Penname: alex13 [Contact]
Real name: Manuel Ramirez
Member Since: 09/26/11
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Hi! My name is Manuel, or Alex, though I prefer the latter. I am a 21 year old university student and I have recently been inspired to study creative writing. I am kind of a late comer into the full-blown HP fandom, I've recently read all the books and started reading fan fiction and since then I've basically been obsessed, for lack of a better term. I been working on some stories, so hopefully I'll have some work up on here soon. My OTP is Harry/Hermione, though I do like the idea of Ron/Luna. Some of my other interests include: drawing, comic books, listening to music, and playing and watching basketball among other things.
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Life in Technicolor by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: He is trudging forward, heart beating, the truth of it all washing over him- neither can live, while the other survives...

Written for the Magic in Music challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 157 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/27/12 Updated: 09/27/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 09/30/12 Title: Chapter 1: Life in Technicolor

Yay! First review! A wonderful poem!! It had a very calming effect...even as death was about to hit. You're very, very good :)

Author's Response: Thank you, alex13! The song it was inspired by was very calming, so I did my best to put that into the poem! I'm happy to read that you felt it was so. :)

 

The Bice Day by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Merope is haunted by the various greens of life...

Inspired by hestiajones' story, The Receding, in which Merope hated the color green but was rather fond of rain and the color yellow. Maybe she was secretly a Hufflepuff? :) Just kidding, Natalie!!!!!!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 168 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/28/12 Updated: 10/04/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/04/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Bice Day

Great poem!! It really locks in the way merope sees and the way she feels about herself. Hopeless in a way, as a product of the way she was brought up and treated. At least that's the way I see it. Again great poem! :)

Author's Response: You are really racking up brownie point,s alex13!!!!! Thank you so much for all your kind reviews!

 

A Darker Nightmare by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Her heavy despondent face stared morosely at the thick dust on the wooden floors. Just dust. Dust covering up the wear and tear of poverty. Dust proving the abandonment and desolation of happiness and love. Dust, dust, dust.

She herself was a mess. True, she was slightly more clean than her father or brother, but still, dirt stuck to her pale skin. Dirt covering up the wear and tear of poverty. Dirt proving the abandonment and desolation of happiness and love. Dirt, dirt, dirt.


Second entry written for the Boggart Challenge in the Great Hall.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse

Word count: 1588 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/08/12 Updated: 10/13/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/14/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow!! Was it a boggart? As I said before you portray Merope extremely well!! You're a very good writer and amazing poet!! :) again good job!!

Author's Response: Thank you, alex13!!!!! I really like this piece, and I'm so happy that you do, too!

 

Dark Side by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Merope's deception is eating away at her, and runs its fateful course. The title of the poem is borrowed from Kelly Clarkson's song, "Dark Side."

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 146 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/08/12 Updated: 10/13/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/13/12 Title: Chapter 1: Dark Side

Wow! Another amazing poem!!! You just how to portray Merope so well!! I imagine that this is how she must feel all the time, due to the way she people treat her...like a scab that should be peeled off! Anyways, again great poem! :)

Author's Response: Alex, I am so grateful for all your reviews! Thank you so much!!!!! I'm glad that you felt it portrayed Merope so well. Stay tuned for more Merope stories... :)

 

The Day the Music Died by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Following the Wizarding War, an awful silence reigns.

The title is a song line borrowed from, "American Pie," by Don McLean.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 161 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/14/12 Updated: 10/15/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Day the Music Died

Wow!! Wow is all I can say! Another great poem! This has definitely influced a short story I am writing. Amazing descriptions!! :) and I guess I was able to say something other than just wow haha.

Author's Response: Alex, thank you so much for being a consistent reviewer! These reviews really help to brighten my day, especially when I am feeling dead on my feet. :) Good luck on your story!

 

Shades of Grey by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: Helena's life takes a new turn after her death as she descends deeper into despair and greyness.

Written for the Birthday challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 180 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/16/12 Updated: 10/16/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Shades of Grey

Well I'm not an expert on poetry....I didn't even know one could write prose poetry. But I do have to say that is beautifully written and very descriptive and very good! :)

Author's Response: Thank you, alex13! :) I was rather happy with this piece, and every time I read it, I just can't believe I wrote it. Keep writing! ;) Nagini Riddle

 

The Endless Road by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Petunia has to leave behind the life she knew at Number 4, Privet Drive. How will she cope?

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 200 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/16/12 Updated: 10/17/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/17/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Endless Road

This definitely shows Petunia in a different light. And you do kind of feel sorry for her, but you're she wasn't the most pleasurable person. But it is a great poem! Wow you churn these things out like a factory...and I mean that in a good way! :)

Author's Response: Thank you, alex13! :) I was on a writing spree during the summer and wrote over forty poems for fan fiction... so I've been working to get the good ones up on the archives. I'm very happy that you are enjoying the poetry and the new perspectives they bring. ~Nagini

 

The Foulest Creature by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Feeding off despair and darkness, these creatures breed. And a dementor is then born.

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 126 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/17/12 Updated: 10/19/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/19/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Foulest Creature

This describes the demontors so well!! All I can say is that this is a great poem!! You are so very talented! :)

Author's Response: Alex, I cannot begin to express how ecstatic I am that you have stuck with me through every poem and story! Thank you so much!!!!!!!!!! :)

 

The Lone Sentry by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: During the snowy season a millennium ago, a sculptor arrives to carve out a special guardian.

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 198 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/19/12 Updated: 10/21/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/21/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Lone Sentry

An amazing poem! I get the sense that you were trying to describe the gargoyle as both cold and lifeless, but still having a certain spark and a sense of duty. All I have left to say is that you did an amazing job with this one, as always! :)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you!!!! :) I really appreciate that. Look out for more of my work... :P

 

If No One Will Listen by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: After Harry is picked as the fourth triwizard champion, he feels as though everyone has turned on him. But Hermione hasn't. She listens...

The song that inspired this poem was, "If No One Will Listen," by Kelly Clarkson.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 200 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/21/12 Updated: 10/23/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: If No One Will Listen

A great poem! I think this really describes Harry and Hermione's relationship growing up really well. I really liked how you described Harry at the begging of the poem. Again great poem! :)

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! You flatter me too much, alex13. But it keeps my spirits up, so don't stop! *chuckles* I hope you continue to enjoy writing and reading! And look out for more of my stuff, because it abounds aplenty. (No joke...) ~Nagini Riddle

 

Soiled by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Severus Snape has Lily - until she leaves him and then dies.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 162 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/23/12 Updated: 10/26/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Soiled

Another great poem! I think this really describes and solidifies how Snaps felt about Lily. I think the last two lines really made this poem!! Again great poem! :)

Author's Response: Alex, I appreciate your dedication so much! Thank you a million times over for your awesome review!

 

Vanishing Point by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary:

*And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone, but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?*


Merope's life is full of painful memories that make her wish to vanish forever. Even when she finally gets what she wants, she lets it slip through her brittle fingers, and she is left to fend for herself and an unborn baby in the bleak, grey world.

Will the fates allow her to die?

This is Nagini Riddle, writing for The Chaptered Challenge in the Great Hall, prompt La Vie et La Mort.

**Lyrics taken from "Fix You," by Coldplay.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Dubious Consent, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Suicide

Word count: 6997 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/24/12 Updated: 11/10/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: I Am Still Here

This is a very good start to this story! And I think a pretty accurate account of Merope's possible history. I really liked the pacing to this! But I did get a bit confused. Is Merope giving Tom the love potion at the end of this chapter? Didn't she get pregnant after she gave him the love potion?
But again this is very good! :)

Author's Response: If you would notice, dear alex13, that the sections in the present aren't given a date, but those in the past and future are. I wrote this in a manner of "jumping" around events- 1907 is when Merope is going to be born and 1926 is when Merope is going to die and give birth. The section without a date is about 1925, before she loses Tom. So yes, she is giving Tom the love potion at the end, but in that section, she isn't pregnant. If it isn't clear, I'll be sure to go back and add the date 1925 to those dateless sections. So just tell me. :) And be sure to read the second chapter that is up! And hopefully, the third chapter will be up soon.

 
Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 2: Always Alone?

And the story continues....haha. This is a great 2nd chapter! :) And now that you have explained the layout, it did become clearer. Sorry I didn't catch it before. Can't wait for chapter 3!! :)

Author's Response: I've noticed that Merope seems to always be a certain way in my mind... I wonder what you think of her characterization? Thanks again for your review, alex! You are a fanfiction writer's dream!

 

Just A Diary by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Ginny Weasley enters her first year of Hogwarts with one friend - a diary. But is all as it really seems?

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 178 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/26/12 Updated: 10/27/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/27/12 Title: Chapter 1: Just a Diary

Amazing!! I really liked the rhythm in this one! But what I really, really liked was how you ended each stanza. It really shows the progression of how Ginny thought about the diary and how she came to the realization that it was evil.
Again amazing! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I really wanted to explore Ginny's feelings, and found that using simple language would help. I surprised myself with how well it turned out. :) It has to be one of my more favorite poems that I wrote. Thanks again for your review, alex13. And keep writing!

 

Frozen by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: In the frosty air, an unfortunate man meets his doom through a dementor's kiss.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 159 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/27/12 Updated: 10/28/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Frozen

I'm gonna sound like a broken record, but another great poem!! The descriptions you use certainly made me feel the chill ;)

Author's Response: Broken record? :) Keep bringing it on, then. Thank you very much for your review, and I'm glad that you found it haunting. Perfect for Halloween, right? *wicked grin*

 

An Empty Photograph by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: An empty photograph slowly comes to life, a reminder of picking up the pieces and starting over.

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 138 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/12 Updated: 10/30/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: An Empty Photograph

This is great poem! For some reason the last line reminded me of a My Chemical Romance song haha. But I have thought that starting over (whether it be in a new school or in a new house) can be a blessing. A new slate! Though it come be really unnerving as well.

Author's Response: Thank you for that input! :) ~Nagini

 

Moonlight by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: During the full moon, a boy and tree meet for the first time, brought together by fate.

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 100 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/31/12 Updated: 10/31/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: Moonlight

Awesome poem!! :) I did guess Remus and I'm guessing the bit about 'friends and mutual enemies and the wild tree' as about the Marauders ? Great poem! :)

Author's Response: *chuckles* Thank you, alex13. The part about friends/mutual enemies can be about the Marauders, but I also saw it as the relationship between the tree and Remus. The tree is destructive and also a reminder of his being caged up, but at the same time, the tree is able to save Remus from becoming a true monster and hurting someone. Thanks again for your review!

 

Death's Horizon by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: In the Tale of Three Brothers, Death magicks a stone to raise the dead. But the second brother finds that he truly cannot have the power to bring back those at peace.

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 126 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/31/12 Updated: 10/31/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: Death's Horizon

Great poem!! Boy you have been a busy bee lately! ;P This feels very appropriate for Halloween!! :)

Author's Response: Yes, it would seem that all of a sudden, poems just flew out of my mind! But these were written for a challenge that was two months ago, so I didn't actually just write them. :) But I'm really surprised that they have gone through the queue so fast! Like four poems in one day. Or was it three? Anyways, thank you for your review, and I'm very happy that you enjoy the poems!

 

The Canvas Life by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A portrait slowly comes to life for the first time.

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the PA.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 123 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/31/12 Updated: 10/31/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Canvas Life

These just keep coming and coming!! I really loved this poem! :) and another one appropriate for Halloween! Is this about the moving pictures in the halls of Hogwarts or the veil in the department of mysteries?
But I really like all your dark poems, so keep em coming ;)

Author's Response: It was a Hogwarts' picture. :) And you are too kind. Thank you so much for your review!

 

The Sun Sets in Paradise by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: On a bright night enriched with the full moon, a young boy races across the meadows, only to meet his dreadful fate.

Written for the Birthday Challenge in the Great Hall.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 116 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/31/12 Updated: 11/01/12


Reviewer: alex13 Signed
Date: 11/02/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Poor Remus!! This was an amazing poem! A.great tribute to Remus! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :) Have a nice Friday!

 
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