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Summary: Past Featured StoryGiving high school essays a Marauder twist, this fiction is centered around the idea that some seniors in high school are require to write a letter to incoming freshman before they graduate. At Hogwarts, Seventh Years are given an assignment to write such a letter for the new First Years. Sirius decides to actually take an assignment, well seriously...sort of. He decides to look back on his entire Hogwarts years and write down his list of things not to do at Hogwarts.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 29400 Chapters: 14 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/09/04 Updated: 07/25/05


Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 12/12/11 Title: Chapter 1: Mum's Assignment

Greetings! It's me again, come back for some more of this fantabulous story. I absolutely love a story that makes me laugh and they are becoming increasingly rare. Yet you manage to make me laugh every time and your lines are so inventive and original. I will be browsing the Authors category for your name to seek out any unread stories of yours, but that's for later. Right now I will continue on because I will never get tired of my all-time favourite Marauder story.

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: Mum's Assignment

Liveley, great job! I am obsessed with The Marauder Era at present and I also like laughing. A lot. Hard. Non-stop. This first chapter fed my desire to read all things Marauder so I will continue on with your story, occasionally leaving a review. Until then, I declare your story,
PerfectInTheEyesOfErised

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 2: Planning Ahead

Good on you, Liveley! We always need more people sticking up for young Peter! I'm sure he was perfectly alright until…
…Anyway, good chapter. I'm not going to leave a massive comment because I'm very eager to read on, and so I will…

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 3: Midnight Serenade

I'm not sure that I can visualize McGonagall with Black but you really do have a talent for making people laugh, Liveley! I continue to read but find myself pausing several times to wipe the tears of laughter out of my eyes so that I can continue to read and enjoy this wonderful tale about four wonderful characters. P.S. Are Severus and Lily set to make an appearance? I guess I'll just have to read on to find out if this story contains a little ROMANCE!!!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 6: Prongs' Potion

The word scrambler potion was genius! Did you come up with that yourself? If so, I'll have you know that my stomach muscles are killing me and I'm pretty sure that my excessive laughter probably hasn't gone unnoticed. As for the meaning of the next chapter "Quiddich, Marauder Style", I have some idea that it will be very funny and that the boys might get into some mischief! Go Marauders!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 7: Quidditch, Marauder Style

Awww, poor Sirius! I think it was cute how he was flirting with Raven. I must admit, I did not see 'Strip Quiddich' coming at all! But I was correct in that the Marauders got up to more mischief (even though that was highly predictable!). I really liked how Lily finally came into the story, playing Strip Quiddich, of all things! Overall, great chapter.

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 8: Diarrhea of the Mouth

I'm not even going to ask why Sirius would ever find the need to send a Howler to himself, although, I must admit, it would be so hilarious I wouldn't be able to get up off the floor. I imagine something along the lines of: 'Sirius Black! How dare you be so awesome! Your looks are incriminatingly illusive and your pranks, legendary…' and so on.

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 9: Dumbledore Dare

Thanks to you, Liveley, I remember how truly awesome Dumbledore is. It think he is hilarious! I enjoyed how he actually double-dared Sirius to go back to bed, nice touch. I also admire your song choice, I Feel Pretty, and having Dumbledore hum the tune for the second verse only increased my respect for the quirky character, whom is gay…awkward (when Sirius sings "I feel pretty and witty and…gaaaaaay…").

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 10: Blue Moony

Love bunny, nice!
I'm glad that you continued with the truth or dare and I'm happy with any relationship as long as The Marauders are involved.

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 11: Ooh, Barracuda

Awww, I find that sort of sad, #54 - Not allowed to be myself. But, Lively, I must tell you that you are correct in thinking that this chapter wasn't the best work you've ever done but don't be so hard on yourself, it was still fun and creative!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 12: Purple Hazing

The best till last? And I thought you couldn't find any more hilarious! Can't wait to see what your genius mind comes up with next…

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 13: Princesses and Professor McGonagalls

Fantastic end to the list! I'm sure McGonagall will be delighted to pass on the helpful hints, given by Sirius, to her new first years!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 09/30/11 Title: Chapter 14: A Legacy Left Behind

I followed you all the way through and I'm glad that I invested my time here. I enjoyed your views on how Marauder life would have been and applaud you for your funny, albeit twisted, sense of humor! Thank you for writing and sharing, your story is now, officially, branded Perfect in the eyes of Erised.

 

Summary: The story of Lily and James Potter has been told many times, and in many ways. This is the truth behind their amazing tale.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2171 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
10/10/05 Updated: 10/10/05


Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 01/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Of Faces and Burning Prefects

Brilliant start and very well written Zayne! I hope you post the next chapter soon. I absolutely love James/Lily and Marauder Era stories, this one is no exception. I do, however, think I've found a spelling mistake. The word 'being' is used towards the end of James' point of view when I think the word was meant to be ‘begin’. I am currently writing my own Marauder story and your story has inspired me. I hope to read more of your stories soon!

From Shelby of Hufflepuff

P.S. My little sister was wondering if your last name is 'Malik'! Please reply whenever you find the time.

 

Summary: Sirius Black, Marauder, heart throb and good friend, is in his last year at Hogwarts. Follow his journey through friendship, pranks and that special someone. Chapter Thirty One is here at last! I realise I have left this for nearly 3 years, but I am finally back! I am very grateful to the readers who have stuck by me during my extended hiatus. Thanks a lot guys :)

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 42189 Chapters: 32 Completed: No
Published:
12/19/05 Updated: 04/20/11


Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 10/01/11 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

I honestly think the story has gotten off to a fantastic start. I'm glad you don't bite because I would just like to add that the story might be extra effective if the word 'yeah' was used more sparingly! P.S. I am definitely reading on because, in my opinion, any story involving (let alone starring) Sirius Black (and the other Marauders too, of course…) is worth my time and undivided attention! It is on that high note that I conclude my review and proceed to chapter 2.

Author's Response: Hi! Always nice to see a new reader. Glad you're enjoying it. Have just had a quick look back at my prologue and you're right! I didn't notice how much I'd used 'yeah'. Sorry about that!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 10/01/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter One

Sorry about the 'constructive criticism' involving the 'yeah's. I guess you were channeling the extensive and complex vocabulary of the teenage boys! This chapter was good too but I'd like to see the following in the upcoming chapters: lots of mischief, the Marauders bagging Snivellus and, If they have time, relationships forming, growing and, only occasionally, being put to the test!

Author's Response: No worries! Hopefully I've managed to put some mischief in the later chapters. I struggle a bit writing pranks, but hopefully you'll like them!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 10/01/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Two

The story line is great, although I'm having trouble pulling it together in my mind due to how small the chapters are, and how many there are, not that the size has anything to do with the quality of the content!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 10/02/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Three

That is sooooo sweet! Sirius is finally actually falling for someone, but it would be to my greatest relief that the vulgar language subsided after the one incident in the 20th paragraph from the bottom.

Author's Response: Sorry about that. There is a warning on the fic that there is some strong language, but as far as I can remember there's not loads.

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 10/02/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Four

With the Marauders by his side how could Remus have sustained such severe injuries? I see Sirius still hasn't managed to do the thing he is famous for- get the girl- but his time will come. His time will come, right?!

Author's Response: You'll have to wait and see!

 
Reviewer: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised Signed
Date: 10/02/11 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter Seven

Can't wait to get all the gossip from the big date-of-the-century! Wwwwhhhhaaaaatttt? James asked TANYA out on a date! Please tell me this is one of his wonderful plans to make Lily jealous and fall head over heals, I don't think I'd survive the night if James were actually CRUSHING ON TANYA!

 
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