I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!
EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!
Dumbledore's Farewell by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]
Summary:
A poem.
Nominated for a 2010 QSQ Award!
That repetition! Anaphora is a beautiful thing! I believe you have this somewhere in the Poetry Anyone forum... And I feel so grateful that you dedicated it to us! :) it's a beautiful farewell.
~Nagini Riddle
Author's Response: Thanks!
A Night of Love by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]
Summary: A night to forget everything else; a night to remember.
Dedicated to Harry/Ginny.
It's nice that you have a wide range of talents in your writing- being able to switch from love, to dark/angsty, to humor, to poetry... I love you, Natalie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep up the good work, an I hope to see some new stories in your future. :)
Memories Are Not Enough by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Harry finally arrives at Godric Hollow, but memories are all he finds.
This was written for the Magic in Music Challenge in Poetry Anyone, and it came SECOND. My chosen piece was Harry and Hermione by Nicholas Hooper (Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince soundtrack).
Oh Natalie....
I don't know how I keep being surprised by your writing, but I am, and it always puts me in awe! I wish, wish, wish I could write as much and as exquisitely as you do! I have to agree that sometimes memories aren't enough, although it is sometimes all we have. It's too bad and somewhat depressing that we can't get those things back, but that's life, and I for one think that perhaps its not as bad as I may feel about it at times.
I want to say that memories, while not tangible, are still sometimes the fuel that keeps me going, so of course, the topic is a little in the gray area, don't you think?
Anyways, great poem! You once again captured those emotions so flawlessly!
Keep writing!!!!
Nagini :)
The Gathering Storm and the Crib by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]
Summary: War is looming right outside the door as a mother rocks her child to sleep.
A sonnet written for the Diamond Challenge at PA. My chosen theme was Innocence.
The summary for this poem really caught my eye, and I'm curious- whose the mother? Is she just the general witch mother, or is she an actual character? I imagine her as Lily, personally, but that's probably due to the fact that she sacrificed herself for her baby. Anyways.... Again, your poetry is so beautiful: "the nights grow long as it creeps into day redder and blacker than they ever were..." "strong is the charm, for love's shield is supreme..." these were the best lines!!! The first one really caught me because I never think of the night as red, but it would be, with a war going on, like the phrase "red dawn". What a great way to really allude to what the war has been doing! And then the second line said it all- that love is the greatest magic in the world. That it always triumphs. And isn't that what Dumbledore was trying to tell his students? Lily (and yes, Harry) proved that simple, yet powerfully completing statement with their sacrifices. Even Snape proves a bit of it, even if his love was not quite unconditional. He still was able to give Harry help and aided in saving the Wizarding world.
Wow, I did not expect to get that much out of so few words!
I just reread the last line, and it, too, is really powerful. Sometimes, it is better to be innocent, and I would definitely want my son to stay young and whole...
A great poem. Seriously, you should publish your work! Of course, not the fandom, but if you are so good with words, you should write on other subjects. I know you would do really well. :)
Author's Response: Well, thank you for another GLORIOUS review! :) This was a poem I worked hard on since I'm not really good with structure. I'm so thrilled you liked it. I haven't thought of publishing, but I do have a Tumblr for posting my original poetry. Someday, I might seek out a publisher. :)
I Like a Healthy Breeze Around My Privates, Thanks! by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 13]
Summary: “Muggle women wear them, Archie, not the men, they wear this.”
Remember ol’ Archie from GOF? Well, now you’ll know why he refused to give up his flowery gown for a pair of trousers.
Written for the April Fool Challenge at the beta boards. Nominated for a QSQ in the Best Humour category. :D Many thanks to Rachel (lily_evans34) for her help with Latin.
DISCLAIMER: This is not J.K.Rowling, though characters you recognize and story premises belong to her.
Boys will be boys, right?
What a great humorous story! I'm so glad you choose various minor characters to write about, because I get to add this new knowledge to the old! Sometimes, I can't tell the difference between what I read on fan fiction and what I read in the books!
Thanks for taking the time to share your imagination with the rest of the Muggle world. ;)
Author's Response: Boys will be boys! :D I'm happy it made you laugh. Thanks for the review!
Breaking Rules by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]
Summary:
How easy it was to break them.
All it took was a smile, a few good conversations, and some daredevilry on your part to take risks and do the impossible.
Perhaps I'd break a few rules, although I cross the line at some point- that final, final point. Still, I loves this short story! It was so sweet, and you managed to catch me once more. What a gift you have!!!!!
Was this Scorpius and Rose? I'm almost positive it is...
Again, great story! You have flair in your writing, and I hope you can eventually reach the one hundredth story! I know you can do it, Natalie!!!
Nagini
Stars Don't Determine the Future by majestic_ginny
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]
Summary: As Severus Snape looks up at the stars in the sky, he wonders if they can really determine the future.
You felt bad for Snape do you wrote this???? It makes me feel even worse for Snape!!!!!!!!!!! My heart just goes out to him! I think I could forgive someone like Severus for everything he had done, but I suppose it's because I know his thoughts and points of view. How sad that we judge people too soon, or never allow people a second (or third or fourth...) chance. I realize that sometimes we just get annoyed with people when they don't change, but as Severus proved here, he could change! He felt so bad for his actions!
Sigh. I still loved reading this short story. :)
Author's Response: I cried when I watched Snape dying in DH part 2. He might have had his flaws, but he was a very moving character. It was very brave of him to sacrifice so much just to keep Lily's son alive, even though Harry was the proof of Lily's preference of another man. He proves that everyone can change, and he strengthens JKR's messages in the book, that love can conquer anything. I agree with you totally; we shouldn't judge people too soon at all, and a part of me wishes that Lily had given Sev another chance, or had at least tried to remain friends with him. for all we know, Snape might have changed and he wouldn't have told the Prophecy to Voldemort, keeping Lily and James alive in the process.
After I read the DH chapter The Prince's Tale Snape became my favourite character and I just had to write this. I'm sorry that I made you feel bad! The truth is that I can't even tell you how sad I felt while writing this. I wrote this when I was around fifteen, and at that time I felt that it was the most mature story I had written.
Anyway, I'm glad you loved this story! Its such an honour when someone likes your work so much. Thank you for leaving the lovely reviews, hun, I'm enjoying responding to each of them :D
The Day Before by h_vic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]
Summary: The wheels that set an event in motion start turning long before the moment itself, but for Severus and Lily, it always seemed the day before what the world saw was when things really changed.
What a beautiful way to write this story! I also like how it was all from his point of view. And it had a sense of melancholy to it that was just so darn gorgeous! I love this story!!!!!!!!!! Perhaps because it was so real and honest, and also because Severus finally tried to come clean.
Beautiful job!
Lily's Son by h_vic
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]
Summary: At the start of term feast, Severus Snape watches the first years being Sorted with a little more interest than usual, and a little more regret, as he finds one child’s presence brings back too many memories of a woman he once loved…and betrayed. Even if Severus could forgive Harry Potter for who his father was, forgiving him for who his father was not may be harder.
My goodness, no wonder Snape doesn't like Harry!
Loved, loved, loved this story!!!!!!! I can only say that it's sad that Snape can never have the "real" lily....
Going Back by h_vic
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]
Summary: It’s a small town; bad news travels fast.
Spinners End was not somewhere Lily Potter had ever had any intention of returning, but then she’d always tended to put others’ needs above her own, and familiar habits are hard to shake when it comes to old friends.
Amazing how Snape is a lot like Voldemort, yet he is the better man! Still, why do people need to be so stubborn? Poor Sev...
I loved this short little story! But it's scary to think that he was a Death Eater by this time. :/ did e know then that he would bring about Lily's death? How tortured and guilty he must feel!
Anyways, I feel like you captured the emotions so well! Keep up your writing. :)
I Am Shame by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]
Summary: The war is over and people are rebuilding their life, happy and sad and grateful. But what about Draco?
Written for the End of an Era Challenge at PA (WON FIRST PLACE! YIPPIE!), and nominated for a QSQ for Best Poetry. :D Thanks!
Natalie, forgive me for not seeing this in your author page!!!!! I absolutely loved this, and I can see why it won! Great job. Sorry, but I just can't criticize anything about it. :) But hey, it's a nice review, right? ~Nagini
Author's Response: Yes, it is hahah! Thank you! :)
Beneath the Cloth by siberianhuskypatronus
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]
Summary: Snape stumbles upon a secret room while absentmindedly wandering through Hogwarts. Inside, he discovers a treasure that he believes with bring him true happiness.
Augh! There is too much pain and sadness! I will unashamedly admit that I like Severus way better than James, and also that I think Lily should have picked Sev! Of course, this is probably because I've seen the pain and anguish of an abandoned Snape... I loved this story! Great job. :D
A Stolen Kiss by Cannae be Kenobi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]
Summary: An unwitting challenge leads to a surprise revelation as Lily and Sirius partake of some forbidden fruit. AU.
Ooh! I never saw this coming! But Lily was right- that relationship would never work. Great job!
The Youngest Death Eaters: Year II by DestinyMoonStar
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 28]
Summary:
The second year has begun:
After a summer without a word from Voldemort the trio began their year at ease for the most part anyway. With a flying car crash, and an incompetent professor, they believe this year will be a dull one. How wrong are they?
The Chamber of Secrets has been opened.
The houses become even more split than ever before. The famous Harry Potter is being blamed because he can talk to snakes, but the other students do not know there are two other Parselmouths in Hogwarts. The Moon Twins can hear and understand the omen whispers and they search for the culprit. Will their secrets and old habits of working alone lead them to lose all the trust they have earned? Or will the trio bond together like never before and solve the sinister mystery, before it’s too late?
Way to end it with an evil cliff hanger... :)
Ah, I absolutely enjoyed this story. And I just love Snape. And I just love how you snuck in facts about Lily there and Destiny still doesn't know that the real reason he hates Harry is because of all that. Teehee! I wonder how she will react when she finds out...
Anyways, this was fabulous! I look forward to more!
Okay, I just loved this chapter! I was laughing so hard! I'm enjoying the little relationships, and on top of that, I just love how you worked in Harry being a Parselmouth. I have always loved that scene- I can't imagine what Snape was thinking at that moment, but now I have an idea of what other kids were thinking. Teehee! :) Love love love it.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I love reading people's feedback. Hope to hear more from you. :)
Did You Hear The One About The Dark Lord ..? by Cannae be Kenobi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 24]
Summary: Ron proves his comedic mettle to a sceptical Fred. Completely AU silliness. Rated for very mild language.
Wow. I didn't realiZe the Wizarding world had so many light jokes about the Dark Lord! Why would you joke about him? I'd be really scared too...
But I still laughed! And I enjoyed the twins humor. :)
Letters of Loyalty by mahogany_wand
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Regulus Black was loved by his family. The perfect son, and what an honor it was for him to fulfill The Dark Lord's request! But Regulus also loved his family, so how far would he go to uphold their honor? And when will their honor go too far?
First, I would like to say that I adored this poem! It was very beautiful and rhythmic and slightly despairing. I commend you for gliding into the hazy realms of poetry!
The letter, wax seal
broken
The news, such honor
taken
A friend, forever
gone
His Andromeda, the
swan.
I really enjoyed the subtle rhyme presented in this stanza, and really liked the metaphor presented. I am drawn in by the letter being opened, and your simplistic language lays it out quite nicely. I do have a qualm about punctuation. I myself feel like punctuation isn't necessary in poetry, but I will echo y colleagues in saying that if you use some punctuation, it is probably best to use it all the time in the poem. So, i would either add in punctuation, or else get rid of it, and place breaks in lines where punctuation would be used.
she had found love and
left her home and
ran away and
didn’t look back and
sent a last note and
changed his mind.
Note on capitalization: what is your purpose for switching it up in each stanza? I rather like it without capitalization for the whole piece. Again, I like the simplicity of your word choice, because it allows it to speak for itself and emote an emotion closer to something I recognize. :)
The pain, too much to
bear.
Lost religion, perhaps a
prayer?
Or an idea, a plan, a
plot…
His past loyalty but
forgot.
"Lost religion" makes me shiver. Yet, I want just a tad bit more in this stanza to show what he is going through emotionally. Does he lose himself in sleep or drink? Or does he remove himself from the world, become a recluse? Adding one more detail would make it that much stronger!
he went back and
took the prize and
lost his balance and
sank, deeper, deeper, and
the bubbles stopped and
he closed his eyes.
Very nice imagery with the bubbles. It can take on so many meanings, and I think the ambiguity of it lends the reader to be able to feel as broken or lost as he was, kind of like that there is no set meaning for life.
The letter, wax seal
broken.
Her cousin’s life,
taken
A friend, forever
departed
Her Regulus, she felt
fainthearted
Oh wow! The fact that you repeat the motif of the letter is haunting, because it makes the letter itself a villain, the bringer of bad news, and kind of suggests that "news" is impassive and uncaring. I hope to never receive such a letter...
she cried as he had cried and
sent a note to his mum and
pondered lost religion and
said a prayer for his soul and
almost looked back and
wished she hadn’t changed his mind.
The other stanzas all have shorter lines, and then these are longer. That's fine, but I felt like perhaps another stanza could have been as similar to really make this piece feel like part of the whole. That being said, I still enjoyed the message at the end, and felt so bad for the main character. I am a little lost as to who the characters are, but it may just be me. I did like that you repeated the lost religion and the contrast with prayer.
If I could give you any pointers, it would be that sometimes, vagueness is okay, but I as a reader, while I loved the effect of the poem and the imagery, did not quite understand who it was about. Try to make it a bit more clear- not much is needed to do so, but if you added another characteristic to help, it would. I realize there are names- Andromeda and Regulus, but I'm not sure I understand the relationship going on, or if they are in anyway connected...
I still enjoyed the poem, though! Remember the bit on punctuation and capitalization.
I am very happy to have this opportunity to leave a review for a fellow writer! :) Have a fantastic day!!!!!
~Nagini Riddle
The Longbottom Way by Cannae be Kenobi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Draco Malfoy pushes Neville Longbottom a step too far. AU.
Neville! Oh how I love that he is in his rightful place of Gryffindor. :) beautifully done, and I think that Neville would actually do this (based off of what he did in the seventh book).
You Are by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]
Summary:
Alone, disgusting, adrift between life and death...
This is Tom Riddle's penance for his lack of remorse.
Do I want to leave a thought? Hmm...
Alright, you win. I don't consider this too moody, but then again my favorite characters are Tom and Severus, so perhaps I just lean to moody and depressing things... :D
Great job!
Author's Response:
Well, maybe the poem isn't as moody as I thought, but it was more a reference to my personal mood when I write it. I was in a crap disposition over something that wasn't remotely important (is it ever anything relevant?), and then I wrote this.
I always found it the height of irony that Voldemort was always thwarted by the simplest things. Well, not simple, but things he considered unworthy of his attention. A baby. A sixteen year old boy and his old house elf. A specky orphan. A simple Disarming Spell. And it brought him the one thing he sought so hard to escape. It felt like a great idea for a poem to me, so here we are.
Thanks for reviewing, and for visiting a poem I really like but doesn't get much love. I appreciate it, and take care!
~Jess
Allegiance by Kerichi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]
Summary:
What Allegiance means to Lucius Malfoy.
A new dark lord??????????!!!!!!!!!!?????!!!!! :o *lifts an eyebrow in shock* Lucius is twisted! Didn't he see what happened the last time? No way would Draco stand for Scorpio to become evil! Not after all that occurred before.
Anyways, great poem! It's nice to see what allegiance means to different people. :)
