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Summary: Hermione Granger and Draco Malfoy attend their sophomore year at the Wizarding University of Paris. This is a sequel to both the Dragon Does the Tickling, where Hermione Granger and Draco Malfoy complete their seventh year at Hogwarts after the war and fall in love and More Wandless Magic with Malfoy, where they complete their freshman year at WUP. I strongly recommend reading both those stories first.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Epilogue? What Epilogue?

Word count: 162696 Chapters: 45 Completed: No
Published:
09/03/12 Updated: 02/09/14


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 10/05/12 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Xoroi's Ghost

While the story is full of interesting color and description, it reads much like a junior literature selection for me. Otherwise, you have put together a nice couple of chapters.

Author's Response: I'm sorry you find the story to be juvenile. It is a bit tricky, trying to take a series written for children/young adults and move it into the "adult adults" realm. Especially when I don't enjoy writing the sex scenes and I my adventure/mystery is going to be lighthearted and fun, not deep and disturbing. But keep the comments coming. Thanks,Jenny

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 07/24/13 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Infecting Draco

Can't believe you ended this chapter JUST as Draco was admitted into infirmary!!!!!!! Hope the next installment comes quickly !

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 07/24/13 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Infecting Draco

Can't believe you ended this chapter JUST as Draco was admitted into infirmary!!!!!!! Hope the next installment comes quickly !

Author's Response: Sorry about that. Gotta keep it interesting. ;-) --Jenny

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 11/29/13 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43: Ardiana Strikes Back

Cannot help but think Dritan is part of Ardiana's plan, but will have to see where you're taking this storyline.
You have many chapters and plots; be careful you get lost in the telling of the tale!

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 06/25/13 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: New Year's Eve

Oh no...you did not just end this chapter without giving us more H/D drama!!!!!???
I was hoping for some kind of confrontation...one where Ardiana tries to one-up Hermione and the whole attempt fizzles out in grand style!
Looking forward to the next installment.

Author's Response: I hope you enjoy the next few chapters that are coming along. And hopefully I'll be able to create some good drama for you. Thank you for your review, Jenny

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 09/29/13 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38: Heliopaths to the Rescue

The dialogue was tight and kept the action moving in this chapter. Good job! Make sure you reveal the results of Hermione's WUP photos: maybe they will reveal more than just FFHs for Luna's research!!! A suspect/clue in the landscape, maybe???

I have also noticed a trend in your writing; the repetition of terms that makes the reading a bit heavy and boring. Try to construct your paragraphs in such a way as to use a diverse selection of descriptives. This will not only move the action along, but intrigue your audience and motivate the reader to stay with the story.

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 09/29/13 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38: Heliopaths to the Rescue

The dialogue was tight and kept the action moving in this chapter. Good job! Make sure you reveal the results of Hermione's WUP photos: maybe they will reveal more than just FFHs for Luna's research!!! A suspect/clue in the landscape, maybe???

I have also noticed a trend in your writing; the repetition of terms that makes the reading a bit heavy and boring. Try to construct your paragraphs in such a way as to use a diverse selection of descriptives. This will not only move the action along, but intrigue your audience and motivate the reader to stay with the story.

 

Mourning by noblefate
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: After the Battle of Hogwarts, the Wizarding world starts to piece itself together, but Molly Weasley knows that’s easier said than done.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1030 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/09/12 Updated: 09/16/12


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 09/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Mourning

Too short!!!! No resolve!!!! You posed the question and did not answer it!!! ARRGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH

Author's Response: I'm glad there was something about this that made you want more. When I first wrote it, it really was a character study in Molly's reaction to the war, but I've received a bunch of feedback that's made me start thinking about another scene or two. I don't guarantee anything, but something may come of the musings. Thank you for reading! ~ Megan

 

Summary: Lord Voldemort is dead. Here’s to a happily ever after. Or not. Life after the war is far more complicated than anyone expected. After a devastating blow to the family so early, the Potters are left reeling - but this is only the beginning. With the death of outright evil, something more subtle has taken its place, and one wizard may not be enough. This time, it takes the whole family.
Sequel to All for All, but you do not need to have read that to understand this.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Mild Profanity, Slash

Word count: 31145 Chapters: 12 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/11/12 Updated: 01/01/13


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 09/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Intriguing! Very nice use of dialogue, accompanied by crisp, descriptive writing.
Good job! I look forward to parts 2 and 3.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I've submitted chapter one of part one, so that should be up in... I think the mod queue is about seven days at the moment. I'm glad you enjoyed it, that you for reviewing!

 

Save Me by Sly Severus
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 102]

Summary: A year after the war, wounds remain fresh. Survivors struggle just to keep surviving. They’re plagued with guilt, illness, and new prejudices.

Harry always thought his life would get easier after the demise of Voldemort, but he was wrong.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Self Injury, Sexual Situations, Slash, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 98989 Chapters: 65 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/12/12 Updated: 11/09/12


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 09/14/12 Title: Chapter 3: Keep Fighting

Too short!!! However, you've provided readers with characters in need of help: Teddy, Harry, Hermione, and Andromeda. Teddy's age necessitates adult supervision, Harry's drinking and self-loathing requires tough love, Hermione's nature demands an outlet to help others, and Andromeda's role as Teddy's caregiver-by-default provides a starting point for a very interesting conclusion. Don't stray too far afield trying to bring other needy characters into the mix: you have a nice combination to work with!

Author's Response: Yes, I tend to write chapters. I happen to like them better. Thanks so much for the comments. There actually are more characters with issues, but they've already been introduced. You just skipped them. :p

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 09/17/12 Title: Chapter 7: It's all in the Blood

Very interesting turn of events. Never saw this coming! Good work!!! Now I'm really intrigued.

Author's Response: Happy to hear I hooked you. :) Thanks for the review.

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 09/18/12 Title: Chapter 8: Murderer

Didn't see that conversation coming...but I get a better glimpse of the direction you might be taking us.
Nicely done.

Author's Response: Think you know where I'm going, huh? You might, with the Malfoys and Androemda, but I think I still have a few surprises in store. :) Thanks so much for the review.

 

Never Let Go by majestic_ginny
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 32]

Summary:

DAUGHTER OF MINISTER FOR MAGIC FOUND DEAD

Lucy Weasley, eldest daughter of Minister for Magic Percy Weasley, was found dead in her room early yesterday morning. Forensics has revealed that the death occurred due to poisoning, though the nature of the poison is yet to be confirmed.


Harry Potter has a difficult job at hand. Well, being an Auror has never been simple, but when the victim is a part of the family, things are bound to become far worse. Relations are put to the test, and old secrets resurface. And sometimes, it may just get too personal…

This is majestic_ginny of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Chaptered Challenge of 2012.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 37576 Chapters: 13 Completed: No
Published:
09/25/12 Updated: 07/27/14


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 01/25/13 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5: Doubts

I'm sure I'm not the only reader to point out your mistaken use of "Molly" instead of "Lucy" in Harry's conversation with Teddy. Oops...make sure to correct the mistake ASAP. The mystery has been constructed too well to be left with such a blatant error.

Author's Response: Argh, I'm so sorry I didn't catch that >.< See what I was talking about when I said I didn't have much time? Hah. Anyway, I fixed it! Thank you! And I'm so glad you consider my story well constructed! It took me a lot of work to fix the plot, so I'm happy to see it paid off. Thank you once again! <3

 

Summary: “Not good--I mean, not bad. Uh, you?”

“I’m alive,” she said cheerfully.


The first three days after the battle, from the perspectives of Hermione, Ginny, and Luna.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 9285 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/01/12 Updated: 10/15/12


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 11/02/12 Title: Chapter 3: Tuesday

Loved the story premise; was a bit confused at the ending. I would have prefered a more cohesive close, meshing Ginny, Hermione, and Luna's storylines. Overall, a nice read.

Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism! I actually did think of tying it all together by having an owl from Hermione fly in around the end, and be read aloud by Ginny or Ron during the ice cream gathering, but I didn't end up doing it.

 

Nineteen Days Later by HalfASlug
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 51]

Summary: It has been nineteen days since the war ended. For everyone involved, it's time to move on and rebuild but can they after everything that has happened?

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Suicide

Word count: 23195 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/08/12 Updated: 01/01/13


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 11/02/12 Title: Chapter 3: Retirement and Responsibility

You have woven a nice tapestry of interconnected POV's. Is there a specific reason for the title or does the span of time simply frame the events you are writing about?
Nicely done. I look forward to the next installment.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) The reason for 'Nineteen Days Later' is sort of just what it says on the tin really - this is my idea of what happened on 21st May. Each chapter is slightly later in the day and from a different POV.

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 02/03/13 Title: Chapter 6: Tomorrow

Very nice. Thank you for bringing a nice resolution of grief into the story. Believeable and encouraging.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad that you think this some kind of closure as that was what I was hoping for.

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 11/28/12 Title: Chapter 4: An Awkward Conversation

An intriguing use of irony in that Hermione could answer her father's question honesty, yet she is avoiding the issue by dwelling on behavior she dreads to share and doesn't have to share.

Author's Response: Thanks on reading and reviewing :) Yeah, I was hoping to show how she is comfortable with people like Ron and Harry, who understand what happened but isn't with people who weren't, no matter how much she loves them. Glad you liked it!

 

Jumper by HalfASlug
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: All these years, Hermione has been waiting for this and there is only one person who really understands why.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1565 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/17/12 Updated: 10/20/12


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 11/02/12 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

This is quite lovely; your references to the previous Christmas during the Horcrux quest contrasts nicely with Harry and Hermione's conversation in front of the Weasley fireplace. I hope you have other before-and-now stories waiting to be written. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing :) I'm glad you liked this! I may have something that is a bit like a before-and-now but not really somewhere actually... Anyway, thank you!

 

The Baby in the Closet by Oregonian
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 41]

Summary: As Harry and Ginny eagerly await the birth of their first child and their new lives as parents, Harry discovers that before he can move forward, he must take a journey into his past and revisit what has never been put to rest. He learns the truth of the poetic line "The child is father to the man."

This story has been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 42993 Chapters: 11 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/12 Updated: 01/19/13


Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 01/14/13 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 The Last Funeral

Wonderful.

Author's Response: Thank you for that kind word. You know, I think that this story appeals more to the older readers because we are able to look back over the sweep of our lives and our children's lives and recognize the enduring themes.

 
Reviewer: baby54boomer Signed
Date: 01/19/13 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Epilogue

Your epilogue is a wonderful finality to what must have been a difficult story to write. Thank you for leaving us with a ray of sunshine..a bright day after Harry's long, dark night.

Author's Response: You are perceptive to discern that this story was difficult to write. I first came to this site to read more stories about Harry Potter, with no intention of writing. But after reading a few fluffy one-shots by Neil about Harry's early experiences with his newborn children, I saw a gaping hole in the extended canon, a subject that no one seemed to have addressed. It had to be written, and I felt sure I could do it. The difficult part was doing it well. The job took nine months, with much research and rewriting, and it was miraculous how things often fell into place almost by themselves, in ways I didn't expect. Perhaps that is the power of the subconscious. Thank you for your encouragement, all the way to the end. (And a huge Thank You to my beta readers.)

 
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