Summary: Fifteen years after the Battle, Ron and Hermione reminisce.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I hope she'd like this.
This story was inspired by a reminder from halfaslug on tumblr - thank you. I dedicate this to her, and Lori (Weasley Mom) because they love Romione so much. (Well, what's not to love?)
Very well crafted. I appreciate the balance of nostalgia, sadness, positivity, and celebration.
You have a gift for insightful dialogue that doesn't bog down in text: conversations flow quickly and reveal the characters' tone nicely.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I';m glad you appreciate this little snapshot of their lives :D ~ Carole~
Summary: Albus remembered her, through everything that happened. And he just wanted to go back to where it all began, where everything was fine.
I enjoyed the convoluted storyline...working back to the beginning. Perhaps you might consider another A/S installment highlighting the events surrounding Al's magical revelation and Sophia's interactions with the Potters?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm not sure I'll write more of Al/Sophia's story - the main gist of their revelation is that when they both wake up one morning, Al realizes he loves her and decides to tell her. Sophia responds with "okay, cool, you're a wizard. What do you want for breakfast?" And then Al proposes he's so happy. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Summary: Life goes on, but not the same. Everything living thing grows, changes, and matures. Married life is a living thing.
This is a delightfully playful and well-constructed backstory to the Drakeshaugh saga. Thank you for developing another Harry/Ginny narrative full of oddments and tweeks!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. More Harry/Ginny soon. -N-
Summary: Sometimes, famous people attract unwanted attention. But minor magical misdemeanours have nothing to do with the Muggle Interface Team, do they?
The story was well-plotted and nicely written. I appreciate the short, succinct paragraphs, informative dialogue, and progressive action.
I look forward to more of your work.
Author's Response: Thanks, now that I’ve written both a Bobbie-centred and a Lavender-centred M.I.T. story I really must write a Susan-centred one. However, next will be Strangers. -N-
Summary: The adventure is over but life is beginning. Struggle and triumph, joy and sorrow. After the Adventure picks up as Harry's talk with Dumbledore's portrait ends shows his life start to unfold, a life without Voldemort. It's not going to be easy, but it is his. (Rated M for violence, adult themes, complex ideas of morality especially in the weeks after the war.)
So much information and wonderful action! This is a very nice addition to the post-Battle library. Good job!11
Summary: AU. Y7. Draco and Hermione are Head Boy and Head Girl. Both are going through personal issues and trying to come into their own after the fall of Voldemort during the Ministry of Magic Battle Y5. Will familiarity breed contempt or romance for these two?
Plot setting aside, the story became much more interesting when the dialogue was injected into the narrative.
Be very cautious as you proceed: the temptation to simply supply information rather than develop interaction between characters is great. Choose your words wisely, both spoken and descriptive. A varied vocabulary will strengthen the reader's resolve to look for your story regularly. While your premise of a hate-to-love (lust?) relationshio between Draco and Hermione is not new, you have an opportunity to bring an unique spin to the 'ship.
Author's Response: Thank you for this awesome feedback! I agree about the dialogue vs narrative. For the purpose of an intro, narrative is what I went with. Hopefully you'll enjoy the unique spin I have planned for this pair.
Summary: It is July 2020, and Ginny and Lily are discussing birthdays and boyfriends.
Thisis DELIGHTFULLY fresh and spot on! Thank you for giving us a little backstory on Ginny and Harry and showing us the precious relationship between mother and daughter.
Author's Response: Thank you. A mother/daughter moment was something of a risk for me, as I'm neither a mother nor a daughter, I'm glad you liked it. -N-
Summary: Harry asks, and gets asked, several questions, the answers to which will shape his life.
A very nicely crafted introductory chapter. You present the reader with a bit of mystery: WHY did Harry buy the Muggle house? WHAT is the significance of waiting the 4 !/2 years and WHERE had Harry been living in the interim? Will the story reveal the reasons for Harry's avoidance of #12 Grimmauld Place? Is the interaction between House Elf and Master become the foundation for the rest of the story?
I look forward to reading your installments. Good luck!
Great job...keep going!!!!!
Summary: It's three years after the end of the war, and it seems like Draco Malfoy can finally return to a somewhat normal life. He is still tormented by memories, but the last person he would expect to help him just might be his savior.
Now that you have provided sufficiently long paragraphs in narrative form, please focus more on dialogue and interaction. This is an interesting storyline.