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Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 08/24/05 Title: None

Hey, love your story, just want to point out a spelling mistake. In your story summary, "steeling" should be spelt "stealing". Please keep writing!


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 08/24/05 Title: None

I'm really enjoying your story so please keep writing. It's also nice to read a story that has proper grammar and spelling! Keep it up!

All's Well That Ends Well? by Shock

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 529 Reviews
Summary: James and Lily-their seventh year. We all know what happens in the end, but what about the beginning? In their last year at Hogwarts, mysteries unravel, friends are betrayed, and, of course, couples destined to be fall in love.

Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 08/27/05 Title: Chapter 1: Ends and Beginnings

Great beginning to the story, I'm going to keep reading. Also like the way James and Lily interact - it seems plausible

Author's Response: Thanks! I try to make James and Lily speak in a way I know that real people would actually speak to each other. I'm glad the effort paid off!


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Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 06/03/06 Title: None

Wow. I think this is the first story I've read involving two completely original characters as the main romance. I'm very interested in further developments. Keep up the originality!

His Juliet by CathCarl

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 28 Reviews

An unlikely Slytherin mulls over his unwanted affection for an unlikely Gryffindor.


He sighed, tired of this never-ending battle within himself. Everything he had ever been taught said to ignore her, to lock all good thoughts about her in a Gringotts vault and throw away the key. But she did things to him… made him forget who he was and how he had been raised… made him forget his House and his allegiance to the wizard she had dedicated her life to fight against.

Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 09/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: His Juliet

Wow, you had me right to the end! Great storytelling. I totally thought it was Harry, Ginny and Malfoy! Loved it!

A Bond Unbroken by Emmeline Vance

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 26 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: Remus saw Harry’s pain. He saw it from the moment the boy, or rather, man, walked through the door. He wished he could do something to dull the anguish in Harry’s eyes. But that seemed difficult while he was still dealing with his own hurt.

Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 10/05/05 Title: Chapter 1: A Bond Unbroken

I like the parallels drawn between Harry and Lupin...they really fit. I also like the awkwardness between them because neither of them feel completely comfortable. Really interested in reading more if you have more to write!


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 07/29/05 Title: None

Hey, just wanted to say keep writing because it's really sweet. I really like Hermione and Draco together and he is so nice in your story. Please update soon!

It Didn't Start This Way by Marauder by Midnight

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 112 Reviews
Summary: James Potter and Lily Evans weren't exactly buddies at first sight. They began virtually as enemies. Gradually, however, they came to respect each other and like each other at Hogwarts. Somehow, that like turned to an eternal love.

Described through the memories of all who knew them, this is the story that follows them through the seven years in Hogwarts, as their rocky relationship develops into a bond that becomes the envy everyone. This is the story that describes the difficulties that they encounter during the terrible years of You-Know-Who's reign. This is the story of the parents of The Boy who Lived. This is the story of the love between Lily Evans and James Potter.

Chapter Five (Friends?) posted - Lily walks into the world she never knew.

Sorry for the (very long) delay.
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 10/05/05 Title: Chapter 3: Witch

Wow, what an interesting perspective on James and Lily's early interaction. I also like the way you are presenting the story, some parts in present time and some flashbacks. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks there ^^ Hope you like the next chapter -MM

To Love a Werewolf by Antipodean Opaleye

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 27 Reviews
Summary: Nymphadora Tonks is deeply in love with Remus Lupin. But he refuses to accept her, causing her tormet deep within her heart and soul. Will he ever like her more than as a friend?
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 10/27/05 Title: Chapter 1: To Love a Werewolf

Some really nice imagery there, you can really feel Tonk's pain. Well done on a sad piece - will there be more?

Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D Yeah I've written another poem, from Remus' point of view, which will be in queue very soon.

The Upside of Being Down by Kimberley

Rated: Professors • 506 Reviews
Summary: *COMPLETED!*What happens when you put a hopelessly "romantic" man-hussy and a girl with a soft spot for bedtime activities (not THOSE activities, silly!) together in a dark bedroom? Well, I don't happen to know either, so I suppose we'll find out together, won't we? Come with me, Tia C. Spencer, on a lovely ride through the countryside... er, lakeside... okay, so we won't actually be riding NEXT to anything, but it will be lovely, I promise you that. How can it not be, with me as your illustrious (and quite possibly mad) companion?

And no, contrary to beliefs very likely impressed upon you by this summary, I'm not a gormless prat.

Well... not entirely.

Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 10/17/05 Title: Chapter 1: Allergic to Idiots

Yay! A different perspective on the Mauraders! I really like your James Lily interaction too. Is there going to be more to the story? I'd love to read it!

Author's Response: Yay! I am very fond of this particular perspective, she is my current darling, so the fact you don't want to chase her out of the Potterverse with a pitchfork is good news. And Lily is one of my absolute favourite characters in this story, there will definitely be lots more of her. And yes there's more--at this point, fifteen chapters more! *grins* Thanks for reviewing. ~Kim

The Choices We Make by xadie

Rated:21 Reviews
Summary: How do our choices affect us and those around us, and how will their choices be altered? Remus's mother takes a somewhat smothering interest in his condition. How will this change affect him when he goes to school and how can one small choice affect his whole future? Written as a challenge fic for the MNFF Beta Forums by xadie of Ravenclaw House. Entry to September Monthly Contest 3 on the subject of choices or betrayal.
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 10/07/05 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

A really original piece, your story really made me think. You captured an alternative path really well and made it believable. I got your message clearly too...what an amazing piece of writing. Well done!

Author's Response: Hey, thank you very much for your review. I'm glad that you thought the themes of the piece came across clearly, and that the whole thing was believable. It wasn't a difficult piece to write; the whole thing seemed to flow as I worked on it, so I was worried that I wasn't struggling enough for it! Thank you very much for your support.

Unshed Tears by My_AvadaKedavra

Rated:21 Reviews
Summary: STORY POSTPONED the mods will not accept my next chapter, but if anyone wants to read the rest of this story go on: http://www.harrypotterfanfiction.com/

Yes, I am kind, and do try to see the beauty in everyone, but I am a little wrapped up in myself. I have too many thoughts. WARNINGS: Angsty, upsetting, some mild language and fighting later on. Not an average teen James/Lily fic.

Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 10/18/05 Title: Chapter 2: He Will Never Change

You're story really touched me and I loved it. So many emotions, so much passion, so much regret. A fresh perspective too - I like the way James and Sirius disagree about Lily. Thanks for writing this.

Author's Response: :D thanks! Chap 3 in que!

How could he by nodidistelle

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 5 Reviews
Summary: He is gone, how will she cope with it? A Fred/Angelina one shot It's my first, be kind but review
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 06/04/06 Title: Chapter 1: one shot

Nice, really nice. I like seeing Fred as an individual and also investigating Angelina's character more, as she seems overlooked in the books. Great work.

Slings and Arrows by Magical Maeve

Rated:8 Reviews
Summary: A young woman suffers at the hands of her husband, until one day he goes too far and she walks out of her front door to an unknown future. Her future appears in the form of Charlie Weasley, but what exactly does fate have in store for the pair of them? Written for Poultrygeist as a covert cupid.
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 06/04/06 Title: Chapter 1: Slings and Arrows

Love it! Fantastic! Finally, reading something that's mostly grammatically correct, congratulations. It makes for a much nicer and easier read. I also like the storyline, very original and intriguing.

Meant to be Alone by FanficWriterNikki

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 8 Reviews
Summary: She loves him. Is that good enough or is she really meant to be alone?
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 06/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: Meant to be Alone

Wow! Nice work. Just a couple of comments. I like the way you don't reveal the identities of the characters until the end, as it prevents the reader from making judgements without considereing the situation. However I'm not sure about Tom Riddle Snr's reaction to discovering his wife is a witch and that he never really loved her. I think he would be more upset about the fact that she is a witch, which seems abhorrent to his nature as I imagine it, rather than an emotion such as love. Also, maybe a little more time and contemplation is required to have a greater impact on the reader. By extending the anguish Tom Riddle Snr feels, you could really make the story believable. Otherwise well done!

Alive Once More by Nostalgic128

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 21 Reviews
Summary: Hermione is lonely and sorrowful after the war has ended. Her closest friends died in battle and she is now alone. She has immersed herself in her work and studies.
At the War Anniversary, Severus Snapes decides to approach her, being an admirer of her achievements. And therefore, a great friendship begins to unfold...and maybe something more.
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 04/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, it certainly wasn't bad! I think there's lots of room for development of these two very complex characters you've chosen. I also think its good to have a plot as well as a romance...I can see the Wolfsbane Potion becoming a greater part of the story.

Ps: Paragraph 1: Ron Weasley, not Weasely

Author's Response: wow thanks!!! im so excited because you reviewed!!! i have the story done already but i will work on it more and i will make it have more depth. Thank you so much!!! P.S. thanks for correcting me!!! im gonna go change it right now!! -Pam

Colors by Orm Irian

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 19 Reviews
Summary: HG/SS romance—a bit dark. Addiction is a frightening thing, but it doesn’t have to be lonely…
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 04/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: one shot

Wow, how original! Very different from anything else I've read recently, and in a great way. Are you thinking of expanding this to a longer story? There is lots of potential. Thanks heaps for the great read!

Author's Response: I am thinking of doing more on this--maybe a companion piece. But I won\'t have time for a while. I want to finish my story at Ashwinder (Shades) first.

Innocence Found by Accio_Brain

Rated: Professors • 498 Reviews
Summary: What happens when the Order's most valuable spy loses his memory? Severus Snape fights to survive in a world he can no longer remember and in the process rediscovers the love of his life.

Severus Snape/Original Character.


Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 07/06/06 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

A great story, really moving and touching. Can't wait for more. You've incorporated the flashbacks really well, they flow nicely, which is hard to find! And great grammar and spelling too. Excellent, I really enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I\'m so glad the flashbacks are working for you. I was concerned that it would be confusing going back and forth between past and present. Thanks for saying it\'s touching. That\'s very sweet. And it\'s nice to hear that the mechanics of it are good, too. Thanks so much for reviewing!

History Books by shadowdancer909

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 3 Reviews
Summary: If there is one thing I would like to be remembered about all of us, it is that we were only human.
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 08/31/06 Title: Chapter 1: History Books

Wow, what a powerful piece - this is what struck me after reading your work. I like the anonymity you've given to your characters...even Harry, the person we all know well through the books, takes on a kind of nameless transparency within your story. You've portrayed him as more than the Harry we know, and it works really well. I also like the actual personality of your original character. The hindsight she displays is particularly relevant to your theme of history, looking back, and to the written histories. This is something that you could explore more, the truth's relationship with history and how this is important for the characters...but perhaps that something for another story. Well done on a really thoughtful and inspiring piece.


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Hello12345 Signed
Date: 06/03/06 Title: None

Well done on a fresh take. It's nice to see Tom as a normal guy, although not entirely canon, but hey, that's what FanFiction is for! Just make sure your tenses are all the same in the opening paragraph. I'd like to read more. Is more planned?

Author's Response: I know he\'s not exactly canon, but the idea for this story came to me one day and i just had to use it. I am planning on writing more. I\'m writing the second chapter right now, actually. Thanks for the review! Caroline