Summary: Draco and Hermione start a game on their first day of their last year at Hogwarts, what happens when an innocent game of lust, turns into a nightmarish fight for their lives. The sequal starts at chapter 14... its Darren's story. Enjoy!!
Sorry, but the grammatical and spelling errors are just too many to muddle through! I suggest you revisit this story with a good punctuation textbook and dictionary.
Summary: It's a rescue, really. At least, that's what Fred and George Weasley manage to convince him of. After all, Hermione is sure to be a target for revenge seeking Purebloods - what could any right-minded Wizard do but step in to help?
But with the shadow of Voldemort still hanging over a frightened community, Oliver is about to find out that the consequences of doing the right thing can get very out of hand!
An Oliver Wood/Hermione Granger Romance
I've truly enjoyed this storyline; Oliver and Hermione together is a rather new idea to me. You developed their relationship nicely...I like the fact that the Contract Law was the nucleus to their circumstances. I may have missed a few important points, though: I presume the Malfoys were behind the Contract idea in the first place...poor Percy being the subject of the Imperious Curse perhaps??? Also...Is it Lucius's vision to rule the Wizarding World and he's laid the foundation for such a move? Forgive me for being thick...I was more intrigued with Hermione and Oliver's storyline. Nicely created, too, their intimate moments. You crafted a lovely, personal moment without being crude or disgustingly bold...good job overall.
Summary: Auror-in-training Kingsley Shacklebolt is learning to blend in with the crowd in downtown London. There, he meets a small, lost girl, and learns how much impact a simple act of kindness can really have.
Love this! Had NO idea who the child was until the fast-forward. One thing I found odd: to be true to Hermione's character, she would have remembered Shacklebolt's name if not the amazing timbre of his unique, deep voice. Regardless, the story is quite refreshing. Good job!
Summary: Bored due to being cooped up in 12 Grimmauld Place, Fred and George decide a prank is necessary to lighten the mood. As a result, they end up learning some surprising information about two of their house guests.
I may be 7 years late to this story; however, I loved your dialogues. I especially liked the way you concluded with Remus' pause and statement and Molly's reaction! Priceless!
Summary: Professor Granger deals with a pair of students who have inherited a knack for trouble...
Summary: When Ginny Weasley becomes Draco Malfoy's wife, he suspects neither her true identity nor her dangerous motives. But when all Hell breaks lose and their relationship takes unexpected turns, there is more at stake than preserving their marriage--namely, preserving their lives.
The wait was well worth it. Such a descriptive narrative; well constructed and easy to read. The images are grand, complimentary to Draco's persona. You have created an atmosphere of resolution in this final chapter: Draco and Ginny putting their past in the past and setting their joined hearts and minds towards a future for their boys that would be full of expressive love. Well done.
Summary: Selina, a third year Slytherin wakes up one day to discover she is bleeding. Convinced death is imminant, there is only one person she can talk to- her Head of House, Professor Snape.
Nicely done. You have captured the angst and confusion of the uninformed female mind quite accurately. To have included Professor Snape in Selina's story is priceless. Thinking further on the narrative in the Potion's room, Prof Snape was exactly the person Selina needed to calm her fears; his calculated response is both clinical and reassuring. That Selina would need the briefest of explanation at hand and redirection to Madam Pomfrey for specific helps works perfectly. Great job!
Summary: Callie and Lia, a Gryffindor and a Slytherin. A lady and a tomboy. Two opposite souls. Two sisters. Separated at birth by circumstances they are determined to discover... and undo. Yes, after being reunited, the siblings plan to reunite their parents as well. Let’s see them accomplish House Unity, too!
“It’s our rule not to dredge up past things, remember?”This rule is about to be broken.
~Inspired by a worldwide beloved film.
I like the path of this story; keep up the good work.
Do be careful with verb tense. The mix of present and past...sometimes in the same sentence...is confusing.
As intrigued as I am with the storyline, I fear the frequent occurence of inconsistent verb tense is quite maddening!!!! Hang in there; I look forward to the outing of Menis and the wedding of our Hermione and Draco!
Author's Response: So sorry for the late response to your review. I'm so sorry for my tense errors as well. It's nice to have a reader who notices that, actually! I'm afraid that chapter was posted with haste and I did go wonky on the present/present perfect... Argh. Will fix them. Thanks for the review! Update posted.
Rose was a Weasley. She never gave Scorpius Malfoy a second glance. They were sworn enemies, even though they’d barely even spoken to each other. But sometimes all it takes for love to blossom is a Potions lesson, a few snide remarks and a dropped book.
Two people. Two entirely different worlds that are suddenly intertwined.
Interesting comment by Scorpius referencing family alienation. In all, this story has been quite a commentary on bigotry and idiocy. Reminds me of my own extended family...
Bit abrupt, this last chapter's opening paragraphs. I anticipated a bit more interaction between the Malfoy men!
A good story...lots of interesting exchanges. Sometimes Scorpius' endearments to Rose seemed a bit odd to me; perhaps I wasn't reading them correctly, with the proper inflection, humor, or teasing attitude. Overall, nicely written.
Summary: Set in a world where HBP and DH never unfolded, Draco Malfoy finds himself facing an unnerving challenge: making peace with Hermione Granger.
Perhaps this is a bit late in the story to point out the ineffective use of profanity? Your plotline and character development is quite satisfying without spattering the text with f*** this and so forth.
Summary: Hermione and Ron are having relationship trouble. The two of them take a trip to Diagon Alley in order to see Harry, but this leads to Hermione getting frustrated with the two, and so she goes to the bookstore.
What happens before she enters the store will shock not only her, but everyone she holds close to her heart. One drink in the Leaky Cauldron will end up changing her life forever, but . . . is it for the better or the worse?
This story is dedicated to Sammy because I love her to death, and I know she loves Dramiones. She has been the one that I have bounced ideas off of throughout writing this entire story, and without her, I probably wouldn't have ever finished it! *hugs* I love you Sammy!
A plausible storyline that lacks development; consequently, the jump in relationship between Hermione and Draco is questionable. Sorry...this just doesn't ring with me.
Summary: This is the story of true love. Over the course of the summer the unexpected happens and many things change in the lives of our three favorite characters. This is my take on the the way things should have been. Follow the trio through the summer after the battle, their seventh year at Hogwarts and beyond. H/Hr. Enjoy!
Kudos for constructing a rather interesting plot and keeping the action moving without becoming maudlin. The issue of "friends in a relationship that turns badly" is not uncommon: you seem to have found a brief resolution to the conflict with Ron's running off. That being said, the bigger picture is yet to be seen...Hogwarts, The Burrow, the Weasley family, and Hermione's parents! Hope you work out the details in believeable ways! Good luck!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you're enjoying it. I have some plans to work out the conflicts you've mentioned. You'll have to wait and see how that all turns out. ;)
As a part of his punishment for his part in the war, Draco was sentenced to a year living as a Muggle in the Muggle world. Harry ropes Hermione into serving as Draco's liaison with the Ministry and guide to the Muggle world. Can she open his eyes to the joys of Muggle living or will she Avada him first? Set post-DH, ignores epilogue.
WHEN will this story be finished?? You have two good plotlines that need to be complete!!!!! Get on with it, please...
Absolutely love your storyline and hope you post the next chapter ASAP! You've written just enough tension into the Hermione/Draco interactions to keep the reader engrossed and anticipatory. Love, love, love the Ginny/Blaise pairing as well! I couldn't stop giggling over the G/H phone call!!! You nailed the humor in one!!! Great job ;)
Harry Potter had seen death - a lot of death. Friends had passed in his lifetime, more so than any one person should ever experience, but how much is too much, even for the Chosen One?
Ron Weasley is dead, leaving behind his wife and his best mate. How can these two cope with their Trio being cut down to two? And when danger lurks in the shadows, can they find the strength to fight for one another?
Well...to be brutally honest, the story falls apart when Harry receives the last letter from Yaxley. Harry's last-ditch effort to warn Ginny was improbable as well. Sorry, but the story looses its credibility in the graveyard; the problems are too many to list.
You have an epilogue? I suggest you tie up the loose ends between Harry and Hermione: Hope's parentage, especially. George's involvement is still "out there" and should be resolved. Are you planning to leave Ginny as a scorned and hateful woman?
Yep, you have some issues to deal with here...good luck.
Haha, I couldn't agree with you more. About all of it.
This story is a hot mess, and the reason I haven't finished it despite the epilogue being just about finished for almost two years is that if I, the author, don't care what happens, why am I writing this story? For whatever reason, it's my most read and reviewed and favorited fic, so I don't delete it out of respect for people who do enjoy it, but it is quite embarrassing when put next to a few of my higher quality stories.
Anyway, thank you for reading and for your honesty. It's kind of refreshing to get a review for this that isn't ZOMG I LUVVVV. Those kind of make me ill because I really do hate this story quite a lot.
Thank you again for visiting, and hopefully next time you read a story of mine, it isn't one that requires matches and Pepto!
Summary: What if the characters in the Harry Potter films were portrayedâ€”not by actorsâ€”but by the book versions of themselves, as created by Rowling? How might things unfold on that set? What would the characters think of the changes made from the stories theyâ€™d already lived outâ€¦ to the ones written for the script?
This fic is a series of one-shots, posted as chapters, each from the perspective of a different character who is dealing with the changes occurring between the book and the script.
Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!
You've captured my feelings on the subject of "unnecessary additions" quite nicely, thank you very much!!!!!
Author's Response: Yay! Thanks!
Summary: Amid the desolation of Diagon Alley, a tiny ray of hope lay buried. Nothing more than a tidbit amid the sweeping despair of Deathly Hallows, yet it would not let go of my imagination. Had I found the casually inserted pivotal clue that would rise like Nicolas Flamel from the pages of the first book? Or had I stumbled upon another Mark Evans: nothing but filler detail in the opening pages of The Order of the Phoenix, JKR having overlooked that he bore the same last name as Harry’s mother?
So I waited for my little gem to bear fruit, to become one of those climactic surprises we should have seen coming, but somehow overlooked. Only it never came to pass. The death count mounted to a staggering high, the epic moments came and went, Snape’s back story was finally revealed, and still nothing.
So it has lain, bereft and unwanted, among the detritus of a Diagon Alley the Death Eaters had turned into a bully’s playground. But in the intervening years, this rough diamond has become the inspiration for this story, spreading its tentacles into new and intriguing territories.
Although Harry mentions Chocolate Frog as the title of Mad-Eye Moody’s autobiography at the end of my previous tale, The Dark Phoenix, this version of the story goes beyond that. Nonetheless, the sections representing Moody’s memoirs are clearly labeled.
This story begins with events recounted in Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows and continues beyond the end of the series. I have attempted to conform to canon as much as possible, elaborating only where the circumstances are vague or passed over. It is an interpretation of the events that happened behind the scenes, so to speak.
Your writing is quite engaging. The dialogues are especially sharp: you have managed to capture the original tone of each canon character! I would have liked more AD/Chocolate Frog moments. Please do not delay the subsequent installments!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Iâ€™ve definitely struggled with some of the characterizations so your words are particularly gratifying. Channeling my inner Snape, as my husband likes to say, has not been a problem, however. The story will definitely be catching up with Dumbledoreâ€™s exploits â€śon the other sideâ€ť after the next few chapters. Itâ€™s always so much fun seeing things from a different perspective, I always find.
Wonderful!!!! Thank you for the quick-paced dialogue and interwoven references to Muggle and Magical life. This chapter was certainly worth the wait. Keep up the good work! I hope we see a resolution to Harry and Ginny's relationship one way or another.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed. The contrasts between us and them and back again have always been fascinating to me.
I promise that we will get back to Harry/Ginny soon. With as many balls as Iâ€™ve got in the air right now, I hope youâ€™ll understand that I have to keep the story in chronological order as much as I can.