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This is so great! It gets better with every chapter! I can't wait for the next one.
Awesome! I can't wait to read more! You've got a really good concept here, I'm loving it.
I love this! I can't wait to see the REAL Harry's reaction when he finds out how Severus acted with Cho. This is a great idea, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Wow...that was amazing. Tragic and beautiful, written really well. Usually I'm not a fan of the whole Snape-loves-Lily idea, but this just broke my heart. You have a great talent for writing.
This story is alright, a little too AU for my tastes, though. Even in an alternate universe I doubt Harry and Draco would get along. Other than that, though, pretty good job. However, Ginny's name is spelled "Ginevra" not "Ginerva".
This is really good, I can't wait to find out what happens next! Your story says there were 2 letters attached to Hedwig, what does the other one say???
Oooo...the plot thickens. I can't wait for the next chapter, update soon!
Oooo, Snape's having a nice little freakout. I love it! You're very good at capturing their emotions. Please update soon!
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This is really great....I can't wait for the next chapter!
Ok, bad news everyone, my computer is on its last legs and keeps breaking down. If it can't be fixed, I'll have to get a new computer, which could take several weeks, therefore it's going to be a while before I can update. The next chapter is nearly done, but I'm unable to get to it for some reason. If you can't wait for the next chapter, e-mail me and I could possibly send it to you.
This is just a response to the other review: overall it's good, but the dialogue just doesn't sound natural, like using "I am" instead of "I'm", "will not" instead of "won't", "did not" instead of "didn't", etc. It sounds a bit robotic.
I really like your story, but you need to work on dialogue so that when the characters talk they don't sound as if they're reading off cue cards. Other than that, it's a very good story with a strong concept.
Author's Response: Will you give me an example of this please. I have had my story beta read by no less than 5 readers to avoid such issues. Your SPECIFIC input is desired. Thanks Samantha
This is a really great story, it's well-written and the plot moves along at a good pace. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I appreciate you comment about the pace because sometimes I think that it's slow, but perhaps it's because I'm just eager to get on with things. It's good to know that it's not TOO SLOW.
Did you post this story somewhere else before? I read it a while ago and absolutely loved it. This is one of the few stories out there that makes me cry every time I read it, you've captured the mood and Snape's emotions very well.
Author's Response: Hi, thanks for the the review! Yes, my stuff is also posted on fanfiction.net, but I'm going to post things here as well.
Very, very good. You've stayed true to Snape and Lupin's characters very well.
Interesting concept, I'll definitely be waiting for the next chapter. This story has promise, but you need to work on your spelling, and if Sirius is still alive in this story you should probably mention that it's an AU. Otherwise, I really enjoyed the first chapter.
I really enjoyed reading this; I almost wish it was longer! The concept of seeing the trio through someone else's eyes is very interesting; Susan does not know the details, but from her outsider's view she sees things that those closer to the trio might miss. Someone who is around Harry, Ron and Hermione every day might not notice how they changed over the years, but for someone who is not in their house and rarely talks to them, the changes become more apparent. Susan's description of Harry was particularly stirring; it would be very heartbreaking to watch him lose his innocence over the years in such a tragic way. 10/10.
Very well-written. I love the way you've portrayed Snape, he seems very sure of himself and confident, and highly intelligent as well. The only part I didn't like was how you made him religious. Somehow, I think Snape is too logical and scientifically-minded to become a religious person, and he seems to put his faith in facts and knowledge rather than in God. Other than that, fantastic job, and soon I'll get around to reading your other Snape fics.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I know you can debate the religious thing, but to me it seems quite natural. Religious sentiments and logic/science are not mutually exclusive, IMHO; they operate on a different plane. Logic hasn't brought Snape the tools to distinguish between good and evil; I thought he might go looking for them in religion, which is a system in itself - I thought he might like it. But that's just a personal view you may or may not agree with. Thanks for reviewing! -S.