Interesting story, I've never read a H/Hr-fic from Ron's POV! I thought it started out really realistic - Ron realizing that they are close, and he gets somewhat disturbed and disgusted by it. That was funny, the big happy family part =D It was cute that Ron kind of realized that he'd always been an idiot towards Hermione, and that he apologized... but I can't see Ron reacting the way he did at the end! Even if he's grown, he's still a bit immature... or something... I don't know. On the other hand, I've never really liked Ron (because most of the time he's just plain stupid =P) Anyways, that was funny too, that bit with 'some other girl will get the spice and passion that a relationship with me has'... I laughed hard at that. It saved me from not liking the ending all that much. But who am I to criticize your story, your writing's wonderful and you're so talented! A few small typos, but nothing big really. Well, I better stop rambling. 8/10, for a truly interesting H/Hr one-shot!
Yay, I'm first to review! =D Nice fic, this is! I think you're portraying Ginny really well (both in the prologue and in this chapter). Your writing is amazing, you can really understand the way Ginny's feeling. There were no spelling errors, but the grammar and phrasing was a bit strange in some places, you may want to take an extra look at that. Anyways, this story is really interesting, I want to see where it's going! Please update! =)
Wow, this story is amazing! An interesting take on that terrible Halloween night, and extremely well-written. Lily's emotions were all very realistic and in-place, I could feel exactly what she felt when James died. You're really talented! Keep it up, and update soon! =)
Author's Response: Thank you - it was really important for me to make the emotions in this fic realistic, so I\'m glad it worked for you! I hope you like the second part - when it gets up, of course!
*gasp* It's Voldie! Omg! =P
I really like this story, you're a great writer and describe things well - I could picture everything in my head. It was a bit unnecessary to go over the ending of HBP again, but... how did Voldemort kill Dumbledore? It was Snape! =/ Anyways, the story was a bit rushed, and the chapter could have been a bit longer. But in whole, it was great! I'm looking forward to reading more (especially when the H/Hr comes in =P) ! Update soon! =)
Author's Response: Yeah I thought it was a little rushed myself, but being my first fan fiction I feel as I have the right to be a little rusty. I\'m really glad you like it. I\'ll try to update it as soon as possible. A_T
Grrrrr such a mean cliffie!!
I liked this chapter, it had a lot of cute moments. I like your writing, it's really easy-flowing, but it'd be nice if you described some things a bit more... like Hermione's dress... =P But I suppose you want to leave that for the reunion. Hope that's next chapter!
I can't wait to read more, please update soon with another (longer) chapter! =)
This story is great! It perfectly well demonstrates that Hermione and Ron love each other, but just don't work out.
What I don't get, is how everybody knows that Harry's coming to the reunion... then again, there could be some spell that forces all Hogwarts students to go, so they can't skip it =P But it actually doesn't matter, because I really want Harry to come to the reunion! I want to see how him and Hermione react when they meet again!
And will they be able to forgive Ron for telling Harry to stay away...?
Please update soon, I want to see where this is headed! You're a great writer, keep it up! =)
The chapter we've all been waiting for, yesss!!! And it was as wonderful as I had imagined! Oh Harry... what had you expected... now I just can't wait to know how this turns out! PLEASE update soon! You are a terrific writer and this story is great! =)
You’ve done an AMAZING job here. There’s a constant flow to your writing, which makes it easy to read and very interesting. I liked that you alternated between narrative text and the letters home to England; it gave the story a bit of variation.
The research you’ve done must’ve been extensive; both the little facts and things about Greece, staying on a ship and the time period added to the brilliance-ness of the story and nothing felt too forced, or anything. Great job!
Journeys end in lovers meeting...
You’ve gotta love that quote =P It fits very well with your fic and you’ve done a very good job making it into a full story. =)
I also liked how you gradually let the reader know the relationship between Cassandra and Albus, how they know each other and why they’re journeying to Greece together. Cassandra’s character is lovely – not as crazy as the Trelawney we know, but with the same (yet more advanced) Seeing capabilities. You wrote those very well; both the premonitions and prophecy were believable and just like I would’ve imagined them to be and feel like. =) Your characterization of Albus was AWESOME, exactly like I thought he would have been as a child. Clever, intelligent and extremely curious, always thirsty for knowledge. I also liked the adventurous side you put to him, I think that fits in as well and it was a nice, sweet touch to the story!
I love every little bit of this story. I wished it were longer, and that we would’ve found out what the captain’s real intentions were! This is such a great story, you’ve done a wonderful job, honestly! Awesomely done, Joanna! =)
LOL! This was hilarious, Cyns. Sure, you're a twin, but I still can't see how you came up with this wonderful idea! =D
I think you've chosen good characteristics for Fred and George; I've never really seen the differences between them, but I'm sure there must be some, and you convinced me. It was fun to see Ginny realising their switch, and the scenes with Angelina were just plain LMAO-moments! =P
I think you've done a very good job of developing a fun and original idea. Was it for that drabble challenge? *suspects it was a liiiittle long for a drabble* =P Anyways, only piece of crit I've got is that you used 'then' when it should've been 'than' in some places, and that I'd have loved for it to be longer and even more descriptive =D Good job, hun! *huggles*
Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a great review! I have always had problems with Then and Than. I\'ll try to fix that. I wrote this for a Monthly One-shot challenge a while back, and I even place in it! :) THis is the only story that I have ever had place. It was a lot of fun to write, and I just emphasized the same type of differences in them as is in me and my sister. :) Cyns
Aww, that was so sweet! I do love H/Hr-fics, especially when they're set after HBP (and therefore actually could happen in the books... =P)
Everyone was very in character - Ginny's behaviour was a bit strange, but hey, she's in love with Harry; and you don't see much of that side of Harry in the later books but I guess it's just hidden... we all know his greatest power is love.
This story was so sweet and so great, absolutely flawless, you're so talented, Croyez! The only thing that would have made me love it even more, would be if Harry had turned around and kissed Hermione back... in the middle of the stairs... oh well, all stories can't be over-romantic like me =P You're the best Croyez, can't wait to read more from you! 10/10!
I was so happy when I noticed that there were not only one but TWO new chapters! Yay! So, now that I've read them, I'm only even more wound up on this story and I just can't wait to read more!! Especially when/if Hermione meets Harry or Ron again, that would be very interesting! You're doing so good, you're really talented chlo, keep it up! =)
How can you even think of not continuing with this story?! It's the best!!
I had a feeling it was Ron... wow, a policeman?? It kind of fits him though, if he'd choose to pursue a muggle career. Anyway, I liked the characterization of him, three years after he was rejected, I felt so sorry for him! =(
And I just have to say, your song... it was beautiful. The lyrics were so good, so Hermione, and you could really see how she feels inside. If only this were a movie, and you could actually hear Hermione singing!
This chapter was so great, even though it was short! PLEASE continue with this fic, please! =)
Wow, this chapter was amazing! It was after all only an introduction, and not much H/Hr-romance, but your writing was so good that I didn't care!
I just have to ask you something... while reading, I was constantly reminded of the story "Crestfallen" by coven. Have you by any chance read it? Cos it's the same kind of plot... and Hermione's shop is called the Book Nook... Not that I mind, it's one of my favorite stories, and now this one is too =D I was just curios.
I love what you've got going here! You've really got a way with words, you're so talented! Pleeease update soon, I can't wait! =)
Author's Response: I haven\'t read it, no. But this is a very overdone plot anyway, and I\'m very sorry I stole the name of the bookshop.
Eeep, you finally updated! You've made my day!!
So...it isn't Ron? Or has he dyed his hair? Hmm... The plot thickens. I'm curious to see where this story is going!
And what about Harry? Gone? My life is over! =(
Please update soon, you are such a fabulous writer I can't even try to describe how much I like your writing! It makes me feel all happy! =D Can't wait 'til next chapter!
Aww, so cute!
I'm not even sure why I started reading this fic, I'm the biggest Harry/Hermione-shipper there is, and yet, I just couldn't stop reading. Your writing is just breathtakingly good, simply fantastic. You're really talented! Both humour, romance, and a little bit of everything else, it was just great! Too bad you're a Ron/Hermione-shipper... =P
Good job on this one! I'm looking forward to reading more of your work! =)
Hmm... you sure you need another review? ;P Anyway, I liked this chapter a lot! Very good characterization of Hermione and it was a nice way to have the readers know what happened during those ten years through her thoughts. I really have to go now, but I'm adding this to my favourites so I can continue reading on chapter 2 when I have more time!! =)
Author's Response: Sorry for the long absence! I always try to answer reviews right away, but maybe you didn\'t notice =) Anyway, thank you for the characterization compliment! And the one about explaining the past through her thoughts! It will only get better, I promise! =D
Hmmm, this is a very original concept... I like it! I think you wrote this extremely well - that he felt like he should be congratulated on his birthday, and probably has at least one friend. Your writing is great, it has an easy flow and rythm to it, which I like! The only thing I thought could've been done better, was right at the beginning - how could he immediately know that it had gone 5 years since his last memory? Maybe you could've written something like: "He knew that he was 15 years old..." beacuase then it would've made more sense how he knew... Other than that, amazingly interesting start to what I can only assume to be a very different story! Can't wait to read more! =)
Author's Response: Ooooh, I\'m so excited - my first review for this story (you should be honored). Thank you for the compliments (*blush*) and for the suggestion. I guess I just didn\'t really think about how Harry would know that he had \"lost\" five years. I hope you continue to like it as the story progresses.
Wow. I'm speechless.
It felt so real, so... I don't know. Wonderful, realistic, Hermione-ish, beautiful, canon, excellent, emotional. Simply great. I especially loved that it was written on some kind of verse, with repititions but small variations in them, not only the poem part, but the in-between as well. It was just beautiful, it made me all soft inside.
This piece is just screaming talent; now I'll have to go check if you have any other stories posted. Just know that this was absolutely astoundingly good, so well-written, definately one of my favorites. The only thing I was thinking was that maybe it belongs in the poetry category... And I would've loved it to be a bit longer... Anyway. Like honey for the soul, or something like that. Splendid. 10/10
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! It\'s my first work here, so I\'m thrilled for a nice review. I didn\'t put it in the poetry category because it wasn\'t supposed to be a poem when I started it... I guess it did end up as one, though. Thank you for the suggestions! They\'re greatly appreciated.
Ginny stays up one night after her fifth year trying to face what she dreads the most....
Hey! You already know that I think this story is fantastic, but I just have to say it again. You portray Ginny's feelings in a very realistic way, and the ending is so cute! Way to go, girl! =D
Author's Response: Don\'t forget you helped a little...
Very sad, I got a bit teary at the end =) Well written, with nice and fitting words and rhyming. Draco and Hermione are so cute =)
Author's Response: Awh, that made me smile when you said you got a bit teary. Not because of the sadness, but at the fact that my story portays strong emotion and people can feel it. Thanks.