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Aurors and Schoolgirls by Northumbrian

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
The Wizarding War is over.

Auror training has begun and Harry and Ron find that their lives are centred round London and the Ministry of Magic.

For Ginny and Hermione there is the inevitable return to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Their lives are centred round schooling in Scotland.

Do these divided duos have different destinations and divergent destinies? When, where and how can these parted pairings meet? Opportunities are limited to holidays, Hogsmeade visits and school Quidditch matches.

Nominated for: Best Post-Hogwarts (Chaptered) story - Quicksilver Quills 2012

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 09/05/11 Title: Chapter 12: Christmas: Definite Declaration

Really loved this chapter. No one writes Luna as well as you do.

Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter has been submitted, expect a lot more Luna. -N-

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 09/21/11 Title: Chapter 16: Christmas: Deputations

A new chapter! Luna spot on as usual

Author's Response: Thanks. -N-

Spontaneity by Northumbrian

Rated: Professors •
Summary: Hermione (and Ginny) chose to return to Hogwarts to study. Harry and Ron joined the Auror Office. It's the Easter holidays, two weeks home from school for the girls, but their boyfriends are both working. The all important NEWT exams are approaching, Hermione's revision schedule is already carefully planned. Will she find time for Ron? What about Harry and Ginny?
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 12/19/12 Title: Chapter 4: Harry

Rereading one of my favorite stories, and I came across this line-

"...the idea of two people living together for more than twenty-five years without a serious dispute shows a lack of spirit only to be admired in sheep.”

This is not only a great bit of writing, but just in general is a great piece of advice for anyone going into a serious relationship. You are a wise man Neil!


Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

I'd forgotten that line. It isn't mine, it's something my dad told me years ago. I suspect that he read it somewhere ... and Google attributes a very similar quote to both A.P. Herbert and Walter Lippmann. As I've never heard of Lippman, but I inherited an A P Herbert bookfrom my dad, I suspect that's where he found it. Not mine, then, nor even my dads, but good advice anyway.


Taking Direction by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: What if the characters in the Harry Potter films were portrayed”not by actors”but by the book versions of themselves, as created by Rowling? How might things unfold on that set? What would the characters think of the changes made from the stories they’d already lived out… to the ones written for the script?

This fic is a series of one-shots, posted as chapters, each from the perspective of a different character who is dealing with the changes occurring between the book and the script.


Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!


Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 12/04/11 Title: Chapter 3: Saving It for Seven


Author's Response: Haha! Glad you liked it!

Strangers at Drakeshaugh by Northumbrian

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
The locals in a sleepy corner of the Cheviot Hills are surprised to discover that they have new neighbours.

Who are the strangers at Drakeshaugh?

Nominated for: Best Post-Hogwarts (Chaptered) story - Quicksilver Quills 2011
Nominated for: Best Post-Hogwarts (Chaptered) story - Quicksilver Quills 2012
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 04/27/12 Title: Chapter 15: Arrivals

Always good to see another chapter by you N. Since you have Seamus at the party anyway I'd love to know what he does now, as you've never said in your other stories.

Author's Response: Thanks.
Neither Seamus nor Dean have played a particularly large part in my stories. Will you find out what he does, or will you simply find out what he tells Jacqui that he does? :-D

Al Potter by thesmart1

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: This is the story of a young boy in his first year of Hogwarts, taking place in a myriad of tales about his adventures with his best friends. The youngest son of the Boy Who Lived will have to rise up and defeat prejudice, cross barriers of his own magical training, discover dark secrets, uncover a plot to destroy wizardkind, and hardest of all, he must learn to step out of the shadow that is ever cast by his father, and become the person he always wanted to be.

This is the story of Albus Severus Potter.
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 09/25/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

How can you NOT love a Hufflepuff, they are so earnest and cheery. Love the story so far.

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 09/25/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Keep writing! I can't wait for the next chapter

Under Snape's Regime by joehook

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Neville and his friends have no choice but to return to Hogwarts. But will it even be like Hogwarts anymore, with Snape as Headmaster? Neville must stand strong while Harry, Ron and Hermione are surely on the run miles away...
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 09/15/11 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Escaping the Dungeon

Excellent story! please keep updating it, I'll be looking for new chapters.

Owl Post by Northumbrian

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Some letters are mundane: generic form letters which arrive with monotonous regularity. Other letters are life changing.
Some letters can be both.
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 01/08/12 Title: Chapter 1: Owl Post

I first read this story a while back, when it was first published, and really enjoyed it. I can't help but wonder if Henry Charleston got a letter that day too. Make a nice next generation story, huh?

Author's Response: In my current plans, Henry won’t get a letter. However, I do have an idea for a much later story in which Jacqui finally discovers the truth. Having said that, plans can change. -N-

Second Guesses by Acacia Carter

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: Neville has got quite enough to be getting on with already, thank you very much, and this... situation with Luna is not making things any easier.
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 06/08/12 Title: Chapter 4: Proofs

Merlin's buggered arse? LMAO!!!

Author's Response: One of my favourite wizard swears.

Hunters and Prey by Northumbrian

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
February 2000 Newly Qualified (in record time) Auror Harry Potter remains obsessed with “The List.” The ten people still wanted for their part in the Battle of Hogwarts. Their capture is essential. It will bring closure to the events of the past few years. Harry has set himself a target. He wants to see “The Last Death Eater” and the other nine captured before the second Anniversary of the battle. His attempts to meet his target will bring heartbreak, danger, pain, and a lifechanging injury for one former DA member.

Nominated for: Best Post-Hogwarts (Chaptered) story - Quicksilver Quills 2012

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 10/14/12 Title: Chapter 1: Introduction: Dogged Pursuit

Excellent chapter, nice to see some of your "old hands" in the Auror's Office (all OC's) in action.

Also nice shading on already your already well drawn-out minor characters Boot & Bones.

Nott was good too, I'll bet he has an autographed copy of Machiavelli's "The Prince" in his library somewhere.

I'm just wondering if Polly's warning to "be careful out there" was a reference to the American cop show Hill Street Blues. I didn't know that ever ran in England, but like most Yanks I have no idea what runs on the telly there except for the stuff that you export to us.


Author's Response:
Thanks for the review

Another sideways move in the action, as various Aurors begin to play to their strengths. I had a lot of fun writing Terry and Susan (and Lavender).

I've been exploring weedy little Theodore, and I'm beginning to like him. Though the main characters don't.

Well spotted. Hill Street did show over here, and Polly is Muggle-born, and about the right age to hve watched it. Of course, no one in the office got the reference.


Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 01/07/14 Title: Chapter 1: Introduction: Dogged Pursuit

WOW! You finished this one in a sprint! And still up to your excellent standard. A little birdie told me that you have started Friends and Foes already,so does that mean that you are going to wait until you are finished with Strangers before you go back to Aurors & Schoolgirls? I am looking forward to the young Harry & Co. tracking down the Slytherins, but I'm dying to know how Fennella Grey got away with breaking into the Ministry!

Author's Response: Thank you.
I had intended to finish this story in 2013 but personal issues over the summer delayed me and, in the end the chapters came in a bit of a rush (for me, anyway - I’m not fast). To be honest, the prologue, and chapters 1, 2, 4 & 5 of F&F have been substantially done for more than 12 months. (Chapter 3 needs a complete rewrite.) I am currently working on both Strangers and A&S (and Epithalamium, a bit), and I’ll be sending the first few chapters of F&F to my beta soon.

Alexandra Quick and the Stars Above by Inverarity

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: Alexandra Quick has discovered the dark secret at the heart of the Confederation, survived a visit to the Lands Beyond, and been given seven years to live. Now she's determined to cheat her fate and see justice done. Standing in her way is a vengeful conspiracy and secrets even she is not prepared for. She'll need the help of her friends and loved ones, but even that may not be enough against the power of the Stars Above.

This is book four of the Alexandra Quick series. For more information, see the Quickipedia .

View cover art and other images .
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 10/26/12 Title: Chapter 23: Nemesis

Been reading your stuff for a long while now, ever since I first read "Hogwarts: A House Divided" a couple of years back, but this is the first time I've left a review. I know that makes me an awful reader, as all writers do so much for so little, but there it is.

First of all I think your writing is terrific! Your creation of a whole wizarding USA that is so different from the UK that JKR created, but still completely canon-compliant is a staggering achievement. Your characterization is good. You don't get overly bogged down in descriptive detail, but still give enough for us to form a good mental image of the places and people in your story.

OK, that's the good part. Now I can make a little correction without feeling like a jerk!

In this chapter you have the grocery store in Shiprock (Orange Rock, I have no idea why you changed the name) selling beer. You can't buy beer in Shiprock or any other place on the Navajo Reservation. It's a small mistake, but as you are so VERY careful to keep your stories canon-compliant I thought you would probably feel the same way about a factual error about the muggle world too.

Please keep writing! I love the AQ series and you have left us at such a horrible cliff-hanger that I will be heart-broken if it doesn't run it's course. Be sure to look both ways before you cross the street, you have lots of readers depending on you!


Author's Response: Oops - I think I did know that the Navajo Reservation is dry, but that detail must have just slipped my mind in this chapter. Thanks very much for your review. I have just started writing the fifth book. :)

The Unbreakable Curse by Karaley Dargen

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: In 1993, Bill Weasley is working on a tomb in Egypt with a team of Magiarchaeologists and Curse-Breakers. It is a job like any other ... or so it seems, until members of the expedition start dying, and Bill has to race against time to figure out what exactly it is that they awakened in the tomb of Mentuhotep, and how it can be stopped before it reaches him.

The following are characters from JKR’s creations: Bill Weasley, Ragnok, Agatha Chubb (QttA), and the last names of Deverill and Pilliwickle. I don’t own them and never will!

I owe a large debt to Hannah (coolh5000), Carole (EquinoxChick), and Natalie (hestiajones) for their constant encouragement and help at various stages of this story.

Fair Warning: Some of the reviews (naturally) contain spoilers, especially those towards the end. So if you want to be safe, don't read those before you read the story.

This story just WON a 2012 QSQ Award in the General category, as best chaptered story. THANK YOU!!!

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So here we are, at last, at our journey’s end,
And it’s time for some sweets; come on, bring a friend!
Simply search for the holiday and the first thing you’ll see
Is a familiar character’s first Halloween.

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 03/22/12 Title: Chapter 7: Horrors

Cliffhanger addict! I'm glad I decided to wait until you had this all finished before reading it. So far it's a good read.

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you very much for your review. Yeah, there are rather a lot of cliffhangers, especially towards the end of the story. They just make such good chapter endings! ;) Glad you're enjoying it so far.

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 03/22/12 Title: Chapter 9: Strain

OK, just a small correction to make. A SABLE is an animal from the weasel family that is prized for it's black fur. A SABRE is a curved, single-edged sword often used by cavalry. Unless you want people picturing someone being murdered by a stuffed black ferret you may want to change that.

Author's Response: OH thank you for the correction, I'll change it right away. English isn't my first language, and here, we spell it with an l. It only gets a tad confusing when words are similar, but not identical... Anyway, thanks! It does make for an interesting picture though, doesn't it...

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 03/22/12 Title: Chapter 12: Endings

OK, now I've finished and I think it was very good.
I had suspected Marcus from the start, though not for the motives you gave him, but Natasha being an art thief (my favorite kind of thief, BTW) was a complete surprise. The emotion-heightening curse was ingenious and the effects nicely described in the early chapters.
All-in-all a nice piece of work.
(Now I'm off to your author page to see what else you've written)

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading it all and reviewing! The motives were part of the mystery, because really, he was behaving too oddly not to be suspicious. I do love art thiefs too -- they're so wonderfully glamorous somehow. They know about art and its worth and are still devious enough to steal it. I might write about an actual art heist some day, because I think there are just too many possibilities not to explore one or two of them...

I'm very glad that you liked this story. I hope my author's page isn't too disappointing -- I took a bit of a break from writing for a while, so there are a lot of stories that are still unfinished. I will get back to most of them some day, but I've been sucked up in this mystery thing lately, so I'll probably write one or two new stories before returning to the old ones. I really hope you'll be back when I submit something new though, and not put off by the out-of-date-ness of my author's page!

Thanks again. I really appreciate the reviews!

Vituperation by Northumbrian

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Villains? Voldemort's virulent verbiage preaches vigorous vendetta against those inferior. Are these two M's merely victims, or are they venal violators of the innocent. Is violence in vain?

Marcus and Millicent make their mark on Muggles, and each other.

My final Cotillion tale.

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 02/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: When Marcus met Millicent

Not your usual fare, but these aren't the people you usually write about either. The Malfoys are unpleasant people too, but they've got a bit of class about them which makes them easier to read about.

That said, the writing is your up to your usual high standard. Can't wait (but I'll have to, *sigh*) to see what you'll have for us next.


Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
The Malfoys are as full of vituperation as Marcus and Millicent, but they are at the “extremely harsh criticism” rather than the “violently abusive language” end of the spectrum.
Next depends on my betas: Strangers 13 is with one, H&P 8 with another. It will be one of those two, but which one?

Dumbledore's Army - Still Flying by Karaley Dargen, muggle girl marauder, minnabird, the opaleye

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Life at Hogwarts is all but cheerful under the Carrows' reign. One of the changes that hurts the students worst, some even worse than torture, is the ban on Quidditch. Dumbledore's Army wouldn't be themselves, though, if they didn't find a way to bring some life back to the castle, even if it only lasts a couple of hours. But can even the best of matches wipe away mistrust and resentment?

This story was written by the Incaff Military Athletic Division for the 2011 Quidditch World Cup on the Beta Boards. It won, too! Our alternate was hestiajones.

Many thanks to the referees, who set this wonderfully inspiring prompt that gave us weeks of drabbling-frenzied fun. The prompt for this match was:

"One Last Match: When Harry was on his extended camping trip, I don’t think his thoughts extended much to Quidditch, but for those at Hogwarts it did. Under the new regime, however, the sport was banned. For the pupils at Hogwarts, this became a focal point of rebellion. They decide to play one last match, an inter-house match, in the spirit of Dumbledore’s Army. The two teams will not be from one house but a mixture."

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 03/24/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Enjoyed this very much. In one of her interviews Jo said that the hardest thing for her was writing Quidditch matches. So you have accomplished what even she found difficult quite nicely, as the quidditch match is really well done.
However I, like another reviewer, found the ending rather abrupt.

Author's Response: Well, one of the reasons the ending seems so abrupt is that the four of us were writing this in turns of 100 words rather close towards a deadline. Also, the challenge really only was supposed to entail the Quidditch match and a bit around that, and ours was too plotty as it was -- so that's the pragmatic reason why it seems a bit cut off.

Of course, that's not really an excuse though. The thing is, there is no real closure to this story because the students at Hogwarts around that time had no closure. The prospect of taking revenge on the people who betrayed them is all they get for the moment. Life for them is getting through one torture and one interrogation after another. So, in a way, the story has no "proper" ending because there isn't a proper ending to it. Their struggle continues for months and months.

Though of course you do have a point in that an actual ending makes the story rounder and gives the reader more satisfaction and a better feeling of closure. For several reasons, technical and plot-wise, it sadly wasn't possible here. But it's something we'll consider when/if there's another inter-house QWC and we get to write together again!

Thank you very much for the review and the concrit :)

Artist's Knight by CanisMajor

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Sir Cadogan meets his own portrait -- and he is not amused.
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 04/22/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1


Author's Response: Hey! This is a serious story (sort of) :)

Wandwork by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The remarkable story behind Griselda Marchbanks' enigmatic reference to all those things Albus Dumbledore could do with a wand.
Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall Signed
Date: 07/08/12 Title: Chapter 1: Remarkable

Remarkably entertaining! The somewhat bawdy tone was well done.

Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad it was entertaining, that was pretty much the only point. And I'm glad you enjoyed the bawdy tone--or at least picked up on it! Thanks so much for reading this, I really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)