Nice (although ominous, given what we know) use of foreshadowing by having Tzipporah say she will never leave this place. One way or another, we know this is not the case.
This was very moving. I have a family member suffering from dementia, and it hurts so much to see the woman I knew slipping away. It seems you know this pain, too.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Although I have not been through anything similar recently, when I was younger my grandmother did suffer from Alheimer's disease, and I do remember how hard that was for everyone. Thank you again for reading this story, I know it can be a tough read for some. I appreciate the note! ~Gina :)
Oh, thank heavens! I've been waiting for the events in the beginning of this chapter for a while now. I realize that Alexandra is young, but she's also incredibly bright for her age. It's about dang time she started to realize that the world doesn't revolve around her feelings, that other people have been yanked around emotionally too, and that maybe, just maybe, she should stop being so cranky and short with people, especially the ones who have gone out of their way to keep her alive and whole for so many years.
Also, I like the fact that you continue to let us almost (but not quite) see the creatures that make the skittering noises. I find it very reminiscent of H.P. Lovecraft's style, and I think it enhances our fear of them. Good job!
I especially liked the interaction between Alexandra and Abraham. This time seemed more like Alexandra is willing to try to grow up. I realize that she's been through a lot, but it's about time that she figures out and internalizes the need to mature emotionally, not just intellectually. This was also apparent in her interactions with Mr. Grue and Mrs. Shirtliffe, but it "felt" better to me with her father. He's about due for some good treatment from Alexandra. (Don't worry, I don't think he's a saint.)
Well done! Although my own life did not have nearly the drama in it that Neville's did to stimulate the fears for the future that he had, I had VERY similar reservations before I asked my (now) wife to marry me.
I thought that the use of the fake Galleon with the Protean charm on it was a nice touch, in that it was a nice tie-in to canon without beating us over the head with anything, since both he and Luna kept their coins with them at Hogwarts even after the DA stopped meeting.
The whole story struck me as believable, especially from the perspective of the relationships. The characters, though we see them only briefly, seem to be comfortable in their own skins, so to speak. Perhaps this is because you are using canon characters, but you did a good job of keeping them in character, and also of making them seem realistic on a personal level.
I, too, hope that you will continue to write more fanfiction.