Summary: Hermione Granger and Draco Malfoy attend the Wizarding University of Paris the year after they graduate from Hogwarts. This is a sequel to the Dragon Does the Tickling, where Hermione Granger and Draco Malfoy complete their seventh year at Hogwarts after the war.
Sorry to be so late in responding! The last two chapters are full of important information that 1) set up the storyline for more intrigue and possibility while 2) re-establishing Draco and Hermione's relationship. You have dangled a few carrots with Beline's absence and Tabor's refusal to believe Hermione is not interested in him. Great job!
Author's Response: You are a very engaged reader, which is great, but makes me wonder if some of my writing choices make things seem more important than they are meant to be. You'll see how all the loose ends get tied together in the next few chapters, and then you can let me know if I've lived up to your expectations. Thanks for the review! Jenny
I liked this chapter for its realism: you have given us a familiar glimpse into the sadder side of interpersonal relationships gone awry. I cannot help but entertain the idea that Draco's rebound behavior is covering up feelings he wishes to keep private. Using Aceline is cruel; however, if she is the blood-purist I assume her to be, she is oblivious to Draco's true feelings for Hermione. She is only about herself. Draco has changed and I also believe he is protecting Hermione by using the breach in their relationship to get on with Goyle's situation. Ideally, in the end I would like to see Draco revealed as an undercover informant for the British Aurors (unbeknownst to Ron and Harry, on assignment from the Minister himself). Sounds far-fetched, but makes sense to me. I imagine Draco using Ron and Harry's snitch-request as the means to keep Hermione out of immediate danger. Somehow, I imagine Tabor to be eyeball deep in evil as well!! Just a few ramblings on my part.
Good interlude and story-building with this chapter! Love the teaser of a last paragraph.
Author's Response: Wow! You have a lot of interesting story ideas. Unfortunately, I've already written the rest of my story, so I can't incorporate your musings. You should write your own fan-fiction! I'm glad you like the realism of Draco's behavior. I struggle with the idea of changing Draco too much from what he was like in the books, so I thought I'd throw some regression into the mix. Thank you for your thoughtful review! --Jenny
Hmmmm. Interesting take on fairy tale-meets-reality. Tabor's mother a hag? And he didn't know himself? Sorry...doesn't jive. Didn't much care for the lengthy descriptions, but the shortened paragraphs and quick dialogue easily compensate. Using Hermione's mum as her go-to is practical and provides believable. I can see how contacting Mrs. Malfoy would circumvent the problem of cell reception at WUP. Good thinking.
When Hermione saw Tabor standing alone, my thoughts were instantly on his culpability at causing Carol and Luke's absence. If anything, I wouldn't be surprised if Aceline has Tabor under her spell and manipulating his behaviors to win Hermione's interest and keep her occupied, away from Draco.
Good job!!! Keep those chapters coming.
Author's Response: I guess it's not yet clear, but Tabor knows his mother is a Hag. Let me know what your take is on the Tabor/mother situation after you read the next chapter okay? (It's in the queue.) I'd like to get your take on things after you see where I went with this. Thank you for your review! Jenny
Really? Sorry, but this chapter just does not stand up to your previous work. The early sections of description are bland. What happened to the quick dialogue and succinct passages? If you intended to save your writing skills for the sex scenes, why bother with the final exams and quid ditch match? I am disappointed.
Author's Response: I'm sorry to disappoint you. As a professor, I love to think about the classes Hermione is taking and the final exams. If that's too much detail for you, I'm sorry. There are times when witty dialogue doesn't seem to fit. I'm trying to wrap up their year at school and there are things that may seem boring to some that I think are important to round out their school year experience. Thanks for your review, Jenny
Typical university goings-on sprinkled with a dash of mystery and subterfuge? Wonderful!!! Do I detect a hint of future missteps with Draco and Hermione as well? I am curious as to how you will resolve Draco's involvement with Goyle and Hermione's duplicity. Please, please do not skim over the plotline and simplify the outcome: develop your storyline as complex and thorough as you can! Good luck!
Author's Response: I'm trying to develop the story fully, but there are a lot of moving pieces! Some issues are going to be longer term. I hope you are satisfied with the way I've plotted things out for the rest of this story, and hopefully you'll stick with me through story # 3 as well. Thank you for your thoughtful review, Jenny
I am not sure where you are headed with this storyline; however, the journey is quite interesting and well-written. I enjoy your attention to details that enhance the reading experience without being overbearing. Love the dialogues! You have my curiosity whirling overtime with the introduction of the map and Goyle's employment (a la Tom Riddle?) Please don't wait too long to post new chapters!
Author's Response: Thank you for your nice review. I love researching the details of the story as much as I enjoy writing it! The next couple chapters should come really fast now. Thanks, Jenny
Summary: Based on the combination of the Latin obliviscor, meaning "forget," and the Aramaic עַ�‘ְ�“ָא כְּ�“ַ�‘רָא, avda kedavra, meaning "what was said has been done," Oblivi Kedavra has the meaning “forget what has been done.”
After being struck by a home-made curse from Draco Malfoy, Hermione's mind is swept clean of any and all memories of Ron. Which is stronger? Love or revenge?
This storyline is very intriguing. I don't know where you are going with it, but I hope the character development and events are well-rounded and believable. I look forward to future installments.
I'm surprised this chapter is so short; I presume it is the prelude to the ending of the story. If so, please do not disappoint with a rushed ending. A gratifying confrontation between Hermione and Draco is worth the wait! I would prefer to have all of Draco's secrets revealed: how he developed the curse and verification of Hermione's theory would be wonderful. In my mind, I can see Hermione walking out of Draco's cell with the knowledge that she would be getting her memories returned before she was able to leave the island...and Draco coming to the realization that he was no longer protected by his "happy place." A screeching halt...to be graphically blunt...to Hermione's hell as she hears the iron gates close behind her.
Bring on your next chapter as soon as possible.
Author's Response: Hi! thanks for your review. Just so you know, the story is done, it just takes some time to get each chapter posted on this site. There are 21 chapters. I hope you like it in the end!
Nicely done. The tension, the repetitive confrontations, the glimmer of remembrance...then nothing. Thank you for bringing Ginny into the mix and for using her observations to reveal a vital piece of information. The eye contact is priceless. I'm glad you are posting frequently.
This is such a interesting story...I hope you do not wait too long to post the next chapters!
Ok...we're finally getting to the crux of the matter, aren't we? Draco has to die. No mention of the Dementor's Kiss, which would merely remove his soul from his body. I think this should be a sticking point: if Draco receives the DK, then Hermione doesn't get her memories in full. Should Draco die, Hermione is possibly cured of her memory loss. Interesting conundrum, yes????
You are correct in tagging this chapter "fluff" as there seems to be no purpose for it but to interject some physicality into Ron and Hermione's re-developing relationship. Perhaps the content would have been better served had you also intertwined new information into the work; a revelation from the Ministry about Draco? Or Draco's death and the complete release of the spell over Hermione?? This could have happened at a most opportune moment. More content, please...less fluff.
Summary: After the end of Voldemort, a new academic year has started at Hogwarts with Harry, Ron and Hermione as NEWT students. Most of the Slytherins have not returned but Draco Malfoy has. His arrogance and self righteousness have gone along with the vanished honor of his family in the wizarding community. He is woken from a dream to face reality with burning desire to regain his lost pride, with no short cuts this time. Will he be given the chance to prove himself? Hermione does not know how much her decision is going to change both their lives forever.
I was concerned with the lengthy intro (sans dialogue) to the story in chapter 1; however, you have redeemed yourself quite nicely on the whole. The more first-person interaction, the better. Be mindful of the use of background/support paragraphs: they can become weak replacements for dynamic action. Good job! I look forward to the next installment, so please don't wait too long to post!
Summary: Weddings don't just happen you know! They need planning.
This has been a fun story to read and I expect the level of detail and narrative to continue. You've managed to capture and effectively illustrate the ups and downs of a typical wedding journey. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you. The ups and downs will continue as the wedding slowly approaches. -N-
Harry and Ginny reach their centuries. Life after one hundred years in ten one-hundred word scenes.
Nominated for: Best Canon Romance (One-shot) story - Quicksilver Quills 2012
What this is?
Author's Response: Thank you. -N-
Summary: Neville has got quite enough to be getting on with already, thank you very much, and this... situation with Luna is not making things any easier.
NIcely achieved, the resolution of Neville and Luna. Just the right touch of angst and reality. I have enjoyed the story very much.
You REALLY get Luna...her dialogue has just the right touch of the misty, sing-song rhythm Evana Lynch provides in her portrayal of our movie-Luna! Nicely done!
Summary: Stuck in the Manor and bored nearly out of his mind, Draco Malfoy hatches a plan of questionable legality to acquire some company.
Love the story! You captivate with well-constructed sentences; descriptive without being repetitous.
Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm glad my style worked for you!
Summary: Perish the universe provided I have my revenge. - Savinien Cyrano de Bergerac
Heaven has no wrath like grief to rancor turned, nor hell a fury like a parent anguished.In 2010, Britain was rocked by the unsolved disappearance of a little girl, daughter to Hermione Granger and Draco Malfoy.
In 2011, America is rattled by a series of scattered and strange crimes, cold cases before the corpses even cooled.A story of Draco and Hermione on a journey of vendetta, and a journey back to each other.
Loved the epilogue and ending twist; 'twas wonderful to finish on a note of hope after the heartwrenching events previous.
Summary: There is a thin line between love and hate. There is an even thinner line between Gryffindor and Slytherin; the willingness to do anything to achieve their goals. Gryffindors cannot see the big picture, and if they come to a decision to choose between the greater good and their loved ones or himself, they would sacrifice the world for their friends.
Slytherins are different. We know the value of sacrifice, but there is something else that separates us from those who wear red and gold. We will fight as hard as we can, in any way possible, even if it may be seen as unjustified or morally wrong. Gryffindors let their consciences get in the way of the greater goal. We don’t, but no one believes that we can fight for the right cause. They remember us as the evil, idiotic, or simply power hungry. They don’t remember us for what we are; who we are. We’re here to change that.
They will remember us, and they will remember us as those who fought all prejudice and cruelty simply because were were done with it. They will remember us, and the next time they think of a phoenix rising from the ashes they will remember this phrase:
Remember the Slytherins.
Nominated in the 2012 QSQ Awards - Next Gen/OC for Nick.
As sick and dark as you've written this story, the end seems to have very little chance of being positive in a realistic way. Perchance this is your purpose?
Author's Response: Erm ... I know that the story can't have a completely happy ending, that's true, but I also don't think that it will end with the world burning. A lot of it depends on which way one scene swings (and yes, it is only based on one scene), but it WILL bring closure. It will either be bittersweet or heartbreaking (because there is honestly no way Nick can completely recover from this). I guess I just have to decide. Thank you so much for the review, though! (and how often in life are there completely happy endings?)