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After the Battle by ginny6142
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: When Harry Potter defeated Voldemort, he made his way to Dumbledore's office without speaking to the girl he loved, knowing that they had a very long time to talk. Eventually, on his way back to his dormitory, he realizes that he can't avoid her forever.

This is a chaptered story that chronicles Harry and Ginny's journey as they recover from the separation and make their way to the epilogue.

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 3171 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
08/26/11 Updated: 09/04/11


Reviewer: carmour45 Signed
Date: 09/05/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

It was well written. I thought you captured the characters very well adding believable interaction between them. I would like to see you add more of the main characters like R/H and and strongly develop the world reborn.

Author's Response: Thank you! This is why I love reviews, because I hadn't intended to have a lot of Ron and Hermione, but many reviewers have expressed a desire for it, so I'm altering the storyline slightly. I can assure that I've been developing the setting extensively.

 

Summary: Voldemort is dead. Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny have survived. Now, the young warriors have a future. They have dreams, and dreams cost nothing; however reality has its price. The path each chooses has twists, potholes, and detours. They find that life plays tricks on people. These issues have to be confronted before they make it Platform 9 and ¾ in 2017 and beyond.

Categories: Ron/Hermione AND Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Suicide

Word count: 54280 Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/27/11 Updated: 10/22/12


Reviewer: carmour45 Signed
Date: 03/26/12 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 -A Trip to Spain

I really did like how this story started in chapters 1and 2, but i feel with chapter 3 you have left Hermione's personality too much. If indeed this is the story of how they got to platform 93/4 then staying with J.K.'s characters design would be critical. I do not think on any level that Hermione would do that to Ron and not feel any guilt. I do not wish to restrict your artistic license, but I think if you wish to be successful in merging this idea with the ending of the series you should stick with the morals that made these characters the one's we know and love.

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