Greetings! It's me again, come back for some more of this fantabulous story. I absolutely love a story that makes me laugh and they are becoming increasingly rare. Yet you manage to make me laugh every time and your lines are so inventive and original. I will be browsing the Authors category for your name to seek out any unread stories of yours, but that's for later. Right now I will continue on because I will never get tired of my all-time favourite Marauder story.
Liveley, great job! I am obsessed with The Marauder Era at present and I also like laughing. A lot. Hard. Non-stop. This first chapter fed my desire to read all things Marauder so I will continue on with your story, occasionally leaving a review. Until then, I declare your story,
Good on you, Liveley! We always need more people sticking up for young Peter! I'm sure he was perfectly alright until…
…Anyway, good chapter. I'm not going to leave a massive comment because I'm very eager to read on, and so I will…
I'm not sure that I can visualize McGonagall with Black but you really do have a talent for making people laugh, Liveley! I continue to read but find myself pausing several times to wipe the tears of laughter out of my eyes so that I can continue to read and enjoy this wonderful tale about four wonderful characters. P.S. Are Severus and Lily set to make an appearance? I guess I'll just have to read on to find out if this story contains a little ROMANCE!!!
The word scrambler potion was genius! Did you come up with that yourself? If so, I'll have you know that my stomach muscles are killing me and I'm pretty sure that my excessive laughter probably hasn't gone unnoticed. As for the meaning of the next chapter "Quiddich, Marauder Style", I have some idea that it will be very funny and that the boys might get into some mischief! Go Marauders!
Awww, poor Sirius! I think it was cute how he was flirting with Raven. I must admit, I did not see 'Strip Quiddich' coming at all! But I was correct in that the Marauders got up to more mischief (even though that was highly predictable!). I really liked how Lily finally came into the story, playing Strip Quiddich, of all things! Overall, great chapter.
I'm not even going to ask why Sirius would ever find the need to send a Howler to himself, although, I must admit, it would be so hilarious I wouldn't be able to get up off the floor. I imagine something along the lines of: 'Sirius Black! How dare you be so awesome! Your looks are incriminatingly illusive and your pranks, legendary…' and so on.
Thanks to you, Liveley, I remember how truly awesome Dumbledore is. It think he is hilarious! I enjoyed how he actually double-dared Sirius to go back to bed, nice touch. I also admire your song choice, I Feel Pretty, and having Dumbledore hum the tune for the second verse only increased my respect for the quirky character, whom is gay…awkward (when Sirius sings "I feel pretty and witty and…gaaaaaay…").
Love bunny, nice!
I'm glad that you continued with the truth or dare and I'm happy with any relationship as long as The Marauders are involved.
Awww, I find that sort of sad, #54 - Not allowed to be myself. But, Lively, I must tell you that you are correct in thinking that this chapter wasn't the best work you've ever done but don't be so hard on yourself, it was still fun and creative!
The best till last? And I thought you couldn't find any more hilarious! Can't wait to see what your genius mind comes up with next…
Fantastic end to the list! I'm sure McGonagall will be delighted to pass on the helpful hints, given by Sirius, to her new first years!
I followed you all the way through and I'm glad that I invested my time here. I enjoyed your views on how Marauder life would have been and applaud you for your funny, albeit twisted, sense of humor! Thank you for writing and sharing, your story is now, officially, branded Perfect in the eyes of Erised.
Brilliant start and very well written Zayne! I hope you post the next chapter soon. I absolutely love James/Lily and Marauder Era stories, this one is no exception. I do, however, think I've found a spelling mistake. The word 'being' is used towards the end of James' point of view when I think the word was meant to be ‘begin’. I am currently writing my own Marauder story and your story has inspired me. I hope to read more of your stories soon!
From Shelby of Hufflepuff
P.S. My little sister was wondering if your last name is 'Malik'! Please reply whenever you find the time.
I honestly think the story has gotten off to a fantastic start. I'm glad you don't bite because I would just like to add that the story might be extra effective if the word 'yeah' was used more sparingly! P.S. I am definitely reading on because, in my opinion, any story involving (let alone starring) Sirius Black (and the other Marauders too, of course…) is worth my time and undivided attention! It is on that high note that I conclude my review and proceed to chapter 2.
Author's Response: Hi! Always nice to see a new reader. Glad you're enjoying it. Have just had a quick look back at my prologue and you're right! I didn't notice how much I'd used 'yeah'. Sorry about that!
Sorry about the 'constructive criticism' involving the 'yeah's. I guess you were channeling the extensive and complex vocabulary of the teenage boys! This chapter was good too but I'd like to see the following in the upcoming chapters: lots of mischief, the Marauders bagging Snivellus and, If they have time, relationships forming, growing and, only occasionally, being put to the test!
Author's Response: No worries! Hopefully I've managed to put some mischief in the later chapters. I struggle a bit writing pranks, but hopefully you'll like them!
The story line is great, although I'm having trouble pulling it together in my mind due to how small the chapters are, and how many there are, not that the size has anything to do with the quality of the content!
That is sooooo sweet! Sirius is finally actually falling for someone, but it would be to my greatest relief that the vulgar language subsided after the one incident in the 20th paragraph from the bottom.
Author's Response: Sorry about that. There is a warning on the fic that there is some strong language, but as far as I can remember there's not loads.
With the Marauders by his side how could Remus have sustained such severe injuries? I see Sirius still hasn't managed to do the thing he is famous for- get the girl- but his time will come. His time will come, right?!
Author's Response: You'll have to wait and see!
Can't wait to get all the gossip from the big date-of-the-century! Wwwwhhhhaaaaatttt? James asked TANYA out on a date! Please tell me this is one of his wonderful plans to make Lily jealous and fall head over heals, I don't think I'd survive the night if James were actually CRUSHING ON TANYA!