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Cartoon Heart by Padfoot11333
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]


Adrian didn't know how he'd fallen for her. He didn't want to.

And even though he could not think of leaving her, she acted, every moment, as if she could leave him without thinking twice.

Nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill - Best Post/Hogwarts.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1114 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
09/27/12 Updated: 09/28/12

Reviewer: lily loves sirius black Signed
Date: 09/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: be a bright red rose and come bursting the concrete

I don't know...but I found it to be lacking in some aspects like her reactions to him,the ending wasn't too good also.....I think so u should rewrite this with a few more details because the storyline is but the description isn't.
I have read some of your stories and i think that you can do much better.

Author's Response: Is there a reason that you didn't like the ending? I think it was necessary to the story, even if it didn't turn out the way that you wanted. I'm also not sure why you think the storyline was better than the description. This piece was mostly description-based, and there really wasn't much of a storyline. I intentionally wrote it like that, so saying that you don't like the description is really quite a bit like saying you don't like the story. I'm glad you've read some of my other stories, but I'm at a bit of a loss to understand why you would review this one and not the ones you thoroughly enjoyed.

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