Just so ya know, I LOVE Tonks/Lupin fics! I have a couple of Tonks/Remus poems so please R&R! Thanks!
Yes for people who have read Fantastic Beasts and Where To Find Them, I am from New Zealand and my birthstone is the opal.
HAHAHAHAHA..... I havn't laughed so much (inwardly so I don't get strange looks) in ages... Llamas? Why not squirrels? You might as well get them on your side as they are going to take over any day now anyway...
Author's Response: Oh I know about the squirrels. Actually, I think they're teaming up with the rice... and the strawberry Poptarts. But you didn't hear that from me. *walks off whistling*
Great story, I love the plotline. You describe thoughts and emotions really well.
Author's Response: Thank you. I am very self conscious about my work & it really encourages me to see that others are interested in my plot. Sometimes it can be difficult to stay focused & stick with a plot. It's a tricky balance to pull out a good plot along with believable thoughts & emotions. I also have to remind myself to describe their surroundings & not just thoughts & actions. Thank you so much. :)
You're a brilliant writer, and that's an understatement. Keep writing, and you will go far! Your style is so beautiful.
Wow that was a great chapter! Good descriptive writing. The characters are very realistic. I liked Hagrid... He was so nice! And I loved how Remus gave her the mood ring, with the note "Dear Tonks, I'm sorry, love, Remus." That was really sad and sweet and... (Well not 'sweet' but you know what I mean).
"Well, yes, but it tastes good" I love that haha!
Wonderful fic keep going!
Author's Response: I *heart* Hagrid. I'm afraid I'm not very good at writing him, kind of like Moody. I'm glad you liked the note! I'm a bit leery about writing letters, since my letters in chapter 2 rather sucked. Are you looking for 'bittersweet'? (Darn, now I want chocolate.) I shall keep plowing on, never fear! Haha. Thanks again!
Hi! That was great!!! Brilliant storytelling, and I love how you interpret all the characters. That last part was sooo sad, it was really great! Tonks seemed kind of mean though sometimes, like when she told him she loved him in the first chapter and she was, well, sort of nagging him. Again though I really like how all the characters are different and have little quirks etc. to make them well... them. More soon please!
Author's Response: Yay, thanks. Ohh, yeah, Tonks shows her teeth verrah much. My impression of her, for some reason, included her being whimsical and mercurial in temper, especially when she's been thwarted, and also as very tenacious. I also almost felt like I had to include her nagging him, since in the book it mentions, "I've told you a thousand times...!" And, well, the thousand times, y'know? But thanks for reviewing and leaving such cheery comments!
Hey that was cool! Loved the bit at the end, it was surprising. Good language.
Author's Response: Really? Surprising? I suppose it was a bit. I thought it would be a good way to end a story, jumping to the future! and good language? now that really is a surprise for me, :) Thanks for the great review! x
Author's Response: OOH! I just realised your name is from Fantastic Beasts! Your a dragon! ooh, dangerous are we? wheres Hagrid? lol, loving the research you put in to your name! Top Marks from me! lol 10/10 for naming creativity!
Aaaaw, so schweeeeet!!!! Sorry but it really is!!! I LOVE T/L!!! Thank you so much for writing one and I give it 10!
Author's Response: I appreciate your enthusiasm! So glad you enjoyed it! ~ The Mav ~
Hi! That was cool, I too sincerely hope Hermione enjoyed it. I would have if I were her. But I think she should have called him back. Not that it would have been much use.
Anyway, good writing! Great language! With fanfic it's kind of hard to keep the characters like they are in the book, but you did it well. Keep going you'll be great.
Author's Response: Thanks :) I'm sure hermione enjoyed it ...she was just too shocked to say or do anything :) I mean wouldn't you be..after all this is Ron we are talking about! hehe
Hi again! That was cute. Hmm, you did the younger Remus well, and little Tonks was great too! It was kinda sad how she said "I'm too different," so they're both the odd one out (though in different ways!), making them closer still! :) I would have thought Remus was handsome, though not in a Sirius kind of way obviously! More like a... I don't know, tall, thin-ish, smart, modest, etc. Get what I mean? Handsome in a gentle way but not 'hot'. Oh well, enough of my raving about Remus! Good story! Bye
Oh and good title. Unbroken, unspoiled by grief and the horror of reality...
*Gasp* That's so brilliant! I love it! ^_^ But it's kinda strange how Remus could try to make it into a 'friendly' kiss, it sounds a bit more than friendly... Anyway I loved how you described the kiss and everything else. You have a unique style and I like it!
Yeah er... Remus getting drunk? Hmm that's... interesting. Haha I agree with the sensible side! That was done very well, by the way, the two sides of the mind. I also like the way Tonks made him cheerful... But... Hmm, everyone seems to make her almost too clumsy and happy-go-lucky, naive, etc. etc. You didn't do that too too much but I'm just saying...
Anyway that was really really good keep writing! And good luck with science :P
Author's Response: Just to explain to EVERYBODY about the whole "go get drunk" thing, I didn't actually mean it as a serious suggestion. He was lonely and bored. Desperate, actually. So, just to explain.
Ooh and I love the Cinderella touch at the end! Haha was it meant to be Cinderella? Oh well that's what it reminded me of!
Great job! A very good one-shot, I don't know what nymph magic meant because I understood it very well and it wasn't iffy. But when you say her heart "shattered like glass into a million pieces," isn't that a simile, not a metaphor? Oh well!
Author's Response: Technically, that sentence was a simile, but it was just a sentence. The rest was a metaphor and that is what's important. Thanks for reviewing.
Very good! So descriptive! I love poetry :D I have a Remus/Tonks poem too. Anyway it's brilliant, I like how you used the phases of the moon. I love the moon! :D
Hi again, sorry to be pedantic but shouldn't you use capital letters.....
Author's Response: Yeah I thought about that...but that's the way I wrote it and I didn't really want to change it. Besides I was getting a real feeling of lostness and surrender from this.(Does that make sense? It doesn't much to me.) But glad you liked it! I love Remus/Tonks too and wish there was more fic in the Mugglenet archive.
When Remus was outside, still near the door, he was sure he heard an outburst of sobs. He felt a pang of guilt inside and said with resignation to himself, Ive done it again.
Very good, but it ended quite abruptly. Maybe you should have had a conclusion, like a missing scene from after the hospital wing scene but before the funeral?
Author's Response: Yeah, I was thinking of that too. I might put up another chapter as soon as I'm through my exams. Thanks for the review.
It was hard acting jolly when he was in a bit of a nark, but George Weasley pulled it off...Without a date for Fred and Angelina's engagement party, George asks Alicia Spinnet and sees his old mate in a new light.
That's just so, so sweet! I love the way you describe kisses, for this and for your other stories. Heaven! Nice description, great!
Author's Response: Kisses are heavenly things, so they deserve descriptions that do them justice, right? ^_~ Thanks for helping make this the most wonderful time of the year by giving such a sweet review!
*Nominated for a Quicksilver Quill for Best Romance- Canon.*
Ooh, wonderful story! Very good idea, Tonks a sort of detective? Hmmmm, that could work! I can see you like detective novels. But I couldn't see Remus letting someone like the... person... Tonks transformed into buy him a drink, and I don't think he would have let her kiss him like that either, or even go to that kind of bar... Oh well it's still a great idea so keep going! While he was talking to Tonks, though, he was in character. I could imagine him reading detective books. Ok description of him, but I don't think he would have long hair.... But hey it's your story and I like it so who am I to complain? The ending left me in suspense, update soon please! 10!
Author's Response: I like all kinds of fiction, but this is more romantic suspense than a detective novel, although the first person pov is directly inspired. It's funny how different people see characters. I think the Marauders would've frequented much dicier establishments and Remus' reserve is due to the fact that as a werewolf, he can't afford not to have self control. He's still a man in his prime, though, and a single bloke who wouldn't let a pretty girl buy him a drink and chat him up- even if he didn't intend on the evening ending the way it did- would be testosterone challenged. As for hair, I meant longish, like Faramir in LOTR, not Legolas, ^_~
Author's Response: I changed 'shoulder length' to 'longish' in the first chap! ^_^
Wow, a great ending to one of my favourite fics! Hehe, my reviews are spread around both sites ;) Anyway, Collony was funny, a new character was quite interesting. I like happy endings :D Yay! The ending was very good, with all the couples. Thanks heaps for a brilliant fic (it's one of my favourites and best I've read in a while) and merry Christmas!!!
Author's Response: Merry, Merry, Merry Christmas! *imagine bells* ^_^ Thanks so much for being 'Bright Moonlight' on two sites! :D Happy endings are mandatory for me. Life has enough sadness and angst. Romance fiction is the way life ought to be, lol. So glad you liked the ending. Had to go out with fireworks, heh. Thanks for every kind, brilliant and discerning review. ^_^ Happy New Year!
Wow, this is amazing! You write so fast, yay! :D Happy! Hmm, ya very nice, how Evan told her. That was good.
:D Remus is so sweet! You have a very good interpretation of him, and your characterisation is great. For all the characters. But sometimes they seem a little bit different from the book. Not the primalness (that's very cool) but overall. That's ok though, it's refreshing from some fics in which Tonks is just a ditzy blonde, you know?
Anyway, very sexy, very fun... Yay! Keep writing :D What other sites do you write on? Can I read more??
One last thing, will this end dangerously? The sun just set... And he seems not to be himself......
Author's Response: When you think of Tonks and Remus in the books, dealing with Harry's rescue and the thin, wan, mousey, love hurts images they projected in HBP, that is quite different from my story, since times got considerably darker after GoF. That's why I wanted to start their romance before OotP. Thanks for asking to read more- it made my day!!! ♥♥♥ I wish I was so amazing as to be able to write fast enough to update so quickly, but I gotta confess that I came here because a pal at Fanfiction.net said 'why don't you post on Mugglenet, they've got fan fiction now!' So I did, lol. I do have loads more stories posted on the other site. (subtle hint, that ^_~) After the holidays, mod willing, I'll be keeping you in suspense with my usual every-Friday-updates with the sequel to Blue Moon. Today should have two chapters and a Remus one shot posted, so happy reading! ♥