at almost 15, im in love with harry potter! im realllly new at fanfiction in general, so please forgive me!
so far, i am hooked! the only thing i would mention would be runon sentences. im loving the plot! keep up the good work!
Severus was angry. Thoughts of Lily and James were still running through his head. His hatred of James for being everything that he was not pulsed through his veins. Severus let his thoughts consume him; he ignored his reserve and took the slip of paper from Avery, uttering the incantation as he unleashed his dark anger on the unsuspecting boy.
A story of desperation, fighting fate, love versus destiny. Friendship turning to enmity and enmity to friendship. This is the tragically beautiful story of Lily Evans, Severus Snape, and James Potter.
this is really good! i really enjoyed it! please finish it!
Author's Response: thanks! It'll be updated as soon as the queue is opened! (: