I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!
EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!
it might not be, but still by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Before Remus leaves for the Battle, what goes on in his mind?
Winner of the Copycat Challenge; written after the style of e e cumming's it may not always be so;and i say.What a beautiful tribute to the protector, Remus, though we know that Tonks came to the battle and died anyway. He was trying to protect his family! The fact he had a family makes me so happy, and hopeful for my future. I may not see a battle like this one, but I hope I can be like Remus and protect my family from other dangers in the world...
Author's Response: That is a nice thought. I hope the same for myself too! :) Thanks for reading and reviewing. (BTW, have you signed up at the Beta Forums?)
Not Alone by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]
Summary:
Hermione never left Harry's side...
...But that doesn't mean she never thought about it.
Wow!!! Wow! And a third wow! *speechless*
You managed to make this a story and poem at the same time, a feat that I find rather difficult. It flowed so well, and I could feel the guilt pouring from Hermione. Goodness, Jess, you are an amazing poet! Where do you get it? :P
~Nagini Riddle
P.S. Have a happy Halloween, and don't try to leave anyone alone... *spooky music*
Author's Response:
Helloooo, my prolific poem reviewer!
Hermione's plight in the tent is one of the most tender and potent genres of character study in the Potterverse, yet so little is made of that time. Julia explores it well in The Lost Weeks, and this humble contribution to the pool pales in comparison, but I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Thank you for visiting, and I shall make sure neither Harry nor Hermione are left alone. Muahahahahaha!
~Jess
The Lost Weeks by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]
Summary: 
Hermione sits and thinks of the boy who left and why she did not follow.
Tied in first place for the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best Poetry.
My goodness! I absolutely loved this poem! When I have time later, I will definitely write a critique for it. This poem will be the second poem going into my favorites! The prose was so beautiful! I loved the repetition of her waiting, and also of the images of the leaves! What a magnificent writing style you have! Perhaps yog can tutor me in the art of poetry? :)
~Nagini Riddle
Author's Response: Thank you :) I would be happy to help you with your poetry!
Last Moments (Ends With You) by Eleanor Lupin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]
Summary: A lament for two lovers who died side by side in the most horrific war in wizarding history.
The title made me cry- which really got me, since I hadn't even started reading it yet! I'm rather jealous of your titles.
Anyways, then I realized from the summary that this must be about Remus and Tonks, so I again cried because that scene in the book was really terrible.
And then I actually read the poem- and I don't know how to put into words how it affected me. Goodness, I can't even critique it because it was so beautiful! Your first poem on MNFF??? You have a gift for poetry, then. :)
Eleanor, I am going to badger you to write more poems, because all the ones I've read are just so gorgeous! Please!!!! I am eager to read more of your poetry. :)
Okay, I suppose that is all. Like I said, this poem was magnificent, and I can't find fault, especially when it touches on such a tragic subject. ~Nagini Riddle
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, I can't believe I didn't see this! Thank you for the lovely review - I've been writing a bit of poetry lately so I plan to post some soon. :)
~Nora
Summary: The vital Battle of Hogwarts is abruptly put to an end by an intruder and an incident. Opening his eyes, Lord Voldemort finds his identity has been obliterated; he is now young Tom Riddle. He and the intruder Bella Reagan, someone he knew so long ago, must find a way to live, survive—but not quite underground.
After much frenzy, the Ministry states that the Dark Lord is gone and continues rounding up many confused, chaotic Death Eaters. Minerva McGonagall, the Headmistress, requires Hogwarts students to repeat their previous year so as to receive competent magical education. So when Harry recognizes Tom Riddle, he believes Lord Voldemort has infiltrated Hogwarts and leads an urgent investigation to find the truth of things.
Tom and Reagan are under scrutiny of the Trio and the professors even as several notorious Death Eaters elude capture and more old acquaintances, by happenstance, are found again. Security must be built by any means, and the opposition’s threats held at bay. There are few people any one can trust.
But it is as if they are looking through a veil, thinking through a veil. There’s a truth in the undercurrent of this unnatural flow of life in the Light, one that can’t seem to get past anyone’s mind. After all, the Light plays tricks, too.
Disclaimer: I am not J.K. Rowling.
Very interesting start. My curiosity has been piqued and I want to keep reading to see where this goes. Good job!
Again, quite interesting. I'm very curious to see how this turns out! Although I do wonder why he didn't show himself to someone who would have recognized him as both Tom riddle and voldemort. I'm sure that there were still loyal death eaters of his that knew him as both...
Can't wait to see what happens next!
Well, I think that you should try to give Riddle more of an edge. He seems too compliant and willing to let Bella control him, so perhaps that needs some more explanation. However, you have a good writing style, and I think if you keep working at it, this story will evolve into a masterpiece. :)
A Typical Day in the Weasley House by PInk_Witch
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]
Summary: The Weasley house is always interesting. Enjoy a few select moments from Molly's day.
This was very sweet! I rather enjoyed the simplicity of it. Go Weasleys! The only thing that I thought could be changed was the stanza that mentioned Molly was alone again and wanted school to begin. I think here would be a good place to add some details about Molly feeling overwhelmed by so many kids, but still, she loves them. Also, the way it was worded seemed odd. If Molly is alone, wouldn't she want her kids to be with her so she doesn't feel alone? I realize this isn't what you meant, so you just need to make it a little clearer. Other than that, this was a fun poem to read! It's nice to see that not all poems are dark and dreary. (I only say that because mine are sort of dark and dreary...) Great job! :) ~Nagini Riddle
Darkness by inspirations
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 3]
Summary: What might've happened if Harry hadn't triumphed over Voldemort?
Hmm. First off, I would lower the rating to 3rd-5th yrs. This is nothing against the poem, of course, but I feel that the darkness within it is more a 3rd-5th yr level.
Now to the nitty gritty. *chuckles* I really enjoyed how you incorporated the Unforgivable Curses, along with looking into the future. That was a rather smart way of dealing with the forthcoming darkness.
I also rather liked the "palindrome" element to this poem. It really helped to tie it all together, especially towards the end.
Just one note on diction. You use "look" for when gazing into the crystal ball. I think a stronger word is needed in order to really invoke a sense of darkness and danger. It's up to you, but words like "gaze" "stare" "peer" would all make the statement stronger.
Overall, I rather enjoyed it. Even if it was dark. :) Bring on the darkness! Keep it up. ~Nagini
Author's Response: Thanks for your review, particularly the comments on mood: it's something I'll definitely consider in future :) x
Hope for Merope by Miss B
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]
Summary: A poem about the tragic life of Merope Gaunt.
This was a rather interesting summary of what happened to Merope. She has become one of my favorite characters, and I have to say that your poem captured her rather well. :) The simple rhyme scheme actually made sense to use, because Merope is a rather simple character, and I found that the rhyme helped characterize her in that way. I was rather impressed that the rhymes didn't feel all that forced.
In this stanza, though, I think the rhyme could change: Only the baby to keep her alive/Onto London's streets she was whirled/She sold the precious necklace/Which would one day come back to haunt the world. I rather like the ending part, so perhaps if you changed "whirled" to "hurled," it would flow better. However, I really think that it would work better with a different word choice.
There were some points when the rhythm was jagged, like in the second stanza. Perhaps it would better as this: Slaving all day/She never had a chance/She yearned to be free,/Escape this meaningless trance.
Other than that, I really enjoyed this ditty. :) There should always be hope for Merope, because I think she deserved better. Great job! Keep it up! ~Nagini
Like a Storm (Flower) by Eleanor Lupin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]
Summary: A poem about Ginny Weasley after the Battle of Hogwarts.
First off, I want to say that you had beautiful imagery. My favorite line was "mingle in me like a storm." I love how that ties into your title. :)
Now I want to talk about punctuation. I love that you branched away from the norm. I generally enjoy not using punctuation in poetry, too. However, I think in this case that punctuation would have been better to emphasize some certain points, like in the last stanza when "hope" doesn't stand out. Now, I realize that it could have been done on purpose, to indicate that hope is hidden within everything else and doesn't always surface. It could also indicate that hope is used so many times it has lost its meaning. But I am wondering if perhaps it should be emphasized a little more. It doesn't have to be with punctuation. By simply hitting "enter" and making the word its own stanza would help. That was just something I noticed. Again, it doesn't actually need punctuation. I'm just musing whether it's effective without it or not. I think in some cases it is, like with your first stanza. Each idea is very separate and disconnected, helping to give that illusion of a person trying to take it all in. So, I think you did a very nice job by leaving out cumbersome commas to really help make this piece more jerky in an emotional way.
However, the capitalization threw me off. I think it would have worked better to not use any capitalization. Making the "I" be lowercase would definitely help to emphasize insignificance or feeling detached. Making all the letters be lowercase would also contribute to the sense that the world is not as it seems anymore. Just a thought.
Overall, though, I really did enjoy how emotive this piece was. Pretty raw and simple, cultivating that hollow part in me. :) Good job!
~Nagini Riddle
Haunted House: Dead by Northumbrian
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]
Summary:
A haunted house that isn’t haunted, a Muggle fortune teller who can’t actually tell fortunes and the legend of the Cursed Green Pearl! What happens when “the nation’s favourite television ghost-hunters” stumble onto something really magical? What (apart from a mysterious chest, a broken red stiletto and a corpse) lies within the topmost room of the Haunted Tower?
It’s time for the Auror Office’s Muggle Interface Team - Brown, Bones and Beadle - to investigate.
This is Northumbrian of Ravenclaw house writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall - Extra Credit Prompt
This is one of four mystery stories I wrote for the Challenge. Until now I’ve resisted editing this story as to do so will (I believe) mean that it can’t be judged as part of the challenge (editing after the closing date is cheating). I can’t wait any longer.
Ooh!!!!!! I love a good mystery! What an awesome story! You sounded like you knew a lot about police work! I'm very impressed with this. I don't know what else to say, really, except that I am never going near cursed objects again!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I’m glad you liked it.
My knowledge of police work is a combination of research and cop-shows.Again!? When did you last go near a cursed item? :-D
-N-
The Accidental Tour Guide by Ruby Emeralds
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 66]
Summary: One year after the defeat of Voldemort, the international wizarding community decides to commemorate the occasion with a magical convention in the American city of Phoenix, Arizona; the city had been chosen to honor the bravery of the members of the Order of the Phoenix. When Harry, Ron, and Hermione are invited to attend the convention as special guest speakers, Harry asks his American Godmother to come with them, to act as a tour guide during their travels in the desert. In this first sequel to The Accidental Godmother, Celie, Snape (her ever reluctant husband), Harry, Ron, and Hermione embark on a memorable – and hilarious – journey through the American southwest.
Oh, jealousy spreads throughout me for such a great opening to the next story in this series... I still wish that I was Celie!!
Oh, I can't stop laughing and I'm eager for more!
Disclaimer: I am not JKR either, nor am I a professional critic. I'm an ordinary person looking for a fun read. ;)
Aw!!!! I still can't imagine their muggle fight, but I loved the description of it! ;) going off to read more...
Oh, camping, camping, camping out under the stars, we're camping, camping, camping out under the stars! We're bringing out food and gear along! Camping out under the stars...
(just a road trip song:D)
I love the idea of Sev camping!!!!!!! :) I have loved every minute of this story!
Okay, I love it. I give up all my trying to hide my excitement and tears!!!! Love Sev's character! I loved the bracelets (especially since I know the predictions come true!) and I especially loved Celie! :)
Here is a review: :) :) I loved it! It was awesome! What an adventure (although I probably would have snapped, too). Still wishing I was Celie... *sighs*
Teehee!!!!!!!!! I just realized that Sev and Celie got married secretly, and then his daughter followed suit! So why did Snape explode? What a great dad he is. But that's totally off topic to this story!
Great job, again! I hope Sev and Celie can catch a break! :)
Goodness! How old is Celie when she has her children? That poor woman has to keep waiting? *chuckles* I still loved this story!!!!!!!!!!!! Off to read the next in the series!
Much love and happiness,
Nagini
