My username on the MNFF Beta Boards is Aurora. I recently published my first FanFiction. I have beta-ed for a couple of years, but have never actually wrote a FanFiction. I hope you like it. ^_^
Good job! You wrote this very well. You drove the reader farther and farther into this alternate reality, very clever. You did that very well. Yet, in chapter eight, you tended to ramble a little in the ending of the chapter. Very, funny though. Please update! I can't wait to find out what happens next. Good job!
I would give this a 12, if I could! I love your whole entire story! You use great transitions! You should become pro! I like your use of vocabulary, humor, and dialogue to increase your story in rating and how well it is! Good job- can't wait to more!
Author's Response: LOL wow a pro? No, that's not what I plan to do :) This helps me with class and writing. Plus I just love J/L. Thanks for your praise. I hope I can prove to you later on that it's all well-deserved :) -MM