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My Penname is BrokenPromise because that is how I found this Harry Potter.
When I was younger, I saw a trailer for a Harry Potter movie, and it scared me. That day I decided that I would never have anything to do with Harry Potter.
Just before DH1 came out in cinemas, a friend told me that Dumbledore died. I knew a little bit of Potter background and I quite liked Professor Dumbledore, so I asked her who had done it. She showed me the first book and said, "Read it." I read them all within two weeks, and then watched DH1 in the cinema.
Having read all the books and seen all the movies, I started writing a Fanfiction, and then looked for inspiration online. What I found was this archive and all the wonders within. Like many others, I have enjoyed the work on this site. I started writing because I thought I ought to give something back.

I now have some work up! I am working on some more but am having a little bit of a writer's block on a couple of them. I also have some poetry from the beta boards too, which I will eventually post here.

By the way, I would like to thank you if you are reading this and hope that you have enjoyed/ will enjoy my work.

Agony Aunts
Early November Morning
Forget Me Not

Chaptered fics:
How to be Beautiful (In progress)
Red Hair and Yellow Ribbons (In progress)

A Dursley Lament
I saw
If He Had Known
The Final Duel
The Storm
The View From By Your Side
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The Prefects' Bathroom by The owl
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: The Prefects' bathroom is one of the many privileges available to Lily Evans and James Potter in their final year at Hogwarts. They certainly take full advantage of it in good times and bad. However, in the bad times, they find themselves needing the retreat it provides more than ever.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1106 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
05/29/12 Updated: 06/04/12

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 06/04/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Prefects' Bathroom

“The diving board certainly suggests otherwise.”
This bit made me giggle. Actually, the majority of the first section did. Especially the corruptible Hufflepuffs. You certainly made Lily less of an angel in this. Perhaps the reason the Founders didn’t make separate bathrooms was so that the Prefects didn’t make out in the corridors: they are supposed to be role models after all.
I think that the separation of the sections was well executed. Much better than I could’ve done, anyway.
The shorter sections are sensitive, and they made me feel quite sorry for James.
The last section sort of brought the whole fic full circle, back to a little bit of a lighter subject matter and the humour of what goes on in the Prefect’s bathroom.
So ends my extremely inadequate review, BP

Author's Response: Not inadequate at all, honey! Any author loves a good review, and you've clearly put some thought into this. The fact that you think my story is worth giving so much thought is a great complement. I'm glad you felt sorry for James. He is portrayed as an insensitive a*** (pardon my French - it seems to be the most appropriate word) a lot of the time, so I quite like being able to make people see him in a different light.

I really struggled over the diving board line. It went through several different incarnations, and none of them involved the diving board until my last draft. It was one of the only lines in the first section that changed at all from my first draft. I wrote the first bit before I got Sorted, so I feel a bit bad about the Hufflepuff line now, but I'm still glad it amused you. I had a lot of fun writing it. Thank you so much for reviewing. TTFN



Enterprising Young Men by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: Past Featured StoryFred and George make their way through life with purpose and passion, fearing nothing.

This prose poem was written for the Random Song Challenge in Poetry Anyone? It came second!!!!!

Thank you Julia for setting such inspiring challenges.

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling.

To my delight and surprise, this poem won the 2012 QSQ for Best Poetry. Thank youuu.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 161 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
06/05/12 Updated: 06/05/12

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 06/05/12 Title: Chapter 1: Enterprising Young Men

Oh my word, that's so sad! I think I read it too quickly, but it really hit me, especially those last two lines.

One young forever; one young no longer.

Your writing is so emotive. I'm a bit sad now...:(

Author's Response: OH, sorry to leave you sad. :( It made me rather sad when I wrote it because I always feel so sad for George and Fred, too, for missing out on so much. Thank you for the review ~Carole~


Pieces by AidaLuthien
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Albus Dumbledore tries to deal with the twin blows of losing his sister and his lover.

This is AidaLuthien writing for Round One of the Character Clinic Triathlon.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1593 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
06/29/12 Updated: 07/01/12

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 08/11/12 Title: Chapter 1: Grass

This story definitely deserved its honourable mention in the contest! I’m shocked that it hasn’t been reviewed yet! You really got inside Albus’ head and showed his emotions, especially that corrosive guilt.

I like this story because it gives an insight into the things that torment Albus throughout the rest of his life. You showed us lots of things about Albus and his life that we already know, but you build on them well and show us more than we were told by JKR. You stay focused on the story, but you don’t lack in detail.

I like the way you used repetition to emphasise that things are monotonous, dull and painful for Albus. I think it also showed that since everything that could possibly change has changed, and so everything will now stay the same. The repetition of ‘all lightness, all gentleness’ describing Ariana was beautiful. It was touching that Albus thought this, especially as he could’ve been bitter: Ariana’s passing away and Gellert’s leaving was the end of all his happiness. The use of the tricolon, in the first couple of paragraphs was also very effective at showing the repetition and monotony of Albus’ life because it shows him making lists, which are usually associated with chores.

The way you narrated the timeline was brilliant. Using descriptions of Albus’ pain showed that each day was painful, and that he never forgot, because the pain never lessened throughout the whole week. The consistency again illustrated the constant pain, and yet the different descriptions showed that even if he forgot one thing, something else was there in his conscience. My favourite was the last one: ‘reduced to a pair of brothers’. I suppose this really put Ariana’s death in perspective for me. It really hit me then that Albus and Aberforth should’ve been together, but that they weren’t and that they were never going to make up.

The grass metaphor was very well presented. I thought it was interesting that he immediately thought of Ariana, but the grass truly reminded him of Gellert, who meant far more to him. I think that this really worked because it was so true of Albus “ although his family was important to him, Gellert came along and changed his whole life. The grass changing was also effective in representing Gellert: not only has he gone, but he is not what he used to be to Albus.

I thought your characterisation of Albus was fantastic. You clearly know the character very well. His guilt was so clear, especially in sentences like “He should have considered Aberforth’s feelings.” This sentence especially caught me because it was at a point when Albus was trying to reconcile everyone and everything-- others, living and dead, and himself. Another strong example was the sentence “There is nothing he can say that will ever make up for Ariana’s death, so he stays silent instead”, which showed his strong sense of honour because you made him so aware of himself and what he’s done. Albus’ inability to cry was an interesting image to demonstrate the loss of his lover and his sister. I found it more difficult to understand than his haunted sleep because tears are associated with sadness, therefore it seemed to show a lack of emotion, when in reality, he was grieving deeply for many things. He went through many stages of grief “ his OCD book arranging, his nightmares “ but I felt this one stood out because it emphasised that emptiness that Albus felt throughout.

In the third paragraph, I like how you also demonstrated Aberforth’s care for Ariana, which we know to be a characteristic that shaped his life. The way he knows everything his sister liked, and that he decides rather than Albus really shows a deep love. Albus knew that Aberforth will never forgive him, and he knew that it’s mainly because he neglected Ariana. When Aberforth threw a pillow at Albus, though, it seemed childish and angry, which seems, to me, a little bit less in character.

I did find a few typos and Americanisms, though. However, there is one Americanism that I think worked really well, despite being an Americanism, because it has a double meaning. When Albus is planning on returning to Hogwarts in ‘the fall’, which in British English would be ‘the autumn’ or just ‘September’, I like how the word ‘fall’ contains a double meaning of the autumn and Albus’ fall from grace and love.

My favourite line was “Maybe it’s his guilt that is weighing him down” while he carries Ariana’s coffin. I really liked how this line used a physical object to convey the extent of his guilt. It felt very realistic and in character.

I really liked this. I thought that your use of repetition was very effective. You encapsulate Albus Dumbledore’s character brilliantly, especially in the way you convey his pain. Congratulations on winning a honourable mention: this story definitely deserved it.



Summary: Lily has always had a picture in her head of her future -- a wistful, far-too-good-to-be-true image of happiness and sunshine and flowers, of her and James walking off into the sunset, unencumbered by the darkness within the most evil of people who walked this earth.

Of course, of course she should have known that things weren’t going to be that simple.

This is babewithbrains of Ravenclaw entering the first round of Madam Alex’s Character Clinic Triathlon: Major Characters.

ZOMG. This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Canon Romance. Thank you!

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 3640 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
06/29/12 Updated: 07/01/12

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 09/22/12 Title: Chapter 1: Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion

Well, I am finally here to review my SPEW buddy. I’m so glad that you asked me to review this story, as it is so brilliantly written.

The irony was very well done. I felt like Harry stopping breathing felt very sudden, with nothing incorporating it into the story. However, when I stopped to think about it again, I wondered if it was an intended effect. As the story is from Lily’s point of view, I suppose that having her son stop breathing would be quite a sudden shocking thing, and perhaps you just threw it at me to try and recreate Lily’s shock. I'm a bit of a sap, so I didn’t really like it because I thought that after all you put Lily and James through in this story, they didn’t deserve to have that happen to them. I’m seriously glad you put the last bit in at the end when Harry recovered.

I liked how the repetition in Lily's thoughts intensified her emotions, but didn't feel over the top. This worked especially well, in my opinion, when she was panicking, because it made her sound like she was almost praying for Harry not to be dead.

Your characterisation of James and Lily is very different from any other I have ever read. Your portrayal of them as adults living in a war zone, which is, of course, who they are at the time, felt unique to me. Often, people write James and Lily fluff and, like I said about the sex being fluffy but unrealistic, that’s all great and nice, but I think that the believability of your characters was great. You show so much of Lily’s emotion that it’s almost impossible to connect with her, and I even began to understand her more than I would’ve done before -- as if she were a friend rather than a character I was reading. The other thing that made the whole story very believable was that, the war aside, everything that took place would’ve been quite mundane. People get drunk and couples argue all the time and I think that this is what you really nailed -- Lily and James were ordinary people in a unique situation. Their proposal was simple, over dinner a suitably romantic situation in a suitably unromantic manner; Lily’s concern for James in the hospital was so natural for two people completely in love; I could go on with the examples, but I think that I’ve made my point: the believability was down to the ordinary portrayal of Lily and James lives.

Actually, as a sucker for fluff, I think the proposal might’ve been my favourite bit. You handled it well, in my opinion, with a good balance of love and war. The reminder that Lily and James were fighting in the war worked well: it kept the scene from feeling too fluffy. In a way, I think, this section provided a little bit of humour and light relief in quite a ‘heavy’ story. James really lightens the mood at that moment, and I think you’ve made me like him a lot more by giving me a different insight into his character. I especially like that you clearly avoided the ‘James is rash’ stereotype in the proposal. It felt like Lily and James’ roles had reversed: James was the one worried, and Lily was just ‘OMG yes!’. I don’t think I’ve ever read such an emotional Lily, and she was especially emotional in the role of mother, despite James being initially the more enthusiastic about having a child.

The sex between Lily and James felt, to me, realistic rather than just beautiful and perfect. The exchanges after their first time felt sweet, innocent, and caring to me, in contrast to the ‘messy and painful’ sex. I think this almost emphasises how much of a ‘fumble-as-we-could-die-tomorrow’ affair it probably was. The second time, when they’d argued as only couples do, was far more loving and beautifully written, and contrasted again with the messy first time. I liked how their blissful second time also contrasted with the arguing before. I think that again, this emphasises that there are bad things in the world, but there are also good things: there is death and dispute, but there is also love and new life. You also linked the second sex scene really well with the preceding one, with the line: “the last thing on her mind was the contraceptive charm.” I really liked how it emphasised how surreal that their lives were: living in a war, but having wonderful sex.

I like how you're consistent about when you change your tense; it makes the non-linear sequence of events easier to follow. It’s something I have trouble with, even in linear writing, so I admire that you did it so well here. Merging the flashbacks/memories and the present was really effective, in my opinion. It made it very easy to understand because everything was very relevant, and without some of the information from the flashbacks, the story couldn’t have progressed. Keeping your tense consistent throughout each scene was also very helpful in keeping me on track.

The scenes also connected well with the quotes, as it felt a bit Shakespearean with the playwright connection. I thought the quotes were really well selected because they were very relevant to the story.

This story was really unique, and I really enjoyed it. I only hope my review can do it justice!


Author's Response: Hey BP! Apologies for taking a while to respond to this. Life has been very busy at the moment, and I wanted to do your review justice.

Okay, I know the ending wasn't quite right. To be quite honest, this was the first story I had written in a while, and I really just wanted to get it over with, lol. That doesn't excuse the ending, of course, but that was why it didn't seem right. I do think that I torture James and Lily quite a bit :P and I can see this scenario happening, but I needed to give them more closure, really. Maybe I might fix that up one day, so ta for the tip :)

Ha, it's interesting you mention her praying. In my head canon, she is actually a lapsed Catholic, so yeah, she would legitimately be praying there. And I'm really glad you liked James and Lily's characterisation! It is difficult to get characters right when they're living in what is essentially a war zone, and it's even harder to make things romantic and yet un-romantic at the same time, lol. It's lovely to know you thought it was believable, because that was really important for me.

YAY to you liking the proposal! :D And an even bigger YAY to you liking the smut, hehehehe. I hate it when people's first times are all silver strands and not really painful because (I'm not talking from personal experience) I know it's not like that at all. There is always awkwardness and almost definitely some kind of pain, and I think it's silly not to include that. And hot, drunk make up sex is... interesting to write :P

Ooh, I was worried the non-linearness would be hard to follow. I'm glad you found it easy to understand. And I only used the Shakespeare quotation at the beginning and end because I needed a title for the thing, lol -- I didn't actually have the whole playwright connection in mind till after I had written it.

Thanks for the lovely review, BP, and apologies for taking time to respond to you!

Soraya xxx


Diffraction by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Diffraction - the phenomenon where light encounters an obstacle.

It is September the first, and a sixth-year boy takes photographs of excited children on platform nine-and-three-quarters. Everyone looks happy, but Aaron Harper's heart is leaden. He can deal with the girl he fancies going out with the obnoxious Hugo Weasley, but coping at Hogwarts with no support from his father could be one obstacle too many.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my story for the Character Clinic OC challenge: Prompt 1.

Disclaimer: I'm not JKR: Hogwarts isn't mine, neither is Hugo Weasley, but Aaron Harper and Genister Avery are.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 10385 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
08/23/12 Updated: 08/26/12

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 09/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: One

Carole, you have done an amazing job here at fleshing out your OCs. This is one of my favourite stories of yours because it is so well written and shows the characters as people rather than as one-sided characters.

When I saw that Genister Avery was in this, I had to read it. I loved her character in High, and, unsurprisingly, I really enjoyed the way you fleshed out her character in this also. In High, I really liked how compassionate and understanding she was, and her witty comments made me laugh. In this story, I thought that you did a really good job building on her characterization in High. All of her different faces - girl, girlfriend, classmate, friend “ made it really easy for me to relate to her, which made her enjoyable to read about. When Aaron overhears her giggling about her hair, she seemed like a typical girl, and when she is being sympathetic about his financial situation, she felt very compassionate. I loved how much more complex these contrasts make her seem. The way you blend together all these different sides of her character was really, in my opinion, awe-inspiring.

Even though I didn't really remember Aaron from High, he, like Genister, was so well developed that I didn't feel like I needed to reread High to understand him. I feel sorry for him because of the situation you put him in: he’s just a boy with a passion and a family that doesn’t support it. Initially, I thought that his resentment and embarrassment towards Sophia and his stepmother seemed a little unjust. Most teenagers get a bit embarrassed around their parents in public, myself included, but not to that level; discovering his father’s verdict really clarified that for me. I actually felt really sorry for him, even though it was a bit selfish. His annoyance that the girl he likes is going out with a complete jerk is another situation that I (and I’m sure most people) can easily relate to. I think that these situations really helped me understand Aaron better and, as I’ve already said, feel sorry for him.

I think that the generally negative portrayal of the Weasley family through Hugo is one of the more interesting points of the story. You really do portray Hugo as a jerk, although as this is from Aaron’s point of view, I didn’t expect any less. When Hugo is repeatedly late to see Genister, Hugo comes across as insensitive. I definitely think that the confrontation is a key moment in the story: you collect up all of Hugo’s lack of consideration as a boyfriend and hit him (and me as the reader) with a ton of allegations in one explosion. I think that it fully expressed how inconsiderate Hugo was, and made me feel sorry for Genister and back Aaron. Aaron is scared of the Weasleys, and he has his reasons. As a Slytherin, he almost has to dislike them (which is a principle I understand and don’t like), but it was the word ‘confidence’ that got to me really. I never thought that 'confidence' was a negative word, although I suppose that it is something that Aaron lacks then the Weasleys must seem a little overbearing. It’s something I’ve never really considered, so this shows confidence, as well as the Weasleys, in a slightly different light for me. Genister’s parents dislike for them seems, to me, a far more valid reason, but as a sort of hook, I think this works quite well.

As for the other hook, photography, I admire that it was woven so deep into the story right from the beginning. I feel that Aaron thinking about that botched snap of Harry at the beginning shows how photography is very much a part of his life. Your subtlety, though, in writing it in also feels so natural that it doesn’t seem important in the story at all, when in fact, it is our first real hint into Aaron’s passion. Genister putting two and two together once she found out that Aaron wasn’t in Photography Club but knew he’d told Professor Zabini that he’d bought a new camera was a good demonstration of her shrewd mind, but also of her care when she encourages him to send something to the Prophet. You use photography as a brilliant medium to bring these two together, and you weave it in very delicately in a way that adds to the flow rather than disrupts it.

This story really does flow from scene to scene, and nothing feels like space filler. I really loved the ending because it all fitted together and flowed so well. I found it funny that the joke was actually on Aaron, but it was a happy joke. The only criticism I have is that “Hogsmeade, next weekend” sounded more like an order to me, as opposed to an invitation.

However, I thought that this was a brilliant story. Well done for writing such a well-developed piece and good luck in the challenge!


Author's Response: OOOH, thank you so much for the lovely review :). I hope my response can do it justice.

Aaron - yes, he's very minor in High, just a name, tbh, but he's one of the fifth years that Scorpius shares with and gives his Astronomy notes too. There is a reference somewhere to him 'having wet dreams over a Ravenclaw girl' because even then I had this story in mind (or more specifically, I had a follow up to High in mind). Then he turned up as a photographer in Swans and after that I knew I had to write him again.

Many of the reviews I received for High mentioned Genister and how they liked her. Her father, Rob, is in another story of mine (Apparently Asleep - which I might finish one day) and the history of her uncle has always been something I wanted to explore. Her family, as you pointed out, have more of a reason to dislike Ron and Harry, but she's fairly balanced about this. In the books, Harper (Aaron's dad) is the Seeker who takes over from Draco and calls Ron a blood-traitor' so his prejudice was something I could work with.

As you pointed out, the Weasleys (and Potters) come across as rather bullying. I don't think they are, but at that time (in my timeline at least) if you've started Hogwarts in Slytherin, and there are nine cousins at the school, the majority in Gryffindor, then I can imagine that would be quite intimidating. This is all from Aaron;s POV, and he's very biased against Hugo, for obvious reasons (much as Scorpius was biased against Albus in High) but Hugo isn't all bad, I don't think. He's careless and probably takes Genister for granted, but he's not really a bully.

The Hogsmeade, next weekend, line was really him trying to be cool. He did temper it with a question just after, so I hope she doesn't think it's an order. :)

ANYWAY .... I am currently writing a sequel to High for the GH challenge. It's more focused on Scorpius and his life in the Auror department, but this particular trio are in the first chapter ... at the very least.

Thank you so much for the wonderful review. It is very much appreciated.



Prayer to the Master by Envy_I_May_Be
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Harry reflects on his choice in that pivotal scene from Deathly Hallows, for he, as many, knows that in the end we must all face the master...

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 167 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
09/26/12 Updated: 09/27/12

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 03/31/13 Title: Chapter 1: Prayer to the Master

After my first reading, I was genuinely speechless. This poem fills me with awe.

This poem is definitely a prayer. The phrases at the beginning of each stanza make the song feel like a hymn. It certainly conveys Harry’s reverence of death (I assume that is the master, although Harry is master of death…) and each stanza gives a new plea of peace and calm.

I don’t fully understand your repetition of ‘emerald’, but I love it. I did wonder if it was to do with Harry’s eyes, but I think it’s probably more to do with the Avada Kedavra. Each different manifestation of emerald is a different side of death, and you show this so beautifully.

I think this poem not only lets us see a reverence of death, but also a fear. I know that Harry is not supposed to fear death, but this poem does not really specify a character (I took it to be Harry from your summary). If I use Harry/Lily’s eyes as the emerald, this poem can just as easily apply to Snape (except maybe a few lines) and how he longs for peace from his own mind in death.

I cannot think of a melody at present, but I cannot help but think what a beautiful peaceful requiem this would make. Needless to say, I love it.


Summary: In his first year at Hogwarts,Louis Weasley hadn't really expected to see Lord Voldemort appearing from a turban, and he never actually imagined that he'd discover the Chamber of Secrets, despite the attempts with his cousin. But he had expected something more from his school than a few mundane magical accidents.

Then, in his third year, he faced his Boggart and everything changed. For how can you defeat a fear that has no form?

Disclaimer: I am no JKR.

Thank you, Jess, for the original prompt and mah flist for encouraging me to write anyway, despite missing the deadline.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 9960 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
10/19/12 Updated: 10/19/12

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 04/05/13 Title: Chapter 1: Boggarts

So, as usual, I cannot but love this story. I think Louis and Laura are the sweetest couple, and I like your Molly a lot “ hooray for Hufflepuff Next Gens! However, what really affected me the most was my sympathy with the characters.

Like Louis, I found the Boggart really puzzling at first. I found it interesting that both he and Molly were afraid of their own family and their reputation, and it makes me wonder what the others feel about it. I wasn’t too keen on Victoire being Head Girl, as it felt a little bit too perfect, but I did like her characterisation pertaining to Teddy and felt that her girly gossipy-ness made up for it. It also raised questions in my mind about whether she gained the position by merit or my name, but a Weasley with a Triwizard Champion for a mother would almost undoubtedly be a talented witch (or wizard).

The way Louis conquered his Boggart made me feel quite sorry for him. Although I somewhat doubt that Molly or Arthur would treat their grandchildren differently, his position as eldest grandson would’ve been overlooked by everyone else because of his ‘younger-by-two-weeks cousin’. I really think that this was quite an eye-opener for me on the legacy that the Next-Gen kids would be faced with. It had never really occurred to me that it would be so expected of them to be in Gryffindor. I felt quite sad about how Molly always felt that her parents were more than disappointed and that she had to escape. I always liked to think that the Potter/Weasley clan would be more accepting (hence in my head-canon many of them are not Gryffindors). I especially hated the way he felt overshadowed by James because he’s a Potter. Louis must also feel very overshadowed just by his own siblings: Victoire as Head Girl, Dominique on the Gryffindor Quidditch team. I felt that your insertion of various Harry events was very effective in adding to this insecurity of inadequacy. However, the support that the family give to each other is really touching, because even if he doesn’t want them, he knows they’ll always be there for him when he does.

As for the other characters, of course, I hated Finch. He is a bully and I wasn’t really sure why he and his cronies were in Gryffindor. And what is the ‘Caron’ on Laura? I guess that she’s related to Stuart Ackerley, but I would love to hear more. I think she’s really sweet, and I love how she is what made him not nothing, because he is an actual person to her, and not just his name or family. And then you made Professor Goldstein very established, both as a teacher, a Ravenclaw, and a minor character of the Trio Era “ I loved how you incorporated all of this into the story (and I also loved the idea of him wearing a turban…). All of the Boggarts were also quite telling of the characters, however minor.

So here’s my review. I just want to finish by saying thank you for such a great story and for opening my eyes to the plight of the Next-Gen Weasleys.

Author's Response: Hello ...Thank you so much for the review for my Louis story. This is very much part of the build up to my canon for Louis which fits into other stories, and may or may not be written as a full fledged fic one day :). I did debate with having Victoire as Head Girl, but really, I couldn't think of a reason not to have her there (especially as her Dad had been head boy) and it added to the pressure Louis felt being her brother. Not sure if you;ve read any of my other NG stories, but Louis and James are actually very close, having been brought up together and have a lot of fun together. I see James as being quite loud, and thus he overshadows Louis, not least because he's a Potter.

Regarding them all in Gryffindor, really that came about because in another story of mine (Swans) Molly was very much the outsider as all the others were Sorted into Gryffindor. These things generally run in families unless there's a strong reason (like Sirius), but again, I couldn't see why the Weasley's and Potters wouldn't be Gryffindors. Also, from a story POV, it adds very much to the pressure any of them feel to be Sorted, or to live up to their names, and increases Molly's 'difference'. (I love Molly, btw - hahahaha)

My 'caron' on Laura was basically, I'm ashamed to admit it, it was a canon name. But I do think about the character, and if I do get around to writing my Louis chaptered fic, then there's a strong chance she'll be in it. I don't see them being together for the rest of their lives, but she's given him a little confidence to be Louis Weasley, and he's given her the confidence in her abilities.

Thank you once again for the wonderful review! ~Carole~


Solace by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Graham Montague is still recovering from a difficult divorce when Ginny Potter comes to the Department of Mysteries, unable to accept her own devastating loss. Can he help her move on with her new life, or will she change his even more?
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity

Word count: 11900 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
01/26/13 Updated: 02/10/13

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 02/01/13 Title: Chapter 4: Depression

Oh my godness.....sob sob.. How could you do that to Graham?!

I feel quite sorry for him. You make him such a complex character, and he really thinks everything through, so he's not out of canon as such. He's so confused and I totally understand him. Ginny dressing up like she did probably didn't help him with the whole anti-dinner date thing...

I don't normally like Ginny very much, but here I kind of feel sorry for her. You write her in a way that makes her less perfect, and I really like that. It must be a really uncomfortable situation. She's still only been a widow for less than a year, and if I were in that situation I would definitely be very uncomfortable. I thought that you really used this passage to bring out a less distraught and grieving Ginny's fire again. She's jumping to conclusions but I think that she makes the best decision for herself that she can in the circumstance.

I should've reviewed the other chapters but nothing particularly sparked in me like this one did. But this chapter was so incredibly good it was worth the ever so slightly longer although still really short wait!

Sorry if this review is a bit rambly and confusing. Really looking forward to the last chapter, and hoping that Graham can get his happy ending, even if it's not with Ginny.

Actually, scrap that. People with happy endings tend to go off into the sunset and never be seen again... Make it sad so you can write more about him.

- BP :)

Author's Response: A belated thank you for the review! I'm glad you were moved by this chapter to leave a note because i really appreciate your comments! I'm thrilled you find Graham a complex character, and even glad you like Ginny (she's tough to get sometimes.) Your final note is interesting and I wonder if you've had a chance to read the end of the story. I don't want to spoil anything, but I do hope you enjoy it! Thanks again!! ~Gina :)

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 03/31/13 Title: Chapter 5: Acceptance

:'( Sob sob sob.

But very glad I read this chapter like you told me to.

I think that this is the most beautiful conclusion imaginable for Graham.

I shall now console myself somehow...

Author's Response: Thank you so much for coming back to read the end! Yes, it's quite sad. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, though. I was rather surprised it turned out this way - I had actually toyed with the reverse, but I quite like how it ended. Very bittersweet but hopeful. It was tough to write but worth it - thanks again for the review! ~Gina :)


Summary: Harry, Ron and Hermione are on a trip in America. Or are they? It's April Fools' Day, and they might just be the victim of one cosmic prank pulled by a red-headed man and a ghost.

For my flist, and for you.

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Substance Abuse

Word count: 1062 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
03/31/13 Updated: 03/31/13

Reviewer: BrokenPromise Signed
Date: 04/01/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Haha... very funny.

But I seriously think you should write the story in the introduction.

Author's Response: BPPPPP! :) I don't know if I'm good at writing actual pranks lol, but I'll give it a shot!

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