Oh my gosh!! when I read this for the first time, I cried a lot. I'm sorry that you had to deal with that death. I was going through a hard time too when my Grandpa had a heart attack. Amazing writing. Do keep up the good work.
It is ambitious Lily Evans' 7th and final year at Hogwarts. She is very excited about being one step closer to becoming an Auror and thrilled about being back to school altogether.
But there is one little annoyance: the Marauders. Specificially arrogant James Potter. He has been pestering her to go out with him, but she has coldly denied his wishes. She thinks this year will be no different to the past six school years.
But life is full of mistakes...::~!~::..
"Just one minute.” Lily noticed footsteps heading in her direction. She saw a hand reach from between the screens and drop a flower onto her bedside table.
“Mr. Potter! Return to your dormitory immediately!”
“Alright, alright…” The hand disappeared.
Once Lily was sure that no one was in the wing, he lifted her head and saw what flower Potter had dropped.
Lily stuffed her head in her pillow and screamed a muffled scream that no one could hear.
"And Then There Were None" by Agatha Christie
SSxHG -- one shot--Pre-HBP
oh you stink. lol. I would have loved a second chappie. I Loved it. With a capital "L." lol.
This was good, but you might want to put in a little bit more fluff in the later chapters. Small stuff sprinkled in. lol. Just a little spice. I like your story so far, though.
I just noticed that I read this one before. lol. I got to,"It doesn't sound right if you're not snarky enough." and I knew it. Well written. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Thank you, so glad you like it! :)
I just figured out that I've read this one before. lol. Though, you should be proud because I'm rereading it and enjoying doing so. Excelent play on that game, also. I used to play it when I was younger and I always got 7 kids and an apartment. Nice writing so far. I'm sure to enjoy the rest and will continue to R&R.
::laughs her head off:: Hasn't she gotten herself in a pickle. Yowza
Just like a fine wine. It gets better with age. lol. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
omg. I played Mash with my friends on a bus ride to a museum on a fieldtrip......never again. lol. My favorite snarky teacher was our "adult" and my friends thought it would be funny to put him down for my pet.....surprisingly, he turned out to be my pet and was given his own name...Mr. Patterson. Divine Providence, I think. he he
I thought that Sirius' eyes were blue, and I know for a fact that James' eyes are hazel. It's really good writing and I do hope that you keep up with it but, you might want to work on your vocabulary and use more descriptive words.
Lily's reaction seemed a bit over the top. The Lily in my mind wouldn't have done that. She just met him for pete's sake. She just slapped a stranger!!
Author's Response: Sirius's eyes aren't blue, I looked that one up on mugglenet.com ^^ Vocab is something I usually have trouble with. I just don't know what type of people read my writing so vocab's always a bit iffy for me. You will see Lily change. Here it shows a bit of her naive and immature side. -MM
Oh gosh. You made me cry. lol. That poem worked so perfectly. good job. Really well written. Kudos.
You're early!!!! yea!!! lol. I love what you've done with it. I'm an avid reader. lol. It's great so far and seems to be looking up for Sev and 'Ermione. Well done, or, should I say, almost done. lol.
When Snape spoke from behind him, he was thankful he had not been drinking, as his body showed every sign of wishing to evacuate all cavities.
I think I almost died from laughing. The mere thought of how many ways and things that can be excreted from the body, made me admire how well thought out that line was. Very nice. lol.
Author's Response: Thank you, ViernaAurora -- I think you\'re the first person to properly appreciate that line!
Oh my goodness. That has happened to me too. I was in a play and I had a corset-style top to the set and it seemes at thought many people taller than me got quite the view. lol.
Master of Enchantment is my FAVORITE fanfic. lol. It's simply the best.
Author's Response: okay...
omg......lol. I love it. lol.
oh gosh. I'm a little depressed now. It was very good. I like it a lot.
ooooooooo. she starts to believe. I like. You're a very convincing writer. lol.
Oh come on!!!! That is totally not Mrs. Weasley!!! Still, it was good of you for the whole lower back thing.
Author's Response: I think that in this case it is Mrs. Weasley. She\'s looking out for her son. She\'s curious... and doesn\'t see that she\'s hurting anyone in the process. But I\'m glad that you kept reading anyways! :D
oooooooooo Kinky!!!! lol. jk. I like it. I think it would have been better if Professor McGonagall heard with Ron and Severus just heard it by chance. I think I just like the thought of him being confused, though. Just my humble opinion. I'm not the writer, so do whatever you please and I promise to continue reading and reviewing. lol.
Author's Response: *snerk* Yeah, kinda kinky. LOL! I\'m glad that you like this. (I also like other\'s ideas and thoughts... even though I won\'t change my story now it does ensure that I keep my ideas open.) Thanks! ~Ginny