AFAIK stands for "as far as I know."
Author's Response: Oh. That makes sense! I guess you really do learn something new every day! Thanks again. Manda*
Uh, AFAIK boa constrictors aren't venomous.
Also, what happened to the framing elements, of this being the memories of a 24 year old Ginny? There hasn't been a single mention of it since the 2st chapter, making it rather superfluous. If this had any bearing at all, at least some return to that time, so mention is required.
Also, in that chapter Ginny is famous and has written a book about her life. For what is not explained. In addition, the reporters are asking to whom she is engaged. Factoring everything in, I can only assume Harry does not survive. If he was then the connection between them should have been apparent from the book.
Author's Response: First of all: AFAIK??? Secondly: YAYY!!! Finally people are catching on! You are asking questions about the first chapter! I understand all of your reasoning and I would explain it all, but I would give it all away! I can't really refer back to the 24-year-old Ginny because it is all saved for the last chapter or so. All of the rest of your questions will be answered by the time this story is finished, I promise! Thanks so much for reviewing! Manda*
The idea is fine, but the execution is lacking. There is very little focus, especially the time element. For example, it's years since the wedding, but by Ron and Hermione's reactions it's as if very little time had passed since they had seen Harry (e.g., there are no "where have you been all these years.") Also, after all these years they are surprised to hear that Ginny broke up with Harry. You would think being married to Neville all that time would be a clue to Ginny's brother.
Author's Response: yes but rember that Ron and Hermione were acting as if they haddnt heard about it so as to try and help Harry
I hadn't read this story before and decided today to give it a try. So far I'm up to chapter 4, and it's very nice. One problem, though, that comes across (I assume) because I'm reading all of the chapters one after another rather than the usual wait between postings.
In Ch 2, you wrote that Harry had "still been with her every single hour of her labour." However, the last flashback doesn't have him showing up until after the delivery to the point of him saying, “I’m sorry I couldn’t make it sooner.”
Author's Response: Oops, better go back and change that!! Thanks for letting me know - there are a few mistakes here and there, some minor, but fewer major. ^_^
As soon as Draco said "Don’t trust anyone who you see around here..." my thought was, "such as, oh say,. Draco, who you just let into your house?"
Author's Response: Lol, yes I thought i was dropping a lot of hints in that chapter! But it\'s not over yet, there\'s much more to come! thanks 4 the review
One bit of advice: double space between EVERY paragraph. I don't know where it comes from, but all to often I encounter pieces where the writer double spaces narrative but not dialogue. If anything, not double spacing dialogue makes it even harder to read than narrative.
Author's Response: i'll see what i can do, if i am smart enough to do it lol
Satisfying chapter? For me, I'd have to say, no. This chapter seems like it was marking time for the main event, why it took so long for Harry to return and why now. I couldn't care less what Remus was going through.
Author's Response: I'm sorry you didn't like the Remus part. I thought it was important because Remus played a huge part in concealing Harry's faked death and that comes into play later.
Paragraph are not optional. I took one look at this and took a pass.
Very sweet, very nice. Like most cynics, I am at heart a romantic, so I'm a sucker for just such stories.
Author's Response: Me too! That's why I write them! Thanks for the review!
Interesting. Unless I'm reading this wrong, your stating that an attack on Voldemort would use up a Horcrux, that the soul piece in Voldemort is destroyed and one from a Horcrux is used to revive him. Reread page 503 of the U.S. edition. Dumbledore states, "The seventh part of his soul ... resides in his regenerated body. That was the part of him that lived a spectral existence for so many years during his exile; without that, he has no self at all."
This implies that a Horcrux is an anchor, not a replacement.
Author's Response: You are correct. But also remember in GoF, after the rebirthing, Voldy tells the D/Es that "...it appeared one or more of my experiments had succeeded..." (or something close to that.) This could imply that the existance of at least one Horcrux was critical to survival, and conversely, the absence of any Horcruxes would cause his mortal death. It could also imply that, possibly, more than one Horcrux would be needed to maintain life, and if more than one, why not all? Stopping right there I would have to agree with you. However, I chose to pursue the “expenditure Horcrux” path, rather than the “anchor Horcrux” path for two reasons. First, JKR has dug herself into such a deep hole with this Horcrux stuff I don’t see how she can resolve it all in one remaining book. If only 2 have been destroyed, that leaves 4 + Voldy himself. DD was almost killed destroying the ring and are we to believe that Harry can destroy the others? It just seemed too far-fetched to me. Second, DD could have been wrong about exactly how they work (which, other than that one line you referenced, he never really explains.) And as we know, when JKR repeats things she is telling us there is something important about them. Dumbledore has mentioned his fallibility at least twice in the series and this could be a mistake in his judgment. Perhaps not, but just to throw another theory out there I invented this “expenditure” possibility. In the end it really doesn’t matter, this story is just to entertain a few while we wait 16+ months for the last book. Thanks for t he R&R. S.
I have a problem with the "no finished eduction/no wand" part. I now you listed this as AU, but only from HBP on. I get the impression that Fred and George still have their wands. At the very least, if it turns out they no longer have their wands, one would assume that some mention of the lose of their wands and the ramifications of this would have been apparent and known to Harry.
Author's Response: Hey, you're the only one to pick up on this and there's a v good explanation in a few chapters where the truth comes out. Thank you very much for reading my fic :)
Some nice stuff -- Moody removing the cloak and revealing the relationship to the Weasleys the most prominent -- but you also have Fred and George with murderous looks but then cheering, I assume in approval, a few sentences later. Something to indicate a transtion, such as referring to it as sudden unexpected cheering, would help. While it's seems a little odd that Molly would be trying to presuade Ginny from dating Harry -- like most of what I've read I would assume she'd be trying to get the two of them together -- it is different and at least exploring a different dynamic.
They were at the Dursleys for only a few hours. How could Harry (and only Harry, BTW) seem underfed in that short a time? Until that morning, he and the other three had been eating the food at Hogwarts.
Author's Response: Since Mrs. Weasley makes really good food everybody always wants to eat more of it. Another thing is she might make better food then the Hogwarts house elves do so they might eat more of her food then they would eat if they ate at Hogwarts. Also since Harry has been very sad since Dumbledore died he might not have ate that much or at all. So he could possibly look underfed. But thanx for the review and I hope that dosen't stop you from reading other chapters that I'm writing.
Sorry, I have to agree with the prior review. Her actions are contrary to what she said at the funeral of expecting him to do what he did. Also, her relation with Dean is based on her rambling "on and on about how Harry might not take her back and how it scared the shit out of her," os o course SHE's the one who doesn't take the other one back. It just doesn't work for me.
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. Yes, I have had other people tell me that also. I plan to go back and switch it up, because I guess i'm obviously not getting out what I want to. I guess when you're the author, you assume other people get the idea that you are trying to convey. Sorry about the confusion and the O/C. I plan to fix it when I get time.
What with Occlumency and Legilimency, I just don't Voldemort would accept Ginny working for him without checking her out first. After that, she's just too OOC.
Author's Response: well, that was my same thought, but for the story to work he needed to believe her. a little hint to you though: he never fully trusts her
It does have a bearing on our discussion because you are listing the story as post-HBP, which means it follows canon. She has established that there are four Horcruxes as canon, which means this is an AU story.
Also, her norm has been to be evasive until the story reaches or determines such and such a plotpoint. After that, she makes absolute statements on the topic. For example H/G and R/Hr, confirming it in the same interview.
Author's Response: I\'m having a little trouble following your logic. What JKR says in an interview is not canon. Canon is what\'s in the books. In any case I don\'t find any usefullness in our discussion. If you don\'t like my Horcrux theory that\'s OK. Like all our guesses about what might happen in Book 7 its merely speculation.
"Asumming the locket (and/or other Horcrux) were not destroyed by R.A.B. Dumbledore did not anticipate that did he? -greywolf"
No, re-read the quote. JKR said there are still four Horcruxes remaining,
Author's Response: I did, JKR has of course changed things she said in the past. In any case it has no bearing on our discussion. We have to go by the books. If she wishes to have four Horcuxes in book 7 that is her perogative. My story has two. -greywolf
Sorry, but your Horcrux theory is wrong. Read page 503. Dumbledore clearly states there were only six Horcruxes and the seventh piece in Voldemort's body was not a Horcrux.
Dumbledore states that the seventh piece is now in Voldemort's regenerated body and was what lived the spectral existence all those years. This means that a Horcrux protects the piece in the body from a fatal attack. That piece is not destroyed and replaced by one in a Horcrux. A Horcrux seems to act as an anchor keeping the original piece on the current plain.
Horcruxes are NOT used up. If a fatal attack would destroy the original piece then the concept that Voldemort made so many wouldn't be so monstrous. If the idea behind making even one was to ward against death, then making only one would have limited affect because one fatal attack would revert you to being mortal. It would be in your best interest to make more than one of you are going to make any. The reason Voldemort made six was because the he saw something magical in having seven soul pieces and because he wanted the extra protection should anything happen to one or more of the Horcruxes.
Author's Response: Well again we merrily disaggree. Horcruxes are used up,each time a body is regenerated. Voldemort alludes to this in GOF (p656). But in any case my story is not about Horcruxes, its about Harry and Ginny, so for my purposes spending minimal time on Horcruxes is desirable. -greywolf
BTW, in the Mugglenet/Leaky interview ([url]http://www.mugglenet.com/jkrinterview3.shtml[/url]) JKR states "Dumbledore's guesses are never very far wide of the mark. I don't want to give too much away here, but Dumbledore says, "There are four out there, you've got to get rid of four, and then you go for Voldemort." So that's where he is, and that's what he's got to do." After the diary and the ring were destroyed, there are stil four Horcruxes.
Author's Response: Asumming the locket (and/or other Horcrux) were not destroyed by R.A.B. Dumbledore did not anticipate that did he? -greywolf
Sweet, but one little problem with your timeline. Harry's birthday is July 31 and Ginny's is August 11. Two days after Harry's 18th birthday Ginny would still be 16.