MJ
I've always been curious as to what happened after the battle, and this all makes sense to me! You have a really great talent for hooking in readers. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! You just made my day!!! Thank you for the review! I'm glad that you like it thus far. ~MJ
Summary: Ten years after her mother's death, Luna Lovegood decides to ask her father what her mother was brewing. Unsatisfied with his reply, she turns to one of his employees, Lavender Brown, and asks for help to investigate the truth.
Lavender is unsure this is a wise course of action, but like Luna, she doesn't quite believe Xenophilius' version of events.
This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the Mysterious May Great Hall Challenge - prompt Extra Credit.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. That shouldn't surprise anyone.
Thank you so much, Gina (Gmariam) for beta'ing this tale and whipping Luna into shape. You are zechadly amazing!
Thank you, Natalie, for suggesting Xanthe's maiden name.
I don't know if her will tell her the truth, but I want to know what illness his wife had that couldn't be treated! Also, I feel like I'm missing something: this is the third fic that has put Lavender as a Werewolf or having been bitten by one- I don't remember that being in the books, but perhaps I missed it. If not, was it in a JKR interview?
Anyways, really well written. My only regret is that Snape did not speak at all! :D
Author's Response: Um, no, I haven't made her a werewolf - that's Neil. Lavender fell from the balcony and Greyback fell with her. He was about to savage her and possibly did claw her, or bite, and was then hit by Hermione and then Trelawney. She's not a werewolf in my story because she was attacked by one that wasn't transformed, (like Bill). Glad you liked the story. I wasn't sure what purpose Snape would have in the story which was why I didn;t include him. It was a Dumbledore McGonagall thing :)
I didn't want to go into details with Xanthe's illness, or make up something Magical, so I imagined that she had cancer or something similar.
Thank you for the review, and especially for this story which hasn#t had many reads or reviews. ~Carole~
Summary: One of Severus Snape's many nightmares.Written for the Copycat Challenge, imitating Emily Dickenson's In Winter in My Room.
Poetry is poetry, and there are no rules in poetry. In fact, that's the first rule, if you can get past the paradoxical nature of that statement. :)
Anyways, this was one of the most beautiful and agonizing things I've ever read, because it felt like a dream and it captured the emotions just right with its subtle simplicity. You really should consider publishing a lot of your work. No doubt that one day in the future, they will sell The Complete Works of Hestia Jones (Natalie), an it will be a best seller! Flying off the shelves, and filling children's (and adults) dreams by the millisecond. :)
Author's Response: That is the best compliment anyone has EVER paid me. :D While I won't be allowed to publish my fandom-related work, I could write raps and agonising poetry :D:D
Summary: As the title says, it's basically the whole story in Limerick form. Hope you like it.
Oh limericks. They make things have such a goofy feel to them.
I rather liked how you were able to lay out Harry's life in this poem. It sounds like you had fun, though I'm sure trying to keep the rhythm and rhyme was a hassle.
There are some spots that just didn't flow right with the rhythm. I would reread it out loud and find what I'm talking about, because some lines felt too long, and others felt a little forced. The one stanza that really stood out in this matter was this one:
Some good years he spent learning in bliss
Never knowing that much was amiss
Then year four came along
And it all fell to wrong
Voldemort was back from the abyss
Notice that the last line doesn't fit with rhythm? There is an extra syllable that is causing the line to feel jagged. First, "Voldemort" doesn't seem to fit with the rhythm. This has a "duh duh dun duh duh dun duh duh dun" rhythm, and Voldemort doesn't seem to fit that pattern. You want inflections to dip here and there, because that's what a limerick does. I realize that you have nine syllables for the first two lines and need it for the last one, but the nine syllables used doesn't seem to work. I would change the line to "The Dark Lord did come back from the mist."
Just make sure to read your poems out loud. It is easier then to spot things like punctuation and grammar and rhythm. ;)
Other than that, I had a fun time reading this ditty about Harry! It was light-hearted and a great way to remember the hero.
Summary: Harry Potter's presence at Hogwarts is a painful reminder to Severus of what he lost all those years ago.
It's amazing how when we read the Harry potter book for the first time, we weren't focused on what Snape was thinking. But now I do! And now I know! This was really well written and quite beautiful. Is there more to this story? I think it would be fun to see even more of Snape's thoughts throughout Harry's stay at Hogwarts.
Summary: Five stanzas to falling in love with Ronald Bilius Weasley.
This is Hermione's POV, starting with the Yule Ball in GoF and following through to the Final Battle in DH. Each stanza fits a different event.
I shall feed you.
I like the contrast between hate and love, though now it's beginning to feel cliche in this world!
Harry Potter has come to Hogwarts.
But I am waiting for him.I who loved his mother, detested his father for taking her away from me. I deserved Lily Evans. I gave my word to protect her son. But how shall I stop myself? I want to see a young, helpless James Potter sqirm and writhe under my gaze....
Sigh, why can't Snape see the quiet nature of Harry? Harry was certainly nothing like James his first year! And yet, as Dumbledore said, Snape sees what he wants to see. I think it's so he doesn't have to dwell too much on Lily, but rather so he can take out his boiled anger on "Potter's son." Good characterization! This was a fun and nostalgic read. :D
Author's Response: Ah, well, Harry seemed pretty quiet then and there. However, we know that he has quite the temper! Hahaha, nope, James and Harry were pretty much nothing alike - except perhaps rationalization? Haha, yes. Very true. Thank you. (Bow)