Penname: Nagini Riddle [Contact]
Real name: Kaylee
Member Since: 04/28/12
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I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!

EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!

Since I write so much poetry, I thought I would make a list of my actual stories that are on the archives:

Completed:
If I Die Young
His Last Descendant
In the Realms of Jealousy
The Autumn Air
A Darker Nightmare
Vanishing Point
The Ghosts that Follow
The Baby-Sitter
Kill It Before It Dies
The Sight of Her
A Christmas Meal of Snow
The Man of Hogsmeade
Set in Silver Stone
Unfaithful
Pills and Potions
The Purity of the Turf
Pearls Mean Tears
The Ties That Bind
The Full House
Delayed Arrival
Hot Off the Press

WIP:
Murder in the Moonlight

To Follow:
I Stood in the Ruins
Questions (tentative title)
Eclipse of the Heart
Lines in the Sand


Here are all my poems (in order of update):

Poetry
Her Hand
His Only Friend
Mad World
Refusal
Negotiation With Death
An Unexpected Turn
The Coffin Brawl
Wasted Space
One Sweet Night
Life in Technicolor
The Bice Day
Dark Side
The Day the Music Died
Shades of Grey
The Endless Road
The Foulest Creature
The Lone Sentry
If No One Will Listen
Soiled
Just a Diary
Frozen
An Empty Photograph
Moonlight
Death's Horizon
The Canvas Life
The Sun Sets in Paradise
Grand Adage
The Banished Howl
Hear Me
Celestina's Songbook: Summer Lovin'
The Certain Dark
The Cursed Ruin
A Greying View
Silent Ash
Left Behind
Save You
With Silent Wounds
The Snow Globe
A Wintry Lust
Hogsmeade Lights
The Calming
The Possibility
Today I Do Not Want To Be...
Walls
A Brief Star
Beautiful Disaster
Where is Your Heart
Fix You
The Black Rose
A Failing Mission
The Darkest Realm
Godric's Hollow
Halo
Unspeakable
Hidden Mysteries
Salire
The Seasons Change
Petrified Desire
In Anguish
Paradeisos
In Final Minutes
The Wrong Child
For the Man on the Street
Something Better
Faust Arp
The Silver Doe/The Silver Stag
Fallen Leaves
Red is the color of death
Living Shroud
Little Bruno and the Evil Elf
Eternal Ice
For the Hero
Magical
The Frost in Melancholy
It's Christmas Time in Diagon Alley
It Came Upon A Charm So Clear
A Ravenclaw's Blue Christmas
Frēodōm
Corpses of the Shadow and the Night
You Just Wink (First Impressions)
His
In Agony
Killing Me Softly
Separation
Absentia
Don't Let Me Go
Pax Tecum (Peace Be With You)
Casualties
Blind Weakness
The Show Must Go On
A Coming War?
At the Battlefront
No One Can Ever Know
Do you think of me the same?
Into the Forest
A Lesson with Biscuits
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 1
Sacrificium
A Restless Wait
Dawn (Go Away)
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 2
Betty
BTSK
on this side of heaven
Colorblind
Through the Mines
The Sparrow and the Wolf
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The Prince's Love by Miss B
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: He loved her all his life...

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 190 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/20/11 Updated: 09/24/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Prince's Love

First off, I just want to say that I was moved. This not only was beautiful, the structure was so mature! I loved how you framed the poem.

The first time he saw her
They were both so young
The world was new
The world was theirs
The Prince had found love


One, I like that each stanza is five lines. Not too short but not too long. :) Also, I like that your first line has to do with time in almost every stanza, and then the third and fourth stanza mirror each other in word choice. Then the last line, always about love... Your anaphora is just gorgeous! It really helps the poem feel as one unit than separate ideas. I also like the simplicity in your diction, which allows the sophisticated structure shine through. I'm rather jealous. :)

Time spent happily
They became fast friends
Learning about each other's lives
Learning about themselves
She was the Prince's Love


The emphasis that he loved her and not necessarily the other way around is rather poignant in your poem. She found in him a friend, and certainly loved him, but as a friend, not the way Snape desired her. I rather enjoyed the emphasis that while learning about each other, they also learned about themselves, which is important about relations with others.

Time couldn't stop for them
They couldn't stay in happiness forever
Growing up was inevitable
Growing apart was too
Yet she was still the Prince's Love


Oh, cruel time! How it can change everyone. I really liked the emphasis on that in this stanza. :) yet, despite it all, he still loved her. It makes me cry!

Pride, reputations, and destiny got in the way
He refused to change his ways
She cried for what they used to have
She cried for what could have been
She was always the Prince's Love


This is where there is a slight break from the structure. I would have found the first line to have more of an impact if it had used the word time or referred to it. I can sort of relate things getting in the way to being "busy," a time word, but I feel you could have used that word for effect and to keep your structure. Other than that, I loved that it made Lily just as sad as it made Severus, and she wanted to stay friends, but found that life jut wouldn't permit it.

No longer even cordial
He hopelessly watched her leave
She had moved on to better things
She had moved on from him
The Prince's love remained


See, the first line uses "longer," another time related word, which is great! And this stanza really pulled at my heart- the fact that she moved on, but he couldn't. I connected to Severus at this point. :)

Then she was gone
Her heart no longer beat
Part of her lived on in her son
Part of her lives on in him
The Prince's love would live forever


I suppose "then" can be related to time, but again, I think you need another reference to time, to really emphasize that time doesn't wait for us to do what is right. I did, however, like how you showed that Harry carried on Lily's legacy. ;)

It was his time to rejoin her
This was the end for him
He had seen his eyes
He had seen her eyes
Always, she was the Prince's Love


Augh!!!! The eyes that always captivated him! Poor Severus!!!!!! This was a beautiful way to end the poem and also allude to the fact that Snape looked into Harry's eyes before dying- though he probably felt like he was looking at Lily's eyes for the last time. It's amazing how eyes can play a vital role as a symbol of not only being a window to the soul but also a vehicle to portray emotion!!!!!!!! :)

I loved this poem so much!!!!!!!! I think a few changes can be made so the structure becomes that much more stronger, but overall it was gorgeous and really well written!

~Nagini Riddle

 

Drive Your Car On by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: When Vernon Dursley starts acting like a prat, Hestia Jones begins rapping on him, Missy Elliot style.

Winner of the MC Kreacher Challenge at Poetry Anyone (MNFF Boards). Rap inspired by and written to the beat of Missy Elliot's Get Ur Freak On, which I love to bits.

DISCLAIMER: Do you really think J.K.Rowling would write this, though?

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 388 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/26/11 Updated: 09/26/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/27/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

My goodness! I forced myself to not laugh since I've been having a bad cough lately, an laughing only makes it worse. So I smiled. And shook my head in laughter, telling my little iPod screen, "My goodness, what was Natalie thinking? She should be a songwriter! No, a rapper!" and to answer your disclaimer: JKR might not write this, but I believe you would

Author's Response: Sorry to hear about your cold. :( BAD COLD, GO AWAY! And I am considering a career in rapping, since I sometimes record raps to amuse myself. Thanks!!

 

Hey, brother by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: How desperate were the last days of Regulus Black's life? With a girlfriend in danger, and an increasing dread for his fate, he turns to the only one who can help him.

But will Sirius listen?

This poem/rap was written for the MC Kreacher challenge set by the wondrous Julia (the opaleye). I chose to base the form and feel of the rap on Stan by Eminem featuring Dido. It probably helps if you know the song, but basically there are three voices in this.

Disclaimer: JKR - nope, not me.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 530 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/27/11 Updated: 09/27/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Hey, brother

Hello, pufflefluff!!!! :)
I just love how you are able to put emotion into everything. This was no exception. I loved what you chose for Regulus! And what a great way for Regulus to want to come back.

One note I have- I don't know if you were allowed to mess around with structure, but I think that the last two lines would have more of an impact and also make more sense if they were separate from the last stanza. Otherwise, I have to make a conscientious effort to change point of views suddenly in the same stanza, and it becomes slightly confusing. I had to read it three times before I realized that Sirius was talking to his brother. But if it was seperate from the last stanza, the change of pov would be more effective. :)

That's my only criticism. I wanted so badly to start rapping this as I read it! We definitely need to find a way so we can listen to our music fictions like this! That would be so cool to hear the lyrics we wrote to the song, and maybe make them even more dramatic...

Off to read more of your stuff...

~Nagini Riddle, a slytherin' Gryffindor

Author's Response: Thank you very muchfor the review. With regard to separating the last two lines, it's actually the last two stanzas that are from Sirius' POV which I delineated by adding an extra space between the last hook and then the start from his POV. The part about Marlene being safe, and 'Hey, brother, I just got your letter', is all from Sirius' pOV - much like the last two verses in Stan are from Eminem's POV.

Thank you again, ~Carole~

 

Vigilance! by XenaTwin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Mad-Eye Moody's last thoughts, as he prepares to lead Harry and his protectors away from the Dursley's home.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 232 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/28/11 Updated: 09/29/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Vigilance!

I had a lot of fun reading this! It was very conversational and even though it was about vigilance, it felt not as dark as many poems about fighting are. But that can be a very good thing! It shows that even amidst terror and chaos, there can still be laughs and fun. It is how we cope with our trials that define who we are, and I think this poem does a good job of showing that, especially since you chose a character who was tough and willing to stand up for what he felt was right. :)
Great job!

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thank you. One of the things I loved about Moody was his biting sarcastic wit even in his dire seriousness. Wonderful character.

 

Silence and Memory by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: In the aftermath of the war, Percy finds that he cannot forgive himself.

This poem was written as a sort of companion/continuation to my fic The Long Way Back; this deals with the consequences of his actions during the war. However, you don't need to read the fic to understand the poem.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 197 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/30/11 Updated: 10/05/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: He remembers

First off, I would like to commend you for writing something different. This was so beautiful in structure! You should do more poems like this. :)

Heavy silence. Stifling like a cloak,
A shroud to bury his pride with the dead,
The fallen ranks whose names he sees listed,
Counted and sorted in orderly columns.
There’s no call for pride anymore.
Silence is all he can bear to give.


Gah! The imagery is just so darn beautiful. Especially the columns part. It's so scary to think of your name as just part of a list, among many other words, without significance. My only concern is that you used pride twice so close together. It would be fine if they were right next o each other, like repeating the idea to emphasize it, but there is enough gap to make it awkward for me. Perhaps "ego" could fit in for one of the "pride"s? That is my only nitpick for this stanza. The rest of it made me shiver and silent. Silent as the grave, as it were. I felt as though I was actually a part of the story, staring at the list and feeling hollow and dead. What a great start!

He remembers.

*gasps* Risky! But it works so well to let it stand alone. And it makes me stop, which is a very mature thing to do in this poem. You don't want your reader to just skim the poem, but to actually stop and be affected. And this line does just that.

A list of names, tirelessly compiled,
The sweat of hours, days, weeks,
A masterwork of persistence;
A list, in the papers, hatefully used,
Promising bloodshed and terror,
Hatred played with consummate skill.
A strident silence, demanding he speak,
A shark’s grin awaiting his response.
All sharp teeth and instinct for pain,
A gleeful Yaxley drives the knife home:
“You’ve done marvelous work, Weasley “
Too bad Umbridge took the credit.”
Silence is all he can afford to give.


The list again!!!! It will surely haunt me now! It is like the most painful cramp in my leg, which I am having currently (nothing to do with reading, I assure you). I adored the diction you used- "sweat" and "masterpiece" give so much more to the imagery of working on this list. And it makes me hate the tirade against the Muggle-borns. I already did hate it, but to see that it takes so much effort to hate against a group makes me wonder if it is really worth it? I also love how you compare the work to a shark. *Jaws music plays*
However, I don't think "gleeful" is the right word to use for Yaxley. It seems out of place with te rest of the poem. Yet, I am blanking on a better word. Think about it.
I really hate Umbridge so much. She is worse than Lockhart and Bellatrix, who are also both low on my list. (There's that list again!) This stanza only makes me hate her more!
And I love the repetitive "silence" permeating throughout the poem. It really captures the emotion of the poor man working tirelessly to please a vindictive master.

He remembers.

It's back!!!!! And just as poignant and heart-stopping as the first time. What a wonderful way to break up the stanzas.

He keeps a tally in his head:
Oliver Wood, seen at a bar, avoided;
Penny, ditto, evaded with pounding heart.
Hurrying past Weasley’s Wizard Wheezes,
Unable to face his brother’s grief.
Strained silence at the Burrow,
Air fit to snap with unspoken words,
Percy refusing to speak the truth:
He’s not worthy of his family’s love.
Silence is all he dares to give.


Poor Percy. He isn't my favorite character, but you make me feel for him. He should be worthy of his family's love! Silence reigns...

He cannot forget.

What a way to end it!

Great job!!! I wish I could take more time to give a more thorough review, but I can't. Sorry!

 

Hush, Dominique by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Dominique can't cope with the death of a loved one. Her father tries to help her.

Based on Eminem's Mockingbird. Written for the MC Kreacher challenge over on Poetry, Anyone?

As always, thank you to Julia/the opaleye for setting such wonderful challenges at PA. Thank you also to Minna/minnabird for the comments/crit and Jess/ToBeetc for the punctuation tip.

As you can tell from the appalling mess that I call spag bol, I am not JK Rowling.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Strong Profanity

Word count: 468 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/06/11 Updated: 10/06/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: Hush, Dominique

Oh wow! If I try really hard, I can almost rap this! What a great song! I want to read more about Dominique now. :) What I always find funny about raps is that they are just sentences said really fast to some rhythm. They aren't what I would consider "lyrical poetry" like most songs are. But I find that your rap song has a lyrical sense to it. Great job!
Just a side note- you really only used one bad word- was it really necessary? Either take it out or go crazy. Just a suggestion.

Author's Response: Hello, Kaylee!

I love Mockingbird -- it was the first song of Eminem's that I heard, and I bloody loved it. Ummm, I've deleted the story I had written on Dominique, though she does appear in another one, Blood and Roses, so do check that out if it's your thing. But I'm not sure it would be -- I don't think you're into slash (correct me if I'm wrong) and it is, ha, slashy :P

YAY to you finding it lyrical despite the very much non-lyricism of it :D I disagree with you on the swearword, however. Eminem only used the f-word right at the end, and I find swearing far more effective if it's used sporadically rather than too much. I also don't think Bill would be one to swear a lot -- only when the safety of his daughter is concerned does he get really angry, I suppose.

This is definitely not one of my favourite poems (I'm not much of a poet anyway), so it means a lot that you liked it :) Ta for the review.

Soraya xxx

 

The Pauper's Tale by ljmckay
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Harry Potter is living a perfectly normal life, until a mysterious letter arrives for his cousin. Why is his mother so worried, and his aunt so excited? A journey into Uncle Sev's memories may provide the answers...

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6486 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/23/11 Updated: 10/25/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Okay, so your other story of All that Glitters is Gold ( I think that was the title) makes more sense now, but I still find myself wanting more! Why did Lily marry James and not Snape? Why won't she marry Snape now? He seems like a very good candidate for her now!
Anyways, this really got me to look at the Wizarding world in a different light. An amazing job!

Author's Response: Glad you liked it! As to Lily and Snape, well, he still has some issues, even though he's a lot easier to deal with in this story. ;) James was always the more charming candidate, and Lily was young. Now? We'll see, but I think there is a lot of painful history between them. I hope I can give you more soon, but I'm a little bit stalled on the continuation.

 

Winter by Padfoot11333
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary:

He says when you gonna make up your mind?

When you gonna love you as much as I do?

Cause things are gonna change so fast

I tell you that I'll always want you near

You say that things change my dear

Boys get discovered as winter melts

Flowers competing for the sun *

Lily Evans and Severus Snape are best friends. Right?

Severus Snape and James Potter are worst enemies. Right?

But what happens when Lily has to make up her mind? What happens when she can no longer put up with Severus, and she can no longer ignore James?

Things change, and that's what Lily has to discover. But what else she discovers is that many things stay the same. And she can't decide what should stay and what should go.

*Lyrics taken from Winter by Tori Amos

Categories: Severus/Lily Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 2479 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
10/31/11 Updated: 12/08/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/28/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Well, where is the rest of this story??????? I was all ready for more, because you have set up a brilliant story! I think you've captured Snape really well, and poor Lily just sees the boy who was her childhood friend, although I think that she does see the good that is in him.
Keep this story going!!! Please!!!! :D

 

Summary: A stern resolve envelops those who prepare for the Battle of Hogwarts.


This poem has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill: Best Poem.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 112 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/05/11 Updated: 11/05/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Okay, I have to rewrite my whole review because the stupid Internet just quit on me! Don't you hate when that happens? And it was such a great review!!!! So here's what I remember of it...

Rah rah!!!! This makes me want to take up my sword- er, wand- and take a stand! It strongly reminded me of all those speeches that coaches give to their teams in the movies. You have such a great command of language! And your sonnet was beautifully rhythmic! My sonnets in the Harry Potter world lack that element, but yours was flawless- and I'm not just saying that to be nice. I really did love that I could almost hear a battle drum sounding!

My favorite word? "Swath." It is now my word of the day! It has such a great imagery in such a short word! And it works so well for a battle poem!

If I strain myself really hard and have to find something to be fixed... It would have to be your second line of the first stanza. The rhythm doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem, and I think it's because of your word choice. It would work better without the "and" but I also realize that each line needs ten syllables. So, I would find a synonym for "strong" that is two syllables and take out "and." Or you can just skip this little portion of my review and be happy with your poem, since it really is a piece of art! ;)

Thanks for reading this review, though I didn't have much to say to help you further your skills. Your skills are way better than mine... :)

~Nagini Riddle

 

Betrayal/Regret by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: A pair of sonnets that explore the betrayal and regret of the Marauders.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 234 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/11 Updated: 11/06/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: Two sonnets

Okay, I have to review these again!!!!!! They are just so beautifully written and I am in awe!


i. Betrayal

We roamed the night, a foursome strong and free.
The forest bound our friendship fast and true,
And yet our bond was one we’d come to rue:
For you betrayed our love and loyalty.

First off, the rhyme scheme is so well done! The rhyme isn't forced and it allows the true regret and betrayal come through. :) I love how it has a dark sense to it because you mentioned how they became friends in a dark forest. And my heart breaks at the bitter tone in the last two lines- we have come to regret our friendship with you because you are a traitor! It makes me shiver, and I hope to never be a traitor! My only nitpick is that the rhythm of the poem isn't quite iambic and seems slightly off... But I don't know how to help with that, since I am not an expert on meter or rhythm! Still, the stanza works, and it broke my heart!

You turned-abandoned light to serve the dark;
The shadow in your soul now somehow bought.
Whether feared or forced it matters not:
For you betrayed us when you took the Mark.


Very nice imagery! I can see the darkness an shadows forcing themselves onto Peter. And I actually liked that you said "Mark" instead of dark mark, because it lends to ambiguity. He was marked in more ways than one, and each mark was a betrayal and drive him farther from "the good side."

We trusted you, above all else we gave
Our faith-our very lives-into your hand!
And yet you broke our hope, our desperate plan:
For you betrayed them to their final grave.


First off, I love how you allude to the Secret-Keeer job. Their lives were in Peter's hands, literally! I also enjoyed that you didn't say death, but implied that they lost their lives by going to their final grave, which has a spooky effect on me and scares me, especially with Halloween so close now.... :)

Run, you spineless coward, traitor, spy:
For I will never rest until you die.


The shift into directness and this bitter hateful tone scared me. It whacked me in my heart, no joke. Th threat is so strong and terrorizing, but at the same time, you wrote the rest of the poem so well that I can feel the justification in wanting to kill Peter. Great job on your poem! It doesn't matter if it wasn't iambic or anything- in fact, it's entirely possible it is iambic and I just didn't pick up on it. I said I am horrible at meter!


ii. Regret

I gave myself unto a master dark,
Who took my life, my hand, my every friend.
He left me naught but silver in the end,
And bleak regret that I did take the Mark.


I really liked how this tied so well into the other poem. You have repeating motifs that are depressing yet gorgeous at the same time.
And great allusion to the silver hand!!!! He really did leave him silver, didn't he? The hand child him in the end....

I know I sold their lives to save my own!
I mourn it still to this, my dying day.
The end is near and now I cannot say:
That I regret the pain you’ve always known.


I wonder if Peter really did feel any regret for his actions. But I love how depressing this stanza was. It leaves me sad that they lived for so with the feeling of regret and revenge. It just really pricks my heart.

For I was wrong, my choice a craven deed
That no repentance ever can undo.
False friend, dishonest rat-I know it’s true.
I do regret the life you've had to lead.


Great word choice!!! "Craven" has become my favorite word of the entire piece. And, the fact that his regrets are directed towards his friends and not at himself tells me that maybe he feels he deserves what happened to him. How depressing!

I am a spineless coward, traitor, spy:
But now, at last, in darkness I can die.


What a great way to tie this into the other sonnet! It must take a lot of guts to admit to being a coward, and it is really sad that he left himself to die in the darkness!

These poems were fantastic!!!! I have thoroughly enjoyed then the second time around. I seem to be reading a lot of depressing poetry... ;)

Keep it up!!!!!! I want to read more poems from you! :)

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: A very belated thank you for such an amazing review!! I am not sure what I did to deserve such a heap of loveliness, but I really appreciate it. I wrote these poems about a year ago now and always hoped they'd get a bit more of a response. Now my wish is fulfilled! I do believe this is iambic, as that is the standard meter for a sonnet. I'm glad they worked so well together. Yes, I do think Peter felt regret. Sometimes I find it so hard to believe that James, Sirius, and Remus could be friends with someone like him without there being something worth being friends with, you know? Something pushed him to do what he did, and I do think it was hard for him. As for writing more poems...I used to write more for archive challenges, now it's mostly when the inspiration hits. It does take me some work, lol. I'm still so glad you came by to read these two poems and leave such a gorgeous review. Sorry for the belated gratitude and rambly reply. Thank youuuuuu! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 07/19/12 Title: Chapter 1: Two sonnets

Wow! What a great way to write about how the Mauraders felt about betrayal! Wonderfully done! And happy birthday! Equinox Chick said to say that and review your stuff! :) So I am. *sings happy birthday with her somewhat good voice* *laughs*

Author's Response: A very belated thank you for both the review and the birthday wishes! I'm so glad you read this poem, as I felt it was a strong poem that no one read, lol. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again! ~Gina :)

 

The Two Black Sisters by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: When their sister runs away with a Mudblood, desecrating their family's honour, how do they react?



This poem won Stage 2:Free Verse at the Triathlon at Poetry Anyone? Inspired by the following prompt:

We must not look at goblin men,

We must not buy their fruits:

Who knows upon what soil they fed

Their hungry, thirsty roots?


~Christina Rossetti, Goblin Market

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 187 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/06/11 Updated: 11/06/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/27/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah, if only Cissy had decided to follow Andromeda... Bellatrix- I don't know what to say about her. She is twisted, but it is partially her family's fault for teaching her such values. It makes me wonder why some children follow in their parents' footsteps and others don't...
Great poem, by the way, and thanks, too, for giving me the information for joining the contests! I hope I will do well in them! :)

Author's Response: Yes. -sigh- The Blacks were a piece of work. I think the difference was that Bellatrix had an inherent cruelty in her which was unleashed by her service under Volders. >.< Thanks for the read and review!

 

Dragon and Dove by Envy_I_May_Be
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Dragon and Dove; innocence and shadow; light and dark. They are rivals, yet one cannot exist without the other. A Dramione poem.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 118 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/12/11 Updated: 11/19/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 07/18/12 Title: Chapter 1: Dragon and Dove

Wow! Great opposites. Why has nobody given this a review????????? Beautiful poem!

Author's Response: You're racking up major brownie points here, lol. Thank you :)

 
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/20/12 Title: Chapter 1: Dragon and Dove

This is beautiful! I love the contrast between dragon and dove and your diction is just gorgeous! I have nothing to add to its beauty, but I would like to express concern on punctuation- the first half used it, then the last half doesn't really. Was there a purpose to that? It kind-of distracted me, but I overlooked it in order to read the poem.

My favorite line was, "steal my innocence." I thrilled at reading it. I felt like this was a love story of sorts- and it makes me want to be the dragon- or maybe the dove... but I feel sometimes like I am both. Ooh! That's another great interpretation- two sides to one person...

I must leave this review and now ponder my new train of thought!

 

The Dark Son's Lament by Envy_I_May_Be
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: A poem about Draco's feelings about becoming a Death Eater; set during HBP.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 218 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/28/11 Updated: 12/07/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 07/18/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Dark Son's Lament

Goodness! What a dark poem. But such beautiful diction! I was blown away, and I feel a little sense of deep foreboding. *shivers*

 

How Many Times by iwannabeanauror
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: After Lily leaves her Defence Against the Dark Arts O.W.L, she writes a poem to the person she thought was her best friend for life.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 100 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/29/11 Updated: 12/07/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 09/20/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

HEY!!!! Great letter poem! I actually rather enjoyed that this wasn't flowery and full of imagery. It was blunt, just like Lily is. I wrote a similar poem, titled Where is Your Heart in the PA. But what really drew me in was that Lily wished for their friendship to continue but found the strength to tell Severus that she couldn't let their friendship continue.

Spelling: "Dissagreements" only has one "s"

I have loved all you poetry! Great job!

 

A Miracle For Christmas by Hypatia
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: When Sirius Black has an idea, not even his friends can convince him it’s doomed to failure. Thus, when Sirius decides to throw a Christmas party in order to play matchmaker for James and Lily, nothing will deter him from his plans. However, Sirius has never actually hosted a party before and one disaster follows the next. Eventually, even Sirius has to admit that it would take a miracle in order for Lily to fall for James. Fortunately, Christmas is a time for miracles...

This is Hypatia of Gryffindor, writing for the Great Hall-iday Challenge, Operation: Mistletoe

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 12533 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/08/11 Updated: 12/17/11


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/26/12 Title: Chapter 5: A Little Christmas Miracle

Aww, this was so sweet! But also extremely hilarious! I busted up laughing. I'm glad I read Where Darkness meets Light before this, because the minute Lily said her best gift had been a necklace, my brain clicked!
Thanks for another great story. I think JKR herself should employ you, because a lot of your stories are perfect for filing in the little holes. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I would love to work for JKR (even for free, heck I'd be willing to pay her). I'm really glad you enjoyed my take on how James and Lily finally got together.

Thanks for reviewing,
Hypatia

 

The Real Magic by goldensnidget92
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 31]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThis is a story about a love of books. It is a story about a boy and a girl united by this love.


Perhaps there's a reason why Hermione Granger values frienship so strongly. Perhaps there's a reason why Hogwarts: A History means so much to her. And perhaps there's more to her life before Hogwarts than we have been told.


This is her story.

This story was nominated for a Quicksilver Quill Award 2012: Best General Story!


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 16760 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/21/11 Updated: 05/24/12


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 05/24/12 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Friends and Farewells

Yes, readin is an amazing magic! The first paragraph of this story was something I could really relate to, and I feel the same about books as Hermione. They are another world to enter and discover something more about life and ourselves. Thanks for a great prequel to Hogwarts. Perhaps you could write about Ron or Ginny or even Neville next...

Author's Response: Thank you! I thought that people on here would especially relate to a love of reading, as we obviously love it so much because of Harry Potter. And haha, maybe I'll do just that...

 

Why Crookshanks? by Snidgetgirl
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Have you ever wondered why Hermione picked Crookshanks over all of the other adorable cats in the store? Needless to say, you will find out by reading!
Read and review, please! I like to hear from you all!

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 825 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/29/11 Updated: 01/03/12


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 06/20/12 Title: Chapter 1: Why Crookshanks?

Well, since everyone needs to be loved, I just can't find it in my heart to criticize!
It was very short, but actually it was very nice. I loved that Hermione was drawn to the kittens, an then to the cat. And it makes more sense that Hermione was so defensive of her cat later on!
Great job! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I agree that it is waaaaaay too short, but ...umm ... Yea, I've got no excuse :) thank you for giving me some love, and hank you for the lovely review! (gives love back) *Cailee

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I agree that it is waaaaaay too short, but ...umm ... Yea, I've got no excuse :) thank you for giving me some love, and thank you for the lovely review! (gives love back) *Cailee

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I agree that it is waaaaaay too short, but ...umm ... Yea, I've got no excuse :) thank you for giving me some love, and thank you for the lovely review! (gives love back) *Cailee

 

White Jade by AidaLuthien
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: The youngest prince of China prepares to leave the capital to go to the Dragon Pearl.

This is AidaLuthien of Hufflepuff House's final for the Charming Characters class.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2779 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/01/12 Updated: 01/08/12


Reviewer: Nagini Riddle Signed
Date: 06/30/12 Title: Chapter 1: Leaving Home

Why is this only one chapter??? It is very interesting so far! I never thought of what the Wizarding world would be like in Asia! I especially love the wand idea! How does he get sorted? Do they get sorted? What's going to happen to him????? :) if you couldn't tell, I love to read and imagine things.

 
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